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Synopsis
A story about two sister's.

A story about a girl... Will she allow her past to ruin her future? Will she allow her fears to control her choices?

A story about a girl... Who had to grow up fast? Who slays her sister's dragons. Has her sister's dragons become hers? Will she slay her own dragons?

This story is going to be about Pakhi kapoor, who was previously married and suffered... She is reeling in the effects of infanticide and domestic violence. It is a story about her younger sister, Kalpana kapoor, who had to grow up quickly as she got to know about this ugly world.


Character sketch
Pakhi Kapoor - age 33 years old
Ayaan khurrana - 36 years old
Kalpana Kapoor - age 21 years old
Ragav Singhania - age 26 years old


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Prologue
10 years ago


Lying on the hospital bed, tossing and turning, oblivious to the pain she feels, Kalpi yells in her sleep, "didi... Didi..."

Sahil rushes to her daughter's side, refusing to cry for his daughter needed his strength, "shhh, pumpkin... Shhh. Wake up... It is just a dream."

Kalpi opens her eyes, sees her dad and crocks, "didi?" Sahil gives her a reassuring smile and says, "she is in the room next door. Mum is with her." Kalpi tries speaking, "dad, they were going to..." He father interrupts her, "shh..." Hugging his daughter softly, not wanting to hurt her, he rocks her gently and says, "she is safe now... You are safe now..."

In the room next door, neetu watches her baby sleep, deep down cursing her motherly instinct for not picking up the signs of abuse. Wiping her tears, she thinks, "oh baby. Three years I left you in that hell hole called marriage. Please forgive me baby for not seeing your pain."

Pakhi wakes up disoriented and tries to get out of the bed. Neetu rushes to her and says, "Pakhi calm down." "Mum. You are here. What? How? Kalpi fell in the fire mum. Kalpi ?" Pakhi ends up yelling. "Kalpi is fine. She is safe. You are both in the hospital. Relax. Everything will be fine."
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Angel 1 more. Shouldn't u finish the others first.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Omg... So good. Give chapter 1 update please!!!! 😃
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Chapter 1
Present day

Stepping foot on indian soil after years, ten years to be precise, Kalpi feels a moment of panic, when she feels the hot Indian air caress her skin, whispering under her breath, she tells herself to calm down, angry with herself over the weak moment. Collecting her luggage, Kalpi heads out to look for her sister. She could not understand her sister's decision to move back to India four years ago. It didn't matter, she was here to support her sister in any way she could... Just as their parents.


Pakhi smiles on seeing Kalpi, walks towards her with open arms, saying, "couldn't stay away could you." Kalpi grins, replying, "where you are, I am. I would have come sooner if you allowed it." Shaking her head, Pakhi says, "no. I could not have you disrupt your education."


Ragav Singhania, p.a. to Pakhi stares in surprise. His boss smiled. In the six months he has worked for Kapoor Investment Group, he has never seen her smile. He nicknamed her, ice princess; of course Not to her face for getting fired would beat the purpose of having worked so hard to get hired. He looks to the girl that brought Pakhi to smile and frown, thinking, "what is wrong with her... What's up with all the layers?" "Di, where is mum and dad?" Kalpi asks, as she looks around her sister. Neetu says, "behind you, beta." Kalpi turns to hug her parents.


"Mr Shukla," Pakhi calls Ragav. Ragav frowns, thinking, "why does she not call me Ragav. Mr Shukla." He hated the name, for it was an alias. "Yes ma'am," he says politely. Pakhi introduces Kalpi and ragav, saying, "Kalpi meet Mr Shukla... Mr Shukla, meet my sister, Kalpana Kapoor." She then adds in a stern voice, "she is the reason I hired you. You are to be her shadow. Your background in self defence is why I actually hired you. You are to be her p.a. Cum bodyguard. She is never to be out of your sight." Ragav and Kalpi look at one another, instant disliking one another, both say in unison... "But ma'am..." "Didi..." Pakhi raises her hand, gesturing them to stop, turns towards her mum and says, "dad and I have a meeting to attend. We will run late if we don't leave immediately." Looks at Pakhi and says, "we shall see you later in the day. Dad, shall we."

Sahil nods, kisses the top of kalpis head and says, "welcome home pumpkin." Ragav stares after Pakhi thinking, "W*F just happened. When did I get demoted to babysitter."

Neetu pats Kalpi's arm and says with a smile, "I am glad you are home. Maybe you can bring in some changes. Pakhi's world just revolves around work."

Neetu smiles at Ragav and says, "don't be disappointed. I know this has come as quite a shock." Shaking his head, Ragav says with a smiles, "no no aunty. I am glad to serve your family in anyway I can. You were kind to me when I was new in this town." Thinking, "I am here for a purpose and I shall succeed. No matter the price."





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Posted: 10 years ago
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Angel.. the start itself tells dat this ss s gng to be a too sensitive one!! And im so ready fr it😳
And I really love d way u show ur characters.. lyk a girl, who ll try be strong n ll stand up fr herself.. I totally love it!
And angel.. plz do try to update ur others works too.. its been a longgg tym since we got an update frm it.. plzz do try dear..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Raghav is a body guard. Hmmm he will fall for kalpi. So curious, were kalpi and pakhi both abused. Is the person who did this still after them? Could u do chapter 2 also chapter 1 was so small. 😳
Edited by sunyy - 10 years ago
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Tackling another sensitive topic...Domestic Violence against Women...Ahhh when will this abuse stop?...Way to go Angel !!!
Thx Sunyy for the pm...heheh So Rags is a Butler😆
Pakhi & Kapli are sisters interesting😛



Love the story line.

Continue soon😉



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Posted: 10 years ago
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R U FOR REAL????
I will be stuck in this RAGNA abyss forever...

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