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Posted: 8 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: Lovelygirl2

Amazing chapter. I got tears in my eyes reading the flashback part. I am feeling very bad for shravan and his anger towards his parents is justified. I just wish that he doesn't take any wrong step and harm himself. I hope this story has a happy ending😊


thank you dear, sorry for bringing tears in your eyes 😳😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#92

Originally posted by: nuttynuts

Superb! So the truth is finally out in the open. Poor Shravan is broken, shattered. Would love to see how Sumo supports him in his tough times with her tender loving care. Continue soon!

Nuts


thank you nuts sorry i dont know your real name 😳 sumo will definitely give him TLC treatment 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Blockbuster update! ! Full weekend wasool! !

Drama bhi tha,,emotion bhi...pyaar bhi tha,,pastry bhi..!
Song was perfect! !
Loved it..!
Thanks for pm!


thank you tabby sab kuchh ek hi update me 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

Much wanted scene of EDKV!! You write it so beautifully, and the song so apt! Really, Father with full of ego, mother with full of self respect! He had to react like this! Let's see what sumo does now!


thank you sanjh, yes he have some alien parents really who don't care about their son infront of so called ego's 😡
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Posted: 8 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: deltadawn

Tear jerker galore this was pretty priti. Tune badla le liya mujhe rula ka😭

Awesome showdown scene and Shravan oh my poor Shravan kitni insecurities hain uske dil mein... Whether he is unwanted since birth ugh.. thats terrible.

Ur writing is flourishing chapter by chapter hunny awesome job.

He still has hope in Sumo and really wish she lives. Upto it.


chalo finaly muze etana rulaya tumane ab kuchh to badla le payi 😉
thank u dear tum logo ka hi asar hai jab etane achhe writers aapnka write up padhate hai to level to badhanahi padega na 😆😆
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Posted: 8 years ago
#96

Originally posted by: vimikrao

Priti ki taraf se block buster wala chap. 😉

The way Sumo came by driving jumping all the signal, it show how she care for Shravan. 😕. Flashback was mind blowing, the parent of Shravan blaming each other for their mistakes. Shravan came to know the reality of his parents truth which has been hidden since so long. Breaking Shravan into pieces 😭 what a pity uski life ek mazak ban ke reh gayi. I hope he won't take any drastic step.

Nice & emotional update 👏

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thank you so much vinu, hope for the best 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#97

Originally posted by: reshmanair356

Super emotional chapter here Preety!


Shaven was a mess really. ..a dad who used him as a trophy of his win over his wife, a mom who let him go be caused she was too weak and tired to fight for him and a family where barring Pushkar, he didn't really mean anything to anyone.

You brought out the confrontation scenes beautifully. Emotions were bang on.

Suman has the key to his heart, I hope she is the one who turns out to be the light in his life.

Brilliant update!!


thank you reshma, yes correct she have key to his heart no one can handle him in this situation 😕
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Posted: 8 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: Safire

So so so emotional!!!

Atlast Shravan came to know about everything... Good..


thank you, yes truth is out lets see how they handle it
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Posted: 8 years ago
#99
Hi all to my readers, i really thankful to my dil sambhal jaa readers, thank you all for your likes and comments 😊
so i am back with the back to back update 😃, etane din ki kami puri karni hai 😳
so lets see how sumo will handle situation, she will be able to do that?
so here is next part 😊
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Part 4

When pushkar finished she found her eyes was shading tears unknowingly all the time while hearing him

She wept out her tears and smiled weakly toward pushkar "pushkar kisine shravan ke room me jane ki koshish ki kya?" she stared him with hope that someone may have tried to reach him at least once

"Badi maa jaa rahi unake piche but bade papane unhe roka aur firse unka zagda shuru ho gaya" he candid situation helplessly

her eyes went round "esaka matlab un dono ne ab tak shravan se baat nahi ki woh kaisa hai yeh janane ki koshish nahi ki?"

pushkar nodded in negative he was still weeping cursing himself for his brothers plight "meine bhaiyya ko rokane ki koshish ki lekin woh nahi mane" pushkar tried to stop shravan from leaving to his room but shravan shoved his hand and pushkar fumbled and before he can balance himself again shravan was inside his room locking door behind

sumo sighed "hmm...calm down pushkar mein hu na hum log sab thik kar denge" she wipe out his tears gentaly

