My ff: The Chockopie and the Prince- Ch. 3: The Flashbacks (p. 2)

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Chapter 1~


Now since I am quite busy, I decided that although I have made up quite a bit of ff, I think it's best if I just start posting my ff, even if it means that not everything is in order.


Anyways, here is the 1st piece of it,


Prem starts having romantic feelings for Kalpi sometime during the time she is the surrogate for Raghav & Paakhi- right after she saves his life from a crazy Prem fan girl & although he feels embarrassed about being saved by a girl, he tells Kalpi after he confesses his love to her that he'll one day save her & he saves her in a big way by delivering his nephew on a stormy night not long after his car breaks down. It's only after this at this time of him saving her that she falls for him. Later on, they basically have conflict between them regarding marriage. This conflict really tears at them because they both think they are better off not being married to each other even though the feelings they have for each other are not lessening. One day while Kalpi comes to his house & tells him that she is not interested in being w/him unless he will marry her. She says that although she is has been keeping away from him lately- it's partly because she never fully felt that he's the one for her, partly because of their not so rosy past (I'm thinking about the show so far for example and that he already rejected her when it came to marrying her a few weeks ago in my ff) she is willing to be w/ him on one condition. She tells him this,

Kalpi: "Are you willing to give not just 1 dance, not just two secret dates, not just a few kisses & some warms hugs, help me get ready for a a big event not just a few times"

Prem: "I also gave u... Just 1 sari..

Kalpi: I don't care much for gifts (she interrupts). Besides, it was understandable that we didn't have too many of these moments. As weird as this may sound, I wouldn't mind feeling everything I felt with u & experienced w/u for the rest of my life. Like whatever emotions when through my head when u delivered Rajini if you're willing to marry a chawlwali girl who comes from a more poor family.

Prem had this sad look on his face, his eyes watering, he looked down, feeling bad about all that he put her family through in the past, then looked up & saw that Kalpi was gone. He pinched himself, to make sure her asking him to be w/her on the condition of marriage wasn't a dream & then called out her name. He went down the stairs still calling out her name, when he got to the foot of the stairs, Neetu asked him if he had too much to drink since he is calling Kalpi's name like this. He ignored her & got out the door, & called out her name again. Once he called out her name again he felt drops of water all over him. He stood out in the rain for moment, then went down on his knees crying.

One day, during a party at the Kapoor household, celebrating Rajini's birth. He takes her outside to a secluded place not far from his backyard

K: Why did you take me here? Although it's beautiful.

P: I know

K: Why? (groaning).

P: I want to give you more of everything u mentioned that day.

Kalpi thought to herself, am I dreaming right now?

Prem got down on one knee & popped out a sparkling diamond ring.

"Are you willing to marry a rich, kinda bratty businessman who you never thought u would ever fall for?"

K: Just kinda bratty...

P: Ya, I... I know

Kalpi put her arms around him, adding to the list,

K: spoilt, born w/a silver spoon in his mouth

"Okay, okay, so I am all those things"

"Yes, I will. I will marry you!"

Prem slipped the ring onto her perfectly French manicured finger & lifted Kalpi & twirled her in the air. As Prem slowly set her to the ground. Their noses touched & then their lips.




Chapter 2~


I made up some ff that takes place sometime post Prem & Kalpi's marriage. Prem takes Kalpi to Dr Deshmukh who is both a therapist & psychiatrist & she diagnoses Kalpi w/a more mild form of post-partum depression & tells them that her condition could worsen if she doesn't get proper treatment. After Prem and Kalpi come home, Neetu finds the receipt which has the cost of the therapy session and the cost of Kalpi's medication & confronts Prem about the cost.
N: Look at how much is on this receipt Prem.

P: What's wrong mom?

N: Look at how much all this is costing you? I am assuming you paid for it.

P: I did mom! I went to the best mental physician in town- Dr. Deshmukh.

N: I don't know about all this Prem. Your busy at work. Kalpi has this.. this mental case, think about Priyanka

P: It's post-partum depression mom! Fortunately, it's not severe.

