VeeBa- ~Manmarziyan~ OS2-part-3 UPDATED(15) - Page 5

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Posted: 11 years ago
#41

Originally posted by: RiMjHiM19

hey thnks every1

@rose, maine kisi ko pm nai kiya yaar.. mai uss din ek ladki ke post se pareshaan thi 😔

its okk dear... 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#42
Amazing!!!
Can't wait 4 ur nxt update!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#43
Amazing!! Please continue 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
#44
Main aa gayi Rimzy and Maine apna pehla comment Bhi unres kiya ... Come to the second update ... Nice one Yaara ... Veera was taking care of Baldev and sher ne sherni ko thanks karne ke liye Kis andaaz mein kiss kiya wah-2 ... Next part kab milega???
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Posted: 11 years ago
#45

Originally posted by: Krazzy4u786

Amazing!!!

Can't wait 4 ur nxt update!!!

Thanks fr reading 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: anshuls

Amazing!! Please continue 👏

thnku 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
#47

Originally posted by: nicky13

Main aa gayi Rimzy and Maine apna pehla comment Bhi unres kiya ... Come to the second update ... Nice one Yaara ... Veera was taking care of Baldev and sher ne sherni ko thanks karne ke liye Kis andaaz mein kiss kiya wah-2 ... Next part kab milega???

thnku so much yaar.. aur tu na sorry sorry nai bola kariyo!!! mainu accha nai lagta hai 😆.
aur next part aayega jab mere dimaag me koi naughty idea aa jaaye 😉😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
#48
Warning:- this is LONG!!! i am really sorry, but u can skip parts if u want...
And this is a product of my naughty imagination so beware 😆. i donno i feel this is going to be typical but still i enjoyed writing it...😛. i am sorry if u got bored or something... and this is too much of thinking, i mean this can NEVER happen in the show for sure..😆. and my tense sucks 🤢 i wrote half in present half in past.. i hope you all can manage...😆.
oh now enough of my bak bak, it can go on forever...
enjoy...
😳😳😳.
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OS-2
Part-1

(Veera was very sad and depressed about the recent happenings in her life. First was Karan, who left her alone. Second was the truth that all this while Ratan and Ranvi were taking so much of trouble just to let her dreams come true. She was heartbroken. She refused to go abroad.)

(She was sitting in her room, sad and lonely. ranvi and ratan were out of village for some work. it was 11 pm in the night and chaijee was asleep.)

(Quietly she slipped out of the house and went on the streets. she was lost in her own sad world.)

(She came across baldev's house and his jeep. She found some bottles of alcohol on the seat. without thinking for a while, she took and gulped in a bottle)

(Now she was drunk and roaming near baldev's house.🤪)

Veera- Baldevvv!!!!!!!! paagal kahi ke... iss tarah koi daaru bahar chadd ke jaata hai ki...🤪 dekh teri vajah se ki hua...!!!!!! 😆.

(Baldev was awake and he saw this from his window)
Baldev- veera?😲 ye ladki marvaayegi mainu aaj!!!!!

(Baldev rushed down the stairs and went to her.)
Veera ( drunk mode🤪)- tu aa gaya baldevv... maine ek baar bulaaya aur tu aa bhi gaya... vvaaah!!!! vvvaaahhh!!!!!😆😆.

(she fell down on his chest)
(he felt a bit hesitant😕)

Baldev- veera chup reh... ghar se log bahar nikal aayenge...😕

veera- toh bulaa lona sab ko... sabko bulaa lo na baldevv..😆.

(Baldev held her shoulders and pushed her apart)
Baldev- tu paagal ho gayi hai veera... chup chaap jaake jeep me baith...

Veera- kyu? hum ghoomne jaa rahe hain?😃
Baldev- nahi meri maa...
Veera- kyuuu????😭

Baldev- shhh!! shhh!!!! chup... haan haan jaa rahe hain... ghumne jaa rahe hain.. abb jaake baith ja plzzz..!! plzzz...!!!!

veera-ok...😃

(She gets inside the jeep)

(Baldev nervously looks around to ensure no1 saw it and sits in the jeep and sets off to veera's house.)
(On the way)
(veera is doing her silly gesture and baldev is worried)

Baldev- veera tu theek toh hai na?😕

Veera- oye!!!! nai yaar... mai kaise theek ho sakti hoon...ek baldevv toh mai sambhaal nai paati... chaar-chaar baldev kaise sambhaaloo???

Baldev- arre baap re baap...aisi haalat me ise ghar kaise le jaaon?😕

Veera- Ghar? kyu? please london chalo na...!!
Baldev- haan haan london chalenge...!!!! (thinks- abb ki karoon)

(unable to decide where to go, he calls gunjan, who advises him to bring her home. finally baldev brings veera to his house. Gunjan is busy distracting bansuri while baldev is trying to take veera up the stairs to the guest room quietly)

Baldev- veera... agar tu chup chaap rahegi toh hum log bass thodi der me london pohoch jayenge... theek hai.. shhh!!!😕😕.
Veera- ok...shhh!!!shhh!!! sshhh!!!
Baldev- ho gaya... chup kar ab!

(He holds her by her shoulder and brings her to the steps. but she is unable to put her legs on the steps as she is too drunk)

(Finally baldev pulls her arm up and wraps it around his neck, then he moves down and pulls her up by he legs in his strong arms)

(Veera smiles like a child😊 and baldev is mesmerized☺️, he is looking at her with passion,as she is smiling so lovingly at him. she warps her other arm around him and holds him strongly)

Veera(whispering)- hum aise lodon jayenge?😊😊.
Baldev- hmmm

(Unwillingly he takes his eyes off her and moves up the stairs to the guest room. He makes her lie down on the bed)
veera- eh ki? mainu sona nahi hai baldevv!!! tu gadha hai ek number ka!
mainu london jaana hai...😭😭

Baldev- haan haan jayenge london, pehle tu soke uth ja phir...

