A veeba story part 50 (last part)

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manishasatpathy

@manishasatpathy

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#341

hey liked ur story alot bt i dont think bansuri would evr want a girl as poti yr u made her look really gud plzz dont do dat it seems very unrealistic nd hard 2 believe 😆

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sunny303

@sunny303

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#342

Tan tan tan!!! the evil shadow of SS is coming!

Can't wait for the next update...I'm super happy that there is still more to the story😊😊

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Shweta Giri

@piya05

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Posted: 11 years ago

#343

I knew it was karan koi aur itna ghatiya tho nahi hi ho sakta

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a4aarsh

@a4aarsh

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Posted: 11 years ago

#344

karan ki papaji,SS????ab usko veera chahiye???omg ballu's gonna be mad .great update,thax,cant wait 4 the next

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Troll Master Gogo!

@S.H.I.E.L.D.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#345

Parts 21+22+23

🤣🤣🤣 OMG. Veera is hilarious! She thought she was pregnant, that too without...? Bahahahahaha! And on top of that, Baldev's reactions were even more hilarious! I loved how he continued to mock her. My favourite dialogues: "menu pta he pr me papaji acha hi banuga", "Wese unki naani kon hogi..ratan chaiji ya phir ranvi" 🤣

Parts 24+25+26

How did they go from their cute banter of:

Baldev; are tu inni upal qn rhi he aaj nhi to kal papaji to banuga na me

Veera; jb banega tb bakwas krna abhi chup reh.

...to this: baldev woke up in the middle of the night to find her sobbing.?

Seriously, I was like what just happened? 😲😕😳

And then Ranvi ne mara entry aur uski behen ko lekar gaya.

And I was more... Seriously, what is happening here? 😲😕😳

😆

However, I loved how you brought in the drama element. I was looking forward to the next parts eagerly!

parts 27+28+29

part 27 tagline: Ek Nanad Ki Khushiyon Ki Chaabi...Meri Bhabhi! 😆😆 Totally loved Gunjan here! ❤️
Part 28, my fav bit: The cute ramblings of a cute wife: Veera; (to herself) ki karaan..wo bhookha hoga..dukhi hoga..aur me uske paas nhi..uske kapde bhi istri nhi honge..usko ye bhi nhi pta k uska rumaal kahan he...Rab jee mujhe mera Baldev luta do plx plx. Super cute! 😳😳
Part 29 - Awww! Baldev's confession! Awww! 😳😳😳

Parts 30+31+32

Aww! Fireworks and more romantic moments! ☺️
(Baldev; tu na sara romaantic mood khrab kr deti he.)...And their nok-jhoks are back! 😆😆

Parts 33+34+35

This part in 33 was so sweet (No wonder Baldev couldnt keep his hands off her 😉):-

Veera; mera matlab jb tk tere sath Mrs. Veera Baldev Singh he tujhse tera sapna koi nhi cheen skta.

he smiled..she kissed his forehead.
Veera; main hoon na

I like this Amrit character. She must have thought "real life mein soap opera" during Veera's narration of her lovestory. 😆😆

Are you a fan of How I Met Your Mother by any chance? 😃 Because this scene reminded me of the gang's telepathy talk. Even if it's not, the scene cracked me up! 😆😆

Amrit; nhi its ok g..thnk u
Baldev; o mention not g.
Veera raised an eyebrow at him.
Soul talk;
Veera; chup kr ja..bht hogai nautanki teri
Baldev; nautanki..me to acha bn rha tha wrna tu hi naraz hojati
Veera; meherbani..ab bas kr..bht naqli lag rha he.
Baldev; chal teri marzi.

The last part where they are in the bed brought this gigantic smile on my face. I love how you keep maintaining the natural Veebalicious spark.

Parts 36+37+38

Baldev; e ki hogya? menu nhi pta tha e jananiyan ini kamzor hondi hen..ik pappi ne behosh kr diya enu. Ab dr. se ki kahan ga? 🤣🤣🤣Ahahahahaha! Baldev is sooo cute!
Part 38 was a relief *phew* I thought u will diagnose her with cancer! 😆 Thankfully you didnt. 😃 I love how he dances all the way towards Veera and stops himself before giving her the "fatal" kiss. 😆 Cute Alert! 😳😳

Parts 39+40

Baldev; haan haan..wahin chal rha hun..pehla haq anokhi naani ka.. 😆😆
Ranveera scene! 😊 * sigh* If only they would show the same depth on the show. Alas!
Balwant's dialogues cracked me up: Balwant; o Rab kre bacha na veera ya ranvi pr jaye.. 😆

Overall Review:

I love you. 😆 You write so well! And your characterization and dialogues are just P.E.R.F.E.C.T. I hope the CVs carries out this sort of track in the show. It will be totally paisa vasool for Veeba fans! So thank you, thank you, thank you for this FF, overactor! 😃 And I am really sorry if I wasn't able to review earlier. Exams and I still had a pending project. Now that's done, I am going to finish reading the other RanJan+Veeba plus Veeba FF. 😃

TC.

