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Guys...its my third story on India forums 😊
😊⭐️Virman-Os haunted story..⭐️😊
I hav written " My lost love" n "Virman OS Pyaar ka ahsaas" 😊
I hope U all will like my story !!
Its a dramatic story of a girl "Manvi" n a boy "Virat" !!
this story is on "Myeduniya" too !!
But I thought to continue on India forums !!
Its a haunted story !! With loads of suspence,drama,tragedy etc...
N I will not give any review or precaps of my story !! Coz suspence feeka padh jaega !! 😆
N its a very unique love story !! Where the boy "virat" will start loving a girl whom he Neva met !!
but just listening to her story !! Her condition !! N just seeing her photograph...he will fall in love foe her !!
How he will save her from the evil spirit...
N how they both will face problems to complete there love story !!!
Yesss !! Manvi is the girl who is captured by an evil spirit !!
WARNING- always read my story with imagination...coz it will make U feel like U R watching a movie...
Please tell me by commenting !!
What U guys think about this story !!
N send be buddy request if U want me to pm U !!
Characters will be in next part...
Then I will start writing the story...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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😉😉Characters...😉😛

Manvi.-a cute bubbly girl...but a lil shy...was doing her graduation from SRCC,Delhi...she wanted to make her family proud..she was a born singer...hav a beautiful melodies voice !! Had won many medols...many competitions in her college...she was the topper of the class..suddenly her life turned into hell.. She desappeared..(lets see what happened to her !! )
Virat- i mean virat vadera...the rockstar of his college...every girl was flat on him...
He was a fab singer..n every student of SRCC was a fan of Virat vadera..
Had a strong background..
But after an incident he was totally changed...
Avinash-Virat's friend in college...but he was jealous of virat's popularity n his stardum in college..
He was in love with manvi..
naa..he just wanted to use manvi...he had a bad eye on her...coz she was very sweet simple girl of the college..!!
But suddenly he died in an accident...n after that only manvi get disappeared !!
Jeevika-manvi's elder sister..
Viren-virat's elder brother...
"dadaji"-virat's n viren's dadaji.. N in short "Dj"
Shambhu kaka-he was a gate keeper of "shanti villa" !
"Characters will build up as I continue the story...
So enjoy till now..
N if U want me to pm U all send me buddy request...
Edited by vibhubebo3 - 12 years ago
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😉😉😉😉😉😊😉PART 1😉😉😉⭐️😉
*****CHANDIGARH****

dadaji-virat !!

beta dekho humne rishikesh k pass ek banglow kharida par log kahte h vaha raat ho kisi ladki k cheekhne ki awaz ati h..

pr mujhe lagta h yeh hamara koi dushman h jo afwaye faila raha h

m chahta hu k tum vaha jake dekhoo...

virat-dadajii,,,aap sahi kah re h..

m kal hi rishikesh k liye nikalta hu...

dadaji-beta suno

virat-ji dadji

dadaji =dj

dj-beta vaha ka chaukidaar h shambhu kaka m unse baat kr lunga..

beta m uss banglow ko bechna chahta hu..

m logo ki baaen sunn kr koi vo ghar khareedna nahi chahta h,,...

virat-dadaji aap chita mat kijiye..:)

virat left

dj thinking

pta ni aaisa kya h uss banglow mwh..

swamini enterss

baujii...

dj-ha beta bolo..

bua-bauji humne viren k liye ek ladki pasand ki h risikesh se..

bahut pyari bachii h..

dj-rishikesh???????????????????

bua-ji bauji,..

aapko yaad ni maheshjii..delhi meh inder k dost the..

unki beti h..

jeevika..

bauji-vahi mahesh..

jo car accident meh guzzar gaye the..

bua-jii bahuji...

bahut hi ache insaan the..vo

dj-thik h beta tum kal viren ko leker rishikesh chale jaoo..

bua was leaving

dj-are beta..

maine virat ko b kal rishikesh kisi kaam se bheja h..uske saath hi chale jana :)

bua-thik h baujii..

nxt morning..

dj-virat beta apna kaam khatam karke hi lautna..

