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WhiteNoise

@WhiteNoise

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Posted: 8 years ago

#491

Res

Couldn't resist to comment on the weather part.Its raining like hell here,I haven't seen proper sunlight in 2 days

Unress
Zoi Bro, the pace is superbly fantastic.
I needed some time to gather up my thoughts.
The more you write ,the more I love this Eric.I would never categorize him as a perfect but he has all the qualities that made him so dam lovable. He is fun -spirited ,supportive with a past.The bond He and Shravan shares is just beyond words literally.
Its like Eric and Amanda are innocent cupids ,knowingly or unknowingly.

Despite the distances that are there ,Shravan still helps sumo and the fact that Sumo is jealous jusyypoints out the fact that she cares for Shravan as we as what he does.It was very well described.

And the Awesome threesome thing you added with Sumo ,Push and Shravan was fab.

I'm loving this Rafter.
Continue soon

Edited by Animagus_Sirius - 8 years ago

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Nik03

@Nik03

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#492

Ress 😃

****

Unres

Zealous si Zoya🤗

How are you bro?

Sorry for being late again.

Coming to the upii...

Raftaar..⭐️

There was indeed a raftaar in the story.

Eric studies while listning to rock music!!!Big smile

Mee too...I would plug in my headphones n study...well just in case of Maths!! 😆

Friendship...it can be between any two persons no matter if their choices are same or differ...what is necessary is understanding and that bond which in case of Shravan and Eric is there for sure!!

What a cute fight there!!

They didnt noticed when they started fighting for each other. #FriendshipGoals

It was beautifully penned down bud!!

Amanda🤣

What a lively character!!

The whole Eric-Amanda-Shravan scene was beautifully captured!!

Loved it ❤️

N that I can't see to I can see was superb 😆

What an explanation Shravan 😆

N that princi was two steps ahead of them 😳

Ye to sach ho gaya ke...jis school mein tum padhe ho hum uske principal the.😆

Three musketeers 😉

Oh how much I love the bond they share❤️

kaam ke na kaaj ke, dushman anaaj ke Daamadji 🤣

I cant agree more maamiji!!😛

Maamiji was even though not completely but somewhat right. she had always given up and compromised in her life...for herself and for her children.

But she wasnt bad at heart.

Sumo fulfilled her chashmish's dream...Aww

Tum dono mere chaheete ho, koi ek se na oopar na doosre se kam." ...Nanu ke do anmol ratan, ek Suman or ek Shravan.😳

He is really a sweetheart.

Shravan...his anxiety, restlessness😳

Slapping his palm across his forehead...That Shravan during Khosla track.😉

I'm proud of you Motu...❤️ ❤️

Their bickering is life!!

N Kutta sach mein adjective hi to hai😆

Pushkie pie...Lakshman of his Ram!!

n here our dumb Sumo...tubelight.

That Trust me was

And I love kandeel too.

The Whole surprise ...the way you have written every minor detail just took my heart away literally!!

I cant explain how much I loved it Zoya.

It made me emotional...happy tears you know.

This friendship is actual friendship...no facade just pure love!!❤️

Jo dosti ho to aisi ho...Always waali!!

I wish the bond that these three musketeers share , remains as strong always 😃

Sumo...The green monster is here😳

Is this a starting of a realisation??

I so loved how Sumo felt anger within herself regarding the comments on Shravan-Eric video even while dealing with jealousy.

But was it just jealousy??

For me it was a mixture of jealousy and insecurity and fear.

Fear of losing Shravan, fear of losing her friend who means much more to her than just friend, fear of being left alone again...Fear of losing her place in Shravan's heart and life.

The thought of him forgetting her made home in her heart...Loved it sooo much❤️

This feeling is worst.

So Shravan Malhotra is in real problem now.

Really Excited to see what happens next!!

What a beautiful update Bro!!👏

Really really loved it❤️

Thanks for the pm bud and cont soonish.

Loads of Love n 🤗

Nikka sa Nik.

Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago

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imshveta

@imshveta

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+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#493

That is just so sweet what Shravan did for her.
You really paint such a vivid scene going in front of our eyes. It was a pleasure to watch the camaraderie among friends.

