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Posted: 16 years ago

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I think that should be enough, right? so I'll start writing the dialogue on saturday..... and you guys can pitch in wherever you feel it's wrong or if you have more ideas and stuff

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Posted: 16 years ago

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k u sure u don't want me to make an outline that way it will be esier to write the dialogs down? cuz its gonna take me like 15 mins it do it maybe not even 10 :)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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on more thing at the end of the concert, all three of the friends say friends foreverr no matter what? does that sound too dumbb.. i just was thing that we could use a line that wraps everything togetherr..and the line i just made sounds kindda corney..chesseyish =/

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: bmtdloverr2050
on more thing at the end of the concert, all three of the friends say friends foreverr no matter what? does that sound too dumbb.. i just was thing that we could use a line that wraps everything togetherr..and the line i just made sounds kindda corney..chesseyish =/

nah.... i don't think it's cheesy at all.... it's cute... we should definitely put that in the end... 😊 and it would be helpful if you made a final outline, but I didn't want to give you any more work to do... 😕 but if you're sure it's no problem, I think we'd all really appreciate it! 😃

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Posted: 16 years ago

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haha alright ill add that to the final outline and
haha its noo biggiee..ill have the outline posted on this forum by..this weekend😊

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: bmtdloverr2050
haha alright ill add that to the final outline and
haha its noo biggiee..ill have the outline posted on this forum by..this weekend😊

thanks a lot.... I'll try to start writing the dialogue this Saturday....

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Okay guys, I've finally started writing the dialogue... I've just done a little bit right now but I hope you like it. Please tell me if there are any mistakes or if you want to change/add something... here goes!

Hannah gets home after a particularly exhilarating night concert. She changes out of her stage clothes, glances at the clock and decides that it isn't too late to call Lilly. She dials her number and Lilly picks up on the third ring.

Lilly: Hi.

Miley: Hey, Lilly! I just got home from the concert. It went amazingly well!

Lilly: That's great (her voice sounds kind of stuffy)

Miley (frowning): Are you alright? It sounds like you have a cold or something.

Lilly: No, I'm fine! It's just my allergies kicking off again.

Miley: That's too bad.

Lilly: So... did you have something special you wanted to talk about?

Miley: Yeah, I was wondering if you were free tomorrow. I thought maybe we could go to the mall and hang out for a few hours.

Lilly: That's great. I'll be over first thing tomorrow morning.

Miley: Awesome! So, I'll see you tomorrow then.

Lilly: Bye.

Miley hangs up the phone, feeling puzzled. Lilly hadn't seemed like her usual cheery self on the phone. As Miley is standing there, staring worriedly into space, Robby Ray comes into the room.

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Posted: 16 years ago

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thatt wazz amazing! btw im sooooooo sorry i couldnt do the outline i have a fevor,😕 so im trying not to go on the computer much..but il try to have it up bye 2am tonite lol i know kinddaa latee but i was sleepin all day soo im gonna try to make the outline!😊
yourr doing an great job!

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: bmtdloverr2050
thatt wazz amazing! btw im sooooooo sorry i couldnt do the outline i have a fevor,😕 so im trying not to go on the computer much..but il try to have it up bye 2am tonite lol i know kinddaa latee but i was sleepin all day soo im gonna try to make the outline!😊
yourr doing an great job!

I'm glad you liked it... and no, it's alright if you have a fever! I can manage fine.... you should rest until the fever goes down... :)

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Hannah gets home after a particularly exhilarating night concert. She changes out of her stage clothes, glances at the clock and decides that it isn't too late to call Lilly. She dials her number and Lilly picks up on the third ring.

Lilly: Hi.

Miley: Hey, Lilly! I just got home from the concert. It went amazingly well!

Lilly: That's great (her voice sounds kind of stuffy)

Miley (frowning): Are you alright? It sounds like you have a cold or something.

Lilly: No, I'm fine! It's just my allergies kicking off again.

Miley: That's too bad.

Lilly: So... did you have something special you wanted to talk about?

Miley: Yeah, I was wondering if you were free tomorrow. I thought maybe we could go to the mall and hang out for a few hours.

Lilly: That's great. I'll be over first thing tomorrow morning.

Miley: Awesome! So, I'll see you tomorrow then.

Lilly: Bye.

Miley hangs up the phone, feeling puzzled. Lilly hadn't seemed like her usual cheery self on the phone. As Miley is standing there, staring worriedly into space, Robby Ray comes into the room.

Robbie: Hey Miley... what's wrong?

Miley: It's Lilly.. she sounded weird on the phone... almost as if she'd been crying.

Robby: Did you ask her about it?

Miley: Yeah.. she said it was her allergies... but I don't think she was telling the truth.

Robby (putting his arm round Miley): Why don't you invite her to come round tomorrow?

Miley: I already did... She'll be here first thing tomorrow morning.

Robby: Well, that's great! I'm sure she'll tell you if anything is wrong.. she's your best friend after all.

Miley (smiling wanly): I guess you're right... I'm gonna go to bed now.

Robby (giving her a hug): Good night, honey.

Miley: Good night, Daddy.

Robby leaves Miley alone in her bedroom. She bites her lip and then gets dressed for bed. She falls asleep after a long time, wondering about Lilly.

Promptly at six o' clock the next morning, the doorbell rings. Miley is sleeping peacefully in bed and she jumps at the sudden noise. She clambers down the stairs, rubbing her eyes. She opens at the door and sees Lilly standing there. She gazes at her blearily, squinting in the bright sunlight. Lilly looks slightly preoccupied as she gives Miley a huge hug.

This is as far as I've got.... Hope you like it! feel free to add or remove or change anything in the text!

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