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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#11

comments:

rajkin: lots of newness in the story. good progress.good to see Kanya as such a strong character. liked his dream.

KC294: that was a brill update...
pls continue soon...
i wanna see what happens

princez-preciou: ooo... continue soon loved dat part!

me: OMG, there have been over 1000 views but only a handful comment 😭 😭

stars_shine*: hi
gr8 update
continue soon!!

candy princess: That was reli good plz plz continue as fast as u can!!!!!!! 😊

suganain: Is the mystery man..It's Chunnu?😕
Anyways great update!
Continue Soon!

rajkin:

omg u make us wait .but we dont mind. kyunki sabr ka phal bahut meetha hota hai. anyway how many comments is ur this time dep on.

me: Hi rajkin! I dont have a comment count frm now on. if sumone likes my story, they will comment on it if not they won't its up to them.

Ew Naina! Not chunnu! ewewewew 🤢

desaigirl101: Please update soon!
I really really really really loved loved loved loved it!
So....Please continue soon as soon as possible!!!

me: Thank u guys soooooo much for reading my fan fiction! U guys r the best! I'll try to get the next update in soon!!! 😊

punjabi.princes: great update
continue soon

rajkin: oh thanks so much. That means we will get to read ur story as soon as u r
free to post it. hey thats great.

me: ya im prety busy but i'll try to finish it up tonight

Multani90: I love it! Just love the fierce kiss that she gave him! Awesome, please continue soon! Need more bad boy sexy!

me: Oh, don't worry! There is quite a hott scene coming up! as soon as i finish the update 🥱

rajkin: so sweet of you. very thoughtful of u .just cant wait any longer.u work so hard for us.

Edited by kwarudkar - 17 years ago

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#12

Sorry it took so long for me to post the next update, I've been really busy and tired with all the stuff I'm doing lately. But it's here!

Chapter 6: Party ki Tayyari

RanKan's bedroom:

Ranbir is getting ready and Kanya comes out wearing this:

R: (thinking)Whoa! Hey sexy!
R: Kanya, yeh tum party par pehnewali ho?
K: Haan, achhi hai na?
R: Achhi toh hai, par tum kuch aur pehnoge?
K: Kyun?
R: Kyunki aisi hot cheez ko kisi ki nazar lage, yeh main nahi chahta.

Kanya (who is facing the other way) blushes, but puts on a mad expression and swerves around.

K: No.
R: No?
K: Main is shaadi ko nahi maanti hoon. Iska matlab main tumhare baat nahi maanni padegi. I can do whatever I want.
R: Oh yeah?

He walks over to the closet and ruffles through the clothes and pulls out a small sharaab ki bottle.

K: (gasps) Yeh tumhare paas kaise?
R: Tumhe kyun bataaoon? Meri marzi hai!

He opens and takes a gulp of it. Kanya is looking at him in horror. He puts it down and fixes his eyes on her lustfully. He starts walking towards her. Kanya gets a little startled and takes a couple steps back.

K: Yeh tum k-kya kar r-rahe ho Ranbirrr?

He says nothing and keeps walking toward her. He backs her up against a wall and puts one of his arms across the wall. Kanya is literally trembling now. He puts another. Kanya closes her eyes tightly, waiting for what she thought was coming. Ranbir tucked her hair behind one ear, came close in to her and whispered "Tumhe jo pehna hai, pehn lo. Main neeche living room mein tumara intezaar kar raha hoon."

He pulled back and walked out of the room, leaving Kanya confused and embarrassed.

*^ Downstairs ^*
Kanya comes down wearing dress and Shanaya (who is also coming to the party with Ayaan) is speechless.

S: (thinking) Yeh Kanya toh mujhse zyaada achhi dress kaise pehni hai? Yeh dress maine khud Manish Malhotra se design karvayi hoon! Mujhe kuch karna padega.

S: (sobbing) Ayaaaaaaaaan!

Ayaan arrives looking irritated.

