Rihaee - part 5 update 19th nov 2017

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Hey everyone!
I am here with a story . i dont know what is its faith whether to be a ff or ss . yet to be decided!
I request you to read it and tell me whether i should continue it or not. This is my concept and i hope you all will enjoy it.

Index

Chapter 1 - page 1
Chapter 2 - page 3
Chapter 3 - page 6
Chapter 4 - page 9
Chapter 5 - page 10

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Tia❤️
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Chapter 1




" good morning" sharanya heard vyom's voice as soon as she wakes up. Its not like she was in deep slumber. She could feel his intense gaze on her all the time even when her eyes were closed. The moving and shaking of car on tipsy turvy road did not helped much!

"Good morning" sharanya replied with a small smile. She got up and did her already perfectly dress proper. Vyom smiled at it awkwardly.

"Where are we?" Sharanya asked looking here and there around her to find out the answer of her question.

"Kapali hills." Vyom stealed a glance at her and then managed to look back at road.

Sharanya hummed in response and looked at other way. Vyom took this opportunity and brought chips packet out from dashboard.
"Here, have it." He offered with a smile which she took it happily.

Sharanya appeared little lost which had started worrying vyom. It was she who insisted to go kapali hills last night . she looked so stressed out when her parents didn't allow her to visit there alone. Things were turning ugly and before it turned out more worst vyom interfered in between and offered sharanya his company in this trip. Since, sharanya's parents loved and trusted vyom so much for their daughter. After little convincing by vyom they said it yes. Ever since then vyom observed changes in sharanya's behaviour. She looked so tired and lost. Its like she is sinking and coming up from deep thoughts by every second.

He pulled out his phone and gave it to sharanya. "Call aunty and speak to her. May be you will feel better."

Sharanya stared at the phone for a while and politely refused it. " no its okay. I will call them once we reach hotel" she said as she gave back his phone. Vyom shrugged his shoulder and kept the phone on dash board.

"Here" he pointed at the location where the phone is kept. "Use it when you want to talk " he added with a smile.
Sharanya nods and again turns her face to other side of road.
Suddenly, she feels a jerk in her body followed by a screeching sound of car. Vyom Have hit the brake. She looks back at him confused.
"You stopped the car? What happened?"

Vyom's eyes never left her face as he said softly , " what happened to you sharanya? You looked so tense."

"I am feeling sad." She admitted sadly.

"And what is making you so sad?" Vyom asked worriedly

"These...these.. images that keeps on coming before my eyes. Vague , scattered, unclear images and voices. Its like I have pieces of puzzles before me and need to make a pitcher of it but unlike game i dont know what pitcher i am suppose to make of it." She breathed out with her eyes shut. Sharanya brings a hand on her face and rests her fingers on eyes.

"Then why are you trying to solve it alone sharanya" vyom said with low but firm and intense voice. " if you dont know what are you looking for dont force yourself to search for it. When right time will come , all those pitchers and voices that are troubling you will start getting clear and make senses. Till then be easy with yourself sharanya. Too much stress will only put the matter to worst." He added as he gently holds her hand in his and brings it down to he lap. He wants to read her face before he speaks further.

His voice holds a charm that made sharanya forget all her worry. She nods and smiles back at him.
"Why have you agreed to come here with me? You think i cant take care of myself? " sharanya asked seriously. She knows vyom cares for her but with each passing day he is just making her be dependent on him. Which she did not want at this point of time. She is not ready for any relationship. Her goals are different .

"...then what would i have done without you there?" Vyom said with mischievous smile while starting the car.

"I am sure you had better business to do other than accompanying a lost memory girl to wierd trips." She said while looking at him.

"Nothing is important than you sharanya." He said it with such honesty that made sharanya looked at him back." And moreover uncle and aunty also wanted me to join you on this trip." He added with a scoff onseeing her giving him killing looks. " they..they didnt say that but it was obvious on their face." He muttered out words in form of whisper.