"achha muze batao shravan ke room ki keys hai kya bahar?" again he nodded in negative

"woh bhaiyya ke room me hai woh room me jane se pahale le gaye the mein woh bhi nahi kar paya" he smiled ruefully on his vulnerability

"shh pushkar apane aapko kitna kosoge?" she cooed him and glared contemptuously to nirmala and ramnath who still had the audacity to play blame game

"jinake wajah se mere shravan ki yeh halat hai unhe to koi farak nahi pad raha hai...aaj en logo ko aise dekhake lag raha ki agar aise maa baap ho to usase achha na ho woh better hai" she murmured through her greeted teeth

"okay pushkar tu sambhal apane aapko mein dekhati hu use" she passed a warm reassuring smile

"sumo muze pata hai agar es waqt bhiyya ko koi sambhal sakta hai to woh bas tu hai"he smiled back to with twinkles of million hopes in his eyes

"chal mein jati hu esase pahale woh kutub minar kuchh ulta sidha kar de, waise bhi angry young man hai" she quipped to lighten pushkars mood and got up from place.

She started ascending stairs towards his room but stopped when she heard ramnath

"suman wahi ruk jao aaj yeh sab jo ho raha hai woh sirf tumhari aur yeh jo aurat hai yaha esaki wajah se ho raha hai" ramnath roared and pointed his finger to nirmala

sumo turned her face toward them "meri wajah seriously Ramnath uncle, etana sab ho gaya ab to atlease dusaron ko blame karna band kariye" instead of getting angry she felt pity on this man's sick mentality

"tum muze sikhaogi ab, how dare you mere bete se dur raho, meine pahale bhi tumhe warn kiya tha ki es aurat ka " he again pointed his finger to nirmala "sath nahi do aur use mere bete se dur rakhana lekin tumane apani aukad dikha hi di na are ye aurat kya mere bete ka bighadegi use to sabse jyada tumase protect karane ki jaroorat hai, i know very well you are only behind his money you are such a gold digger" ramnath yelled sardonically

suman felt a pang in her chest being very well familiar with her from childhood how he have such low opinion about her, he claim that he is honest student of her nanu but its clear that how his nanu failed as a teacher to teach him how to respect people, her eyes welled up, she gulped down hardly to take in all the anger and weakness she felt, she cant be weak at least at this point when her love needs her and more important her chashmish, her best friend need her beside him.

she was very sure what will be the consequences if she show her timidity to him, she need to fight back for her friend and she hit the nail on the head

"Mr Ramnath malhotra dont you dare to say such words against me" she retorted

Ramnath taken aback on her brusque retort "Oh really Miss suman tiwari agar tum mere bete ke piche nahi to paiso ke liye to kyu usase zut bulwaya, aur raat me woh tumhare yaha ruka tha pahali bar usane muzase zut bola tumhari wajah se , yahi chahati thi na tum?" he replied with withering look thinking she started showing her original face, this girl always shows how much respect she hold for elders but he was right about her she have so much ego ans self respect like nirmala

sumo crossed her hands across her chest "ohh toh usane meri wajah se zut bola okay man liya, abhi aapne kaha na ki usane pahali baar aapse zut bola aur aapne, aapne to usake jindagi ke sabse imp 10 sal ko hi zut bana diya toh us hisab se to use aapse bahot jyada ghussa hona chahiye hain na" she smiled ironically and leaned forward slightly "aur ek zut ke liye aapne etana sunaya you said that he gypped you but what you did with your own son Mr malhotra" and this her caustic remark landed him back on the floor from world of his ego and he felt completely mortified

nirmala smirked at his predicament which didn't went unnpoticed by sumo
"aur aap kya soch rahi hai , haan khush ho rahi hai unki galti par lekin aap apane aap ko dekhiye, kaise aapne kah diya ki mera shravan aapki sabse badi galti hai ye bhi nahi socha ek bar ki uspe kya bitegi are sharm aa rahi hai muze aap pe aur apne aap par bhi..." nirmala stared her in disbelif "haan esliye muze apane aappe sharm aa rahi hai kyuki meine socha tha ki aaj aapko usase milaungi aur aap log ek baar shanti se baithke apani misunderstandings dur kar lo , but i was so wrong" she smiled wanly