A: Ab kya hai Shanaya? Maine bola na, uss dress mein tum bilkul moti nahi lag rahi ho!
S: Woh toh mujhe pata hai Ayaan! I always look fabulous! Par woh Kanya, Kanyaaaaaaa-
A: Shut up! Kanya kya?
S: Mujhseachhidresspehenrahihai! Ahhhhaaaaaahahaaaa!
A: Grrrrr....Shut up, shut up, shut up!
S: How meeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaan!

Kanya is standing there and watching all this and smirking. She doesn't know Ranbir has come up behind her, enjoying watching her laugh. Meanwhile, Ayaan - irritated with Shanaya to the limit - decides to adopt a new tactic.

A: (slipping his arm around her) Shanaya darling, Kanya tumse achhi dress pehen rahi hai toh kya hua? Tumhari natural khoobsurti usse bahut zyaada hai.

Ayaan shoots Kanya an apologetic glance and Shanaya begins to stop sobbing. Ranbir says "Woh kitni childish hai na?" in Kanya's ear behind her. Kanya jumps because she didn't know he was there. She whirls around to see him and he is wearing this:

She is completely breathless, but Ranbir just smirks and leads them all out to the car.

What will happen at the party?
Will Kanya make Ranbir jealous?

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#13

comments:

rajkin: cant wait to see wht happens next.i think the next episode is gonna b a dhamaka. I cant stop imagining Akash. THat scene was reeely hot.And thanks despite all the tirednes and business u did post. sweet of u.

princez-preciou: ooo brill updaet
continue soooon!

desaigirl101: COMPLETELY BRILLIANT!.
Please Update SOON!

stars_shine*: gr8 update!!!!!!
continue soon!!

desaigirl101:AWESOME Update!!!!
Loving this FF.
Please continue soon as possible...please update quickly! 😃

KC294: that was brill
i can't wait...
ooo ranbir jealous...
pls continue soon

candy princess: Kwel awsome plz plz continue fast fast i reliwanna know what happens next!!!!!! 😊

punjabi.princes: great update
continue soon

sweet cherry: dat was a super scene
plzzzzzzzzzzz continue 😊

me: thnx u guys! its bin fun writing for u! i'll try to make the next one today 😊

princez-preciou: will be eagerly waiting!"

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kwarudkar

@kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#14

Recap: RanKan and ShanAyaan (hehe) are going to Ashutosh's party

Chapter 7: Mystery Man

As Ranbir, Kanya, Ayaan and Shanaya got down from the car, Ranbir waited for AS to get further away and grabbed Kanya's hand. She paused and turned back angrily.

K: Kya hai?
R: Tum yahaan kya karne wali ho?
K: Tumse matlab?
R: Mujhse matlab hai, dammit!
K: Agar tum is shaadi ko nahi maante, toh main kyun maanoon?
R: Tum sab ladkiyaan ek jaise hoti! Irritating!
K: You'd be surprised to know ladkiyaan ladko ke baare mein aisi hi sochti!

Ad with that, she turned her back on him and went into the house. Ranbir, helplessly watched her from behind. He kicked his car tire in frustration.

R: I hate girls.

He took a deep breath and walked inside.

Inside the music is pumping loud and everyone is on the dance floor. Ranbir scans the room for Kanya and sees her standing a few feet away, talking to Ashutosh. He walks over to them.

As: Hey Ranbir! Kaise ho yaar?
R: (smiling) Great! This is my wife Kanya.
As: I know. I've just been talking to her. I must say, you're a very lucky guy!

Kanya blushes and Ranbir looks down at her.

R: (thinking) Yeah, I guess I am. No! Ranbir! Snap out of it! You're hate guru!
R: Sure I am! (wraps his arm around Kanya's waist)

Kanya shot him an angry glance quickly.

As: So come on guys, join the party! Mujhe actually jaana hai. Mera aur ek dost aa raha hai.

Kanya and Ranbir make their way to the refreshment table and sit down.

K: Waiter, ek coke milegi?
W: Ji, memsaab
R: Aur mujhe ek shot tequila lunga.

