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Hannah just came back from her night concert in --( state name goes here( idk where she lives)) -- She calls lilly asking her if they could go to the mall tomorrow? Lilly tells her that she is going to come to her house tomorrow, and hangs up. miley thinks why lilly was soo sad on the phone and why she hung up. she goes to sleep after. its in the morning, and she tells her dad everything, he tells her that maybe she just wasn't in a good mood.. Miley thinks yeaa maybe she isnt..its 1pm, and lilly comes over, and rings the door bell, and once miley answers the door, lilly hugs miley right away. Miley is wondering why lillys acting like this.. lilly starts to cry.. and tells her that she moving. And shes moving in a month:(....Miley is in shock!! and still trying to think what should she say and do and tell Lilly what is this some kind of a joke?..and lilly tell her i wish it was :( and they both hug again?............ alright i think thats enough for today anyone wants to change something pleaase do i know i made mannny mistakess.. and i reallly dont know how to write an written upgrade but im trying my bestt..if anyone could also please add some moree lines to it, it would be awsomee! hope everybody likes what i wrote so far :)

it's a good idea, charleen.... tell you what... i'll try and help you with this.... just write down what type of scenes you'd like in the episode... you know just a main idea and i'll re-write it with dialogue and everything.... how's that? and btw, ours is the yellow team!

alright ill have the that done before monday:)
and our yellow team is in 3rd/4th 😊
thanks n i hope im doin this correct soo far

Originally posted by: bmtdloverr2050

Hannah just came back from her night concert in --( state name goes here( idk where she lives)) -- She calls lilly asking her if they could go to the mall tomorrow? Lilly tells her that she is going to come to her house tomorrow, and hangs up. miley thinks why lilly was soo sad on the phone and why she hung up. she goes to sleep after. its in the morning, and she tells her dad everything, he tells her that maybe she just wasn't in a good mood.. Miley thinks yeaa maybe she isnt..its 1pm, and lilly comes over, and rings the door bell, and once miley answers the door, lilly hugs miley right away. Miley is wondering why lillys acting like this.. lilly starts to cry.. and tells her that she moving. And shes moving in a month:(....Miley is in shock!! and still trying to think what should she say and do and tell Lilly what is this some kind of a joke?..and lilly tell her i wish it was :( and they both hug again?............ alright i think thats enough for today anyone wants to change something pleaase do i know i made mannny mistakess.. and i reallly dont know how to write an written upgrade but im trying my bestt..if anyone could also please add some moree lines to it, it would be awsomee! hope everybody likes what i wrote so far :)

umm..

After..(oo god im stuckk :( ) they are both thinking about all the times they spent together...etc..
then Lilly + miley go walking around the beach.
There they meet ( i forgot those 2 girls nams that are always makin fun of lilly and miley..i think its amber+Ashley) they start laughing and stuff just to get on their last nerves.. then they have a lil fight but then lilly tells miley to just forget about it. so they walk n talk..they talk about how they will alway talk to each n other no matter what happens :)...then lilly says we should try to stop this all somehow.. they should stop lillys mom from transferring. then miley gets the perfect idea and then she tell lilly (its in mute)..ill do sum friday and this whole weekend :)

great work, charleen.... keep going with the original outline and then suhana, simz and i will pitch in with the actual dialogue writing.... how's that?

Thats greatt :) ill do some of it right now and btw i think this is due on thanksgiving right?😛

Originally posted by: bmtdloverr2050

umm..

After..(oo god im stuckk :( ) they are both thinking about all the times they spent together...etc..
then Lilly + miley go walking around the beach.
There they meet ( i forgot those 2 girls nams that are always makin fun of lilly and miley..i think its amber+Ashley) they start laughing and stuff just to get on their last nerves.. then they have a lil fight but then lilly tells miley to just forget about it. so they walk n talk..they talk about how they will alway talk to each n other no matter what happens :)...then lilly says we should try to stop this all somehow.. they should stop lillys mom from transferring. then miley gets the perfect idea and then she tell lilly (its in mute)..ill do sum friday and this whole weekend :)

-Lilly goes home and tells her mom that she is about to pack.
-Then hannah on the other side is explain something to oliver in mute
-Oliver callls lillys mom and tell her that she is the lucky person to be hannah montans secretary

heyy guys im kindda stuck i really dont think ^that^ makes sense i just wanna know if you guys have an idea or so...how should they stop lillys mom from transfering?
here are sum of my ideas:
-tell her the secret bout hannah montana n let her become the secretary
-They get her another job
ehh thats all i could reallly come up with if i come up with anything eles ill post it up here an anyone could add on too the ideas 😊

well... i think they could make lilly's mom feel sentimental you know... like taking to her to the park where lilly's mom used to bring lilly when she was a toddler... the place where lilly's mom and her dad first met... stuff like that.... what do you think?

sounds great...i will pitch in tonight...gotta go to work.

chhilt that sounds awesome i think we should do that :)
n thanks simz and chhilt :)