|| Raga OS - The Realisation ||

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello everyone! 😃
I am posting my first Raga OS here ..


hope you like it..


Thanks for all the support Sanjhi. ❤️ 🤗



Scroll down for OS ..😊.its in the next post.😳

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Posted: 9 years ago
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[Its continuation from Jungle night...Raga confrontation..

Ranaji's dialogues are in green color..and Gayatri's dilogues are in Pink color.] 😳


Rani Gayatri devi and Ranaji were standing in front of each other.

Gayatri was shocked the moment Ranaji said that,

"Aapne Wilkinson ke saath sauda kiya hai..jis se aap Rani bani rah sake..wah Rani Gayatri wah!!"

["You have done deal with Wilkinson so that you can remain Q..U..E..E..N!!"]

"WHAT are you saying Ranaji????" she said while seeing in his eyes..shocked..

"Now don't act innocent Raniji..don't pretend as you don't know anything.."

"But I went to meet Wilkinson to pay the tax only..."

"Yes to pay the tax ..exactly..i am saying this ..so that no one can snatch form you ..the title of Rani which you got after so much planning..

i know about what you have done to be in power..don't act smart now.."

he said sarcastically.

She could not believe at first..how can he think all this ..what made him think like that?

So many things came into her mind the sec she listened his words which were sharper than any sword..but she somehow collected herself and she reply back..

"Ranaji...so you think I have done all this to become Rani..ye aapne kaise soch liya??


i already have doubt that you might can hurt me once again but just because Swarna ask me to give one more chance..so I was ready to meet you ..without thinking much..and I was right..but I will not take any blame on my self ..and why would I ? when I have not done anything wrong!!

you were selling your favorite Air plane "Morpankh" to pay the tax.. and I was the reason for this tax...i didn't wanted you to sell your fav plane for me..so just for you and your respect..i have done this...

i have given my "Streedhan" my jewellry to that officer..in order to pay tax.. o/w I already knew that for Ameerkot and for your respect you will pay the loan somehow..you can do anything...and so there were no danger to my Rani title ..and I would remain Rani as before .. and also I could have ask my bauji to do something about this..to help us..but I knew that it will be not acceptable to you ..so I didn't do that..

this matter was bigger than being just a Rani .. I don't want to be a Rani ..i want to be a wife first and I want to love and to get love..only this much I want firstly ..and the decision was taken by a Rani but also by a wife too..but you won't understand this..i know..you.."

"How do you know about my "Morpankh? That I am going to sell it ?"

now he was shocked ..he haven't told it to anybody other than Rajmata..and her words also echoing in his ears..

She again said, "Does it matter Ranaji? How I got to know about that !

actually fault was mine..i loved you..and you are my husband..i thought just for you and your respect..i thought for Ameerkot and its King too ..and I did it what I thought is right..but I never thought that you can take it this way..and you are saying I have done deal with officer!!..so remember you also done deal with my father..knowingly or unknowingly..

Rajmata has also done deal with my father..so what about that? Do you have any answer?"

He stared at her lil confused ..but in anger,,as still he was doubtful..

And she was also fumimg but controlling herself..

"I marry you for Ameerkot's sake..not for my personal reasons Gayatri.."

"How I can believe it ..may be you also have some hidden agenda.."

Hearing these words he shouted..

"Rani Gayatriii!! I am the king!you are forgetting.."

She cut him off and said in lil loud voice too.." Just like that I was shocked when you said me those words Ranaji..when someone says wrong about you.. the reaction will be like yours and mine isnt't?

but you have hurted me so much..you have no idea..

well.. i could do anything if only becoming Rani is my dream but its not that..and I don't want to prove my innocence..you can think what you want..i can't change your views about me if you are not ready to listen or believe anything..i have done everything out of pure love towards you Ranaji.. "

Her eyes filled with tears and throat choking but she was saying what's in her heart..

He saw her and sort of become thoughtful about what she is saying..reconsidering all that happened..

He wanted her to show the letter which BRO has given to him and in the moment he could took it out form his pocket as his eyes were down ..he heard her screaming voice ..

"Ranajiii..."

and he saw her coming in front of him and she got shot with a gun..