Kanya stares up at him in shock, but that doesn't faze Ranbir. He grabs the shot glass and gulps it down.

R: Ek aur, please
Ashutosh comes and sits down next to them.

As: So guys, kaisi lag rahi hai, party? Are you two having fun?

RK: (strained) Yes

As: Good...hey look, mera dost aa gaya! Hey Armaan! Over here!

As the mystery man descends down the stairs, the disco ball's light falls across his face. It's ARMAAN! From DMG!

Ar: (thinking) Whoa! Who is that hottie? I have to ask her to dance!

He strolled up to Kanya.

Ar: Hey beautiful, wanna dance?

Kanya cast a painful glance at Ranbir.

K: Sure

Armaan grinned and took her hand and pulled her onto the dance floor. As they passed the DJ, Armaan sent him a wink and the DJ grinned and changed the music.

Shaam hai, jaam hai, aur hai nasha
Tan bhi hai, mann bhi hai, pighla huaan
Chhayi hai, rangeeniyaan, phir bhi hai betaabiyaan
Kyun dhadakta hai dil?
Kyun yeh kehta hai dil?
Deewano ko ab tak nahi hai yeh pata
Aaj ki raat, hona hai kya, paana hai kya Khona hai kya
Aaj ki raat hona hai kya paana hai kya
Khona hai kya

Ranbir glared at Armaan with a powerful intensity. How much he longed to be over there, in his place. And even more! How much he longed for her lips to smile just like that when she danced with him! And how much he wished he could bring her body that close to his.

R: (thinking) Agar mere bas chalta toh main abhi us saale ko jaan se maarta!

With these thoughts in mind, Ranbir grabbed another shot glass and gulped it down.

What happens next?
Does Ranbir get drunk?
Make sure to comment everyone because I just had a brilliant idea on what should happen next, but I need to know what you thought!

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#15

comments:

suganain: d*mn! so short but continue soon
👏 👏 👏 wonderful

stars_shine*: gr8 update
ranir jealous!
continue soon!!

rajkin: arre i was waiting for ages for ur update. u build it up really well.make ranbir burn. he deserves to. kanya b very nasty cmon . thru ur ff i realy miss akashs hate guru days.

princez-preciou: ooh love ur f so far ....but must say parts are short i want longer parts (im just greedy 😉 😉 ) lol
continue sooooon!

me: hey salma! i kno i shud make em longer but i guess im just lazzy! 😆

desaigirl101: LOVED YOUR UPDATE AND THIS WHOLE FF!!!!!
Please Continue Soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And if you can PLEASE make the updates longer!!!!
But Great Job 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

me: aww thanx u!

KC294: pls pls continue soon
i loved that update
its so good....
i wanna know ur brill idea....

candy princess: reli good awsome plz plz continue!!! 👏 plz make it longer i reli like reading it!!!!!!!!!! 😊 😉

punjabi.princes: that was a great update!
continue soon!

sweet cherry:
awesome update plz
continue
plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz make it longer 😊
othewise it fantastic 👏 👏 👏

princez-preciou: krish u are just too good at writing dat y i cant get enuff!

kspooja10: pls continue

desaigirl101: PLEASE CONTINUE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!
And Make It LONGER!!!! 👏

rajkin: ek toh kit is going nowhere and here you too make us wait so long for ur absolutely grippin and lovely episodes. write na, as soon as u find time. plsssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss. i keep checkin everytime par har waqt bas mayoosi ka hi saamna hota hai.

me: haha rajkin! i <3 u! ill try to post one this evening or tommorrow. my mom is making us clean the entire house cuz our cousins are coming over on the weekend

desaigilr101: ^^^Awesome,can't wait till the next update!!!! 😃
Also,good luck with the cleaning 😛 😛 😛

candy princess: yaar plz plz continue i reli wanna know what happens!!Cleaning oh god my makes me do that too good luck with it!!!! 😉

miss.sonia: plz plz plz update soon 😭
but i dont understand it do ranbir love kanya or not and if he does then why did he
say to kanay that it was all a drama
explain 😕
but it is awesome ff

miss.sonia: hey i read the hole ff
again and i think i know it now
plzzz make the next part longer 😭
i love the part where ranbir was yalouse 😊
plz plz plz contineu soon👏

me: m tryin but there is so much to do! im exhausted! i just went to da beach wit my friends Nisha, Saachi, Nikki and one mor Nisha. It was sooo much fun!

