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836559

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: sunny303
I can't wait to see what happens next.

Your stories are amazing bud! You should definitely keep writing...you've got talent👍🏼

As I said in my previous post, the dialogues are on point. I'm usually not a fan of too much dialogue and not enough story, but you do such a good job of it...ever think of becoming a screenwriter?! 😊

no...😆 but its true that i don't write as a novel or story writer. i write like a script writer...😆

thnks fr ur comments dear.. and see, the next part is up😃

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sonal

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

yay me first

hayee beautiful and very very romantic part i just loved their love hate relationship

and see rimi maine tumhari pm se pehle story padh li

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836559

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: SONAL30
yay me first
hayee beautiful and very very romantic part i just loved their love hate relationship
and see rimi maine tumhari pm se pehle story padh li

thnks a lot yaar... luv u 😃 and yaar ek prob hai.. pm kiya hai.. padho na...

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sana2511

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

chal rimi mein toda sa gussa hun tumse...😒
baldev pulled her head close to him very closed nd kissed..☺️.haaiii meri imagination me kya aya...😳aur agle sentence on her forehead...duhh sab kuch furrr hogaya...aur uppar se tu bol rahi ho relax guys kaise yaar...😡😆

🤣chal ab tu relax ho jao...gussa nahi hun...hare teri birthday jo hai...koi baat nahi...agli baar componsate kar dena...😆 jokes apart it was soo nice rimi i enjoyed alot...😊

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836559

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: sana2511
chal rimi mein toda sa gussa hun tumse...😒
baldev pulled her head close to him very closed nd kissed..☺️.haaiii meri imagination me kya aya...😳aur agle sentence on her forehead...duhh sab kuch furrr hogaya...aur uppar se tu bol rahi ho relax guys kaise yaar...😡😆

🤣chal ab tu relax ho jao...gussa nahi hun...hare teri birthday jo hai...koi baat nahi...agli baar componsate kar dena...😆 jokes apart it was soo nice rimi i enjoyed alot...😊

yaar tum log ki heart beat ko rok ke dekhna chahti thi😆 pure serial ishhtyyl... 😆 agli baar karr doongi compensate.