N: What happens if it becomes severe Prem?

Prem put his head down, feeling like his world was slowly crumbling down. All he wanted was for Kalpi to be happy. His eyes started to water. Then he saw Kalpi coming down the stairs in a matching robe & gown.

K: I heard everything

K: You don't need to worry about me Neetu aunty. I'm going to take my medication on time & try to be more positive.

N: You better Kalpi. You see Prem isn't like your father. You cannot afford to not take much care of your daughter & have Prem be like a stay at home dad.

K: Enough is enough! Don't say anything more about my family. I know my...

Kalpi didn't feel like she could finish the rest of her sentence. She knew her responsibilities, including her responsibility to her baby girl

N: What Kalpi? Cat caught your tongue.

P: Leave her alone mom! Right now, Kalpi needs extra support & I know you don't like how much money went to the medication, this appointment, & there is going to be at least a few more appointments in future but I am concerned about her. I'm concerned about MY WIFE!

By this time, Prem was yelling at Neetu. Kalpi was afraid that she might end up being a burden in the house as she went up the stairs. She closed the bedroom door shut. Part of her wanted to leave Kapoor Niwas because she was afraid she would end up feeling like a burden due to her post-partum but how would leaving help much. She would be away from Prem who she couldn't afford to be away from. Kalpi looked up & saw Prem entering the room. Prem saw tear roll down Kalpi's face. He went over to her wiped the tear & held her close to his chest. Kalpi wrapped her arms around him.

P: We're going to get through this, okay?

K: Okay

Their embrace got interrupted when they heard Priyanka crying. Kalpi told Prem to not to go anywhere. Prem started to say he was thinking about checking out the venue for the next business party.

K: Do you have to do it today?

P: No

K: Then stay right here.

P: Ok.. U are kinda creeping me out right now.

Kalpi closed the door and tended to Priyanka. After she put placed her back in her crib. She stared at her, while she lay in her crib, fast asleep, thinking how now there is another person in her life that she cannot afford to let down- her daughter. She went back to the bedroom and saw Prem lying on the bed.

P: Is she sleeping?

K: Yes.

Kalpi took off her robe & lay down on top of Prem. While they cuddled, Kalpi revealed the reason as to why she wanted him to stay in the house for sometime today.

K: Do u wanna know why I want u stay at home for some time today?

P: Why?

K: Because I want to... I want to make love to you.

P: You're in a naughty mood.

K: Yes I am

They made love.

Not long after making love, Kalpi was in deep thought while resting her head against Prem's chest. She fellt like her life was so much more at ease before the day she saw Prem in a drunken state, running his fingers through her hair, saying that she had such pretty eyes & he could just stare into them. That was the first time she felt that he might have a more than a friend feeling towards her. Ever since then her life turned into more of a roller coaster ride. She heard a lightning outside, getting reminded about the day he delivered Rajini (Ragav & Paakhi's son) that stormy night. She caressed her nose against his bare shoulder, getting a whif of his cologne. Being reminded of how sometime after she started dating Prem in secret how angry her parents, especially her mom got when she smelt of this very same fragrance.

"At least she ended up accepting us." Kalpi whispered.


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Great! 👍🏼
Thanks for sharing this.
It seems so out of character for Prem though😛 Prem wouldn't change so much unless something major happened!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Like I said, my ff is not in order & most of it takes place in the future. This particular chapter takes place not long after the birth of Prem & Kalpi's daughter. Prem started liking Kalpi while she was a surrogate for Paakhi & Raghav & Prem ended up delivering their baby. So emotions were running more high w/him during this more drastic time. W/the way the CV's have been portraying him so far on the show, your reaction is understandable 😆.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I must say... you are one very much dedicated fan of Prem-Kalpi!!! :) :)
and btw.. so far so good.. chapter 1 and 2... :) :D
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excellent job ..but don't u think all chhapters shud be posted at one thread itself??
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Awesome...though I love ragna madly...I do like PREMNA TOO...AND AM CLESRING ITS NOT PRENA🤣
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: angelinasingh

excellent job ..but don't u think all chhapters shud be posted at one thread itself??


