* You And Me -- Its Us * : A ShraMan SS (Complete Pg 14)

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Mahi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: Manyata5
It was awesome
And so captivating
Sumo did hit a soft spot
It was beautiful
So continue really soon

Thank you Manyata!

Will do😃

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Mahi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: hormonalbrkdown
Yaarr tum kaise ?like How do u manage 2 write SUCH beautiful stories I really feel grt dat i joined dis forum n came across such amazing writers 🤗

Ritu, my Jaan!😳

My pleasure to write such things...

It's all coz of the appreciation I get😉

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Mahi

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A big thank you to Ranju, Crazy_vaish and pinkypadda for the amazing compliments 😳

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Mahi

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Originally posted by: shinegirl100
a new ss. really i m so excited right now for reading this. i liked your concept and story is going to be amazing and i know it. your works are always amazing and i have read them. and yeah write fast and update i really want to read the first part. i dont know but i think you r not well. you said that that u lay sick in your bed... so take care of yourself and get well soon. lots of love for u for writing this ss.
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Thank you so much Anupriya! Glad you liked it... And others too

Thanks for the wishes, hope I get well

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Mahi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Hey guys! Here's Chapter 1. Enjoy this. A bit hot headed one, so take breaths in between...

Chapter One

"But Shravan, you HAVE to listen to her! Maa hain woh tumhaari", said Sumo.

"Maa, huh?", smirked Shravan. "Maa...

Pocho inse, Maa ka MATLAB bhi pata hai? Aree inko toh main insaan ka bhi darjaa naa doon"

"Shravan!!", shouted Sumo.

"Chillao mat!!", he barked. "Don't dare you Sumo. Stay out"

Looking at Nirmala,

"Toh, kyun aayi aap waapis? Kyun mujhe iss tarah akela chodkar Chalo gayi thi? Khair, main kaun hota hoon aapse poochne waala..."

"Par Shravan ek baar meri baat toh suno...", sobbed Nirmala.

"Nahi sunna mujhe!! Aur aap mujhe sunaane ka hak kho chuki hain"

He turned to leave but Sumo pulled him back.

"Sunna hoga Shravan, you have to listen", said a firm Sumo.

"Yahi problem hai tumhaari. Sirf apna dukh, apni tension! Tum London Chale gaye aur sochte ho ki woh dus saal khaali tumne suffer kiya, haina? What about me, kabhi socha hai? Kitni akeli ho gayi thi, kabhi socha? Nahi! Coz you're so selfish. Self centred. Arrogant."

"I can't believe you're saying this Sumo. You? Tumne kabhi meri value ki? Hamesha mujhe hurt kiya, meri feelings ke saath khela. Aur end mein,mujhe ek used trash can ki tarah discard kar diya."

"Toh boliye Nirmalaji, aapne mujhe kyun choda? Hai koi jawaab?"

But Nirmala only lowered her eyes in shame. What would she tell? She didn't even know what Ramnath told him after she was gone. What if he took her for wrong? The existing ties could Also be shattered. She had been waiting for this moment since 10 years. And now that it was here, she felt she didn't have that courage to speak up.

"Dekha, koi jawaab nahi. Papa was right", smirked Shravan.

Tears were freely flowing down by now.

"I should've known ki tum auratein kabhi nahi badal sakti... Never! Galat tha main ki ab tak..."

He felt so disgusted at the thought itself.

"Par sacchai yeh hai ki auraton ko khaali 'use' karna aata hai. Aur tum bhi waise hi ho.", looking at Sumo.

"Shravan! Tumhaari ladaai mujhse hai, Suman se aise kyun baat kar rahe ho?", defended Nirmala. But the statement was completely ignored as the two of them shared a fiery eyelock.

Suman felt that his gaze was ripping her heart. The heat and intensity was burning hot. Unbearable to bear, perhaps.

Whereas Shravan wanted answers, answers to his unanswered questions.

Hoton Pe Tere Shikwon Kar Shor Hai

Par Yeh Nigaahein Kehti Kuch Aur Hai

Jo Hain Mile Yeh Lamhe Kahin...

Choot Naa Jaaye Haath Se...

Mil Jaane De Dil Jo Bane

Ek Duje Ke Vaaste

"Aur aaj ke baad apne 'MATLAB' ke liye mujhse mat milna", said Shravan and turned to leave, without glancing back at her.

As Shravan reached the car door, he thought:

Dukh toh sirf iss baat ka hai Suman ki dus saal door rehkar bhi main tumhe kabhi bhulaa nahi payaa.

As Suman saw him leaving, she thought:

Dukh toh sirf iss baat ka hai Shravan ki dus saal jaan kar bhi main tumhe kabhi samajh nahi payi.

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Understanding is the foundation to trust. The art of understanding lies in putting yourself in others' shoes and thinking from the other perspective. Its easy to criticise but difficult to realise. There is no Trust without it and when there's no trust, there's no relation. Sometimes, a man rises in his ego so much that he starts to look down upon others. But those who keep themselves calm and composed are the ones who are eternally happy.

Hope its fine!

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Mahi😳

Edited by Artist_Forever - 9 years ago

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orion23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Mahi🤗

Loved it!!

Dono ka dimag garam hai aur kharab bhi😆

Can't wait to see where this is headed!

And the last paragraph 👏

Thanks for the PM 😛

Edited by orion23 - 9 years ago

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Sidhi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Oh my my; that was a blast. Total paisa vasool update 👍🏼 👍🏼

Shravan beta ur gonna regret ur words pretty soon. Wud love to see how he's gonna woo back his ladylove, how he's gonna apologise to his mom n how ramu's band is going to be bajaoed by his n only his shravan kumar beta.

Ramu ki toh aisi ki taisi honewala hai. Biwi se toh haath dho hi baitha tha n now his son is gonna hate. Serves him rite, gadha 🤢 🤢

Damn xcited for this ss. Update pretty soon n fanx 4 pm dr

Love ❤️

Edited by ---awe10some--- - 9 years ago

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sapphire3

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Mahi meri jaan 🤗
Its awesome 👏
Loved it ❤️
Both of them are suffering so much 😭
Eagerly waiting for next update
Thanks for pm and a quick update

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Mahi

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Originally posted by: orion23
Mahi🤗
Loved it!!
Dono ka dimag garam hai aur kharab bhi😆
Can't wait to see where this is headed!
And the last paragraph 👏

Thanks for the PM 😛

Orion, my firstie😳

Quite quick nowadays😉

Thanks a lot, Glad you enjoyed it😛

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Mahi

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: ---awe10some---
Oh my my; that was a blast. Total paisa vasool update 👍🏼 👍🏼

Shravan beta ur gonna regret ur words pretty soon. Wud love to see how he's gonna woo back his ladylove, how he's gonna apologise to his mom n how ramu's band is going to be bajaoed by his n only his shravan kumar beta.

Ramu ki toh aisi ki taisi honewala hai. Biwi se toh haath dho hi baitha tha n now his son is gonna hate. Serves him rite, gadha 🤢 🤢

Damn xcited for this ss. Update pretty soon n fanx 4 pm dr

Love ❤️

Sidhi🤗

Thank you very much dear!

Spoiler: You maybe wrong about the Ram here and this is a surprise twist😆

Glad you're excited. Will try to...

Love!