virat-ji dj :)

all of them left for rishikesh...

virat-kya baat h bhai...bade khush lag re hoo

kahte ho toh aaj dekhte hi fere karwa de...

viren-oyeee..beta le le apne bhai k maze...

jab tere liye ladki dekhne jaenge na toh btaenge..kaha fere lagwane h...

virat-bhaii abhi meri shadi ko toh bahut tym pada h

pehle apni shadi ki sochoo..

acha bhaii much yeh shanti villa pe hi chod dena,,

actually dadji ka kuch kaam nipta k aaunga,,

bua-par virat tumhe b chalna chahia humare saath..viren ko support milega..

virat-nahi bua aap log jaoo,,

viren-chal thik h..

milte h fir..

virat-jii bhai..i think vahi h shanti villa

after dropping virat bua n viren left..

virat steching his arms..

entr from d main gate..

virat-acha toh yeh h shanti villa,,,

cheekhne ki aavazhe...

chalo dekhte h hum b kaun h yaha par..jo virat vaderaa ka intezar kar ri h...

smikes n enter,,,

shambhu kaka comess

shambhi kaka -sk

sk-are virat baba namaste..

aaiye

virat-namaste shambhu kaka...kaise h aap..

sk-bas sabh sahi chal ra h...

aayiye na baba...

virat-jii..chaliye..

shambhu kaka maine sunna k koi ladki yaha bhatakti rehti h..

kaun h vo beauty...zara hame b toh milayiye unse...

sk scared-a..are...virat baba aap b kis baat ko lekr baith gyee..

aayiye na..

virat thinkingg are yr..kab milegii vo..

smikess..

*********

aj 2 saal baad shanti villa fir se khula.. charo taraf safed chaadar se dhaka hua furniture...

virat unlockes d enterance suddenly banglow k saare curtains udne lage...

he didnt notice this sudden chnge in d atmospheree...

scene shiftsss..

to chaudary houseee..

viren n bua enterss chaudary housee...

beeji welcums them

beeji-aaye na swamini ji,,

baithiye

she make them sit in d drawing room...

bua-beeji..

aap kaisi h,,,

beeji-m thik hu..aur wadera sahab nahi aae???

bua-nahi beeji,,,.

unhe kisi kaam se delhi jana padha...

beeji-acha..

m aabhi jeevika ko bulati hu...

bua-jii jii..

bilkil

beeji-pinky ja jeevika ko neche le aah..

aaye swamini ji m aapki ghar dikha deti hu..

aayiye na viren beta...

itne jeevika b aah jaegii..

bua-ek minute beeji..

(seeing d photo frame hanging on d wall..)

beeji yeh toh jeevika h yeh uske saath kaun h...

beeeji deperessed..

swamini ji...yeh meri dusri poti h manvii..

par...

bua-par kya beeji..

vaise bahut pyari bachii h...

beeji-nahi swamini jii...pyari bachi h nahi thi...

bua n viren confused..

viren-thii matlab??????????

beeji-abh manvi iss duniya meh nahi rahii...

n a tear falls fron her eye :(

bua-ohh...i m sorry..

scene shifts to jeevika's room...

jeevika cryingg..

mannu tu kyon mujhe chod kar chali gyiii..

mana kiya tha na tujhe fir b tu...

tune ek baar b nahi socha k tere jane k baad teri di ka kya hoga...

2 saal ho gye par aaj b teri yaaden iss kamre meh kaid h...

aur yeh sirf aur sirff uss avinash ki vajah se hua...

Edited by vibhubebo3 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Different concept n story..! i like reading suspense..Pm me when u continue...n i guess maansi is not dead but possesd in the same house where virat has enetred... waiting for ur next update..!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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hey i am naina... 😊

many ppl in this forum are in love with my ffs n os... and i am in love with this haunted ff of yours...
i have already read it n lemme tell u... its super amazing... 😃 and u are an amazing writer... 👏
thank u for sharing it on IF... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thanx naina !! Happy to hear from you !!

Yep !! N very soon !! I will continue..With a fresh part !!
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😉😉 PART 2😉😉
Flashback...

