Unleashing Wat Remaind Unsaid-Pt19/pg144/note-p151 - Page 113

Originally posted by: aravi

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awesome update as usual!! i always love the way u explore the different sides of relationships whether be it love or frndship u always strike the the right chords!!!! glad u like that aru....yeh um a goner for focusing at one spot alone bang on....gosh nj no doubt it was one hell of an update a lenghty wonderful treat!!!!! beautiful is the word for AR def behaving like love struck teenagers n man do i love chirag!!!!! their first encounter was soo totally worth all the wait !!!!! their hug ..the silent heart warming embrace ....their loss of words.... the over whelming emotions WOW it was a masterpeice like totallllly Nj !!!! hahah its still talkes me by surprise the way any of u say typically NJ...hinu di cals my delays the NJ hours...understandable...but hahah totally NJ...um yet to comprehend the correect implication thr...until then il please myself believing its all in the good sense!then RM were sweet as always!!!!!! n then the dinner was really adorable n gappu-ridz gosh they are adorable to the power infinity if possible!!! oh well that takes nothing of an effort...its all abt my brother n me...in fact we are atleast twice as much and that maybe a very positive way of stating the disaster we are, mum shud give u much fairer estimate which in no way will earn either of us laurals!srsly u rocked it like totally!!!!! n then time for the despearte lovers hmmm!!! i cud so get the film was lagan the moment i read the first line 😆 so mr. psycologist for once behaving traditionally and irrevocably in loooovveeee 😳😳!!!! hahah yeh nij told me u think the end is a cliff...so much aru, for not being a sadist this once...i mean no cliff, it shud be so easy to figure from here!great part nj it soooo deserved the loonng essay ya but chorry short of time wid boards n everything phewww !!!!!!!!

it deserves a good deal of applause...👏gee thnx...um all smiles!

love

Rv

Originally posted by: Robin_M

ohh wow its soo long! yay im excited to read it :D
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omg robin...before anything else...the size of that comment made me grin so dam wide, my muscles still hurt, i dint actualy come to check if u updated, i was replying to comments n i saw it....even before reading i was very proud of my self...the presumptuous me!
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ohhh my what a happening part! your sooo right nj, its not just a lot in length, but the events taking place!
ok firstly i love how ridz and rahul have bonded so well! she really is like part of the family now! felt bad for muski tho, had to say goodbye to gappu and armaan :( but she has mr garewal to support her!!! hehe
chirag is awesome!!! hahah omg hes so fun and cool! really the way he distracted her were was great. it was a sweet idea, having armaan see her before she sees him... and i just adored his excitment on finally seeing his best friend after a year! him and gaurav the ultimate accomplices! glad u like dthe bits preceeding the real AR meet....i was writing all that n wondering how many ppl will want to kill me for all the crap um not cutting n geting to the point...but like i said too much to wrap n i was so distracted by side tracks, took me tons to actually make it to AR!but well...it seems to have gone well for the most...glad abt it!
alright, i dont think i have enough words to describe the much awaited armaan riddhima reunion!!!!!!! nj you really went above and beyond my hopes and expectations! it was way better then i could have ever imagined! aawww hun...um realy pleased hearing that!
the way you had the both their point of views showing simultaneously during the scene was briliant! the whole scene...from the point armaan wakes up on the plane, his excitment and anticipation on a high...to when hes off the plane and sees chirag...then the moment his eyes land on her, and her turning around seeing him...i just dont know what word to use to describe that exact moment...their eyes meet...the rush of emotions...it was beautiful and perfect!
i cant imagine what they must have felt in those few seconds that seemed like an eternity! her whispering his name, his sweet reasuring smile, her jumping into his arms, and the warm embrace!!!!!!! OMG it was soooooo exciting and heartfelt and passionate and emotional! AMAZING! i had tears in my eyes and a huge grin on my lips! OMG....robin, if i was proud of the size of this commnt, which isnt an alwaz from u :) ....i totally hit the roof here...atleast my swelling ego did!
you did a wonderful job nj, the way you described everything, the emotions you brought out, i really wanna give you a huge hug for that! well done girl!!!!!
*sigh* and now they are together! but still didnt get any alone time to fully enjoy their new feelings, to talk to one another. but the family dinner was so sweet! im so glad he fit in so well with them! and i especially loved seeing ridz and gappu together again being totally crazy and adorable! gosh i love gappu, hes my fav :D yeh hes def my fav...i cant even stop myself becoming the hero in an update meant to sealed with the ARMIDZ stamp!and it was very nice to see them so affectionate with each other... the smiles, kiss, hugs! yay im so glad they are both back in chicogo!!!!!!
ok the ending was soooooo good! omg cant believe he showed up at her house outside her window in the middle of the night after angie and atul left! that too after he flew halfway cross the world and should be jet lagged! what a guy...crazy and hopelessly in love! ohhh im soooooooo excited for the next part, they will finally be together! alone! omg im going insane, i feel like im gonna explode, cant handdle all this excitment! lol so since, im sure, we all are dying for the next part, pleassseeee update soon! or at least try to :D hahah yeh my reputation carries very badly i understand....will be trying to update both this n LNI before i leave for a week long road trip this sunday!thnx for the wonderful commnet robin, yet again!
p.s. loved the lagaan reference! one of indians finest creations according to me! and i just love that song...went very well with riddhimas current state!
ok, continue soon nj! your the best :)

