Shraman ff- Destined thread 3 chapter 28 updated @page 17 (26/11/17) - Page 9

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Posted: 8 years ago
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sorry for late comments...
amazing update...
thanx for PM...😊
loved it...
beautifully penned.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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All the best for your exams... Very nice update
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One hell of update .. I thought u would kill sm1.. Phew ..
Shravan's pain & his suffering right after the bullet hit him & he became conscious again was written so very well .. The way he saw Sumo crying & hanging onto him while taking hospital & couldn't do anything;showed his love & helplessness..
The pain of his parents & Pushkar seeing him back in similar situation was too much ..
Shravan's broken ribcage & exact amount of emotions of pain & seeing ur loved ones in pain dealt brilliantly,making me emotional too.. 👏
One thing that this incident brought out was the huge difference between sumo & Alisha ..
Sumo is really good at hiding emotions & putting strong upfront .. But actually she's really fragile to stand the pain of loved ones ..Only Sumo can be in OT😉 & Shravan knows that very well ..
Possessive Mr malhotra can't stop even in hospital ..😊 update soon ..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thanks God Shravan is fine 😃 goli chukar nikal gayi...
That aditya deserve to be in jail 😡
Sumo is Jal kukudi par bolegi nahi 😉 😃
Very nice Sanjh 👏
Thanks for pm

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Posted: 8 years ago
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well wishes for your exam. it's almost one month you're not updating... hope you're f9
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oh i loved it... Read last 5 parts in one go... Saamjh, u r marvellous yaar👍🏼...and the story is going superb... This part was too good👏... Jealous sumo... Hahaha😆... Pls update next soon...😃
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Awesome update
Amazingly penned 👏👏
Update fast
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Saanjh,how are you doing now??
Hope you are recovering now!!
And if so,can we expect an update from you soon??
Please take care of your health...
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Hi.. hope you are doing good now... please update the next chapters if you r alright... really missing this
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello all, remember me??? Yes a new update, all of you, thank you so much for loving this FF. I know I am late, and I am really sorry for that. Circumstances weren't in my favor.
Now enjoy.

Chapter 27


"Shravannn..." I whispered, the gun roared, and I could manage to see a spark, and within nanosecond, Shravan tilted his left side towards me. I was already out of the car by then, trying to reach for him, but there wasn't any blood, "thank God laga nahin...Shravan..." But he didn't answer.

I wrapped my arms from his behind, but I could not balance his weight and we touched the ground together.

"Bhaiya..." Pushkar came running out of the building, with four guards shadowing him.

Aditya standing there with the gun, still pointed towards Shravan, but by the expression on his face, one could easily say that he was not into himself. Guards caught him easily, strangling from behind.

"Police ko phone kar diya, aate hi honge," Pushkar gritted his teeth, somehow controlling his anger, his bhaiya needed him more than that filth.

"Khoon to nahin hai, laga nahin lagta hai, but bhaiya aise kaise... bhaiya.." he kept stroking his hands over his hands, chest .."kuch to nahin..." Suddenly, we saw, blood, slowly oozing out of left side of chest, "Shravan..." I nudged. He groaned, his eyes fluttered a bit, as if he was trying to say something.

"Goli lagi hai Sumo, we need an ambulance..."



Next few hours were blur. We didn't know, how we managed to come to the hospital within an hour, that too when we were stuck in traffic. Doctors didn't want to waste time, as Shravan's condition was rapidly deteriorating. I cried, literally begged, to the doctors, to allow me inside the OT, because all this while, Sharavn didn't leave my hand, even if he was unconscious.



After a month he got discharge from the hospital. These 30 days, I could never ever forget. I had categorised these days as my ring of torments. Shravan's attitude towards me, and nurses' attitude towards Shravan.

All these while Shravan made fun of me, mocked me, teased me, in every other way he could. I knew he was doing those deliberately, just to get a reaction from me.

But of these two torments, the most irritating was nurses' attitude towards shravan. They didn't leave a single chance to flirt with him, and of course Shravan, enjoying all the attention he was getting, smiling and laughing even though his ribs weren't allowing him to do so.





"You better take rest now, I'll be back in a while."

"Aisi haalat mein mujhe chod k kahan jaa rahi ho?" Shravan whined. And yes, it did feel good.

"Tum sone wale ho Shravan, meri yahan zaroorat nahin hai." I chuckled, "Aur waise bhi, ghar k bahar nahin jaa rahi hoon. Yehin hoon."

"But where, I demand to know. Agar mujhe kucj chahiye ho to?"

"Kya chahiye?"

"Paani..." He smirked.

After having a glass full of water, he whined, "Woh pillow thik se nahin rakkhe hai, thik kardo.."

I placed the pillow properly, "Kuch aur?"

"Haan...woh...woh..." He looked here and there, "Haan...woh khidki bandh hai, khol do and AC off kardo."

I did the same.

"Chalo, aur to kuch nahin na...now you sleep." I tried to control the smile which was threatening to come out.

"Ohh Suman..." His voice boomed, as soon as I turned off the switch.

"Ab kya hua?" I turned on the switch again.

"Main soch raha hoon, khidki bandh hi kardo, and AC on kar do."

"Shravan tum chahte kya ho?" I did as he said.