Everything happened so suddenly that he couldn't understood what happened ..but in a min he realized that to save him.. she came in front and her life is in danger now..

"Raniji ..Raniji..oh!my God!! who shot her and he came to shot me but she saved my life second time..on God!! ..she can give her life for me and telling me the truth too and what I was thinking about her..oh no!! I should not have done this.."

He was speaking to himself..and trying to figure out what will he have to do next..she was in his arms ...just than he heard her dizzy voice..

"Ranaji .he was aiming at you but I am happy now.. you are saved and all right!!."

"Raniji..pls don't close your eyes..pls! I have hurted you so much but you saved me than also??"

"Don't touch me..don't try to help me..and yes I am a wife . and a Rani..too and above all I am human so I couldn't let you die because you have hurted me..but now don't try to save me..i don't want YOU to save me..i don't..."

her eyes were closing and voice became so low..

"I know you are shattered Gayatri..and you don't trust me now ..but you don't have to prove yourself innocent..i admit..i was wrong..i got it now.. why you have done this all!! But sorry is too small word..i don't know how I'll make it up but this time your life is important..once you will be out of danger..

i will compensate for every mistake I did..i promise..its a promise by a Raja..and by a husband too!! and I will be ready for any punishment you want to give me..but let me go for yours treatment first."

But she was not allowing him to touch him ..and the blood was oozing out from her arm..its paining her so much.. he than forcefully took her into her arms and saw that she opened her eyes..

"Gayatri ..i am sorry but I have no other way but by force I am taking you with me..you can say anything after you will be all right but this time your life is in danger..nothing important than your life.."

and he saw..she was looking in her eyes as to see whether what he is saying is right??..

and a strong determination was there..but she was loosing senses..not in a state to say anything more..she became uncautious..

Ranaji realised what he has done and he felt so worried and just rushed for treatment..he just wanted her to be allright ..to be out of danger..at any cost..his Rani..his wife Gayatri devi.

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Thanks for reading..sorry for mistakes ,if any.😳

Deepti.

Edited by RM14 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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First of all Congratulations for new and your very first RaGa OS🥳 I love the total sequence u wrote here. Gayatri's all dialogues are perfect, something I want to see in the show and Rana for the first time I able to relate with this character through ur OS. My favorite part of Rana's dialogues is last two paragraphs. U r a awesome writer deepti, Keep writing more 😊
Edited by Snow_Angel - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Congrats deep for ur first os on RaGa 🥳
And I'm reading first story on RaGa here 😳
My sweet sissy deep wrote an emotional and beautiful os ❤️
U have brilliantly merged the gun shot part here 👍🏼
Very well written 😊
Loved the os very much ❤️
Finally ranaji realised his mistake good
he called her gayatri 😳 I want him to call her the same on serial too ❤️ not gayatri ji or rani gayatri devi as if he is teacher calling his student in school 😆
Keep writing more deep 👍🏼

Edited by anish17 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Congo deepti for ur first OS to this couple 🥳
I love this scene as it is shown in show but liked the way u showed it in ur OS 😉 ..
Rani gayatri did tell him everything and he realized what mistake he has done ... Gun shot scene is manipulated in an awesome way ..even I expected that it would be rana on target in show 😉 but u typed it in ur OS .. I love rani who is determined to not let him touch 😛
Awesome one ..keep writing ..😉

PS: I m on time for the first time 😆😆
Edited by abba12 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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R 😛
🤗 Deep congratulations on your first RaGa OS 🥳
I loved it ❤️
Finally Gayatri's selfless love won 😳 Rana Ji realise his mistakes !
Gayatri came in between and got gun shot to save her husband's life 😭
That was emotional & heart touching scene 😭 superb writing. 👏
Now I m expecting more from u 😛
Keep writing... 👍🏼 Thanks for the wonderful read ❤️
Edited by ..neelanjana - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Lovely os gayatri gave back him so bravely then ranaji realised his mistake beautifully written
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome 👏
Beautifully written
Loved it
Edited by RockingPixies - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Congrats for your first sorry and more to come
Well this is my first raga story
Nicely written and you even combined the gun nicely!!!
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beautiful OS.
Loved it a lot.
Loved how u showed Ranaji realising his mistake...
Marvellous..
Do write more.

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