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Posted: 16 years ago

#1111

Originally posted by: Bollywood_chic
woah.. amazing part hun..
i just love the way u write.. i wish i could write like that.....aawww hun that had me beaming...glad u liking it so!

in so much awe..

i loved all the AR scenes. and can't wait to c wat him coming to her house is going to bring..

: )

do cont soon.

xxSonia

Originally posted by: everlastingword
hey,
wow....! i didn't know what else to write. i just love your ff. it is extremely well written and you are amazing at describing the emotions. Gappu is such a sweetheart.

love,

mia.

hey mia! glad to hv a new reader....gappu, as most of my readers know is inspired completely from my younger siblin, the bonding has been very easy to project n so ave been the events n tales involved!....glad u lik the flow of the fic!

Originally posted by: meow23
brilliant update....
rahul. mushki.. gappu.. ammy.. n chirag... wid d suprise 4 ridz.... luvd d way chirag planned it at d airport.. same goes 4 rahul.. 4 handling ridz.. n givngg her a hint....hqaha...yeh the hint credit is more to babbling muskaan i gues but duh ridzi!
n yeah... ammy landing up at d hse..(certain thngzz don't chng...)..lolzzz yeh at least i kept him away from her window!had a hard time not making him that incorrigibly snooopy
luvd d prt.. thnxx, 4 d pm.. update soonnn...thnx lakky...btw love ur avi!

Originally posted by: sujata23
luved the part...
esp the part wen armaan is outside her window....glad u lik it hun...will post asap!

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DMG fan

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1112

Hey Nj,

It was good part. Liked the way Chirag was trying to make the moment at the airport memorable for them....and I am sure he must have. The dinner felt a bit rushed....I think Atul should have guessed something between Armaan and Riddhima. He should have asked more about their Cambridge times. This is a friend of Riddhima's whom they have heard of so very scantily and then their own son stayed with him, but they know nothing of him.....maybe just my motherly instincts kicking in......I am not complaining though! Just constructive crit.....I hope you take it in that light.

When Vivek was at Ridhhimas' for dinner and he had seen her bedroom, I was hoping that Armaan should see it before any confrontation with Vivek. Any mention of Vivek being there and not Armaan might not go down well with our hero...as it is love has turned him into an inscure teenager.

Chal then waiting eagerly for the next one...whenever that happens...he he he...

PS: I am sure next time you will do justice to Gappu & Minnie

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Jodubai

@Jodubai

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1113

Hi NJ,

Ok, I know, I was missing for quite a while & you must be upset, so my heartfelt apologies for the same....

I loved this part, loved it means really, it was like all our wait was worthwhile......can't believe you made Arman come below Ridz's window, like some love struck teenager...ok, before I start my blablerring on this, I will start from the very start...

Rahul teasing Ridz was great, superbly written & then Muski almost giving away their surprise, if it wasn't for Rahul's sharp wit...looks like Rahul/Muski/Ridz are already bonded.....can imagine Ridz being impaitent, wasn;t even Arman the same, when he was unable to reach her, so can really understand her plight...poor girl, doesn't know she is in for big surprise!!!

Arman being impaitent whilst on the aircraft is so natural, then his flashback of how he started his journey back, him wanting to remeber everything, I am so much like that, whenever I go to India, I tend to make a mental note, of what I had last, what my grandparents wore, what rickshaw we sat in, the route, its like you are mentally preparing yourself, if you were never to return, but can totally relate to it, so kudos...my beautiful lady!!

Chirag trying to keep Ridz distracted was utterly cute, he wanted Arman to see Ridz 1st, thats so nice of him, he knows his friend must be desperate to see his lady love & wouldn't want to miss that expression on his face....he is a real friend! Arman is lucky to have friends like him

Finally the moment arrives that most of us were waiting for....them face to face...I had goosebumps while reading it & was so engrossed in it, that didn't realise my mom calling me, infact she even questioned me, on what material I was reading/....lol...can you imagine?? that scene was written so perfect, it couldn't have being written any beautifully than what you wrote.....

Gappu & Ridz back to their teasing mode, while Arman watchs his lady love....that is so cute, can it get any cuter!! The dinner was all nice, gave some time to Atul/Angie to bond with Arman , which I think happend quite naturally, which is a good sign.....when Gappu asked that he would like to accompany Ridz while dropping Arman, I was like Kabbab mein haddi...lol! I totally forgot about minne...very bad of me.....well, they all had lovely deserts, so thats nice

The moment came when they were yet again alone, its nice that Arman is behaving like a teenager, its like he wants to re-live his life, do everything he coulnd't do....can't wait to read further, poor guy, made sure Atul/Angie were off to work & then came to meet her...pakki planing ki mister ne!

do continue soon...

Congrats on 2nd thread!!!

