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Posted: 8 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: Nik03

Hey Reshma...sowii for the late comment 😕

Well Reshma, the best commenter we have is starting her own story...OMG!!...This is soo amazing bro!!
Start is really intriguing n captivating... 👍🏼
ShraMan are married but the question is with each other or not??!!
Curiosity is killing now...😉

What an amazing start dear... 👏
Cont soon n plz pm me if possible... 😊
Loads of Love n 🤗
Nik


Aww..Deekshu🤗,
I am blushing here Sach mein. ..
Nahi meri jaan, curiosity se nahi maaroongi
I will update soon.
I will learn how to PM, I haven't the slightest clue babe.
I am seriously so happy you liked the start.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Jerry2308

Interesting start...So different

plz continue soon


Meera baby. ..working on the update darling ❤️

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Posted: 8 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: deltadawn


yes IPS you r officially recruited by ACP pradyuman. ⭐️



Hmmm kuch to gadbad hai Daya! 😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#64
Hola Amigos


At the onset, I would like to thank all of you for encouraging my first attempt with such tremendous response. To say that I am overwhelmed would be an absolute understatement. A big hug to all the cheering leaders of this forum, who have been ever so supportive. I would like to dedicate this chapter to our own Evaviego (Eva) . She is the most cutest and loving girl I have ever met , with an energy that has always helped me move ahead in my day. No wonder then, that I call her my own sunshine. Now, lets proceed to the second chapter.

Goodbye Shravan- Part 2

The spotlight fell on Shravan's wife and I could see her clearly now, she was tall, slim and...beautiful to say the least. I loved the way her raven coloured silky hair fell on her shoulders and how gracefully she had draped that ivory and sea blue coloured sari around her slender frame. Her skin was milky white, translucent and luminous as if it glowed from inside. She had those lined those gorgeous almond shaped eyes of hers with a thick coat of kohl and her lips were luscious pink. Those dew drop diamond earing looked really cute on her. I loved the mangalsutra she was wearing with that beautiful diamond pendant and also the sindoor proudly glistening on her forehead. She was a beauty, undoubtedly, and a rare one at that.

She looked nervous standing at the dais and let out a deep breath when she was handed over the mike. I saw Shravan settling himself on the bar stool which was bang opposite where his wife was standing, with his drink in his hand. I felt a hand around my waist and immediately knew it was Rishabh. I could identify that touch anywhere. I turned back and gave him a smile , though he looked a little lost to me. "All okay sweets?" he asked. I nodded my head in positive.

Rishabh was about to say something when the music started playing and we all turned towards Mrs. Malhotra again. She let out a deep breath again looking keenly into Shravan's eyes and then the song flowed out

Main jaan yeh vaar doon,
Har jeet bhi haar doon,
Keemat ho koi tujhe, beinthaa pyaar doon"(X 2)
Saari hadein meri, ab maine tod di
Dekar mujhe pata awaargi ban gaye
Haan hasi ban gaye, haan nami ban gaye
Tum mere aasman, meri zameen ban gaye
Aa oo...(music)

I was looking at Shravan all this while, he had a big smile on his face when the song began,but as she went deeper into the song , I saw the grin thinning and him looking back intensely at her, only at her, as if no one else existed..as if no else needed to exist.
The music was playing and I saw her moving towards him as gracefully as she could, with their eyelock still intact.

Kya khoob Rab ne kiya,
Bin maange itna diya,
Warna hai milta kahaan, hum kaafiron ko Khuda (X2)
Hasratein ab meri tumse hai jaa mili
Tum duaa ab meri, aakhiri ban gaye'

Shravan tightened his grip around his glass as she sang those lines. His wife had reached him by now and he kept aside his glass and stood up to face her. The music was still playing in the background, but her eyes were filled to the brim with tears and she was too choked to sing, while his eyes threatened to spill any moment as well.

He pulled her into him with a force for a bone crushing hug and pecked her forehead with a fervour. I could see that she had clutched his blazer tightly as he enveloped her further into his embrace.

The ambience suddenly got emotional and I could hear a few sighs drawn in and almost all the eyes around me were moist. I could precisely feel the immense love between them, it was so obvious that they were two souls who thrived in each other's existence, that they were together but they still ached, that they were content but they still yearned.