Originally posted by: DMG fan

Hey Nj,

It was good part. Liked the way Chirag was trying to make the moment at the airport memorable for them....and I am sure he must have. The dinner felt a bit rushed....I think Atul should have guessed something between Armaan and Riddhima. ...totally....ur bang on di....can i ask for the exemption of time???i just cudnt have fit anymore in this part...but i did want atul to finally make an inroductory appearence in here since i need him now n very soon....um hoping the next updates will rectify this issue, but just to assure u, um ignoring none of the obvious...just cant manage being brief n then i cant get everything in....n u dint even have to say....i really appreciate the constriuctive tips, alot more times than u all possibly realize they help me framing the next bits much better.l...its all there is to writing with an immediate reader response, to actually know how things turned out so promptly....n u shud totaly know, um the last one to think any other way abt pointers....if u ever doubt it ask nijal...i literally have her dissect my parts, but um like i need to know the whole wrong in it....!its just that when i write myself i read every word of the update a billion times i think n then after a wile the wrong leaping out of the page also fails to hit me....so its in my best interest , completely selfish, to seek the accurate ideas from u lot reading it all in a go first time...i stil remember the time u mentioned my newtons father day blooper....see wat i mean, the obvious doesnt strike u when ur writing it urself....anywaz...this is getting longer than ur comment now...but i just want u to know it alwaz goes down very wel with me, id rather u told me head on!....oh n gappu...ahem...*sheepish* yeh i was very guilty abt ignoring minnie n him....i just thot AR had to be thr, n i skipped them with convenience..will look into that, i cant keep away from them too long they are my prefernmce over AR!...cheers for the lovely comment!He should have asked more about their Cambridge times. This is a friend of Riddhima's whom they have heard of so very scantily and then their own son stayed with him, but they know nothing of him.....maybe just my motherly instincts kicking in......I am not complaining though! Just constructive crit.....I hope you take it in that light.

When Vivek was at Ridhhimas' for dinner and he had seen her bedroom, I was hoping that Armaan should see it before any confrontation with Vivek. Any mention of Vivek being there and not Armaan might not go down well with our hero...as it is love has turned him into an inscure teenager.

Chal then waiting eagerly for the next one...whenever that happens...he he he...

