Ek Lamha Hamara : A ShraMan One Shot - Page 4

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

What a wonderful piece of work!

Got me hooked since the very first line.

Star-struck! ! ⭐️

Loved Shravan's confession about his not the brightest deed.

It was emotional and heart wrenching.

His teary eyes turning visible in thunderlight was

a gripping moment.

Absolutely loved it!

Thank you! 😳

The end was even more beautiful with how

ease, simplicity... they made peace.

Great job!

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

Unressed on page 1.

Originally posted by: KitkitMkb

Apke naam ka OS dekh kar, kuch kuch hota hai Tabby, aap nahi samjhe gi 😳

To samjhao na 😳

First of all, can we talk about the title?

Yes,,we can!

So apt, so beautiful it already transports you into ShraMan's world, the wait behind my res aside from my bimar-pur ( 😆 ) was because I wanted to cherish it, I wanted to take my time and relish every word of your write up!

Main to aisey hi dhamkakar chance le rahi thi, ,,aap ne to Sach main res-pur ko unres-pur bana diya,,,not that m complaining !😆

We have waited so long for this to happen and God it was Worth all those posts and those requests!!

🤗

Life was never simple for her but it never felt so dark. For some reason I loved this line in the paragraph, it stood out for me. Simple but impactful ❤️

Story of her life!

These two are soulmates in every sense of the term and you showcased this so beautifully. ❤️

They are 'bila shuba'... no matter how much we crib! 😃

I'll end up quoting the whole OS at this rate 😆

Meri line mujhi par 😆

I think you noticed but I am a sucker for little details

That I know 😉

and in only a 1000 words write-up you were able to give me that: His dark clothes mingled with the darkness of night.

It was him and she can find him in crowd. Eyes closed. This reminds me of all the moments Sumo had this blind trust in Shravan, she knew that he would never let her fall. Just beautiful ❤️

They are both so broken 😭

Very much 😭

His hand involuntarily moved towards hers and he kept it on hers ever so lightly. Why do I feel that if his guilt wasn't overpowering him he would have engulfed her in his arms, I can feel his hesitance here.

Yoon na hota to kya hota waali feeling hai... I myself keep wondering! ! Kya kuch karna tha...😉

"Kyon Shravan...? Hamari dosti mera ghuroor thi. Tumney usey daagdaar kar diya." her eyes moistening. "Inti nafrat kartey ho mujhey?" her tears refused to stop. I so wish I could make these dialogues a part of the screenplay of the episode when she confronts him. Because this makes sense.

Yey! ! Sal approved it! !

That was the only time i felt nervous while writing this piece! !

A woman does not become characterless if she had had a Relationship before her marriage. I wanted Sumo to say this, to make him realize that it's her trust, her heart that had been broken and nit her honor.

Absolutely! ! It was Aditya's 2 rupee soch, ,which made him do such an atrocious act! !

Shravan had belttled their friendship,,her trust and he should be knowing that !!

He might hold himself responsible for Aditya's act but he was not.., even in his remotest comprehension he woudnt hv thought,, aisa kuch hoga..! Par as his statement acted as a catalyst,guilt to banta h!

Wo bechara to Jairaj ke barey main sunkar bhi jal hi raha tha,,he wasn't judging her!!

Shravan to phir Shravan hi hai! ⭐️

His fault or not he used to blame himself for all her pain. This, righ here sealed the deal for me. I had all the flashbacks playing in my head, be it chota Shravan or bada wala.

The ending just stole my heart, you gave me the real Shravan and Sumo and my heart is happy.

I am more than happy you know! !😊

This scene of theirs actually is one of my favorite for a simple reason: despite all the misunderstanding, there was one thing that didn't flater for even a second, the immense care they have for each other, so I wouldn't want to touch it or modify it, but after reading this piece, I wish it had happenned.

Omg! ! Bas kar pagli rulayegi kya 😳

and not to forget the shayari,you have waved magic with your words and I am a proud little munchkin!

I love this munchkin! ! Muaah!

But I need more, so when I am getting my confession? 😉

Haha! Sal ...the smartest! !
🤗 ❤️

Originally posted by: Sunain

Unresed at 1

🤗

P.S. Please ab mera bhi kar do😛😆

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Hey ya!!⭐️

Plz post the pm !!

M going to read n unres urs.,,just give me a few more days !😳

Originally posted by: Sunain

Hiiya!⭐️

Posted it at 1. Hope that's fine. Or else i can post it in another comment.

That will do 😳

And take your time no need to rush. Will wait!😳

Thanks ya !❤️

Love ya🤗

Love u too 🤗

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

awesome..

Originally posted by: phoenix_edkv

You NAILED it Tabby !!

Awesome one, specially those couplets ❤️

Love it 😳