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Posted: 8 years ago
Mine!!
****
Unres
Zealous si Zoya🤗
Long time bud!!
Sorry for being late...as always😕

Coming straight to upi...
As always I loved the tittle ❤️
Lehja...way of speaking!
N this upi deals with lehja in such a layered way.
Well done buddy!!👏

Lack of interaction between ShraMan...hmm!
It only inc Sumo's restlessness and jealousy and that turned into anger.

Shravan broke his arm...ouch!!
Poor baby.

Eric's accent laced hindi...aww!😳
He must have looked cute as always ofcourse.

Sumo thought about her previous mistakes so decided to call him to clarify...nice Sumo!!
But again a MU.
Sometimes they are neccesory in times like this.They have their own importance.

Eric and Amanda's care for Shravan was too good.
He isnt alone afterall.

Painkillers ...they are worst sometimes.
Cant blame Shravan here.

For me both ShraMan were right at what they were feeling or saying.
Even though most of the times its Sumo who's always at fault but not fully here for me.

"I dont know tumhe takleef kis baat se hai, ye ke Am saath thi ya ye ke for a change I was enjoying my life"...I can understand where all this was coming from.So much is happening around him.

"You think ke at the hint of someone better, at the hint of a better life, main tumko chod ke chala jaaunga"...You hit home Shravan.Thats what she is feeling right now...thats her biggest fear.N you dont have control over yourself when you feel something like this and with Sumo, she have only you. The fear here at this point is acceptable...Its natural.
She did that stupidity but why?
Its her insecurity and fear and jealousy is making the matters worst.

"Ye tumhaari soch hai Sumo. Giving up on people is something you do, not me.Tumne mujhe apni zindagi se insult kar ke nikaal diya tha."...This hurts...it does!!
As you hinted Zoya...Khalish abhi bhi baaki hai Shravan mein.
He may have forgiven Sumo but he didnt forget and forgetting is what takes time...a very longgg time.

"You're important to me Sumo"...she is much more important for him.
Shravan ke dil mein ranjishein hai magar pyaar bhi hai kisi kone mein...Ranjishein or pyaar ki kashmakash Sumo ko takleef dengi or Shravan ko bhi.
It wont be easy for both of them.
Both are miserable.

Ramnath-Niramala...They did, they learnt, they're guilty, they're trying...But it all had already affected Shravan in the worst possible way.
But as they say, better late than never.
Happy that they are atleast trying...everyone deserves a second chance.
More happy that they Both accepted their mistakes and apologized to the other coz actually they both were wrong and not just the one.

Really loved Nanu here...he is the sweetheart!!❤️
Beautifully captured the minor details while writing the whole scene btw Ramnath and Nanu.

As Shravan has said about Ramnath Nimmo's decision about getting together for their son...I agree with Shravan here.
They shouldnt try just for him but if they think that there is a chance for both of them as husband and wife.
To stay apart is much more better than living together and hurting each other.
Baaki lets see what you have in your mind for them here.

'Bacha ab or nahi sahega"...I loved it for some reasons.❤️
N I love you Zoya for always adding something like this...very simple but touching.

"Arey Chup!!...Mera matlab waise nahi tha"...Hilarious it was!!
Loved this scenario buddy!!

Loved how Ramnath informed Nirmala about Shravan.❤️

And Sumo...It was actually a 'kaand' baby...Sumo special kaand!!
Poor soul...again guilty.
Na chahte hue bhi Shravan ko hurt karti hai phir khud hurt hoti hai!!
Jhalli!!

Zoya my buddy...you have successfully thrown light on all four points you mentioned...
There was unpredictability...Shravan's injury, Ramnath-Nimmo milan.
There was judgemental behaviour...of Sumo.She didnt inquired but judged Shravan and Amanda just like this.Learn to have control on your tongue Sumo specially when Shravan is involved.
There was the difference of Lehja...Lehja of Sumo which worsened the situation..
There was Guilt...ye to bharpoor matra main uplabdh hai hamaari Sumo ke paas...or ab to Ramu kaka or Daalmaata ke paas bhi!!