Hi angelinasingh. I think I am most probably am gonna put both chapters 1 & 2 as well as any future chapters all in one thread but I might have some of the future chapters be flashback w/some of them taking place before Ch. 1.
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loved it...
it is a must read..
emotions beautifully portrayed❤️ ..
well thought and excellently penned down...
its a delight to read even if you are not a Pralpi fann...
The way kalpi prem made love and kalpi feeling a burden and wanting to leave kapoor niwas and many more small things which make up this brilliant story..
hats off... to the story..👍🏼
and a big hug to the topic maker for providing a sheer delight for us to read...!!!!🤗
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I actually decided to change when Prem and Kalpi fall for each other. Well, I am at least having Prem fall for Kalpi more earlier on. I also will remind u that chapters 1 & 2 remain the same. Chapter 3 takes place post Raghav and Kalpi's break up & before Prem & Kalpi become a couple. I seriously cried while typing this chapter. It just got quite emotional for me. Some people might find how Kalpi was convincing Neetu strange but she felt like she just had to let it all out & be more direct when it comes to her relationship w/Paakhi but unfortunately Neetu refuses to listen to the rest of what she has to say & well Prem decides to help pick up the pieces after his little outburst. Anyways, you'll see what I mean when u read this chapter.


Chapter 3~

Paakhi ran outside into the pouring rain and then she heard a strong male voice call out her name.
"Paakhi!"

Why is he trying to stop me, Paakhi thought

She looked back and saw Raghav.

"I'm sorry, Paakhi."

"How could u Raghav? Use me to take revenge on my family & to top it off the only reason why you hired me is because of this revenge thing."

"You have every right to be angry at me but... Don't... don't do anything reckless... Please don't."

"So now you are worried about me?".

Raghav reached out to her, saying her name but Paakhi backed away.

"Paakhi, I'm..."
"I know you're sorry but I can't even look at you now".

Raghav put his head down in shame.

Through the drops of rain, Paakhi could see his eyes, watering. A part of her want to wipe the tear that was rolling down his face but she fought that part away.
Raghav was worried. Worried that she would tell her family about what she found out today. This was a perfect way for them to do even more damage.

"So are you going to tell your family about all this- get me into trouble?"

Paakhi turned around, facing him. Raghav looked into her eyes, seeing if he could at least get at least some sort of sign that she would maybe at least reconsider if she was planning on telling anyone.

"No," Paakhi replied, choking back tears.

Raghav couldn't believe that Paakhi wanted to keep such a thing. His mind was swarming with questions. Will she actually not tell anyone about all this? How can I believe her? Would believing her be a foolish thing to do?

He just couldn't take all these questions.

He grabbed Paakhi's arm

"Don't touch me!" Paakhi yelled. Raghav slowly let go of his grasp

Paakhi looked into his eyes. And then let out a sigh and ran away.

Raghav watched her fade into the distance. Feeling like his life just got smashed into pieces.

Kalpi was in the Kapoor's house trying to convince Neetu to not do anything to Paakhi like distancing herself from her. Paakhi gave Raghav important inside information on one of Prem & Sahil's business deals & reminded herself of how they stole her presentation. Kalpi witnessed her saying all this to her & tried to convince Paakhi that getting this information would be taking a risk & that she shouldn't through w/it even though they could possibly find negative information.
"Just get out Kalpi!" Neetu yelled, pushing her away. She looked up and saw Sahil and Prem enter the room

Prem caught Kalpi.
Sahil scolded Neetu.

S: What's all this racket Neetu?

N: This girl, this chawlwali girl has the audacity to tell me how to treat my daughter!

P: What?

Prem looked down at Kalpi, letting go of her,

P: What the hell did you say Kalpi?

Kalpi didn't answer & looked up at Prem who looked furious.