As always very well written 👍🏼

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reshmanair356

@reshmanair356

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#494

Hey Zoya!

Raftaar it is 😃...loved the pace. Shravan having fun brought a solace that nothing else can match. You have created Eric and infused him with a spirit so supportive that we have begun to love him for all that he has become for Shravan. So take a bow there creator!!

I loved the bromance to say the least😛.the bickering and the advice included, to think of those whom he loved more than he would ever think for himself is actually an innate part of Shravan's character, but Eric warning him about the probable unpleasant consequences made such a melting read.

The three musketeers and their fun made me laugh but what actually accentuated my laughter was the pal part of the word principal. ..never thought that the dreaded word could have a deeper and funnier innuendo attached to it😆...and boy...his reply could beat Shravan's swag😃

Shravan arranging such a cute surprise for Sumo...is it a surprise then why we love the guy the way we love him😳..The cake part was sigh inducing!!..jhoola and kandeel..wow is the word!!

Pushkar and Shravan always made such a heartening team and you just added spirit to that here. .add Sumo to it..and you ran a parallel 3 musketeers plot😃

So now we come to my most favourite part..her anger and that pang in her heart when she realises that Shravan actually took someone to the prom and worse, she was not duly informed about it. Those tears in her eyes spoke that the raftaar of your Shraman's journey towards each other is going to pick up😊

Sumo is impatient and so are we..when will London see the dawn?

Could you hug Amanda for me?😆...the cupids are my favourites, whichever form they take to strike or ignite.

Wonderful update as usual Zoya!

Edited by reshmanair356 - 8 years ago

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lizzy1299

@lizzy1299

Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#495

Awesome update.

I love the way u have portrayed the bond between Shravan, Amanda and Eric.

Sumo's jealousy is well described. Poor Shravan will have to bear her wrath now😆

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deltadawn

@deltadawn

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#496

Kiye karaye pe pool ka paani fir gaya !! 🤣

Love the bond that Shravan and Eric share. Guys understand each other better any day so the exchange of words was so perfect. Like bro I know you and I hate to tell you this but ye quality tujhe le dubegi !! 😊

Amanda the innocent still third angle 😆 here to add just the right amount of Raftaar to some teenage emotions.

So Suman madame ko gifts acche lage, he still helps her out in spite of the distance. Kahi ye aanewali "Sumo-naami" inke pyar ki raftar ko dheeme to nahi kar degi? Why do I keep feeling now that Sumo's dreams of going to a big shot institution will be held back due to Mamiji's convo here?

Kya toofan laanewalii hain aap JahanPnaah. Itna hale an dhearty sab kuch rehne ki aadat nahi hai Dil ko. To darr raha hai 😳

A chirpy, fast paced and witty update.

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Happy Birthday to Perpetuity 😊

Zoya ka update as a dedication might just be the perfect gift . I believe she was one of the people who made you write here Zoya. To unke ehsaan to hum sab pe hain 😃

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pinky.padda

@pinky.padda

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#497

totally amazing

absolutely loved it

sumans surprise was too good

continue soon

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Zenab

@Duskyylilac

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 8 years ago

#498

Zoya Api 🤗
Ramadan Mubarak
And Happy birthday Resh Dii 🥳
Gift bahut pyara Hai ❤️

Update was fantastic as usual
Manju Mami I hate her she is so greedy Sumo is topper wow and surprised party from Shravan and Pushkar they arranged it so well giving her so many surprises
Shravan had trust that she will prove herself and she did
Nanu was so proud of her grand daughter

Last part I really hope she will not misunderstood Shravan for not telling her about Video
Waiting for next update 😊

PS. Good news for you Api I am topper of my stream this year 😃

Lots of Love
Zainab

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Faith28

@Faith28

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Posted: 8 years ago

#499

This was a very happy and sweet update. Sumo topped👏 College starts n newer challenges will be faced. Loved the Bromance👍🏼 And pool masti. Waiting to know more what a jealous sumo does😃

Ramadaan mubarak zoyA😊