desaigirl101: ^^LOL my name is Nisha too.Hope u enjoyed!But please update soon!

miss.sonia: hey it's sunday
now plz update

me: k, i'll start writing the update now,

desaigirl101: ^Awesome can't wait to read the update.
😃 Please make it long! 😃

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#16

CHapter 8: O Meri Jaan

Ranbir consumed his drink, staring murderously at Armaan. His blood was boiling and every pore in his body was screaming at him to go take what is rightfully his. Ranbir stood up and walked to the dance floor with a determined look in his eyes.

R: Armaan, if you don't mind, kya main apni BIWI ke saath dance kar sakta hoon?
A: (sounding sad) Oh, biwi ke saath...sure

He let go of Kanya and walked away. Ranbir slipped his hands into Kanya's as the song switched from 'Aaj Ki Raat' to 'O Meri Jaan'. Ranbir stared into her eyes, unfalteringly.

Dil khudgarz hai,
Phisla hai yeh, phir haath se,
Kal uska raha,
Ab hai tera, is raat se

K: Ranbir, stop it.

He tightened his grip around her waist.

R: Stop what?
K: Tum jo kar rahe ho, thik nahi hai.

He tightened it more.

Tu aa gaya, yoon nazar mein,
Jaise subah, dopahar mein,
Madhoshi yoon hi nahi, dil pe chhayi, niyat ne li angdayi
Chhua tu ne kuch is tara, badli fiza badla sama

R: Kyun? Humari shaadi hui hai. Main tumhare saath dance nahi kar sakta?
K: (frustrated) Pehle tum bolte ho ki tum is shaadi ko nahi maante ho, aur phir koi aur ladka mere saath dance kare toh tumhe bura lagta hai!
R: What's your point?

Ranbir has now pulled her so close, he was whispering in her ear. His lips brushed against her ear. She wanted him to stay with her like this for as long as possible, and hold him this close forever, but then, the memory of the suhag raat flashed in her mind. She abruptly pushed him off of her. He felt as if he'd been ripped in half.

: Tum mujhse pyaar karte ho ki nahi?

Ranbir took a deep breath and said, "No,".

Kanya turned around and left, but not before Ranbir could see a tear sparkling against her cheek.

R: Kanya...

He ran after her, searching for his Kanya in a throng of people.

Kanya burst through the front door, gulping in the crisp night air, wishing she would wake up from this horrible dream and find her self snuggled in bed with Ranbir's strong, protective arm around her. As her feet met the gravel in the driveway with a crunch, her bubble of hope burst and confirmed her sad perception that this was, indeed, reality.

She ran out to their car and sat on the hood and cried all her sorrows away.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * 1 hour later* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

Ranbir had frantically searched for Kanya around the entire party in vain. Now, the last few couples were departing. Ranbir watched them, looking at their happy smiles. Boy's arms around girls. Private whispers in each other's ears, blushes and hugs. He remembered the day he declared Kanya 'mera chand' and smiled. That was probably the best moment of his life yet. He took a deep breath and walked out.

There was Kanya. Sitting on their car, looking pristinely beautiful, but sad. He decided to go up to her and apologize. He walked up to her.

R: Kanya...
K: Ranbir, kuch mat kaho. Mujhe abhi kuch nahi sunna. Let's just go home.

Ranbir got in the car and so did Kanya. He saw her hastily wipe her tears as he started the car. They sat in silence for the next few minutes as Ranbir pulled out of Ashutosh's driveway and took off down the road.