"meine socha tha ki mere chashmish ko bhi usake maa ka pyar mile woh bhi apane life me dono parents ka pyar paa sake aur usaki zindagi khushiyonse bhar jaye, aapki baate sunake muze laga tha ki aap aaj bhi usase pyar karati hai lekin nahi i was completely wrong aap sirf aur sirf apane so called self respect or better if i say ego se pyar karati hai" sumo shrieked at nirmala "10 sal pahalebhi aapne yahi kiya tha sabse easy way choose kiya tha to leave shravan behind without giving a second try and today, today again you did same thing" she pointed her hand to ramnath "unhone roka aur aap ruk gayi ek baar bhi apane bete ke liye fight back karne ke baare me nahi socha na aapne" nirmala downcast her eyes

"aisi baat nahi hai beta mein jaa rahi thi usake piche.." but sumo cut off her in between

"aisi baat nahi hai to kaisi baat hai aunty ek maa hoke apane bachhe ka dukh nahi samaz payi are apse to lakh guna behatar uncle hai atleast unhone jo bhi kiya woh bhalehi galat tha lekin usame unka pyar tha kamse kam unhone har waqt usaka sath diya bhalehi zut bolke hi kyu na"

nirmala slumped on floor crying bitterly when she understood her mistake and what all she said today she was wrong all the time

sumo started feeling air around her becoming nauseating , she felt so suffocated , she need to see sharavan right now as her life was dependent on it, once she will see he is okay she can breath once again, she cant waste more time around such strong headed, egoistic people

she turned and started ascending stairs again but stopped in her path, she turned her face to left side "mein shravan ke paas jaa rahi hu aur agar kisine bhi i meam kisini ne bhi agar waha aane ki ya muze rokane ki koshish ki toh i am not gonna spare anyone and i mean it so take it seriously" she warned blankly

everyone alarmed, till now everyone witnessed her jolly, caring and respectful shade but today she was different , it was like wounded tigress who will not spare anyone who will try to hurt her tiger an ounce more and no one was in mood to add insult to injury

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Sumo gentaly knocked door of his bedroom "shravan please open the door" she pleaded hoping he will open door but she didn't got any response from inside

"shravan its me tumhari sumo please open the door baby mein akele hu koi nahi hai please let me come in" she pleaded with all love she have for him but still she didnt get reponse,

she was fighting back tears which were threatening to come out but she cant shed them she need to be strong here, she need to handle him first

she placed her left hand on door and stayed there silently to precieve some response from inside, and she heard a light sound of sobbing indicating he was inside and listening her
in no time she turned on her sumo mode

"shravan see agar tumane abhi ke abhi yeh door open nahi kiya toh mein yaha se chali jaungi aur kabhi tum muze nahi mil paoge, na dekh paoge, so you understand MR Shravan Malhotra if not now then never" forewarned him which worked prefectly,

she heard his footsteps coming near door but again they stopped like he was in muddle what to do, so he need some more push okay sumo here you go

"okay as you wish shravan i will leave and dont you ever try to cross my path again leave that i will only leave without telling anyone tab baithke rona yaha lekin mein nahi aaungi" she faked anger and she heard click on on door opening slightly so that she can only enter inside

she keenly observed him his head was tousled, eyes was splitting blood and face covered with some dry and wet tears, she gasped on his devated state
she entered room and locked door behind her and followed him silently without uttering a single word

teri ungli thaam ke
teri duniya mein chaloon
mere rang tu na range
to tere rang mein main Dhaloon

he slumped on floor beside his bed and stared in nothing blankly, she sat down beside him and placed hand on his shoulder

"shravan..." and in next moment he engulfed her in his arms tightly and started sobbing silently, it was so immediate and tight that she felt she was chocking but she reciprocated him without demur

she tenderly stroked his back "shravan shhh...ab mein hu na please calm down" she cooed him

