The Long Wait (ShraMan TS) : 16+ (updated part-2 pg1) - Page 4

Originally posted by: nahisa123456789

nice one

Originally posted by: Namiksfan

Hey swarnima you are really good at this ...beautifully penned it was...glad that you updated the second part...yes it seemed quite incomplete before but now it is beautifully complete ...ease keep more of them coming ...will be waiting

Dolly😊

Originally posted by: arshuaar

Originally posted by: Sunain

Ressi res
Me first 😳
missed i soo much 😛

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Unres

Sawru!!!🤗

Hello Suzie🤗. Missed u too. But I had promised to be back with a story took me some time

Now m on cloud nine...floating in joy n lots of glee

Woah yar...what a TS⭐️

Ty😊

Part 1

Firstly thanks for writing n dedicating it to me...means hell alot😳🤗😃

The song choice was apt👍🏼...full of feels n emotions is mein kahaon gi is song nay Suman kay ander ka female version of Imran Hashmi nikal dea(kissing apart)🤣...atleast confidence to dea na😛😆

Achha hua full version wahi active nhi hua. I always found the song very romantic but imagining them so ShraMan made it all the way more romantic for me, the reason I selected the song.

"I guess we have waited enough."

this line made me shiver slightly😳...finally thy decided to consummate their marriage🥳

warna tu mjhy laga shrmanay mein hi puri zindagi cut jaay gi aur pata chalay ga k Preekar ka 4th baby ho raha ho ga tab apna Shraman pehlay ki planning hi kar rhay hon gay 🤪🤣

Hell yeah! Jis pace mein ShraMan were going surely they would have become chacha-chachi for at least five times. But why increase PreeKar population!

Shraman are soo adorable

yaa pretty much i also felt it incomplete...glad u continued😃

Im glad too😊

Part 2

ohh..this part was daammnn hot!!!🤪

Really!! Thank you so much. 😊

"Shravan, I really wished to know ki tumahara chashma sach mein utar gaya tha, ya phir sirf handsome dikhne ke liye nhi pehante ho?"

this part cracked me into fits of laughter🤣...improve ur aim😛🤣

the kiss part ws beautifully penned!👏

N whn she said I love you...i was like Fiiinaallyyy..squeals of joy left my mouth😳😆..i so much wanted her confession in show...but u gave it hell beautifully😉

A confession from sumo and a kiss these two were my minimal expectation from the show. But alas! The reason a wrote them here.

I loved it❤️

Shooting stars......❤️

The romance was delight...u nailed it!👏

Shravan kept on asking her if she wanted some time proving his gentleness and how much he loves her and fears losing her...tht thought made my heart swell❤️

You missed the part where he said but I think it's too late for you to decide now. 😉 Yes true that he loves her so much that he fears losing her, this makes Shranav Malhotra all the more loveable! He is the rare combination of tough exterior and soft interior!

And the ending ws super lovely...he promised her tht he'll love her "with every breath he takes"...awestruk!!

This was indeed an Enchanting one!!

Fantastic job dear👍🏼

Cuteness and love overloaded😳😆

loved it❤️

Thank you for appreciating. I'm happy that you read it.

Thnak you so much for such a lovely TS...lots of 🤗for my Sawru!😃

Love you😳

Take Care!

Ur Suzie❤️

PS:so sorry for unressing late😳

PSS:Now i guess u should change the tittle replace OS by TS(if u like...just a sugestion😉)

Nice suggestion. Doing it now.

Originally posted by: Safire

Hey,the update was written very nicely!!!!!

There wasn't an iota of vulgarity in your story!!!!

Well done!!!!

Originally posted by: Edkvforever

Beautifully written

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

It's really very cute... Lovely... You should write more and more...

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

"Shravan, I really wished to know ki tumahara chashma sach mein utar gaya tha, ya phir sirf handsome dikhne ke liye nhi pehante ho?"

"What!! "

"I mean you need to improve your aim 🤣 #sumoness

"Sumo, promise me that you'll always stay with me. "

"Always", she reassured, "but do you promise to love me the same way?"

"With every breath I take." ☺️

Beautiful! !

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

so beautiful

and romantic

loved it