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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: eishe10

Interesting story concept😉


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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice start angl... And i m ready to read it always... Yaa will fell bad to see kalpi in pain but its ok at last ragna will be together and i read it in prologue... Update chappy also
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Angel May I call you Fuzzie Bear ? 😃😃
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Character sketch
Ragav Singhania

A 32 year old businessman. He studied abroad, London and came back five years ago to take over and run his father's business, Singhania Group of Companies. A company that has many sister companies dealing in different industries, such as construction, hoteliers, pharmaceuticals, automotive.
He lives life on his term and does not deem it necessary to answer to anyone. He can be one minute be charming and next abrupt to border line rude. He just does not care. Will always follow his conscious and but instinct

Kalpana Jhadav

A meek 21 year old who always bows down to pressures of society. She is her mother's shadow. The perfect daughter who always does what her mother wants. Her soul is suffocating in the life she leads.

Pakhi Kapoor

A carefree 21 year old who thinks life is all about partying and shopping. A bubbly, confident girl.



Will add more later


The setting will be the same as the show... Only differences will be

Ragav is not after revenge. His parents are alive. Don't recall their names so will make something up. The Kapoors and Singhanias are family friends.
Kamla, Vithal amd Kalpi are living in the Kapoor chawl.
VIthal is working in the garment manufacturing plant for Sahil kapoor and Kamla is/ was wet nurse, nanny and now household overseer at Kapoor home.
Kalpi has always lost out to Pakhi, but she did not go to boarding school, but studies in a local school.
Both girls are at university, but different u is, soon they shall start their final year
Prem's is a spoilt brat.
Pakhi is a spoilt brat too.
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Hayy 😳😳

Luv the sketch ... + the concept behind the name too ...do continue cos your loyal stalkers will wait until you update😆😆
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Warning in the scene ahead Kalpi has been raped... There will be emotional turmoil... Pain.
I want to apologise in advance, should I handle the situation incorrectly... Or bits of it incorrectly. Luckily I have never had to suffer such plight nor do I know of anyone in my circle that has suffered this plight. I want to write a story about a woman's fight, her journey and how sometimes that one person makes so much of a difference. Just to have one person believe in you. Here that person will be Ragav.

In no way am I advocating how the situation should be handled. There is no correct way to handle such a situation... Just different ways.

Please check out character sketch on page 2 - I have edited it.


Chapter 1


Sitting in his car, in the driveway of Kapoor mansion...smoking a cigerette, ragav sighs as he looks out to the house in front of him, "Another party to attend!" He would rather be anywhere but here... Unfortunately duty calls, his mother would have his hide if he did not attend this party. He had already skipped the last two. He looks at the digital clock in the car... The time reads half twelve... And thinks to himself... Let's wait another fifteen minutes. He hated such parties.. It was all about loudness... Falseness... Shallowness... It was a waste of his time... Time better spent in expanding his business... He had a pile of paperwork waiting for him when he got home.

Hearing laughter, Ragav sits up and looks about... He sees prem and several friends standing in the garden laughing away as they keep looking ahead. Curious he follows their gaze to the outhouse. He sucks in his breath in shock at what he sees.

He sees a young girl... Her clothes tattered... Blood dripping from one side of her lips... It was obvious what had happened, but he was not sure to what extent... Wanting to step out and assists... He stops himself and watches in awe as she steps forward towards the group... Her gaze meeting theirs... Fearlessly... Defiantly. Impressed with her display of strength, he sits still... Curious to see what she will do next.


A mature woman comes into his vision... Rushing towards the girl... Worry etched on her features. Frustration eats Ragav for he cannot hear the conversation... But from the woman's gestures... He could read that the woman was angry with the girl. The woman turns towards the group, her gaze slightly lowered... In servitude... filled with fear, pain, shame. She drags the girl back inside the outhouse. The group laugh and jeer as they head back into the house... No sense of shame... No prick in their conscious.

Ragav sits still... His soul suffocating... He hated this country... The people... The attitude... He wished he never came back... this world was very different from the one he grew up in... There everyone was equal... The law applied to all... Here people rarely fought for their rights... The poor puppets of the rich...

He quietly walks up the the outhouse... His intention to ease drop...

Kamla says in a determined voice, "kalpi nothing happened."