(Gunjan comes in with some aid)
Gunjan- veer jee... aap jaao.. mai sambhaal loongi...
Baldev- theek hai...
(He starts to leave but veera holds him by his arm)
(her touch was electrifying for him, it was so soft but still so strong)

(He turned to look at her smiling face)
Veera- gunjan didi bhi chal rahi hai humaare saath...
Baldev- haan... ...

(He feels hesitant and takes his hand away and reaches the door)

(Gunjan goes and sits next to veera)
(Baldev at the door, turns back)
Baldev- gunjan...
Gunjan- jee?
Baldev- khayaal rakhiyo iska...
Gunja- aap chinta na karo... mai veera ke saath yahi so jaaongi aaj...

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(night- 2 am)
(Baldev can't sleep. he just can't take the thought off his mind that veera was drunk. he knew why she did all that. and he was feeling bad for her... he was confused about his sudden care towards veera, but he did not regret it at all)

(his concern made him go to the guest room again, he found the door open. he was shocked. He looked inside the room, only gunjan was there. Just when he was about to scold her, a hand gently touched his shoulder.)
(He turned back)

Baldev- veera? tu itte hai?

(in a fraction of a second, he hugged her. and veera, still not in her senses hugged him back)

Baldev- kitthe chali gayi thi tu?
Veera- mai toh paani peene chali gayi thi... hum abhi tak london nai pohoche kya?

(Baldev breaks the hug and holds her by her shoulder)
baldev- tenu kisi ne dekha toh nai?
veera- nai... hum chupke se lodon jaa rahe hain na... shhh!!!
Baldev- haan haan... abb chal andar... shhh!!!
Veera- haa chalo...
(Veera gets inside but runs straight to the balcony)
(Baldev follows her)
Baldev- ki hua...? yaha ki karr rahi hai?
(Veera was looking up in the sky. she turned to look at baldev. baldev was shocked to see tears in her eyes)

Veera- baldevv...mujhe pata nai kyu aisa lagta hai ki ... mujhe marr jaana chahiye... mai sab pe bojh hoon...😭

Baldev- veera.😲 eh ki keh rahi hai... chup kar.

(He hugs her again. her head was resting against his strong chest,veera grabbed his shirt tightly from her hands and cried. He caressed her head...)

Baldev- aisa nai kehte veera... tu kisi pe bojh nai hai.. sab terese pyaar karte hain... samjhi...

veera- nai baldevv... sirf mere veer jee mainu pyar karte hain bass...

Baldev- nai veera...tu... tu paagal matt bann samjhi... gunjan tujhse inna pyaar karti hai mai tujhse inna pyaar karta hoon vo kya kam hai?

(Baldev widens his eyes, what the hell did he just say? was this his innervoice or someting?)

Veera- (with a shy and faint smile) tu mujhse pyaar karta hai baldevv?😳

(Baldev was unable to answer... he thought for a while)

veera- bol na baldevv!!...
(Baldev hugged her tighter and closed his eyes)
Baldev- haan veera... bohot pyaar karta hoon tujhse...

(Veera smiles and leaves his shirt and moves her hands back to hug him tight.)

(Baldev was lost in her, his lips brushed her neck through her soft hair. And veera found peace in his arms)

(baldev moved back a bit so that he was just inches away from veera's face. Veera looked at him with her sleepy eyes and blushing face😳.)

(He leaned and kissed her forehead as she closed her eyes, He moved his hands to touch her face gently and stroke her cheek. with his hand he cupped her cheek and was slowly leaning further...)

(Suddenly he heard gunjan's voice)
gunjan- veera... kaha hai tu?

(Baldev broke away.)
Veera- mai itthe hoon gunjan didi... thandi havaa ke beech...
Gunjan- utthe hi ruk mai aa rahi hoon...
(she reaches there)
Gunjan- veer jee aap itthe?
Baldev- aur ki? tune akele chadd diya tha ise... darvaaza khol ke neeche chali gayi thi ye... mai jaa raha hoon tu khayaal rakhiyo iska...

(He storms out)
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Precap:- (morning time in veera's house, baldev reaches there to see if veera is ok. veera remembers nothing about yesterday's night.)
(Baldev and veera nok-jhok)
Baldev- tu mujhse nai darti.. hai na??
Veera- nahi!
(Baldev pins her to the wall and leans closer)
Baldev- abb???
Veera- 😕 nahi...
(closer)
baldev- abb?
Veera (with a lower voice)- nai...
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Ok done 😃 Pheww... that was long.. so sorry about that... sorry if i made any mistakes... don't forget to like and comment 😃

And next part me baldev aur kinna close aaya😉😉. vo janne ke liye padhte rahiye manmarziyaan.. only on IF 😆😆😆.


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Posted: 11 years ago
#49
yaar gunjan kyu aayi beech mein hmmm😔
rimi nice os gal🤗
updt next part soon
Edited by sparkle2985 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#50

Originally posted by: sparkle2985

yaar gunjan kyu aayi beech mein hmmm😔

rimi nice os gal🤗
updt next part soon

abb yaar gunjan nai aati toh aage ka part mai kaise likhti yaar... mujhe sharam aati hai 😳😆😆.🤣

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