RT

PS: I am sure next time you will do justice to Gappu & Minnie

Originally posted by: Jodubai

Hi NJ,

Ok, I know, I was missing for quite a while & you must be upset, so my heartfelt apologies for the same....aawww nah jo...i know told me ud be gone a wile....hope ur work n studies all taking off for the best!

I loved this part, loved it means really, it was like all our wait was worthwhile......can't believe you made Arman come below Ridz's window, like some love struck teenagerhahah lovestruck teenager...maybe i shud get ridzi to tease him with those words i dont think r very sensible mature sesoned guy wud like that description of himself speically when he knows hes guilty as charged!...ok, before I start my blablerring on this, I will start from the very start...

Rahul teasing Ridz was great, superbly written & then Muski almost giving away their surprise, if it wasn't for Rahul's sharp wit...looks like Rahul/Muski/Ridz are already bonded.....can imagine Ridz being impaitent, wasn;t even Arman the same, when he was unable to reach her, so can really understand her plight...poor girl, doesn't know she is in for big surprise!!!..yeh yeh....surprises like that are so outa the world!i had a close one...sometime...from one of my best frends, no lover boy alas...but it was so completely rocking!

Arman being impaitent whilst on the aircraft is so natural, then his flashback of how he started his journey back, him wanting to remeber everything, I am so much like that, whenever I go to India, I tend to make a mental note, of what I had last, what my grandparents wore, what rickshaw we sat in, the route, its like you are mentally preparing yourself, if you were never to return, but can totally relate to it, so kudos...my beautiful lady!!..aaww um glad um mighty glad u noticed that...i tend to do it more often than not...i still vividly remember how each of my old houses loked the day i moved into the each new one....its a differnt kinda feeling to hold the memories with such precision!

Chirag trying to keep Ridz distracted was utterly cute, he wanted Arman to see Ridz 1st, thats so nice of him, he knows his friend must be desperate to see his lady love & wouldn't want to miss that expression on his face....he is a real friend! Arman is lucky to have friends like him...yup...it was more me than chirag wanting ridhima to see him after he saw her!

Finally the moment arrives that most of us were waiting for....them face to face...I had goosebumps while reading it & was so engrossed in it, that didn't realise my mom calling me, infact she even questioned me, on what material I was reading/....lol...can you imagine?? that scene was written so perfect, it couldn't have being written any beautifully than what you wrote.....oh thnku so much!

Gappu & Ridz back to their teasing mode, while Arman watchs his lady love....that is so cute, can it get any cuter!! The dinner was all nice, gave some time to Atul/Angie to bond with Arman , which I think happend quite naturally, which is a good sign.....when Gappu asked that he would like to accompany Ridz while dropping Arman, I was like Kabbab mein haddi...lol! I totally forgot about minne...very bad of me.....well, they all had lovely deserts, so thats nice...haha yeh i thot it wud be unfair to not let his love story bloom when hes been such an evangelic cupid!

The moment came when they were yet again alone, its nice that Arman is behaving like a teenager, its like he wants to re-live his life, do everything he coulnd't do....can't wait to read further, poor guy, made sure Atul/Angie were off to work & then came to meet her...pakki planing ki mister ne!..:D...yeh to be honest, it took me ages thinking wat to do...i cudnt have someone like the armaan he is in my fic actualy climb a window...n well it wud be quite not possible for him to do it ina downtown housing place...somehow..the pictuire of that happening seems out of place!

do continue soon...

Congrats on 2nd thread!!!...oh boy...i kinda lost track of that somehow...yeh guess i will start one very soon...thnx for the commnt hun!

Originally posted by: $h!V@n!

Hey Naseem!!!🤗

So sorry for the late reply...*Ghosh*, I had to read 9 parts alltogether...missed so much..OMG 9...wow shivani...that wud have taken a considerable time, but dont start apologizing at all...if its just 9 in the long time u wrnt here think of how delayed i was with each update!!!😕

Everytime I read this ff, i fell in awe with it...coz this is very different from the other two, also ur writing style is quite different in it...but its fantabulous i must say...and yeah the fun is doubled all the more now when he is finally back....looking forward to more...glad u like the way its going despite the differnce..yeh it has been very different for me as a writer too!

thanx for the pm...