K: (thinking) Bhagwan, yeh mere saath aisa kyun ho raha hai?
R: (thinking) Oh god, yeh mere saath aisa kyun ho raha hai?
K: (thinking) Maine pyaar kyun kiya?
R: (thinking) Maine pyaar kyun kiya?

Ranbir pulled off the main road and down a dark, deserted road.

K: Yeh kya kar rahe ho tum?
R: Yeh shortcut hai mera.

They drove in silence for the next few minutes, with an invisible wall between them, blocking out emotions.

BANG!

Ranbir and Kanya were awoken from their thoughts by a loud noise.

R: Lagta hai, tire phat gaya

Ranbir heard a small whimper next to him and looked down to see that Kanya had grabbed his hand in surprise. He stared at it for a few seconds until Kanya realized and withdrew. Ranbir got out of the car and Kanya followed. He rounded around the side of the car to find his front left tire busted.

K: Yeh kaise hua? Aaj pura din thik tha!

Ranbir's mind flashed to a few hours ago, outside the party when he had kicked this very tire in frustration before going inside. Saying nothing, he bent down to examine it.

R: Kanya, phone de na.

Kanya fumbled in her purse and pulled out her phone.

K: Arre, is mein network hi nahi hai!
R: Umm...Kanya?
K: (worriedly) What?
R: I don't know how to tell you this but...hume yahaan se chal kar jaana padega.
K: K-kya? Is s-sunsaan raaste p-par?

Ranbir put his hand on her arm reassuringly.

R: Darro mat. Main tumhare saath hoon.

Kanya angrily pulled her arm away.

K: Main darti nahi hoon, okay? Aur mujhe tumhari madat ki koi zarurat nahi hai!

With that, she stormed off down the road. Ranbir sighed and followed her.

What happens next?? Comment if u liked!

Edited by kwarudkar - 17 years ago

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#17

comments:

Multani90:

I didn't like it Krish, I loved it, just loved it! Loved the way you bring in a little bit of everything, I just love my bad boy sexy, and Kanya is keeping strong too. I loved that. Awesome update, please continue soon, I will be waiting. Its just plain brillant, and I just love the way you write, the flow is amazing.😳👏

And I also want to add, the way you bring in the dard, is awesome!

all23eyzonme: nice! continue soon!

desaigirl101: Great Update!
Loving this FF.
Please Continue really really really SOOOOOOOOOOON!
👏
KC294: loved it... it was brill... pls do continue sooon... i love ranbir's bad biy attitude and Kanya's strong on the outside but weak on the inside character...
pls pls continue soon

yogitz: multani90 says it all.
thanx for update.

kspooja10: pls continue 😃

candy princess: Awsome!!!!! but yaar how cum we had wait so long yaar plz plz continue fast u leave us hanging its so fun to read it plz plz continue soon plz plz!!!!!!!! 😊

rajkin: intezar ka phal bahut meetha tha . Again u gave us an awesome update. Kaisey likhti ho itna badhiya.Mazaaa aa gaya. As for comments as yogitz puts it - multani 90 has made it easier for us. We just echo what she has written.

GGG3: Absolutely loved the update.Beautifully narrated.How hard it is to act as hating someone whom we really love.Ranbir is a good example.Feeling jealous,telling no when the heart screams yes,wanting to apologize......the hardship has been brought out well.Then Kanya....her pain,her hope,her disillusionment everything is decsribed well.Way to go Karishma!

stars_shine*:awesom update!
continue soon

miss.sonia: awesome i love it it was
really good man plz plz don't take
too much time for part 9 like before
plz plz plz upadate soooooooooooooooon

princez-preciou: ooo excellent part! love dis ff mix of everything!
continue sooon!

miss.sonia: plz plz plz update soon

ash_music: plz update soon 😭

rajkin: ab jis point par kit hai , they better steal from youre ff to keep the excitement alive

me: i'll update today. yeh mera vaada hai. 😊

rajkin: kya baat hai sunkar mazaa aa gaya. wow i cant wait.

miss.sonia: simplyinluv
what time are you updateing

miss.sonia: and plz plz plz this time a long one

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#18

I'm sorry i didn't do it yesterday. I kind of twisted my ankle in dance class yesterday and I was omn the sofa for a long time till 10:30pm, anyways, here it is!

