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Posted: 9 years ago
#51
aww lovelyy part👏
shravan confessed😳
continue soonish😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#52
Awesome confession..
But now why sumo saying no..
ShraMan scene❤️..
Continue soon..
Thnx for pm...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#53
Such an awesome update👏
Loved the confession!!
But yeh Sumo mana kyun kar rahi hai?
I can't wait for the next part!!!
Update real soon!

Thanks for the PM🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
#54
Hey all. I am back with the last chapter of this SS. Thanks for all the amazing responses🤗
It means a lot to me.
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Here it goes:

Chapter 4

"I Love You Shravan.I really love you Shravan" she cried to myself once he was gone
"I am sorry to have you hurt like that,but I cannot do anything,I cannot Shravan,I am sorry"she began crying harder
"Why god why is it always me?"She questioned to god fresh tears pouring out of her eyes

*flashback*(in Suman's p.o.v)
It was the time I had returned from Shravan's house after being thrown out by his harsh words but I knew it was my fault and I was determined to tell him about my feelings
As I was about to enter my house I heard Mamiji and Mausi talking.
"Mujhe toh yeh samajh nahi aata ki kya zaroorat thee us Sharvan ke shagun ke vaqt hone ke?" Mami said
"Par bhabhi voh toh Suman ka sabse khaas dost hai na" Mausi questioned
"Dost vost ka mujhe kuch pata nahi par mujhe lagta hai ke uska aur Suman ka kuch chal raha hai. Dekha nahi ke voh kaise Suman or Jeevan ko dekh raha tha?Mujhe toh Sharvan bilkul pasand nahi hai.' Mamiji claimed
"Par Bhabhi jab usne Khosla ke case jeeta toh aap toh bade khush the"Mausi asked confused
"Kahanke khus humme jab acha khasa ghar mil raha tha toh uss Sharvan ne beech mein taang ada dee thee aur yaad hai jab meine Suman ko galti see thoda dhakka diya toh who humme kaise dekh raha tha?
Agar iski or Suman ke shaadi hojati toh shayad Suman ko karz nahi chukane deta aur kya pata voh london chale jaate?Humme toh yahan sadna padta na. Yahan Suman ke maa ne humara jeena mushkil kar rakha hai aur firvoh udhar aish karti"
Mamiji said with utter disgust and left
Once I knew that both Mamiji and Mausi had left I rushed to and burst into tears not bothering to change.
*flashback ends*

"Shravan I am sorry I cannot do this,neither can I let them prove what they think is correct nor can I let a daag come on my mother's name." Suman said helplessly and drifted to the moments she shared with him

She remembered how they first met,how they became friends,how he she left him heartbroken,how despite of being broken he helped her,fought with his own family for her family,how he was the first one again to amend the broken friendship,to have a fresh start,
and how he always stuck around.
Just then a thought struck her mind. If Shravan could go against his family for her even after what she did to him why couldn't she too?After all she loved Shravan and he loved her back and it was not like she was going to run away and pay no debt to her Mamiji.
She knew Shravan wasn't bad,she knew he loved her back,she knew her mother wasn't at fault then wasn't that enough? Why was she behaving like an idiot and stopping herself from speaking her heart out to Shravan?

"Chal Sumo pick up your ass and go to the Malhotra Mansion and tell your guy how much he means to you"Sumo said to herself but stopped
"Sumo wait. Aise nahi,he is special and so you are so the confession should be too" She thought as a idea struck her mind

Determined,Suman Tiwari took a bath and slept waiting for the next day which was definitely going to be a long one.

In The Morning

Preparations were going on in Tiwari Killa as the Pandit Ji would come and decide the 'shubh muhrat' for her and Jeevan's wedding. Everyone was invited even The Malhotras,after all it was a grand occasion.

The function started around 2 p.m. in the afternoon. Everyone was present,from Malhotra Family to Jeevan's family even the pandit had come.The only one that was missing was Suman.

Finally it was announced that Suman had come. Dressed in a lime green Lehnga Choli with her odhni barely covering her midriff.

Oh god why does she does thing to me every damn time? said Shravan his male hormones going out of his control

Suman sneakily looked towards Shravan and she could see that she had that effect on him,she smirked.She had chosen this colour particularly cause he had once told her that it suited her and she had pinned her Odhni in that particular style cause she knew Mr.Malhotra too well,he won't be able to concentrate
anywhere but her. He looked no less, wearing a black sherwani,he was making her day dream all her fantasies.

She could feel his constant gaze on her and she felt as if he was happy,maybe he knew what she was about to do. Jeevan and Suman were made to sit on a sofa and in front sat the pandit ji who was about to decide the date for the wedding.

But as soon as the pandit opened his mouth to speak Sumo stood up and announced that she wanted to confess something.

"I Suman Tiwari would like to announce to all of you that I am in love and its not Jeevan. I am sorry Jeevan but I have to do this" Suman said looking at Jeevan and he nodded approving her to go on
"I have been a stupid pig to not realise that I have always been in love and that I was hurting the person I have loved. That person has been with me through thick and thin,has always helped me with my work,be it 10 years back or now,has accepted me with my flaws and never once complained,
has been my friend even when I broke him completely,has gone against his family and the most important of all he has been there to see me get married cause I looked even when he loved me" Sumo said her eyes fixed on Shravan's eyes and her legs moving towards him.
"Today I Suman Tiwari would like to tell you a little secret Shravan Malhotra that I am truly,madly and deeply in love with you. Just like there is no day without the sun,there is no Sumo without Shravan" Suman smiled knowing that she was using the same lines he used and bent down in front of him and forwarding her hand

Suman closed her eyes waiting for Shravan to take her hand in his,as a sign of accepting her love.

Shravan smiled to himself and muttered "pagal". He took her hand in his making her rise so that they could be face to face.
Suman had opened her eyes but her heart was beating loud still scared that he would reject her after whatever pain she gave him.
"I Love You To Sumo" he said with the widest smile lighting up his face

Not caring about the gasps and talks from the guest Sumo tip-toed,closed the distance between them and placed her lips on his.

Note-I particularly used "SHARVAN in mamiji's dialogue as she says it that way in the show. I am thinking about writing an epilogue. Do you guys want one?
Please like and comment down your views on it.
All criticism welcome
Thank You

-Mitali❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
#55
This can truly happen... Mittu
What an awesome writeup👏
Brilliant!
But, I would like something from Shrav's pov as well
He needs to scream, shout out his love as well
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Posted: 9 years ago
#56
Wow it was amazing
Plzz write epilogue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#57
Omg sumos confession lovely Mitali.. U nailed it girl 🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
#58
sumo confession...hope this would happen in show too
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Posted: 9 years ago
#59
Mittu i loved it to bits 👏
Just like there is no day without the sun,there is no Sumo without Shravan
Wow!!! Beautiful lines ❤️
I loved the confession in sumoish style 👍🏼
Plzzz write an epilogue
U r an amazing writer bachcha 😳
Love u
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Posted: 9 years ago
#60
Mitali 🤗
This was so wow!
Loved it!
Sumo proposed and how
I hope we're getting an epilouge😳
Thanks for the PM 🤗

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