ShraMan SS - Dawning of Realisation| Epilogue - Pg 57

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kennashreign

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: ---awe10some---
Nice

Fanx 4 pm

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kennashreign

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Posted: 9 years ago

#112

Originally posted by: Shree06
thanxs for the PM
It was really nice update Shravan and Ramnath conversation and then evil chachi wow...
i can imagine this confrontation
beautifully written
update soon 👍🏼

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WhiteNoise

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Posted: 9 years ago

#113

Nice one...
Go and get ur girl shravan
Thanks for the pm and continue soon

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kennashreign

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Posted: 9 years ago

#114

Originally posted by: astonm

Hey girl! Finally got around to reading this, I am going to comment on the last three chapters here! :)


Chapter 2 

Omg, I loved the way you wrote the scene where they bumped into each other, perfect amount of angst! Ugh, these idiots. I want to see this in the show so badly!

Ramnath is such an ass and I love how you worked him into the chapter, and the cliffhanger at the end was great! Onto the next chapter!

Chapter 3

I thought it would be Pushkar, but it was Shravan ahhh! I love that Shravan in your story is already using his brain and trying to piece things together. I also adore that you made Suman not be the one to tell him!

Chapter 4

Aw, I love Kamini in this, THIS IS WHAT SHE NEEDS TO DO IN THE SHOW! Oooh, Shravan's reaction, breaking all ties with Ramnath - oh I wish this would happen - but I feel like Shravan is going to be the bigger person and end up forgiving his father eventually, especially if Ramnath is truly apologetic.

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I love the pacing for your story, and how seamlessly you move from one scene to the next, kudos to you for that! I am enjoying it so far, I can't wait to see where you take it from here!

Thanks a lot! 😊 You echo my sentiments. Cheers! Stay tuned for more

Ps: Yes Ramnath is an ASS, Shravan needs to use his degree, Suman needs a stronger stance in the show and I thought of making Pushkar the one who overheard Suman and Ramnath but I didn't want to prolong the revelation for Shravan. Well as for Kamini, I'll reserve my comment 😆