Jeevika- mannu tune apme sandles rakh liye.

..N track suit..

Are manviii..

Tu kitni bhlakkad h.

.College trip pe ja ri h..

bt Tera Sara saaman mujhe pack krna padhta h..

Meri Shari k baad kaun Tera khayal rakhega.

.Manvi-diii...Pehli baat m aapko shadi krne ni dungii..aur agar bychance ho b gyii..apne soon to b jiju se kh dungii..K dekhiye jiju aap Shadi kr re ho..Bt meri di toh rishikesh meh hi rahegii..Aap apna dekh lo..Di k saath rehna h toh yaha raho nahi toh..

Jeevika cuts..

.Chal dramebazz..Aabh chal Bahr chachu Tera w8 kr re honge.

.Manvi-thik h...M ja ri hu bt aap apna dhyan rakhna..Koi b pareshan kre aapki mannu bodyguard hamesha aapke sath h...

Don't worry b happy :

)*******flashback endss*******

Jeevika-mannu tune kaha tha na tu hamesha mere saath rahegi..Fir kyon apni di chodke chali gyi..aur abh meri shadi hone wali h pr tu mere saath nahi h.kyon..mannu..She cried wiz whole heart..Sitting on d floor..Handling manvi's n her's photo..

Pinky comes.

.Pinky-jeevika meri bachii..

Kya hua..

Tu ro Kyi ri h.

.N she saw manvi's photo in her hnd..)

Jeevika mat ro meri bachii..Chal abh apna face thik kar aur neeche chal..

She takes jeevika down.

.Swamini saw jeevika..

Bua-aao jeevika mere saath baithoo.

.viren admiring jeevika's beauty..

Bua-beeji..Dekhiye beeji..hame jeevika pasand h :)

Beeji smiles..

Bua-beeji..Dekhiye Shadi toh bcho ko krni h..Toh dono ko akele meh baat krni chahia..

Viren n jeevika both came to the terrace..

both hav no topic to discuss

So viren took manvi's topic..

Viren-mujhe bahut dukh hua aapki behn k bare meh jaan krPr yeh hua kaise..

Jeevika-(wiz tearry eyes)Jii..Manvi Apne kuch dosto k sath college trip pe gyi thi..Bt vapsi meh ek gadii...Yahi rishikesh k pass khai meh gir gyi..N she started crying..

.Viren consoling her...He started liking jeevika bcoz of the pure heart...

Bt went to bua n beeji...

N bua neh jeevika k liye ha kr di.

.*******in shantivilla******

Sk-virat Baba.

.Mujhe lagta h...k aap mere saath mere cottage meh rukk jaiye aaj raat..

Kyonki Maine sunna h raat ko banglow meh kisi ladki k cheekhne ki awaze aati h...

virat-are kaka aap b na..Logo ki baaton pr bharosa kr lete h...aaisa kuch nahi..vaise agar aapko darr lagta h..Toh m rukk jata hu..Subah dekhte h...ghar ka haal..

In morning..

Sk-virat Baba mujhe bazaar Jana h sabzi lene..m nikalta hu..

.Bt in reallity he was scared bcoz of the rumers abt the banglow..

Virat opens d door.

.Enters there...He saw really good anteques furniture etcc.He luvd dat...He went inside the rooms..Suddenly he heard something..

Virat-waooo..itni pyari aawazz...

Some1 was there in the room bt room was closed..

He was nt able to saw that person..

Sau baras guzre raat hue

Sau baras guzre din hue

Sau baras guzre chaand dikhe

Sau baras guzre bin jiye

Kyun pal theharta hai ye

hKyun waqt badalta nahin ha

iYeh raah sooni hai kyunKyun koi

nikalta nahin ha

iSau baras guzre saans liye

Sau baras guzre bin jiye

Palkein hai khwaabon se khaal

iDil hai ke bandh koi gha

rKabhi rang thay nainon mein

Kabhi dil ko lagte thay pa

rWoh raat saheli meri

Sab taare chura le gayi hai

Woh dil jo tha mera

Ab woh bhi mera nahin ha

iHai khafa mujhse yaar mere

Kya pataa kab yeh phir mile

Hum toh charaghon se jalke

Baithe hain umeed mein

Kya jaane yeh kis ka

Rahe intezaar humeKoi chu le mujhe

Kyun aakhir yeh lagta hai dil ko

Saansein bandh hai toh kyaAb bhi dhadakta hai dil toh

Yeh tadap koi naa sune

Naa samaj yunhi dil hai yeh

Sau baras guzre raat hue

Sau baras guzre din hue

Virat-waooo...jo b h she sings very well yr..