Chapter 9: Soona raasta

R: Darro mat. Main tumhare saath hoon.

Kanya angrily pulled her arm away.

K: Main darti nahi hoon, okay? Aur mujhe tumhari madat ki koi zarurat nahi hai!

With that, she stormed off down the road. Ranbir sighed and followed her. Kanya folded her arms as Ranbir drew level with her. She did not want to talk to him, he was a hate guru. But she sorely wished she could break down the wall that he had built up and talk to Ranbir. Just Ranbir.

As they walked down the street, Ranbir glanced down at Kanya. He felt a rush of love and an urge to apologize and make everything better. He fought it back in his mind and kept staring at Kanya, beautiful in the night, oblivious to the fierce battle in his head.

At that moment, a drop fell on Ranbir's head. He looked up slowly and realized it was going to start raining. He stared down at Kanya, who was still wearing the short white dress. He pulled off his jacket.

R: Here, Kanya
K: (angrily) Mujhe nahi chahiye.
R: Come on, Kanya. Bachho jaisi baat mat karo. Thand bahut hai aur baarish hone wala hai. Pehen lo.
K: (stubbornly) Nahi. Tumhe kya? Tumhe meri parva karne ke liye koi zarurat nahi hai.

Then, the rain started to spill onto her head. She looked at Ranbir and he silently put the jacket around her shoulders and they walked on.

They were now both very wet. As they walked, Kanya stole a glance at Ranbir. His short sleeve white shirt was now drenched and you could see his abs and chest clearly through it. Kanya bit her bottom lip to prevent her desires from spilling out of her mouth. Ranbir caught her eye and she looked away, embarrassed. Ranbir also looked away, with a smirk on his face.

They kept walking. Suddenly, Kanya's earring fell out. As she bent down to pick it up, Ranbir stared unabashedly at Kanya's hair and his gaze drifted down to her shoulders... her arms... her legs...and then he realized that Kanya was looking right back at him. Both of them looked away hurriedly, blushing furiously.

They continued to walk for a while until Ranbir saw a side street.

R: Kanya, suno, mujhe lagta hai ki humme is raaste se jaana chahiye.
K: No way, Ranbir! Kitna andhera hai wahaan pe! Tumne toh humme is musibat mein phasaya, ab main humme is raaste se bahar laaungi!
R: (llosing patience) Kanya, mujhe pata ahi ki wahaan pe andhera hai, par woh main road ki taraf jaata hai. Ho sakta hai ki hum us pe chal ke, main road mil sakte hai!
K: Main nahi jaaungi.

Ranbir growled in exasperation. Kanya just looked more stubborn.

R: Toh tum apni marzi se nahi jaaogi?
K: Kya matlab?
R: Dekho Kanya, main aakhri baar puchh raha hoon. Tum us raaste se chalogi ki nahi.
K: NAHI
R: Toh mujhe koi option nahi.

Ranbir bent down and scooped up Kanya in his arms. She yelped.

K: Ranbir! Kya kar rahe ho! Neeche utaro! Let go of me, you saand!

Ranbir ignored her and kept walking. Kanya started hitting his back. Ranbir kept walking. After a while, when he couldn't stand her yelling anymore, he put her down.

R: Ab tumhe jaana hai toh tum jaao. Main is raaste se jaaunga.
K: Fine! I will!

Ranbir left her and kept walking. Kanya stood there with her arms crossed. Suddenly, a bunch of motorcycles roared down the lonely road and encircled Kanya. A bunch of gundas got down from the cycles.

Gunda 1: Oye, tum itni raat ko is sunsaan raaste par kyun ho? Tumhe nahi pata, yahaan pe bahut khatra hai!

All the gundas laugh.

Gunda 2: Tumhari naam kya hai, gorgeous?

