Beete Lamhe~~ShraMan OS - Page 10

Originally posted by: vimikrao

Oh sorry actually I didn't see u have modified the story but still I m little sad Sumo couldn't survived.. 😭 😭 but OK tune kisiko toh bachaya..agar Shravan happy hai toh mein bhi Happy if he is not missing his Sumo because he has his daughter who is Sumo's carbon copy than I m happy with his happiness.. 😛

Thanks for modifying & PM

Vinu

Originally posted by: priety.priti

thank you kiddo for compansation of all the tears i have shaded in last part 🤗

ashta was so cute 😊

nice alternate end

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

made me cry again

so amazing

absolutely loved it

Originally posted by: ArpitaSingh1806

hello's and hi's

kaise hain aap?
Hum vadhiya hai...Apna sunaiye...

main finally free ho gayi, no exams😆

tu bhi dolly se inspire ho gayi hi kya, sad ending 😭
Yup😆😆Mera uss se bhi danger tha...😆

par lekin hum starting se bolenge

hugs for the starting🤗🤗

godgi main utha kar ghumna 😳

pushkar be like aaj badha pyaar aa raha hai apni biwi par

and then sumo=laal tamatar😳😳😛

and Sumo kitni dramebaaz hai, yeh nahin ke seedhe batado but main tumse baat nhi karti tum apne bacche ko mujhse zyada pyaar karoge😛

aapki mummy mujhe aapse milne nahi dee rahi...yeh har baar Sumo tiwari killa main chali jaati hai😛...and then shravan bhaaga bhaaga uske peeche aata hai😆😆

itna blush mat karo warna dusra room banvana padhega...what do you mean..ya li'l nasty😃
Awww...Thanks arpi darling...!!🤗

and then starts the rona dhona part😭

poor shravan i pity him, humesha he's the one with all the hardships😭

tumne Sumo and bacchi dono ko kyun maar dala??

doctor change karo!! abhi!!
Doctor change🤣Shravan with hardships...Yaar abhi dilevery ke waqt shravan thodi na maar sakta hai..😆😆

ut the last part was really beautiful just like maine jo first shraman story padhi thi 'the nerd' uske andar bhi Shravan kept her alive by her memories

The nerd❤️Satyavachan baccha...!!!🤗

not to forget the song choice was👏👏

but then you made me go like😭😭😭
Aww...Shorrie😳

koi nahi n i'm gona read the alternate ending and then comment on that too, soon
Aagayi alternate ending..padhlo😆

and haan check your pm box

Originally posted by: amlavs

Lovely update...

Ur alternate ending gave some relief even though it's sad...

Stories like this will always disturbs me emotionally...

But have to say it's a beautiful work... writing intense and emotional one is not easy I believe...

Am loving it vmuch...

Luv.,.,.

LavSriya