SHRAMAN SS - DIl Sambhal jaa zara last part updated on pg 20 - Page 13

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Posted: 8 years ago
A very well written chapter!!
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Edkvforever

Beautifully penned

Loved it


thank you dear
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Safire

A very well written chapter!!


thank you 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

I didn't comment on previous Chapter as well. So tonight will unress for both the chapters.

So sorry preity. Hope you understand.😭


of course i can understand, np sanjh i know you are busy in studies😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
sorry for late cmnt...I was studying when you updated...as I saw dil samhal jaa Zara I left me maths question and was reading your update my theorem was asking me to complete that first but I badly ignored that...this is silly...but what can I do???ek to itne din se aa if soona hai zyada update ho nahi rahe or upar se dil samhal jaa ka itne din baat new part...how can I ignore it yrr...this is awesome...shrama's scene was so beautiful and cute...shravan's dialogue for ramu and nimmo is tooo good...superb update waiting for next update and other one please update soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Sunain

Literally mjhy chullo bhar pani mein doob marna chahiyay!

WONT WRITE RES CAUSE THIS TIME I'LL BE READING IT RIGHT AWAY AND WILL COMMENT RIGHT NOW!
feeling terrible right now!

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Angel!!!
I know sorry is not enough for depriving you from my comments here for soo long!
I'm genuinely very sorry!Please forgive me for my stupidity.
I know very well where my previous resses are but i want them all fresh right infront of you so m unressing for all my previous parts here!
I know you are not mad at me but i also know you felt bad and I'm really sorry to disappoint you.I truly am a devil but no where cute one but a cruel one.
Please pardon me.

no problem devil i can t be mad at you dear, its okay i can understand , and dont you dare to call yourself cruel late se hi sahi but etana bada comment karke sab manage kar diya and thats why u r my cute devil 😃

Coming towards the upiiz...



CHAPTER 2

I swear i read this chap a long time back its just that i didn't got time to Unres my post😕
So sorry for being such a dumb turtle

coming towards ur update...

Ohh Angel!
The start was so so so sweetoo...😳😆
Shravan and his desperateness and his cravings his immense water fall of love which finally got to flow after thousands of barriers.
He was just not ready to leave her..at any cost!Which was really cute!

yes he really cant leave her because he finally got her after longing for 10 long years 😳

Shravan...his naughtiness,his lie to Ram,his intense love,his feelings,his cravings..every thing was just so amazing and reading it was nothing less then a pleasure!
You penned it really Brilliantly!👏

thank you so much 😊

I just heard the song and it was soo amazing!
Your choice of songs as always killer ones and this one was too!⭐️

ya i for this song i really thought so much but finally got perfect one ad per me and now u also put your stamp😉

The convo they had just a few minutes later their confession was beautiful one!
Shravan saying..."aj lag raha hai mein pura hogaya hon..."...was everthig to know how much love deprived he has been.And the way he held her as if his life depends on her that very thing was cute and at the same time emotional!

Hmm..Intensity kum nhi honay wali...and i wud also say,Honi bhi nhi chahiyay😉

OMG!😆

intensity kam ho jayegi to woh shravan kaha correct everything should be intense in his case 😆
Shravan and his naughtiness😳😆
OMG!
It was literally very hard for me to suppress my blushing self and bursting into laughter on Sumo's antics and Shravan's teasing!😳😆
Jangli pan kahein aur dekhna!☺️😆
Angel that was totally amazing!⭐️

same was my condition while writing fully blushing 😳😳

Their moment...the way he called her his sabse anmol cheez and the assurance they both give each other about the intensity of their pure love for eachother..tht all was outstanding!

she is priceless for him ain't it? ⭐️

The best thing that she didnt hid about Nirmala's presence and stayed honest with him moreover He understood her and trusted her.Something we all badly wanted in the show.

The whole way she consoled and comforted him...that all sequence was penned hell beautifully!and got me teary too all coz i was so deep into that scene.

ohh my devil ko rula diya sorry kiddo 😳

When she said..."...itni selfish tu hoon mein apni jaan to nhi janay dongi na"...that was hell of a beautiful dialogue!

Angel you are an incredible Dialogue writer!Really!⭐️

thank you so much i cant really believe on this, i mean really they are good dialogues, i thought they are so so 😕

When i read two orbs witnessing them..i thought it might be Preeti but my gut feeling says it might be Nirmala😕

Angel the morning scene the way they greeted eachother and were drown into one another the way they showered their love at each other specially Shravan..the wasy you penned it...That all ws hell hell mesmerizing and hell hell stupendously penned!👏
I so loved it!⭐️

i also loved that part too, how mesmerizing morning it was finally two lovebirds wake up in each others arms 😳

So true..second chances are only received by lucky ones and not everyone is lucky enough to rectify their past or relationships.

yes thats true everyone wont get second chances

The way Sumo stood by his side to support him and encourage him..that all was comendeble.