Rishabh started clapping and soon the whole crowd joined in. I brought my hands together for an applause as well. She had truly poured her heart and soul into the song. The Malhotra couple finally broke the hug and Shravan actually gave a thumbs up sign to the crowd while flashing his widest grin. Since when did he start grinning like that I wondered, the Shravan I knew could put a snorting bull to shame.

"Are you okay love, you look pale." I heard Rishabh ask again.
"Of course I am fine Rishy. ..why do keep asking ?" I snapped at him and immediately regretted it but it was too late. The damage was done. I could see the hurt in his eyes.

"I was just checking"said he while moving away towards the bar.
"Rishy , I am.." I couldn't finish as he had already flashed past me as quick as his legs could take him.

I flinched inside, hurting Rishy infallibly filled me with despair. I hated it.

That's it. I needed fresh air to calm my nerves. It was already an open air venue, but I needed my fresh air coupled with solitude. So I moved out towards the swimming pool at the fag end of the lawn. I had marked the place as soon as I had entered. It looked like a cute little retreat, away from where the crowd was standing.

Water bodies always calmed me. The serendipity I found around water was something that always amazed me. I guess it had something to do with me being a Piscean. As I was standing next to the pool, completely lost in my thoughts, I heard the sound of footsteps approaching me. I groaned inwardly at my solace bring snatched away from me and my annoyance was clearly visible on my face as I turned back to meet the source of it. I was shocked to see her.

"Oops. ..I am sorry. ..I didn't realise you were already here ..didn't mean to intrude "said Mrs. Malhotra.

"It's okay" I smiled at her.

"I love your sari" We both said in unison and gave a small laugh when we realised that.

"You look beautiful". We were at it again and this time we laughed a lot harder.

I looked at her smiling face and I could not but help admire her beauty yet again

She had something very earthy about her, something very grounded.

"You sang beautifully Mrs. Malhotra" I said appreciably.

"Please, call me Suman" she replied while extending her hand towards me for a handshake.

"Hi Suman, I am Seher. ..Seher Khurana" I replied reciprocating the gesture.

I didn't know why ..but I was sure this night would be changing the course of my life going forward.

To be continued. .

Note: To all those worried about Shraman being married to different partners , I hope you have found your breath again now. A big applause to Sanjh (itssanjh), Sara (PrincessAshvik) and Vinu(Vimikrao) who guessed correctly my attempt to hook the readers. A tight hug to Anu (aukulgr8) and Meera (Jery2308) who read the story more than once to unveil what I tried to hide.
And last but never the least, a pyaar bhari jhappi to my personal helicopter Deltadawn, whose excitement at my first attempt was so infectious that it got me into my writing zone so quickly..yet again. The way we hover above each other would put the world's most efficient helicopter to shame.


Edited by reshmanair356 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#65
First things first

ahem ahem Sparkplug !! BEAT YA !! me first😎

Resh meri helicopter.. 🤗we should do a - you post I post game here. Readers thak jayenge par hum nahi😆


Now story bottom to top

Seher Khurana - Tumhara naam sun ke meri saas jo kal subah 7 baje se atki padi thi wo bahar nikal gayi. 😆Thank you for being Seher. Be nice to your hubby. seems like a nice guy.

If he could read your expressions... Either he knows your heart is not 100% his, or he knows something disturbed you today. Both ways be nice to the guy.

No snapping you see how shraman had to face so much because of such stuff. if not you will see soon enough.😉

I hope she gets to know about shraman but really wish Sumo would not judge Shravan having met this girl and their relationship... abhi to gana gaya😕

Shraman question - wife hai and he proposed...means what I mean? (> episode 155?)

The song, your description of Sumo, and then the portrayal in words of every expression and change in it on Shravan's face. marvellous.👏

I can see the guy in grey suite watching his wife in the sea blue drape wondering how that angel is kind enough to not only love him to but shed her inhibitions and sing it out in front of a crowd. what a response to his proposal.And what a hug...that is so #shraman.😳 Your lines to describe their feelings in that embrace I have no emoticon for swooning, overwhelmed with emotion and still lost for words.




dil ki baat kahein tumse socha tha aaj mere humdum

kya misaal dein, kaunse labz uthaaye ye bhi tha taye lagbhag

par jo hamari nas nas se hai waakif us humraaz ko aur kya batayein

jis dil ki baatein kehni thi wo dil hi nahi mila dhundne par...