(he didn't notice dat d house was closed from last two years n no 1 had visited there..

.Bt he was jst admiring the lyrics n voice

.He knocked d door..

N she stops singing

virat- kaun h vaha. Kaun h uss room meh..No response..

N he doubted he opens d door bt no 1 was there..

.He was abt to go suddenly a paper falls frm d table he got dat..

He took dat paper n went back to d cottage w8 for shambhu kaka.

.He was abt to read dat paper Sk comes.

.Virat Baba aap aah gye..virat-vo sabh chodiye sk yeh bataiye...yaha koi ladki h jo gati ho...I mean gane wane ka shock rakhti ho..

Sk confused nahi Baba aaisa toh koi ladki nahi h..Lyon???

?Virat-kuch nahi kaka..Bas aase hi...N he left

Dat was nt jst 1 paper dat was 4 or 5 sheets..

.Virat was nt much serious abt wat would b in dat.

.He took dat letter n suddenly something fell on d floor

Virat -ohh god..He took dat thing dat was a photo.

.A gals photo She WAs really very beautiful..

Virat smiles aftr seeing dat photo n put dat aside.

.N now he started reading dat letter.

Letter beganss...***************I know yeh letter koi nahi padhega...Pr fir b m iss sarnate meh koi toh h jo mera saath de ra h.Yeh kora kagaz..meri life b na...kuch alag hi h..M kabhi kisi ko khsh nhi kr skti.jis baat ki saza mujhe aj mil ri h..Pechle ek hafte meh meri life neh pta nahi kaisa turn liya h..Mujhse mera sabh kuch cheen liya.Meri hassi meri khushi..Meri zindgi yaha tak b meri maut b..Pechle ek hafte meh mere saath jo hua...Bhagwan na kr vo kisi k saath b ho..jiske baare meh soch kr logo ki ruh tak kaap uthti h...m vo sabh kuch seh rahi hu.Sunday

Mere ghar vale mujhe dhund rage honge..kaash m unse mil pati :'(M abh bas yahi janti hu unke liye yeh kabool krna aasan hoga k m mar chuki hu..Kyonki vo log bardash nahi kr paenge...mar vo...Kyon ho ra h..ye..Kaash use raat usne vo harkat nahi kri hotiToh aj vo b zinda hota aur m b yaha kaid nahi hoti..Uski ghatiya soch aj b meri jeete ji jaan le ri h..Har roz mere shareer pr ek naya ghav...Bhagvan b jaise andha ho gya h...Manvi :'((the letter was very much old..Wid some drops of tears n blood Virat was too much affec

Affected wiz d letter..A tear rolled on to his cheeks..A pain in his heart..dat was nt virat who was crying dat was his heart his soul..Virqt- manviii..he wispers while crying...(he even don't know manvii never met her never seen herHe jst hav her name n photograph..Den he remember wher was d photo..He took up d photo n admiring her..Virat thinking(manvii tumhari is smile k peeche jo dard h jo tadap h shayad m usse samajhne k kaabil nahi hu..Pr mujhsse jitna banega m krne k liye tayiyar hu..)Cryingggf :'(:'(:'(:'(:'(:'(

Edited by vibhubebo3 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesome os
This part was also too good
Waiting 4 ur next part
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Posted: 12 years ago
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a different and interesting story.update soon dear can't wait.best wishes.and and really hope that manvi will b back.
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Nice Update...! If Maanvi is possesed then y Virat couldnt see her...m confused...waiting for ur next update...!

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