Tears falling silently, Kalpi replies with equal determination, "no Aai, something happened." Crossing her hands around her waiste, she continues, "I want to go to the police station."

Trying to keep the panic at bay, Kamla says, "you foolish girl, you don't understand anything."

"Aai there is nothing to understand. I..." Kalpi says.

Kamla interrupts, "they are rich, you think you will get justice. You will be mocked, taunted. They will spend money and throw the case away or worse will twist it so that you look guilty to save their son. They will say you were after him... That you purposely..." Kamla stops, unable to finish her thought process.

Kamla begins pacing as she thinks of all the consequences and worst case scenarios, "omg. We will lose our jobs, our home. Nobody will marry you. Kalpi beta please forget it happened. Your baba will never be able to handle this shame."

Folding her hands, Kamla pleads, "kalpi I am begging you, please forget about it. It never happened."

Kalpi holds her mother's hands, crying she says, "aai, why is being poor such a curse? Why is being born a girl such a curse? Why do girls always have to feel the shame? Why do girls always have to keep paying the price for society's double standards?"

Kamla pulls Kalpi into a hug, "everything will be okay. We cannot fight destiny. It was written."

Kalpi steps away angrily, "God did not plan for me to get raped. Don't bring fate into it!"

Seeing the determination set in Kalpi's eyes, Kamla panics further, thinking, "I have to protect my baby from future misery. I could not protect her this time, but I will protect her from society." Steeling her heart, she grabs Kalpi's hand and drags her in to the bathroom... Pushing her under the shower... Watching with relief as the proof is washed away.

Ragav rushes inside when he hears the girl named Kalpi yell for her mother to stop... He was too late... He sees her sitting under the shower... Her gaze filled with despair. He chokes, realising that the girl who had a fighting spirit moments ago... Has accepted defeat. He calls out, "society will not change... If the people living in the the society don't change their attitude... Change comes about one step at a time." His voice startling Kalpi and Kamla of his presence... For they were so immersed in their grief that they were not aware of his presence.

Seeing the glimmer of hope and fighting spirit, Ragav turns and leaves... Thinking that he has done his bit and justice will be served.

Note: don't be upset with Kamla's attitude. Her worries are real and at the same time she has been moulded with this thinking. As a mother she is thinking further ahead... Thinking of future battles that her daughter will face. Ragav and Kalpi... Maybe because of their youth are thinking of today's battle. None have had time to realise that the actual battle will be a battle Kalpi will have to fight from within.
Edited by angelpureness - 10 years ago
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Angel I can relate to this story because it's close to home ... You see one of my best friend she is like a sister to me ...She was rape by her step dad at an tender age ...worst part her own mother didn't believe her ...so she never got justice ...Also my friend forgive that beast because he 's taking her 2 younger sister ...The court declare her mom unfit ...
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Originally posted by: GUYCAN

Angel I can relate to this story because it's close to home ... You see one of my best friend she is like a sister to me ...She was rape by her step dad at an tender age ...worst part her own mother didn't believe her ...so she never got justice ...


Omg... I am so sorry. I hope she has come out stronger and believes in herself. I feel the real battle is from within. To overcome any situation and make a life and believe in oneself... To have a sense of I am worth it.
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Chapter 2

Six months later

The Singhanias and the Kapoors are having brunch together at the Kapoor mansion. Whenever Ragav saw Prem over the six months he always remembered that girl... He had kept an eye out in the news for her case... But there was no mention of it... A sense of sadness would overcome him at the thought that she didn't try to get her justice.

"What are we celebrating?"Sudhir Singhania, Ragav's father asks. Chuckling, Sahil passes him the newspaper, saying, "my son's innocence."

Ragav nearly chokes on his tea, grabs the newspaper from his father's hands to read.