Edited by deltadawn - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#66

Oh God. Popat ban gaya mera. 🤣 Well that's a compliment for you . I did not even have a slightest idea that this is what was coming.

And look at that. You revealed at the very end. Dil pe patthar rakh ke I read the whole chap. 😆 And then I was laughing hysterically at my popat-panti. And then read again. 🤣

Okay so SEHER's POV was beautifully written.😛

Suman wears Mangalsutra and sindoor.

I love the song she sang for him.❤️

The way Shrav is looking at Suman. (I can visualise it.)

Whats with Seher though?😛 Kyon Rishabh ka dil dukkha rahi hai. He is such a wonderful guy.😉

Water bodies, serendipity and Piscean . wow. Nicely penned.👏

Amazing one. Loved it. 👍🏼

This is dedicated to me.😲 Cutest and loving . 😳 Oh My God I will die blushing. ☺️ *Blush Blush Blush*

If I am your sunshine, then you are my moonlight. 😉😆😛


Thank you so much Love 🤗

Edited by evaviego - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#67
Ressi res 😳
****
Unres
Reshma... 🤗
Why didnt you wrote it before????!!!!
You are a freaking awesome writer you know ...!!
👏

Kya Suspence banaaya ya... 😉
Well a confession here...I was contemplating whether to read the first part or not as I had read the ending first not the starting..😛
N seeing ShraMan married to other individuals...No No I cant deal with it!!
Then I read it finally thinking that you cant do that to ShraMan...So lets give it a try.N am sooo glad that I did 😛
Sorry ha? 😳

Coming to the upiii
Blasting one I would say... 👏
So it was Seher's POV...loved it though!!
Sumo in a saree with magalsutra n sindoor...
Song choice...Too beautiful!!...I love this song...Its lyrics n voice...❤️

You described soo beautifully how Sumo sung it...how Shravan looked at her...how Shravan hugged her being overwhelmed...kiss on forehead...Everything was oh so perfect!!...❤️

This Rishabh seems nice guy...but Seher...keep your eyes n mind Off Shravan !!
Your husband loves you...dont hurt him!!

N water bodies calm me too yaa... 😳
Pisces...Loved it!!.❤️

So Sumo-Seher met...talked...laughed!!
Lets see whats in store for us next... 😳

Looking forward to the next part...
Thanks for the pm bud n plz do cont soooinsh... 😊
Loads n loads of Love n 🤗 your way!!
Nikka sa Nik 😆
Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#68
Phewww !!
Seher Khurana 😳 nice name :)) .. Hmmm interesting turn of events ( I did go back to read the first update again 😆)

Loved the part whr Shravan laughs when hearing his wife is going to sing .. I almost visualized Sumo on stage n Shravan
The intensity with which u described Shravan n his wife eye contact during the song had butterflies in my stomach !! Being the ever romantic at heart .. I feel there are ppl who love like this 😳

Did feel a lil bad for Seher n her Husband 😕 wanna see how they progress

Can't wait for the story to unravel Resh but every time I see the title I see " Goodbye Shravan " my heart sinks

N lastly ur rite Eva is the little miss sunshine ❤️
Edited by amks2016 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#69
Oh god my poor little confused soul
Me kaha ja ke sar phodu bata meko
Such a dumbass i am I thought ki suman is narrating this story and you wrote her name in the first part oh god !!! Foolish me
But this was just👏👏👏
You know what the song was too good and took my heart away but could not feel the emotions as i thought someone else singing it for shravan and when it came out to be sumo I want and read the song again...the lyrics suited than so so perfectly that I had tears In my eyes😭😭😭 thanks to making me cry😛
You rock reshma baby👏👏👏
Such a wonderful writer you are
And water bodies can bring peace to any soul they're always so soothing
And when she said call me suman my heart stopped beating for a second and stupid me has to read both the parts again to realise that you never mentioned suman narrating this story 🤣
So finally i am breathing properly and have a smile on my face thank you so much for this reshma
And excitement me zyada hi bada comment to gaya so pardon me for this continous blabber
Thanks for p.m
Update soonish
the Super stupid dolly😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
#70
I am finally out of danger after knowing that suman is not the one who is narrating the story!
I am laughing at my own dumbness and went back to read the first part again🤣
I don't know what should i say now, it is really amazing! 👏
Thanks for the pm😊
Update soonish!

Edited by crazyparrot - 8 years ago

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