Zoyaaa...my magician of a writer.
I love you re.🤗
I have said this many tims but still...Your writing does something to me...touches me deeply every damn time.Thank you...you know na why?
N I sooo love your gyaan...keep it coming...I need it specially!!😉

Cont soon if you can or else I'll wait eagerly.
Lots of Love and bigg beary🤗
Nikka sa Nik


Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Hmmm..interesting chapter.
Personally suman is getting on my nerves. She needs to grow up. Shravan is very patient with her.
Shravans equation with his parents. .was interesting insight.

Thanks for the pm.

Looking forward to the next one.
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Posted: 8 years ago


Nice update Zoya I hve been reading this FF regularly n keep waiting for your updates :) it gives me a feel of watching a show from HumTV .. The names of each update is so well thought 👏

Sumo patha Nahi kiya kha Leti hai jo aisi harkate karthi hai 😕 poor Shravan now waiting to see her remorseful reaction :)


Shravan toh is ma fav so always I'm biased 😆 he is ❤️


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Posted: 8 years ago
Marvelous,Zoya!!
You have brought out Shravan's feelings in a fantastic manner!!
And your Gyans are equally appealing to me!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
Well Sumo did overeact and now she is regretting
Shravan's feelings were beautifully penned
Finally Ramnath and Nirmala have come to their senses. But they have already caused enough damage
Waiting for the next update
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Posted: 8 years ago
Zooo❤️
This was lovely yar...
Loved it to the core
Shravan was hand and heart broken 😛
Suman was guilty
Ramu' s concern
Sorry for not commenting on the last parts ..kaan pakad k sorry

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Posted: 8 years ago
Hey Zoya Apii 🤗
Sorry for late reply
Update is awesome
Oh poor Shravan his arms got fracture and on other hand Sumo is misunderstanding him
But now she realizes her mistake let's see how she will ask apology from Shravan
Waiting for next update

Lots of Love
Zainab
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Posted: 8 years ago
Sumo again hurted Shravan unknowingly who is alrwady in pain but still didn't inform anyone.
Don't this time Sumo would get apology from Shravan or not.
Hope all the MU clears & Sumo would ask apology genuinely & Shravan might consider.

Sorry I m late

Thanks for PM Zoya

Vinu

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Posted: 8 years ago
Where is the fire 😆 he is cute! !
Heard it !! Someone had a great fall !!😭
Eric speaks hindi! ! I like this sangam 😃
Drama runs in our blood! !😳

Sumo and some sane thoughts! ! It's a pleasing sight! !
A thought of which has annoyed her so much, ,Shravan has seen it all !!

Sumo is acting like one jalkukdi biwi ya gf...
Itni to tum tang dil nahi... hye! !
Shravan speaks! ! It's liberating! !
(ReshmaNair would really appreciate that! ! Her Shravan always speaks or she makes Sumo do wonders! !)

Ramu kaka ke shatranj ke mohre to unke apney hi the! !
This Ramu looks different though !!

Oh! He already knew about nimmo fiasco! ! Bad !!
Emotional pain is much worse than physical pain! ! Double blow! !
🤗 this is for you baby! !

...Zindagi uski aag main guzregi! ! We have witnessed it Nanu ji! !
Us aag main hum sab bhi jal gaye the !!😳

Is dard ka ilaaj to aap hi ke paas hai! !😉 #Nanu

Yet to learn his trade! ! I hope the same trade! !
Ramnath Malhotra had a puran janam is this very janam !! I am in awe !!

Be-taassub nazar main chupa har rishtey ka wajoob hai,,
Zindagi hai naam jiska naqaabil-e-paishangoi hai! !

Lehje ki narmi main chupi kirdaar ki bulandi hai,,
Talkh zubaani ka sila wo ehsaas-e-gunahgari hai! !

This is for the elderly and new buds! !😆

Brilliant piece of writing Zoya! !
Edited by CarpeDiem_ - 7 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Zo.. 🤗
fabulous like always..
lehja beautiful title and suits sumo.. 😆
poor shra broke his arm and sumo broke his heart..
yeh ladki kabhi nhi sudregi..
ramnath and nirmal good their are clearing their differences..nanu like.always sweetheart..
waiting what sumo.will.do.now
thnx for pm
lots of love and hugs
take care

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