"sumo aaj tak mein kitane bade zoot me jita aaya hu, sach me mein sab muzase pyar karneka dikhawa karate hai sach to yeh hai koi muzase pyar nahi karta papa ke liye unka ego muzase bada hai aur maa ke liye unake liye unka self respect" his voice was wobbly and thick

till now she never witnessed this side of shravan, he was so vulnarable, broken like a glass in thousand pieces and those pieces gashed his soul completely, her chashmish was sobbing like a small baby, for the whole world he was a strong young and confident man who can take everything but now at this moment his actions gainsaid his personality, she really hated to see her love, her friend like this

without her permission tears ran down her cheeks "sumo mein tut chuka hu aur yeh tuta hua insan jisaki pahchan, jiska astitva hi ek zut hai ek galti hai woh tumhe kya de payega" he nuzzled his face in crook of her neck and she ran her fingers through his hair and fondled nape to sooth and clam him down

she took a deep breath inhaling his presence "shravan meine tumase kuchh manga hai ab tak" he nodded in negative on her neck "hum logo ke reshte me ye give and take kaha se aaya shravan bhalehi aaj tumane muze bataya ki tum muzase pyar karate ho lekin usase pahale hum dost hai na aur ek sachha dost dusare dost ko unconditional pyar karta hai bina kisi ummed ke aur kisne kaha tum muze kuch nahi de sakate ho?"

mujhe kuchh mat de
bas rakh le mera nazraana
bin sharton ke
haan tujhse mera yaaraanaa

he broke the embrance and looked into her eyes with so many questions and his forehead creased, she cupped his face in her small palms "mere pyar ko apnana liya hai na tumane shravan bas usi me sab aa gaya" she smiled warmly and gentaly removed lined of worry from his forehead with her index finger and thumb

he smiled wanly on her antics "sumo tum mere sath rah paogi?" he asked her with fright of she will also leave him as his parents did with him

"shravan jab tum muzase dur the 10 sal tab agar mein tumhe bina dekhe tumhari yaado me ji sakati hu toh ab to tum mere pas ho mere sath ho kaise nahi rahungi tumhare sath, aur shayad tum yeh bhul rahe ho ki tumhari gf hone se pahale mein tumhari bff hu aur usime hi to forever aa gaya na" she smiled whimsically "aur mere qutub minar sabse imp baat tumhe chodke mein kaha jaungi mere andar toh tum ho aur koi apane atma se alag ho sakta hai" he nodded in negative "to mein tumse dur kaise ho jau?" she kissed his forehead and he closed his eyes

he felt content at least he have his sumo with him and as she said she wont leave him , when all relations in this world was feeling so fake he have one pure relation and he highly esteem her for giving him love, care and all of her. she was the only person who can ripped out his heart beneath his flesh and he can smile broadly after that because he trust her that she cant do anything wrong with him

mujhe mehram mehram mehram
mujhe mehram jaan le
meri aankhon mein teri
soorat pehchaan le

"sumo..." she stared him intently and found some hesitance in his eyes, that confidence which was integral part of his personality was lacking today

she took his hand in between her both hands " shravan tumhe muzase kuch bhi bolane me jara bhi hesitate hone ki jaroorat nahi hai" she gave a gentle squeeze on his hand

"sumo, papa aise kaise soch sakate hai ki muze maa ki jaroorat nahi thi jab bhi mein sab bachho ko dekhata tha toh sochata tha ki meine aisi kya galti kar di jo maa muze chodkar chali gayi, shayad muzmehi koi kami rahi hogi, aur mere andar woh khalipan badhata gaya aur muze khud pata nahi chala kab woh khalipan nafrat me kab badal gaya" he lowered his gaze feeling mortified "woh nafarat jiska shikar tum bhi hui, sari auroton se nafrat karne laga mein, mein manta hu ki mein tumase naraj tha lekin yeh sochata tha ki jab meri maa muzase pyar nahi karati toh tum bhi muzase pyar nahi kar sakati ho what a big deal?" and he again met his gaze to her

sumo felt pain in her chest when that pain reflected in his eyes "how much he was holding inside, etane saal wo akele sab se dur tha aur mein ek dost hoke bhi us tak pohachane ki koshish nahi ki jab use sabse jyada meri jaroorat thi, use akela chod diya sumo tune sare dard takleef sahane ke liye , etani khokali thi teri dosti jo tu yeh sochate rah gayi ki woh kya kahega, jab ki tuze acchese pata tha ki tere dost ko kaise manana hai usake dukh kaise dur karne hai?" she mused and smiled remorsefully