Edited by Jodubai - 16 years ago

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1114

Hey Naseem!!!🤗

So sorry for the late reply...*Ghosh*, I had to read 9 parts alltogether...missed so much..

Everytime I read this ff, i fell in awe with it...coz this is very different from the other two, also ur writing style is quite different in it...but its fantabulous i must say...and yeah the fun is doubled all the more now when he is finally back....looking forward to more...

thanx for the pm...

Luv Shivani😊

P.S. Before I forget, well i have been meaning to ask this to u from a long time....why such coincidences happen in ur ff yaar....why do u always have the confession in the 12th part, anything special about it or just a coincidence like the mother's/father's day in the previous ones???😃

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chocofreak

@chocofreak

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1115

wow nj...

that was truly an astounding part... my fav section was of course the last part... where lover boy comes to meet riddhima in the wee hours of the morning...

i also loved the constant bickering between gappu and ridzi... thats so typical of sibblings you know and i have to admit... you captured it perfectly...

now i cant wait for the upcoming part... hopefully you'll unleash the full effect of armaan and riddhimas romance... you must be wondering how impatient i am... but really... please please do update sooner this this time... like i always say... cant wait to see the happy couple together...

with lots of love... your ardent fan...

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Hina

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1116

hey nj

finally managed to read the whole part

but sad that i had to read in bits over three days

gr8 update hun

u'll have to excuse me this one time,not that my comments r all that anyway,ok dont be mad at me now,but seriously my comments r utter rubbish nj and the part too gud for me to comment

all i can say is i loved it as always

the RR and RC bit more than AR ,sumhow u've given equal importance to other relations and characters and matched them up really well still keeping romance alive in every part

u see wat i mean,can never express to do justice to ur writing

anyways

hope u give us another awesome part soon

take care hun

love

Hina

Edited by hinanaziri - 16 years ago

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@bernard shaw

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1117

NJ! I am not going to apologise for a delayed response simply because I have run out of apologies….terribly delayed on comments, I am struggling with work pressure, social commitments, travel, trying to respond to comments and updating Maslow and now this stupid fever and cough and cold! Need I say I am in complete AWE of how you manage to multi-task so brilliantly and efficiently! Am convinced you are one of God's favoured children!

I read the part with a huge cup of tea and a big big smile and then re-read it again!

I love the easy familiarity and comfort of the relationship that you have shown between Rahul and Ridhima. There are some people with whom you just gell…just like there are friends with whom you can pick up where you left off no matter how much time has passed since you last met or talked!

Need I say that Armaan surprising Ridhima was my favourite part for more reasons than one but primarily because it was so close home! I can completely imagine her surprise, excitement, disbelief at seeing him there in front of her and I must say you did complete justice to their emotions!

And absolutely love the symbolic or the modern day version of "boy comes home to meet girl parents" and absolutely love Gappu! He really is the star of your fic in so many parts!

Though I think my favourite part in the fic has to be Armaan taking in his surroundings at Mallik Niwas one last time before he leaves all of this for a new beginning and desired fulfilled, seeking to imprint the momentous nature of this departure and what it portends!

At the cost of repeating ad nauseum, chuck physics and fighting lab equipments girl, and tell me when are you writing your first book?

Waiting for the next update

Love

Sam

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princess4120

@princess4120

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Posted: 16 years ago

#1118

AMAZING!! totally totally awesome... it was just so cute how rahul and muski are already bonding with rdizi.. and trying to handle this HUGE surprise.. but wow.. kehna pade ga.. mr.lover boy ko.. kya planning ki hai.. sab ke sab mile hue hai.. hehe.. ridz is dying to talk to him.. but lilttle does she know he is on his way to SEE her.. then tehy can TALK all they want! hahaha..

his departure .. and capturing everything.. was very sentimental.. muski missing gappu and dada .. soo sweet..

chirag.. the most amazing friend one could have.. the distraction at the ariport.. finding it difficult to hide his own excitement about seeing his best freind.. and yet pulling off the surprise so armaan could see ridz first.. it was beautifully written..

the momen i was dying to read about.. them face to face.. it was just MINDBLOWING.. so well written..t he emotions portrayed so well..

the dinner.. was fun to read about.. cute sibling bickering..armaan and ridz stealing glances.. ridz wild thoughts.. hehe.. i cant wait to see anjie and atul's reaction..

LOVED LOVED the last part.. that he comes to see her in the middle of the night.. after making sure both the docs were off to their duty.. how romantic is that.. hai.. cant wait to see them together.. alone.. so much emotion pent up from all these years.. will be a great part.. i am sure..

i hope vivek doesnt ever come back into the picture.. hehe..

btw.. i absolutely adore gappu's character..

hope you are going to update soon.. dying to read this next part..

take care.. and thanks for the pm..