Kanya stares after Ranbir, who was too far out of earshot to hear her call him.

Gunda 3: Tum humare saath aao, baby. Hum tumhe bahut safe rakhenge. (more evil laughter)

He reached down and played with a strand of her hair. Kanya angrily shoved his hand away. The gunda raised in anger, but another strong arm caught it before it came down on Kanya.

R: Trust me, you don't want to do that.

Two more gundas rushed Ranbir. He kicked one and twisted the first one's arm around and kicked him from the back. One pulled out a knife and came at Ranbir. He grabbed the gunda's arm and twisted it around and punched him. Another jumped him from behind and ripped at his shirt. Ranbir kicked him straight in the stomach.

Kanya watched as Ranbir beat up the gundas. After he laid the last one down with a punch, he looked up at Kanya. His look was so intense that Kanya took a couple steps back before she could steady herself. He got up and walked towards her and pulled off his torn shirt.

R: Chale?

Kanya was too shocked to give him more than a faint "hmm" as consent. And they continued walking. As they walked, Kanya stole a glance at Ranbir's bare, muscular arms. And she noticed blood.

K: Arre Ranbir, tumhari toh khun nikal raha hai!
R: What? (checks) Oh yeah, thoda sa.

Kanya rips the hem of her dress and ties it around his arm. When she tied the knot, it pressed on the wound. "Ah!" yelped Ranbir, and grabbed Kanya's wrist. She looked up at him. He opened his eyes slowly and looked back at her. But this time, it wasn't Ranbir Nanda, baara hazaar crore ki malik, hate guru looking at her. It was just Ranbir.

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#19

comments: desaigirl101: Brilliant & Awesome Update!
Loved It!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please Continue ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

princez-preciou: ooh excellnt krish im lovin dis ff continue sooooooon!

psarada: WOW 👏 Beautiful update. Really good update with the minutest details. Keep up the nice work and update soon.

yogitz: oh yes, excellent update, a beautiful start to my day.
waiting for the next one.
thanx and take care.

GGG3: WOW!That was cinematic and proficiently narrated.How sweetly hypocritical they are!But love always wins over.Brilliant update.Can't wait for the next part.Hope everything is fine with your ankle now

KC294: love it love it love it love it....
it was absolutely brilll
pls continue soon

miss.sonia: again a cliffhanger
it was short also and it was really really
niceeee love it yaar plz plz updayte soon as possible

stars_shine*: amazing update!!!
continue soon!!

candy princess: Cliffhanger yaar it was Awsome plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz plz continue asap plz plz yaar!!!!!! 😊

unpredictable91: it was really nice
continue soon 😊

Multani90:

Ok, Krish I am in love with this ff! Yaar, it was amazing, I love the way you execute all the details. The the feelings are so powerful, every emotion reaches me, and I love it! It was beautiful, beyond beautiful. And the best best part you include his to die for smirk, and uff his bare abs, his bare bod. I can't help biting my lips. Want to eat up that bad boy sexy!!! Each scene is written with brillance, sachi! I have no words.👏I want to give you a hug for this 🤗! Ok, as you can see I am very happy!😃

Please continue soon, I will be waiting!😳

all23eyzonme: good continue soon

me: Thank u so much Sandeep! Yeah when i was writing, i cud almost imagine ranbir in that drenched white shirt, his muscular arms and chest showing it was just.... 😳

twilightlove: nice 👏

punjabi.princes:
great update
continue soon!

rajkin: oh god i am speechless.u r a great action scene writer also. the details in the rain were awesome.i want the creatives to read ur ff and include these details in the serial. Isse better aur koi treat nahi ho sakti hum Kitians ke liye. Hadh hai-Tumhara har update is busy surpassing the previous one. you work that hard. And yes pls take care of ur ankle and dont overstrain. love you and your ff.Thanks so much for your wonderful wonderful update.And it is so so live and alive. YOU r very good.vooow

miss.sonia:

oh god

you take soo much time always

plz update soon and make this part litle more romantic🥰

me: thanx guys! i hav not updated for a while just cuz i was irritated with the new layout. i'll update today.