Luv Shivani😊

P.S. Before I forget, well i have been meaning to ask this to u from a long time....why such coincidences happen in ur ff yaar....why do u always have the confession in the 12th part, anything special about it or just a coincidence like the mother's/father's day in the previous ones???😃lolzzz shivani u had me in splits with this one...nah no intention at all...in fact i dint quite notice the trend until now that i had u say it loud...wow....i do notice that more often then not its part 6-7 where they tend to soften to each other n start self confessing...but i dint realize it was 12 each time they said it!

Originally posted by: chocofreak

wow nj...

that was truly an astounding part... my fav section was of course the last part... where lover boy comes to meet riddhima in the wee hours of the morning...:) i guess there has to be a majority of ppl supporting u on that one!

i also loved the constant bickering between gappu and ridzi... thats so typical of sibblings you know and i have to admit... you captured it perfectly...thnx hun...thats so easily me n my brother...the words almost, like lifted off our convos...he n me are like that, never letting the other get the last word till someone comes n shuts us up...n even then we try to continue without catching the attention!

now i cant wait for the upcoming part... hopefully you'll unleash the full effect of armaan and riddhimas romance... you must be wondering how impatient i am... but really... please please do update sooner this this time... like i always say... cant wait to see the happy couple together...aahhh nah truly um far more impatient than u are....but it just takes forwever with unleashing, somehow i sit at it, n it takes me an age each time!....will try to do it before i leave for a week on sunday....

with lots of love... your ardent fan...

Ok...back finally...u knw, i distinctly remember making a rserve somewhere but um in no mood of searching thru 6 pages now....see, this time the comments just poured in, told u...give us loads n loads of AR and we will gie u instant replies hehehe..

Yeah well, even after not such an SUD...um here to fill u up on this update...u knw, this ff is something so much more closer to my heart as compared to the previous two...and i always know that ur gonna write such a wonderful part that i cant even begin to criticise...and yeah, te length is not worth mentioning this time because evn though it was a long, long on (the part ;) hahahahahah), i still cud have sat thru a longer one....anyways...

Rahul-Riddhima interaction was a little unexpected, i always thught Rahul was the quiet shy one in this story but i simply loved the whole convo...and the main thing was, u kept me seated to one spot,nearing the laptop till it was an inch away, okay thats totally exaaggerated but u get the picture.....and then the Riddhima-Muskaan convo abt Gappu...u knw, its suddenly so lonely and weird when sumone whose been staying at ur place for long just goes away...u get so accustomed to having them around that their going back seems so heratbreking, happens with me all the time...

Chiragh was an absolite favorite in this part...the way he was trying to divert her attention, and the way Riddhima was getting irritated was a treat to read...u knw how bad a league um for keeping surprises, kinda started feeling ke Riddhima would get to knw before Armaan was there....but the whole setting, OMG nia how do u do this...dramy, the whole setup was so dramatized yet so original...there meeting...ufff..,.ok, i ant even do justice to that part cuz it was SO good that i cant even start telling u how good it was....i loved loved loved it....specially the ug ;)...u knw what a hardcore romantic i am, so pour in loads more next time...

Gappu teasing Riddhima...uff, had i been in her place, i would have kicked him hard....but had i been him again, i would do even more huahahahha...but still, u capture the whole brother sis kinda relation so well...i can SO see ameen n u in the way u write the characters....totally inspiring...though makes me miss my brother...*sniff* hehehe..

Khair....NOW the last part was an absolute favorite..plz, jaldiiii update kerna,....u evil sadist, u ended right where u knew we would all be smiling wide...aand waiitng for more...now um gonna nag u till u dun update hehehe....so update super soon...

i hope this makes up for the delay, um still busy watching Ghajini, hisso main hehehe...take care hon....