Wait..WHAT!!??
What happened to Shravan!?

Intrigued!⭐️

And the way you ended it with that lovely stanza...it was Exceptionally Beautiful!👏

thank you dear and age kya hua woh to pata chal hi gaya na 😉

CHAPTER 3

What to say!
You literally added so much of intensity and emotions into it and it felt more like i was witnessing it with my own eyes than reading it!
You penned it hell Brilliantly!👏

Thank you so much 😊

Sumo's predicament the way she stood strong for her love and fought her weaknesses the way you narrated it...it was hell Amazing!⭐️

yes she need to be strong to handle that 6'4'' grumpy creature correct 😉

OMG!
Now this was something really terrible!
Preekar just talked about their bet and clarified their douts but Kamini...😡
The whole convo btw Ramani was just intolerable!But u penned it tremendously!👏

kamini toh mahir hai na in eavesdropping correct and usaka fayada uthane me 😡

Angel the revelation part...wel tht really got me speechless!
Was beyond Tremendous!👏👏
The way you penned down each and evry dialogue scene emotions and intensity..every God damn thing was damn damn OutStanding!⭐️

thank you dear 😃

That very slap on Ram's face was much needed and an excellent one!

it was much needed that someone to show mirror to him

Shravan's agony,tornment,predicament,thoughts evrything was heartaching.
I so much felt bad for that poor soul!He had to face it all alone and to absorb so much of bitter info was hell lot to accommodate!

Ramnath's thinking and the things he said were beyond my limits.Koi itni giri hoi sooch kaisay rakh sakta hai...i was so furious reading it all!😡and when he bad mouthed about Sumo i was like this was the last thread and now Shravan wont stay quite.

it says na ki ek limit tak jane ke baad aapka pap ka ghada bhar jata hai 😳

You know what Angel...this one is THE MOST OUTSTANDINGLY MAGNIFICENT CHAPTER OF YOURS TILL DATE!

Oh really thats so sweet of you ⭐️

I mean each and every word of mine.
Angel this chapter got me into a pool of tears and your narration was as if i was living this whole imaginary chapter!Truly!

sorry dear to make you cry i really hate crying 😔

You nailed it to the deepest core and this chapter makes me want to give you a HUGE HUGE ROUND OF APPLAUSE!👏👏👏

thank you so much 😃

The song you choose is one of my most fav and its lyrics were so apt for the situation and all i wanted so badly was to hug you damn tightly🤗

devil bada wala 🤗

Angel!
The most perfectly penned chapter of urz ehich i loved the most!
You penned each and every moment every ones emotion specially Shravan's so hell Stupendously that i still feel my praises are not enough to justify its perfection!
M literally all blown away!

really

M so so so proud of you!

I have no more words.
Angel...🤗


thank you devil for your so praising words dear i am really overwhelmed by your comment

Love u Devil 🤗
angel
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Posted: 8 years ago

Very well written angel :) hve been trying to read your story for quite sometime now and finally managed to read and finish it :))

Like your style of writing and how the story is progressing .. looking forward to your updates !!

Mayuri
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Posted: 8 years ago
Awww this is indeed EPIC hun...sooo emotional beautiful heart-touching sweet cute lovely fab so love it too many EDKV feelsss...Thank you so much dear



Lots of Love Hugs,
Spandana


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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Sunain

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CHAPTER 4

Angel!!!🤗
What to say...m so overwhelmed right now...literally speechless reading such a Mindblowing chapter and mind it reading such fantastically spell binding chapters in a
row makes you even more flattered and speechless and all makes you want is to personally appreciate the writer for such an Incredible series...at least in my case! But unfortunately i wud only be able to do that by writing it so will try my level best to express how madly m in love with this SS of urs and more of ur writing way!

thank you hon i felt so pleased by this appreciation, they are meant a lot to me really 😃

The start you choose ws very Great.Sumo consoling a broken Pushkar the time when she herself is broken deep down the core and still stood steadily all for the sake of Shravan!

she have to be strong getting strong was the need of hour and she did it for her love 😳

The same thing i felt!
I wasn't angry on Ramnath but all i felt was pity for him and his mentality which led him fall into a deep mud of dirt and filth!

it was something he dont know how to respect people eventhough he was a student of such a great person 😕

And the way Sumo stood against him was Commendable!👏
"...apnay tu uskay zindagi ki 10 saal ko hi jhoot bana dea..."...Outstanding one!👏

The entire converstion Ramnath Sumo and Nirmala had...it was hell of a piece to imagine!
You made it look so real and the entire chapter was emotional but really really Brilliantly penned!

thank you devil 😳

You never missed a spot mentioning/adding slightest of emotions and feels into it making it more live and electrifying!