"You don't know?" His taut reply made me speechless momentarily. How could I not understand, it was me who's hand he was holding being unconscious, it was my name, he took whenever he got merely conscious, it was me, about who he thought when he gained his consciousness. I knew it all. But again, how could I forget, it was his company truck which rammed our car, he was the one, because of whom I didn't have courage to face my nanu, he was the one who ruined my belief in love.

"No I don't, you should seriously sleep now Shravan. Main bahar hoon."

All I could hear was silence. His silence. Silence that was screaming at me. Silence which was begging me to understand, my alter ego twisted vigorously trying to nudge me from inside. I turned off the light, and almost fled from the room.






"Suman..."

"Ji..." I didn't know why I couldn't call her Maa anymore.

"Kuch baat karni hai beta..." She pleaded, her voice said, it was regarding that accident.

"Boliye..." All I could manage to say.

"How's Shravan? So gaya?"

"Haan..."

She sighed, "Suman, I know, you are angry...I mean you should be, I understand..." She stumbled. It was so unlike her, Mrs Nirmala Malhotra, hesitant, was one of the rare views I had seen.

I kept mum, so she continued, "beta, I know, humein itni badi baat tumse chupaani nahin chahiye thi, par, you know, the very first time I saw you, I knew, you would be different. Tumne bharosa karke apni kahani batayi, par sach mein Suman, mujhe andaza hi nahin hua, ki tum wohi Suman ho...jiske Maa Papa...humein pata tab chala beta, jab Ram ne Shravan ko tumhari taraf jhukte huye dekha, we didn't want, ek baar phir, Shravan ko wohi dard mile jo uss Alisha k wajah se mila tha." I flinched, hearing her name, her name alone brought back so many memories, good memories.

"Then we came to know, you are that Suman Tiwari, jise hum dhoond rahe the." She paused, and looked at the file she was holding, "This is for you, please ek baar isse padh lena."


I opened the file, it had all the evidence, all the proof that Malhotra Industries, tried to find the daughter of Late Avinash and Priya Tiwari, but they couldn't find her. And it was dated 21st May, 2016, exactly one week after the day of accident.




"You should learn to forgive beta, aise gusse mein rehna, sahi nahin hai."

"But Papa, usne sab kuch barbad kar diya, meri painting, dekho to..."

"Usne jaan bujh k nahin ki na beta, zindegi mein aise bahut se haadse honge, to kya tum jeena chod dogi?"

"But...Papa..."

"Beta, jo ghalati se ho gaya ho, use maaf karna chahiye, Kya pata kal tumse bhi to ghalati ho sakti hai. Tab agar tumhe maafi na mile to?"

"Mujhse kabhi koi ghalati nahin hogi."

"Insaan hai hum beta, ghalati sabse hoti hai, aaj agar tum apne dost se gussa hoke usse baat karna bandh kar dete ho, woh to aage badh jayega, par tum ek achcha dost kho dogi. Jo beet gaya, usse pakad k rone se koi fayda nahin hai...samjhi..."



"Sumooo...Kya hua? Ro kyun rahi hai?"

"Nahin to...tu yahan kaise?" I saw him coming out of our room.

"Went to see bhaiya."

"Ohhh! He is sleeping." I pay my tears away.

"Nahin to, he is all awake...abhi unko gaana sunna tha...to ..." He scrutinized my face, "Kya hua Sumo? Yeh ansoo kyun?"

"Nothing..."

"Sumo...don't think this much...Jo bhi hua, bhaiya ki ghalati to nahin thi na...to..."

"I know Pushkar, I know, but it's not easy to just forget everything, Shravan ne bahut se ghalatiyan ki hai...bass...sab yaad aa jata hai."

"Hmmm...still..."

"It's okay Pushkar, I should go now... goodnight.." I didn't want to hear more what I already knew. Its always easier to choose between right and wrong, but here I had to choose between two right things or two wrong things.

I walked towards our room, I could hear the song he was listening, but this song...

Come up to meet you, tell you I'm sorry
You don't know how lovely you are
I had to find you
Tell you I need you
Tell you I set you apart
Tell me your secrets
And ask me your questions
Oh, let's go back to the start
Running in circles
Coming up tails
Heads on a science apart

My hand froze on the handle of the door, as if the song was for us, I could feel, Shravan's plea, his hurt...


Nobody said it was easy
It's such a shame for us to part
Nobody said it was easy
No one ever said it would be this hard
Oh, take me back to the start


How I had wished manier times, 'take me back to the start.'

I was just guessing
At numbers and figures
Pulling your puzzles apart
Questions of science
Science and progress
Do not speak as loud as my heart
Tell me you love me
Come back and haunt me
Oh, and I rush to the start.

How I wanted to tell him, I loved him, like sunflowers love Sun, like moon birds (chakor) love moon, like peacocks love rain...I opened the door slowly, and he looked at me...caging me with his eyes...


Nobody said it was easy
It's such a shame for us to part
Nobody said it was easy
No one ever said it would be this hard


He extended his palm a bit, with a simple question in his eyes, was I ready to forget everything, and start it all over again? Was I strong enough, to forget what had happened to my parents? Was my love for him enough for both of us? Was his love for me enough for both of us?

Oh take me back to the start
Oh take me back to the start.



Yes, Destined is coming to an end soon. But there will be at least 5-7 chapters more.
The song I used, is The Scientist, by Coldplay.

I know after these much wait, it may not fulfill what you all have wished. But it was necessary. Next chapter will be more shramanelicious.

Edited by Itssanjh - 8 years ago

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