P.s. u online on gtalk?

loads-a-lov thingi...mwahz

Kiran

Originally posted by: bernard shaw

NJ! I am not going to apologise for a delayed response simply because I have run out of apologies'.terribly delayed on comments, I am struggling with work pressure, social commitments, travel, trying to respond to comments and updating Maslow and now this stupid fever and cough and cold! Need I say I am in complete AWE of how you manage to multi-task so brilliantly and efficiently! Am convinced you are one of God's favoured children!..ahaa more than anything, ur overrating by faraway standards sam, i can assure u despite a lack of modesty iv been told to possess!

I read the part with a huge cup of tea and a big big smile and then re-read it again!...i wont be 'modest' to say i hate the way the part was or anything, but it still surprises me how the length of it doesnt scare off second readings!...very flattering!

I love the easy familiarity and comfort of the relationship that you have shown between Rahul and Ridhima. There are some people with whom you just gell'just like there are friends with whom you can pick up where you left off no matter how much time has passed since you last met or talked!...i cant think of having said in better words that particular thing about some bonds...i agree....there are frends i must have not met over half a decade at least, n when we do have the reunions, or annual bday calls, its like we wr in high school just yesterday!..yeh...rahul ridzi sharing a good bond....i thot it wud be natural for him since i keep insisting she is quite like his beloved muskaan!

Need I say that Armaan surprising Ridhima was my favourite part for more reasons than one but primarily because it was so close home! I can completely imagine her surprise, excitement, disbelief at seeing him there in front of her and I must say you did complete justice to their emotions!..hahah yeh um certain u recognize it ith a familiarity um eager to envy n await!...glad u liked the way it shaped...

And absolutely love the symbolic or the modern day version of "boy comes home to meet girl parents" and absolutely love Gappu! He really is the star of your fic in so many parts!..haha yeh hes the star of my heart...iv bee pestering my brother to read the fic.,..he read 6 parts n told me he packed him off into a 3 day introspection so deep that he cant risk it again while he still intends becoming a shining attorney of tom!...as a latter note he whimpered over the name GAPPU for a footballer, n minnie for a girlfrend...cursed me not quite the subtle way n expressed a hope i would look into the gravity of that issue since i associate the char with him n announce it so!

Though I think my favourite part in the fic has to be Armaan taking in his surroundings at Mallik Niwas one last time before he leaves all of this for a new beginning and desired fulfilled, seeking to imprint the momentous nature of this departure and what it portends!...oh yeh...thats very me...i do that...n then i sit back n remember the times much long ago with all vived details, its like my self imposed competition to figure how much i can recall!i have a weird mass on the top of my neck between my shoulders, i dont think i can call it a head or a brain, sill looking for a name....naseem would do i guess!

At the cost of repeating ad nauseum, chuck physics and fighting lab equipments girl, and tell me when are you writing your first book?...uh oh...make sure u dont meet my prof after this, he is rather disgruntled n disappointed as i decide to postpone the idea of a Ph.D. has asked me to take this last term of research alone before i quit for good....lets see wat it accounts to!

Waiting for the next update

Love

Sam...gee thnx hun!

Originally posted by: princess4120

AMAZING!! totally totally awesome... it was just so cute how rahul and muski are already bonding with rdizi.. and trying to handle this HUGE surprise.. but wow.. kehna pade ga.. mr.lover boy ko.. kya planning ki hai.. sab ke sab mile hue hai.. hehe.. ridz is dying to talk to him.. but lilttle does she know he is on his way to SEE her.. then tehy can TALK all they want! hahaha..yeh....its like a wish u made coming true in a much unexoected way,...they are the charming moments if life!

his departure .. and capturing everything.. was very sentimental.. muski missing gappu and dada .. soo sweet..