"but it was a big deal sumo mein ek din bhi tumhe yaad kiye bina nahi rah paya" he shut his eyes and joined his forehead with her "aur yeh sab bas us nafrat ki wajah se jo mein sochata tha ki mein tumase karata hu kyuki tum bhi ek aurat ho..." he sighed

khul ke na keh sake
kaanon mein bol de
apna har raaz tu
aa mujhpe khol de

she caress his chicks but still their foreheads was joined "tumhari nafrat jayaz thi shravan meine tumhara sath choda tha aur jab tum chale gaye tab muze samaz me aaya ki meine apani sabse kimati chiz ya yu kaho apana ek hissa kho diya ho, bus das saal intezar karati rahi es dar se ki kahi mein , kyu to bas rejection ke dar se jo meri sabse badi galti thi, tumhari best friend thi na to mein kaise nahi samaz payi ki tumse bas ek baar baat karane ki deri hai, meine khud apane hatho se apane innocent chashmish ko nafrat se bhar diya" tears ran down her cheeks from her closed eyes

she parted and wiped out her tears "lekin aaj es waqt mein tumase ek wada karati hu ki jab bhi tumhe kuch bhi bolna hoga mein hu yahi tumhare paas, tumhara har dukh mera aur us dukh ko khushi me badlane ki jimmedari meri , tumhari har khwahish mere sar ankho pe hongi aur tumhari har khwahish ko puri karna ab meri jaroorat jaise saas lena meri hakikat hai..." her eyes bored into him promising him that she will be there with him till eternity

"shravan aaj tak jo bhi khoya hai use hum milake payenge, jo har ek lamha dukh me ek dusare se dur bitaya hai usake badale mein mein tumhe do pyar bhare lamhe dungi jise ham jindagi bhar sanjo ke rakhenge" he smiled though his tears

she kissed his lashes and kissed out his every wet tear, she pecked both corners of his lips and finally pecked his lips.

mere rehte...
bhala kis baat ka hai ghabrana
ab se tera...
haafiz hai mera yaaraanaa

"shravan" she called out his name coyly and he opened his eyes and found most beautiful girl in the world blushing, her pink chicks were so tempting he just wanted to kiss them and he did
rosy pink shade also kissed her chicks where he kissed her, she averted her gaze to other side

"sumo tum muzase shadi karogi na?" he asked apprehensively

"shravan agar tum yeh soch rahe ho ki agar tum bach jaoge then you are completely mistaken Mr Qutub minar aur waise bhi mein avg ladki ke height se jyada hu so esase jyada to koi nahi milegi, as i said i will be there to poke you for your whole life" she cocked her brows mischievously

"aur haan ab muzase jyada lambi to sirf koi model hi milegi tumhe soch lo" and finally a genuine smile broke on his face reaching in his eyes, she succeeded bringing smile on his face for a moment or though but she did it, she admired him he was looking so cute while smiling whole heatedly

"na baba model nahi chahiye kaun etane nakhare tolarate karega usake aur waise you are perfect for me, we fit together as pieces of puzzle" he pulled her chicks gently

tere hisse ka neelaa aasmaan
hogaa na kabhi baadal mein chhupaa
tujhpe aanch naa koi aayegi
takleefein kabhi chhoo na paayengi

"sumo can i kiss you?" he whispered hoarsely

"shravan tum muze kabhi bhi kiss kar sakate ho, hug kar sakate puchane ki jaroorat nahi hai..." she replied shyly and in next moment he crashed his lips on her pounding his love, longing claim on her in one kiss, unlike previous one which they had , it was full of promise of being together in every up and down throughout their life

mujhe ye vaada hai jeete jee pura kar jaana
bin sharton ke, haan tujhse mera yaaraana
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So finally done , let me know how it is with your comments it will really help me to progress further 😊

Take care till next
Priti

Edited by priety.priti - 8 years ago
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Poor Pushkar he was feeling so helpless that he couldn't stop Shravan from going inside the room & couldn't take the keys of his room. 😭 Still Ramnath & Nirmala blaming each other how irresponsible parents they are 😡 just thinking about themselves not about their son 😡 jo beta unke such jaan ke toot gaya they are not worried about him 😡 Sumo has retort Ramnath bravely she made him bend his head in shameful.

Shravan has opened the door after Sumo threatened him going out from his life never to come back so finally he opened the door. 😭 She assured him she will be there beside him always chahe duniya idar ki udar ho jaye woh apne chashmish ka saat kabhi nehin chodegi 😳 he found peace in her embrace, she is his world to him always stood beside him.

Hum Shraman ki shaadi ki intezar karenge 😉

Mind blowing update 👏 & Thanks for PM 😛

Vinu 😊
Edited by vimikrao - 8 years ago

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