The newspaper article excerpt

Business Tychoon's son found not guilty

The shame of today's girls. Who cry foul when their plans to trap a rich businessman's son fail. Here is the journey of one such girl, Kalpana Jhadav who cried rape when her plans to marry a rich businessman's son failed...when women a morale as her, who have been proved to be sexually promiscuous, cry rape falsely. It hinders the progress made over the years for real victims to get their justice. This writer says, "shame on you Kalpana Jhadav. Shame on you."
Below find quote from her university colleagues. Read for yourself what they have to say
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Ragav stares at the newspaper clipping... Shocked. He looks towards his father, wanting to protest. His heart racing as he thinks about what that poor girl must have endured. He hated India. He looks at Sahil and says, "Sahil uncle, this was never mentioned in the news before." Smiling sadly, he replies, "I made sure it did not reach the public. In fact deep down I am not happy that the girl's name is mentioned in the article... But I had no choice. The media were insistent and I relented on the condition Prem's name is not mentioned."

Neetu sighs and says sadly, "we tried to make sure the case never go to court. When we found out the truth from Prem and his friends... I just can't believe that Kamla's daughter would..." Patting her hand, Sahil says, "neither can I. I guess it is because of Kamla that deep down our hearts refuse to believe."

Gauri says, "Prem is such an angel. I cannot believe that he is capable of what she claimed. Anyways justice has been served. Let us put the bad memories behind us."

In the car with his father... Awaiting his mother... Ragav hesitates momentarily, then says, "dad. I was there that night." His father turns to him sharply, "are you a witness to the rape?" He asks. Ragav shakes his head, replies, "no. After. I heard her tell her mother she was raped." His father replies dismissively, "maybe she was scared because her mother caught her." Frowning Ragav replies, "no dad. I don't think so. I saw the state she was in. I encouraged her to seek justice." He finishes, guiltily. Hearing the car door open, his father's says, "we shall continue this conversation later."

Later in the night, Ragav and his father are sitting in the study, having a drink... His father asks, "tell me. What role did you play?" His heart heavy with guilt, Ragav says, "I encouraged her to go to the cops. Her mother foresaw this. And had refused her." "Dad,"he calls out, his voice infused with pain, "she was going to do as her mother said, but I intervened. I am partly responsible." "No. You are not responsible," his father replies. "Tell me. How else were you involved. Did you use your name to carry weight towards her justice," his father asks. Ragav looks at him in confusion, "no. Should I have. I just told her to fight for her rights and left."

His father sighs and says bleakly, "Ragav this is India. I keep reminding you that things work differently here. Her mother is wiser than the both of you. She knew this would happen." "Dad," Ragav says, "I will reopen the case." "No. No. No." He replies, "you will make things worse for her."
Seeing the guilt etched on his son's features, he says, "I know you want to help her. Find another way."
He gets up to leave the room, stops at the door, turns to Ragav and says, "son, you are not responsible for what happened. Let go of the guilt."

Note: recently there was an article where a woman who is free with her services to support her family was named and shamed and yet the bigwigs who used her services were not. This chapter is dedicated to her strength for dealing with the double standards of the rich and famous.


Edited by angelpureness - 10 years ago
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Omg... I am so sorry. I hope she has come out stronger and believes in herself. I feel the real battle is from within. To overcome any situation and make a life and believe in oneself... To have a sense of I am worth it.

Thank you for writing this FF ...
Lemme share a bit ...hope I don't bore you 😊😊
My friend is one tuff & strong cookie ...Yet meek inside but she doesn't show it ...
her parents had a bitter divorce ...her mom remarried that's when the rape took place at a tender age ...at first my friend didn't know what was going on because that monster would bribe her with candy & threaten her...yrs pass by yet she didn't share it with any one because she was afraid no one will believe her ...after a while thing got really bad at school she would get into fights & start drinking & smoking...her family start accusing her that she 's a disgrace to her family ...that's when the truth came out ...no one in her family believe her ...worst part her own family kick her out she was living at the shelter for a while & start working at age 14 ...finally she found a family who accept her ...
oh she learn the bitter truth about life ...she did stuff that she 's not proud of but she did what she had to do to survive ...
she 's one of the strongest person I know & i'm so glad I met her ...how did I met her ?about 3 yrs ago we did this programme & every one thinks she was weird & start gossiping abt her ...I would listen to them ...I'm so thankful for my mom who thought me don't judge a book by its cover ...so I look at her & feel something abt this girl ...she wouldn't talk to any one but me being a chatter box kept talking to her finally she start talking to me until this day ...there's soo much more to share let me stop ...
I'm so happy for her because the guy she 's dating accept her for who she is & doesn't care about her past ...
Her character remind me of Kalpi ...

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