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aravi

@aravi

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#51

oooohhhh!!!!!!!!!! "d king will bring down d queen" luved dis one !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! suzie hun me dying to read ridzy's entry now u noe!!!!!!!!!! u r excellent on describing fights gurl........... ne personal experiences hmmm...... lolzzzzzz.... GOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! d guy gang is wicked!!!!!!!!!!! a bunch of devils put together yaar....... shizu falling 4 abbas ooopppssss!!hope she doesn't get hurt in d process!!!!!!!!!!!! but u noe me even luvvviinnngg dis bully cum "BAD BOY "armaan ............ god!!!!!!he would look so damn sexy wid dis luk on his face........ ouch! but do sumthing of dis anjali naa....... i wonder mayb more dan armaan -ridzy ,angie-ridzy would b at loggerheads................ so armaan bout to face a female rival 4 d first tym ooohhhhh!!!!!!!!!!! n i read dis one happens to b a lonnngggggg FF hun d longer d better rite!!!!!!!!!!!!!! luv
aravi

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soumya

@saridena

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#52

hi😊
thks for the pm
nice part
but still ridz is not introduced
i was hoping to see ridz in this part
anyway great job
contd soon
update asap
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Edited by saridena - 17 years ago

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raghvini shastri

@lolita1234

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#53

hey i like this story but isnt this based on one of the online fanfiction by an author on www.fictionpress.con coz i remember reading it there .
Or is this based on a manga

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Payal

@xentrik_me

Beginner

Posted: 17 years ago

#54

Ouch ! The king will take dwn the queen 😉
Desperately w8in fer Ridz's entry nw . 😃

Wonder wat planning hes done to kick herr out of "Maliks territory" 😆

Loved this partt 😃

The way yu described their fyt was perfect , 👏

& i cld clearly picture it in mii head .

Tsk Tsk , lots of violence in Sanjeevani 😆

But love is still hidden sumwherr lol

Shizu and Ahmed , hope he wont break herr heart 😳

Loved the way yu penned dwn the chess discussion between Armaan & Abaas . 👏

Do continue soon

Love Payal ..x😳

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Mona

@.:.MONA.:.

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 17 years ago

#55

wow yaar malik's gang is cool.........they beet the other gang to badly..........feel sorry for them........cant wait for next update as ridz will be coming......continue soon.........thankc4 the pm........

❤️MONA

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sea_nyx

@sea_nyx

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#56

hey suzie,

Really good part 👏 I was hoping for ridz's entry in this, but the fight sequence was really well described. You know one the characters I liked best until now is Muskaan's. She comes across as really spunky, and clear about her goals not to mention having a very clear idea of right and wrong. Shizu's also an interesting character, but maybe you could flesh her out a little more? Same goes for all the members of Armaan's gang, especially Ahmed whom I personally find very interesting😳 (who is playing him btw?). And of course Armaan himself. I mean right now we know little about him save that he's a big man on campus who chain smokes 😡 and is not really interested in academics . I hope to see more shades to him in the future. I hope that wasn't too harsh and was enough constructive criticism for you.

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aredhel

@aredhel

Inactive

Posted: 17 years ago

#57

LOVE YOUR CONCEPT ITS THE BEST AND MOST CREATIVE OUT OF ALL AR FANFICS PLZ CONTINUE VERY VERY SOON, I LOVE THIS STORY SO SO MUCH!
LOTS OF LUCK
AREDHEL

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Jodubai

@Jodubai

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#58

Hi Suzie,

Thanks for the pm

This part was nice, just showed how the malik gang is...for a minute I thought they were on a verge to lose & Gupta gang would save them,. but thats too much to ask for & also, Arman's pride will all go down, that a girl had to save him

Looking forward for Ridz's entry..

keep writing

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Madhu

@cute_madhu

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#59

Hey suzie di sowiie for da late compliment..so sowiee…didn't get time to post it..buh now em gonna write mah compli…

Hehe so ammy is not at all good in studies..hehe..got a D minus..tis cracked me up.lolzzz n abbas is jus God..ovisly the scholarly lad mus hav had a G8888 laugh…So ammy n abbas r the ones who r very very closeee…great loved the description…abt their relationship.

Well then came the fight..great yaar..too gud…superb..the way u described the fights was jus fantabulous…loved it…well do u hav sum personal experience of it..well I do..buh not of such biiiiiigggg fights not tis big..buh yeah they r big mostly….now don't tink that I'm the queen of fights at skul..buh even I fight sumtimes the way muski does n oder times the way Ridz may do..buh mostly muski type…I'm kinda like her…..

Woahhh Shizu..gal has she fallen for him..n is that not serious…if he tries to play wid her I'm gonna bash him..lolzzzz

Hey ammy does chain smoking..not good..not good for health…I suppose he may stop once Ridz cums..

Loves tis prt..

When only Armaan and Abaas were left outside, Abaas smiled enthusiastically as he folded his arms on his chest, "I have a feeling that tomorrow's going to be rather interesting. Ah… female rival? Something different for a change, huh?"

"Yes, interesting…" Armaan replied smugly. "So interesting that it would be like chess…"

"Chess?"

Exhaling smoke, a confident grin formed on Armaan's lips as he replied "The king will take down the queen."

Wohhhahhhh so he accepts that she too is of a high standard….gud…he called her the queen..gosh he doesn't know that tis Queen wud take him down n will steal his heart from him…widout havin to take any extra effort….

Well G88888 goin..keep up the g8 wrk n sweety plzzzz update asap….plzzzz

Love ya hon….t.cccccccc

-Ur's Ever Madhu😳

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Madhu

@cute_madhu

Voyager

Posted: 17 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: ~suzie~

Thank you sooo much for the comments Madhu Awww u r most welcum sweety😳, you can call me anything you want, I dont mind (as long as its nice 😆) Of Course i left you speechless? lol... never knew i had the ability to do that.Now that u know..use it..buh don't keep using it on me😭...plzzz yaar..I love to speak,I mean talk n blabber on anytin n everytin..lolz😆😆😆z dont worry i plan to do regular updates (daily ones) OOhhhh yeah..Thank God... unless asked not to otherwise Well I don't suppose ny one wud ask u to do sooo😆, so the pace will be kept up in this FF Thats Great...rilli gr8 news for me.😆😃.. Before i f orget i dont think i'm qualified yet to be compared to the great writers in this place yet.Well mah sweetu suzie di..I wanna tell u that I'm an avid reader as I mentioned b4...n thus read most of the FF's..n as per mah taste n as per all the oders view it won't be wrong to categorise u in one of the Greates writer..a blooming writer.⭐️....N I personally felt that u were jus absolutely perfect.⭐️the way u started the story n how u write..sooo....so that's not wrong...buh yeah still U'll hav to learn a lot..jus like all the oders...😳 but thank you very much for your compliments. U R MOST WELCUM SWEET PEA..buh nxt time I'll get angry😡 if u say..sowie or thanx..coz no such wrds exist in friendship...😉😉😉

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Do cont asap....😛

Love ya darling...t.ccccccc

-Ur's Ever Madhu😳

Suzie😳