"And you? You would have allowed me to go alone?" Sharanya asked softly looking at him. When vyom turned his face to her she looked at other way.

"Yes, although it would have left me worried all the time about your well being. But yet i know you are enough capable to take care of yourself. And i trust you i guess. " he said it without realizing his words have brought a real smile in her face. She looked at him again but this time from different perspective.

" and what if something goes wrong with me on this trip during that time?" She liked having this discussion with him and decided to push the topic a little more.

Instantly, vyom hits the break making her hair fall all over her face.
" you may go far from me but you cant separate you from my heart sharanya. This heart connection between us always informs me about your well being. " he adds while tucking her hair behind her ear " Every straw has to go through me before you"
He got back to his seat and started engine again " moreover i dont think any girl can handle my so much love that my heart store. If not you sharanya, then there will be No one"

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They parked the car aside and got out of it. Mr rajan have already sent someone to escort them to their respective rooms. All arrangements were done from staying to beverages and other site visits by rajan. He loved his son and never missed any oppotunity to show it to him.
"Hello sir and madam welcome to kapali hills." The receptionist welcomed them and handed over the keys to vyom. With a soft thankyou , sharanya and vyom started walking towards their room followed by the person rajan have sent.
"Here, these are your rooms. " he took the keys from vyom and opened it.

Vyom entered the room but sharanya didnt followed him inside.
Vyom gave a confuse look to her. " what?"
Sharanya just signed at those bags which vyom was holding.one if it belonges to sharanya.
"Oh so sorry!" He boyishly smiled and gave the other bag to her.
"Okay sharanya. We will take some rest for now. Will meet you in 3 hours for dinner" vyom and took a step towards her. Sharanya stops him and forces him to go back to his room.

Vyom laughs and nods his head, " apka hukum sir ankhon per."
"You come inside with me. There are certain changes in this trip that needs to discuss." Vyom said and the man agreed. They went inside the room.
Sharanya too felt tired and she opens the door with key and goes straight inside to the bed. The door gets locked after her. She hears the slamming and locking of door but feels too lazy to move an inch and check.
She throws the bag on one corner of the room while she practically jumps on bed with face down and falls asleep. The coldness in the room made her feel better. They were helping her to soothe the body pain. She snuggles more in to the feeling until she feels a cold palm resting on her face. She quickly opened her eyes and looks below her, its not pillow beneath her but ...
"Aaah" her scream echoed the room once again...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Awesome👏waiting for next part update soon 😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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As your english teacher , I have a lot to say , why didn't u ask me to beta for you ...

That sure did feel some how like Vyom , but shanny felt off , she was too receiving in my opinion she should feel a little uncomfortable with Vyom's forwardness , and I expected her to remind Vyom that his connection is only from his side as she still doesn't remember him ...

Share more of shanny's thoughts and feelings , not her talking but reflection and especially about her confusion, her unwanted connection to something or somebody she doesn't know , the feeling of not knowing what is happening or having control of her body , the feeling of fearing shiv but still feeling an attraction to him ...

These are just my suggestions as am not really a writer nor am I good at it ... But we as viewers right now want more than the cv is giving us and you could do that ...

Great start though ...
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Wow Tia I love the start.. finally you started writing..
Btw I'm surprised about Shanny.. she came alone with Vyom..
Baby you should update soon.. I'm excited! Bhoot ji came there also kya 😒
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Posted: 7 years ago
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So, here's the first ever story on this forum. And you are officially the first writer now 😃
Beautifully penned!! 😳
Are you adding some mystery to it? Or keeping it like a love story with some twists?
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Aww awesome. Nice one. Just one request don't make vyom or Shiv negative . Next part pls
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice part!
Plzzz update soon!
👍🏼
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Your writing skills is sooo amazing
The first chapter itself is very gripping..cant wait to read how this story unfold.
UPDATE SOON!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: IDRegistration

Awesome👏waiting for next part update soon 😊

Thankyou fpr reading story😃 i am glad you liked it. Will post the new chapter soon.😳

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