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻😀😀😀😉😉😉

but everyone has to promise that they will click on the song link and listen while reading the scene s-l-o-w-l-y!!

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kwarudkar

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Posted: 17 years ago

#20

Here is part 10! BUT! You MUST play the song while reading veeeeerrrrryyyy s-l-o-w-l-y. It's crucial to the story! Really really slowly!

Start playing the song....NOW

http://ww.smashits.com/player/flash/flashplayer.cfm?SongIds=61925

Recap: Ranbir is bleeding from his fight with the gundas. Kanya rips the hem of her dress and ties it around his arm. When she tied the knot, it pressed on the wound. "Ah!" yelped Ranbir, and grabbed Kanya's wrist. She looked up at him. He opened his eyes slowly and looked back at her. But this time, it wasn't Ranbir Nanda, baara hazaar crore ki malik, hate guru looking at her. It was just Ranbir.

Part 10: Dard ki daastan

Ranbir let go of Kanya's wrist and let her tie the cloth around his arm, just staring at her the whole time. They resumed walking in the drizzle.

R: (thinking) Yeh kya hai? Ek hi din mein itna sab kuch hua hai. Kaash yeh sab sapna ho, aur main jaagoon, Kanya ke baahon mein.

He sent that sweet, sincere, apologetic look to Kanya, but she didn't look up at him.

R: (thinking) I'm sorry, Kanya.

He looked away and Kanya stole a sad glance at him.

K: (thinking) Chahe jo bhi ho, I will always love you Ranbir.

They continued to walk in silence, remembering all their intimate moments, unaware that the other was doing the same.

The suhag raat scene when Ranbir and Kanya had their first eye lock...

The scene when Kanya got drunk on the honeymoon and started singing...

The scene when Ranbir throws water balloons at Kanya...

The scene when Kanya tries to calm down a drunk Ranbir in her room after holi...

The scene when Ranbir called her "mera chand"...

A wistful, remembering smile played on Ranbir's lips. A similar one came on Kanya's.

K: (thinking) Un sab baaton ko kaise bhulaaon? Mere dil pe bas tumhara hi tumhara naam likha hai, Ranbir.

R: (thinking) Woh pal mere zindagi ke sabse haseen pal the, jo maine tumhare saath bitaya, Kanya. Dil karta hai ki main abhi tumse shaadi karoon, par main nahi kar sakta. Main tumse pyaar nahi kar sakta Kanya. I'm sorry. I'm hate guru now and forever.

And they walked...

K: Ranbir, hum kahaan aa gaye?

R: Pata nahi, mujhe lagta hai, rasta chhut gaya hoga. We're lost.

K: Time kya hai?

R: 3:45

K: Humme rukna chahiye. Aur chalenge toh shayad andhere mein aur kho jayange.

R: Woh dekho, wahaan pe ek jhopdi hai!

K: Thik hai, toh hum wahaan pe raat guzaarenge.

They went inside and Kanya stood in a corner and Ranbir pushed up two bundles of hay.

R: Tum yahaan pe so jao. Main wahaan so jaata hoon.

Kanya silently moved to the bed of hay and lay down.

~ Half an hour later~

Ranbir shifted around to face Kanya's bed. He hadn't fallen asleep. Her memory was still fresh in his mind. He stared at her sleeping face. She looked so peaceful, so innocent. He got up and walked over to her bed and bent down next to her. He put out a hand and brushed a strand of her wet hair away from her face. As he stared at her sleeping face from above, a tear dropped onto her cheek. Ranbir immediately wiped his tear away from her face.

R: (softly) Kanya, main nahi chahta ki mere dard tumhe lag jaye. Main chahta hoon ki tumhari aansu, mere aankhon se nikle. Tumhare ghaav se mujhe chot lag jaye aur mere hasi tere hoonth se nikle. I love you.

And he fell asleep next to her with his arm around her waist, physically expressing what he could not.