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sanjh

@nisisanjh

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Posted: 16 years ago

#11

oh wow ....welcome back dear .....m already so egar to read ... n as u say its a poetic frm toh i wud love to read the whole story in one go .. 3 long pages naa? great re.. i can feel like watching 3 hrs movie den .... lukng fwd to it ..post soon yaar...
Love u , always.....

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 16 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: nisisanjh

oh wow ....welcome back dear .....m already so egar to read ... n as u say its a poetic frm toh i wud love to read the whole story in one go .. 3 long pages naa? great re.. i can feel like watching 3 hrs movie den .... lukng fwd to it ..post soon yaar...
Love u , always.....

Hi Sara dear... so nice to get ur suggestion so early dear... Yup ok its long and how long u will know.. i will be posting it in just few sec... hope u like it... 😊.. its pretty simple...

luvu u too dear.. always always...

Bhoomi

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Kritika

@rajeevskitu

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Posted: 16 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: bhoomikauttam

i will be posting it in just few sec... ...

oh no! in that case i can't be first to comment😭.......... my mom will kill me if i stay b4 the sys. for 1 more min................ bhoomi! u better reserve first comment for me.......... hehe

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sanjh

@nisisanjh

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Posted: 16 years ago

#14

U called it long? kis angle se? maine toh bas shuru hi kiya tha, aur it ended.... so early ..... 😔 but i must say its such a nice attmp n a very very diffrnt apporch...

I liked the hypothetical situations bit ..n later they sorted out chat pe ..explaining n sharing.. briliant Bhoomi ....no name, no dlgs but still effctive ... hatts of... n hello , mera jee nahi bhara bilkul bhi so, start writting anothr ....

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@spln

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Posted: 16 years ago

#15

wow bhumi!!!that was awsome....i was wondering how many pages of word that may have been....i used to write poems at one time...n the longest i wrote was 7 pages long, it was about a day when i had to go to school without my glasses, a funny one since um blind as a bat without them lolzzzz...this was from a time when i dint have contacts like years ago....but oh well reading ur poem i remembered writing that one coz it took ages to narate a whole story like thong with rhyming poeting lines!!!

but u did a great job....awsome....heres the best part...u dint even name the leads....n i stil feel like i know them!!!

cheers!

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jyothi

@jyothi_cool

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Posted: 16 years ago

#16

bhoomi just read the entire story let me tell u i was spell bound its just amazing r8 job write one more soon

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 16 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: nisisanjh
U called it long? kis angle se? maine toh bas shuru hi kiya tha, aur it ended.... so early ..... 😔 but i must say its such a nice attmp n a very very diffrnt apporch...

I liked the hypothetical situations bit ..n later they sorted out chat pe ..explaining n sharing.. briliant Bhoomi ....no name, no dlgs but still effctive ... hatts of... n hello , mera jee nahi bhara bilkul bhi so, start writting anothr ....

Hi Sara dear.... Hehehhe I did call it long..... kiss angle se.. areey areey mujhe to pages pe pages lagey when I wrote in book.... ab typing mey dont know i didnt even see pages immdeiately posted...😆.. shuru kiya aur end.. hahah woh to isliye as u have read the last story which ws like tooooooooooooo long..yeh to poetic one thaa so a bit long considering poem form... glad u appreciated the attempt and ya approach was a bit differnt... As u know I have written poems on so many things.. and issues that soemthign different has to come up to write...

Ya the hypothetical situation is the base form of the poem..how we assume thigns ki yeh hoga woh hoga to..and try to prepare ourselve sbut future is so unexpected .. we can change our perspective and as we love or have soft corner we want to change though we may hundred times say I am not gogin to change myself for anyone...😉..yup no name.. no dialogues i wnted to try that one out glad u did got that... yup I will start a new story soon... just my comp timigns get fixed...😃..

luv u so much dear..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 16 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: spln
wow bhumi!!!that was awsome....i was wondering how many pages of word that may have been....i used to write poems at one time...n the longest i wrote was 7 pages long, it was about a day when i had to go to school without my glasses, a funny one since um blind as a bat without them lolzzzz...this was from a time when i dint have contacts like years ago....but oh well reading ur poem i remembered writing that one coz it took ages to narate a whole story like thong with rhyming poeting lines!!!

but u did a great job....awsome....heres the best part...u dint even name the leads....n i stil feel like i know them!!!

cheers!

Hi Naseem... Am so glad to get ur comments its been a long itme na.... U felt it was awesome dear.. that makes me happy.. Oh so even u write poems.. now i want to read atleast one.. Pm me na.. waise I do write a lot of poems.. and logn ones short ones al kind .. but usually my poems r on sicial issues which move me.. i have posted in my yahoo groups certain poems tellgin a story many times... and after all that .. soemwhere thought why not write a story and later started postgn story short story for my friends... So my loooon g poem reminded u of those days.. so get back to does creative skills and do write some nice poems ..ok...

Am glad u liked it.. it wasnt good.. btu it was an attempt to say a story which i havnt yet... I will see if I can post some of my looong story like poems here .. for u all to read.... ya I didnt name them ... awwww u felt like gogin through their life and knowign their phase of life. thats a great encoraging factor for me... makes me so happy dear... luv u for all the encoraugment u give me...

tc dear

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

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Posted: 16 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool
bhoomi just read the entire story let me tell u i was spell bound its just amazing r8 job write one more soon

Hi Jyothi dear.. poem likhun and i have to remember u ..here in IF na... so glad that u read and liked this.. this was in English while Pyaar hai was in Hindi... i tried to experiment with a lot of things.. and tellgin a plain simple story.. so glad u liked this little attempt.. luv u ... a big hug ur way..😃