chirag.. the most amazing friend one could have.. the distraction at the ariport.. finding it difficult to hide his own excitement about seeing his best freind.. and yet pulling off the surprise so armaan could see ridz first.. it was beautifully written..thnx hun...i cherish the bond between armaan n chirag n its like one i share with my dearest frend!

the momen i was dying to read about.. them face to face.. it was just MINDBLOWING.. so well written..t he emotions portrayed so well....glad it came out to the liking of readers!

the dinner.. was fun to read about.. cute sibling bickering..armaan and ridz stealing glances.. ridz wild thoughts.. hehe.. i cant wait to see anjie and atul's reaction..lolzzz yeh me neither..um stillmaking up my mind!

LOVED LOVED the last part.. that he comes to see her in the middle of the night.. after making sure both the docs were off to their duty.. how romantic is that.. hai.. cant wait to see them together.. alone.. so much emotion pent up from all these years.. will be a great part.. i am sure..wow..its flattering n intimidating when u lot say all the great things n place great expectations...!il try my best!

i hope vivek doesnt ever come back into the picture.. hehe..

btw.. i absolutely adore gappu's character..yeh me too...better than all the rest...thnx for the commnts hun!

hope you are going to update soon.. dying to read this next part..

take care.. and thanks for the pm..

Originally posted by: arluver15

Hey nij

sorry sweetart i just cought up with ur FF...wow like the whole darned thing...that must have taken u ages to read girl...glad ur here though welcome aboard!

i just love u for the last part

HE is finaly here i just cant belive it

wow i cant imgine how ridz must b to she him after soooooooooo long time n after hereing him say i luv u to her

the part was just gr8

i was bit confused in between regarding rahul n mushakn n vivak but i guess i will learn it soon...um understanding that u have a gap abt their relationship?...rahul n vivek are brothers, siblings i mean...muskaan n rahul wr best frends n she thot she was in love with vivek but he ditched her n left n rahul took the spot n is now married to her, while his brother vivek has been absconding for years under a fake last name khanna...n is the same guy hitting on ridhima....hope thats a clarification to watever i dint communicate wel in the fic so far?

but sweet this was the best part

the way u have describ the setutation n al was just superb

luv

nruti

Originally posted by: santhideepu

Hey Naseem!!!

I am commenting for the first time on this FF... I read all the parts in one go not even moving an inch till I read all of them... hah... u took me to beautiful journey of Love, Pain, Seperation, Waiting, Belief, Patience, Trust, Bonding, Happiness,and again Love... that was too good....aawww...the whole darned thing must have taken a wile, um glad n very flattered when u say u dint move an inch...hope u continue to like it as much, n welcome to the thread girl!

I still cannot get over the post reading effect of the story....the potrayal of each and every character was so so so good.... I know I am boring you with so much vague sentences....but then I've to express what I am feeling right....nah not boring at all....this fic takes me more than just plain writing n words n vocab to put the tale together...um glad its perceived all so well!its alwaz a delight to have new readers join in!

May be from next time u update I'll try to tell how the parts are... but for now.. all of them are so Uniquely Superb!!! Thanks for giving us such a beautifully said story....gee thanx girl, looking forward to having u here next time on!

Continue soon...

Originally posted by: cool_pisces

Hi Nj

OMG i love this update

Truly this has got to be the best one so far....really??? um glad u think so, i liked it, not my personal fav though!

I enjoyed it immensely

Read and re read it like a hundred times before commenting LOL
Thinking of reading it once again after posting this...hahah oki clearly now u have me hiting the roof hun!

Firstly thank god there is no Vivek in this

Secondly thanks again for such a looooooooooong part

I love reading the bengali refrences u provide in ur ff, it makes it seem so much more natural...oh well...um trying to keep them real...its taking me silly calls dam bribes to my brother to get real facts outa him!!!but its fun, i like calcutta ....for some very strange things!

And awww the lovely surprise he gave her, not just once but twice in the update

Loved it, pls update soon..thnx mini...i will!

Love Mini