yeh bahot funny part hai mere writing ka bcoz likhane pahale i used to imagine it by my self even each and ever expression😉

Shraman predicaments their love volumes were so clear and terrifically penned that it scared me whether to dare praise them with my low grace or not but i thought ab jo hai yahi hai will try my level best to do justice in praising your commendable job!

are devil dont say that you did full justice dear, mere update se jyada observation u have in your comments 😛

The way Sumo seek entry into Shravan's room was the most loveliest part!Her threat was all for him to let her in.
I so loved it!

haha that was something one of my terrible thoughts and my own tricks😆😆

Angel...ek baat batao..sab amazing songs ka copy right tumharay pas hi hai kya!?
How you are so perfect in choosing so apt ones for Shraman everytime!

hehe...nahi copyrights nahi hai mere pas bas match ho jate hai 😎

Shravan's broken self was so hard for me to imagine...was a hell of a emotional part!

When he said about hels all broken and wont be able to give her anything and in reply she said meiny kabhi kuch manga tumse...this very part just stole my heart!

thank you 😳

The truth is you stole my heart long time back with ur previous chapter but this one was hell amazing!
The way you penned down them being in eachothers embrace finding solace and comfort...ahh...Hell beautiful!

"...mere pyaar ko apana liya hai na bas ismein sab aagaya"...❤️

"...mere andar tum ho aur koi appni atma say door rah sakta hai?"...❤️

The feel he had after his mother left him and seeing others with their Mom and missing his was heartaching.he indeed have had been through a lot!

"Shravan aj tak jo bhi khoya hai ussy mil kar paein gay..."...❤️

its true correct whatever both lost they only can find being with each other, supporting each other 😕

Angel!
Kah jaon gi mein tumhein!
Kahan ho tum..please give me a tight tight one...🤗

kha mat jana i know u r devil but still 😉
yes here i am a tight very tight one 🤗

The ending was hell hell Enchanting!
The way he asked her out and joyfully she replied in a yes making him smile and the way he asked for a kiss and she replied saying she;s all his...tht all was hell mesmerizing and hell beautifully penned!👏

Killer update Angel!⭐️

Thank you a ton hon 😃😃


CHAPTER 5

AAANNNGEELLL!!!
Will you believe me if i tell you i was just listening to that song!coz i actually was⭐️
Yar meiny tu apna dil bhi day dea ab tu kuch bacha hi nhi kya doon tumhein!

haha...enough hai i will manage 😉

The start was soo soo passionate the kiss which started slow and full love soon turned into a passionate one in which he ventout all his hurt and pain and at the same time relish his love for her.Outstandingly Amazing!👏

sometimes things needs to be expressed not only with words but with actions too 😳

Shravan asked her indirectly whether she trusts him or not and she straight forwardly replied in a Yes!..yes she dose and knows where he wants to take her.All Shravan needed was a mere reassurance which encouraged him to core.

yes because when everything was falling apart from him that was the only way to believe on this relation i guess

Their every moment every convo was Outclass!
Wonderfully penned!

thank you 😃

Her silent prayer was...❤️

Sumo is so right!
Kab tak koi apni sachai say bhag say bhag sakta hia ek na ek din tu samna karna hi hoga and the way she made him understand ws splendid!

leaving thing hanging wont solve problems untill we dont face them and seek for a perfect closure 😭, you have to lick your own wounds

Oye...Munasif..nhi Munasib hota hai😛😆...btw is it a hindi word??
Cause its very common in Urdu language.😳

haha corrected and thank you for pointing out 😉

"Love is selfless Sumo"...true!

"Love is possessive Shravan"...So true!...Excellent one!

yes he have to understand other part too 😳

I must say the way you handled the situation...was amazing!

"...Tumharay bharosay par bharosa karon..."...❤️

The whole scenario..the way you pulled it out..Sumo being Shravan's strength and Shravan taunting his parents Pushkar bein all concerned about his bhaiya and the bond Shraman shared throughout this devastating situation..this all was commendable!

thank you so much 😃


finally done with reply devil, i have no words now the way you appreciated this SS was made me wordless
thank you so much kiddo
love you❤️
Angel🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: sweksha

sorry for late cmnt...I was studying when you updated...as I saw dil samhal jaa Zara I left me maths question and was reading your update my theorem was asking me to complete that first but I badly ignored that...this is silly...but what can I do???ek to itne din se aa if soona hai zyada update ho nahi rahe or upar se dil samhal jaa ka itne din baat new part...how can I ignore it yrr...this is awesome...shrama's scene was so beautiful and cute...shravan's dialogue for ramu and nimmo is tooo good...superb update waiting for next update and other one please update soon...


oye padhai karate karate keeping one eye on forum 😉 not done kiddo 😆
ya will update soon 😉
thank you for comment

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