Prem repeated the question, shaking Kalpi. Kalpi looked at his hands on her arms & then she turned her head looking at Neetu. She felt choked for words. She felt that the only way there would be more of a chance Neetu would get convinced is if she went through Prem. if there was anyone Neetu would listen, it would be Prem.
N: Get her out of my sight Prem!

Kalpi felt a bit faint, her eyes closing

P: Kalpi, Kalpi

Prem lifted Kalpi and carried her upstairs

He placed her gingerly on Paakhi's bed.

Prem went to the kitchen and on his way there, he saw his parents quarreling. Prem needed to get Kalpi to talk. Maybe her blood sugar level is low right now, he thought. He saw some left over chocolate pie in the fridge. He took it upstairs with a glass of water.
Kalpi woke up in Paakhi bed wishing she was no longer here in Kapoor Niwas. Then she saw the door opening, worried that she would have to face more Kappoor family wrath but her worry turned into surprise when she Prem coming into the room with some pie.

"Here, eat this."
Prem handed her the piece of pie & Kalpi took a bite of it, realizing that she hadn't consumed much of anything today.

"I overheard my dad talking to my mom, saying that maybe you are just really freaked out by my mom right now and all three of us crowding around you so now it's just me and you. Tell me everything.

Kalpi told him about what happened with Paaki.

Prem shook his head.

"I can't believe she would do something like this."

"Prem, I heard your mom saying all kinds of things & I don't know exactly how much she said in anger but... She can't distance her from her. She neglected her all those years and... "

"You're mom took advantage Kalpi!" (Interrupting)

K: Prem... Prem

Prem had his head down, whimpering

Kalpi placed her hand on his shoulder but he just wasn't budging. Kalpi moved, facing him.

"I don't want you to see me like this Kalpana."

"What? Prem."

She placed her hands on his cheeks.

His eyes looked welled up, looking like he was going to burst into tears at any moment.
She wiped a few of his tears.
"Why aren't you mad at me?" He asked.

"Because it's not like you don't have a point. There have been times when I think my mom gets w bit too carried away when it comes to Paakhi sometimes."

"Well, it's not like you don't have a point too"

"If my mom distances herself from Paakhi then your mom will have no less of a stronger hold on her & both of us don't want that."

"Will you please convince your mom to not be like this?" Kalpi asked

K: Prem?
Prem looked into her big glistening eyes. Those eyes, Prem thought.

Prem got off the bed and looked back at Kalpi. Kalpi got off the bed as well.

"Okay."
"What?"

"I said okay. I try convincing my mom."

"Thank you, Prem."

Prem looked into Kalpi's eyes

"Uh.. I'll drop you off at your house. That's probably where Paaki is right now."

"Maybe."

On the way back to her house, Kalpi wondered what got into Prem today. She had seen a different side of him today. A more emotional side.

Prem parked the car in front of door & Kalpi went inside to get Paakhi.

Paakhi just wasn't in Kalpi's house, she was in her clothes. Oh dear, Kalpi thought.
Kamla: "When she came here, she was drenched."
Kalpi tried waking Paakhi up.

Paakhi sat up and rubbed her eyes.

"Hi Kalpi."

"Hi Paakhi. Your brother is waiting outside for you."
Paakhi hugged Kamla.
Kamla: Here are your clothes dear. I layed them to dry outside.

Paakhi gave Kamla a little smile and went outside.

Paakhi sat down in Prem's car, and then looked into her compact mirror.
P: We were wondering what happened to you.

"Well, I was safe and sound with Kamla ma!"

"You know what Paakhi. You need to stop living in the past! I know mom neglected you all those years but she has been trying to get closer to you..."

"Just shut up!"

"I rarely bring up anything that has to do w/you and your relationship with Kamla ma. Anyways, you must be tired."

Paakhi looked into the window thinking, don't worry Raghav. I didn't tell anyone about anything regarding your revenge because... Tears welled up in her eyes.

... Because I love you.. And I don't want you to get hurt.



Edited by edabella - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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You wrote really well!
You're good with the emotions!
It was really different I admit but I really liked the way you write! Great work!👏
Prem bringing chocolate pie for Kalpi was intentional right?😆

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