Edited by tvlover92 - 11 years ago

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Troll Master Gogo!

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Posted: 11 years ago

#346

And OMG. I am so sorry for this gigantic review size! 😆 Just read the last para if you dont have time! 😆

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overactor

@overactor

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#347

Originally posted by: tvlover92
And OMG. I am so sorry for this gigantic review size! 😆 Just read the last para if you dont have time! 😆

aww thk u so much for the reviews. I love it when u guys appreciate. My work..i love u all...and i need to clear a confusion here...there was a suhagrat dear so she could hav been pregnant when she first thought so

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Muna

@DazzilerDizzy

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#348

👏This is the best and longest Story of VeeBa which iam really loving it...

Please continue soon!!

If this ends then please make a "a veeba story season 2" please!!

I really loved it ...

congrats for 50 pages (+4)👏

Edited by DazzilerDizzy - 11 years ago

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sunny303

@sunny303

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#349

Oye hoye fitte moo, agaya Kerela!! 😲

Lol..I don't mind Karan on the show...he's a cutie and actually a real sweetheart so far, but in your story you've made him so agggh!

Lol loved the update...please update soon...this is my all time favourite story on here!!!

Edited by sunny303 - 11 years ago

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overactor

@overactor

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#350

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Baldev and Veera were back home. They had to change their room

and move downstairs..until it was time.Veera was lying on the bed

Baldev; sb k sb pagal hogaye hen..jaggi ranvi se mitti k khilone

banana seekh rha he..balli kursiyan chote palang banwa rha he..

Veera; tu bhi to pagal hogya he..gadha.

she had nausea and rushed to the bathroom.

Veera; oye ithe aa na (she yelled)

he rushed inside too.

Veera; oye baal pakad mere.

he held her hair until she was done vomiting..

he took her out.

Veera; mere baal baandh de na.

he nodded..he brushed her hair..her hair were tangled and baldev

moved the comb to fast it hurt..

"Ahh" she yelled.

Bansuri came running.

Bansuri; oye ki hoya

Veera; dekhiya na chaiji..menu ultiyan ho rhi hen..aur mere baal

khule the..ise kaha baandh de to isne itni zor se khincha

Bansuri pushed baldev to a side.

Bansuri; hat nalaiq..meri bahu ko tang krne se mana kiya tha na..aur

tu he k dard kr rha he..me banati hun apni laado k baal..

baldev was shocked..what happened to his always supporting bg?

Baldev; bg aap ko ki hoya?aap ka ladla to me tha..ye veera kb ban

gai

bansuri; kuch nhi hua puttar..ab to mera chotu hi hoga mera

laadla..aur abhi k liye veera he.

Veera; chaiji menu na halwa khana he..suji ka

Bansuri; han puttar abhi bna k ati hun.

*****

Surjeet and Bakhtawar were thinking of all the possibilties to get rid

of the child.

Bakhtawar; sara masla e he k wo veera ghr se hi nhi niqalti

Karan; wo niqle gi for sure..for routine check up..i suggest hum un k

breaks fail krden...baldev use jeep se dhaka de dega..she'l

miscarry..and he'l die..chapter close..veera alone.

Surjeet; mera puttar mujhpe hi gya he..shabash puttar.

******

At Ranvi's house..Gunjan was going crazy..

Gunjan; mene to uska ghr ka naam bhi soch liya hai..booboo..kitna

pyara he na..ladki ladka jo hua dono ko bula skte hen

Chaiji; Gunjan puttar inni utawli na ho..nazar lag jati he..

Gunjan; nhi nhi moti chaiji..mere booboo nu kisi ki nazar nhi lagni

chahiye..

Ratan was smiling..Ranvi was siting beside the door..

Chaiji; chote chan tu uthe qn betha he..subah se wahin betha he..gal

ki hai

Gunjan; chaiji wo veera ko achank hi apne veer ki yaad ajati he..to

bs veerji menu phone krte hen..aur me ise awaz lagati hun..aur ye

darwaze se bahar..kahin aur se bhagta jaye us me same qn barbad

krna..apni veerakhdi nu aur ki intizar krwana..

Chaiji; oye hoye..ye cheechdi k to nakhre maharaniyon se bhi ziada

bhad gaye hen..

Gunjan; qn na hon chaiji..

they were all excited unaware of the upcoming danger

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