Vishvaas:PG85The End!-preview of VW2 pg1! - Page 6

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Thanks Shona!Very Sweet & Nice Pls. do update 😉

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as promised i am here with my analysis - i have picked out points i thought were nice 😳 + 😆 both

its funny how dharam is unable to come to terms with his new found love and needs veer's help for the same...😳 the dialogues are very catchy and very much in tune to what is happening on screen.. (i.e. something that we can identify with) but i have a question... poor dharam why is he so innocent

what i liked
i liked the confrontation between shera and veer in the tent 👏 (hee hee both of them referring in the third ki shera ye shera woh shera kyun aisi karti ho)

looool i know it wasnt meant to be that way but the way she passed out immediately after hearing veer's name brought a smile to my face.. 😆 its nice to see their fiery relationship.. neither wants to give in but both already have...😳

when dharam catches veer with shera its a nice scene.. i expect to see something like this in the serial too.. hee hee 😛

wow first meeting main veer has already popped the question of her ideal guy and shaadi loooool kaafi forward veer hai...😆

in a span of a short time i think shera has been injured so many times... kyaa khatarnak lady hai - khud ke liye 😆

i know im being sadistic but im glad veer doesnt shera completely even when he goes to save her.. 😛

Shera,Veer,Dharam n sia remain alone in the cave then shera and veer alone... ahem ahem... 😛

i started blushing during the part when he heard her stomach rumbling.. i get embarassed.. hence try and ensure all my meals are eaten on time.. 😆

what i think could be changed😳 - just my suggestions... dont take it to heart.. you might have much better plans for your story as this point of time.. so you can choose to ignore them

please let shera not get any more injuries - for a while atleast 😳 😆
can we see a more independant Dharam or atleast his transition that way .. 😳

What i Loved - i absolutely was bowled over by the following dialogues... like almost hit me out of the blue.. you have handled the following scenes very well and i am sure if this was shown in the episodes, we would have been discussing it for ages here on IF.. 😳

Veer: itna jaan lo ke mein tumhari soch aur tumhare zindagi ka tareeka is mele mein badal dunga....aur ye mera...Rajkumar Veer ka vaada hai tumse
Shera: bohat vishwas hai tumhe apne app par
Veer: apne app par bhi aur TUM par bhi........jai bhole nath

maat ao Shera ke itne kareeb ke Shera tumse durr jah na sake
Veer: veer kayaron se mukabla nahin karta
Shera: hum kayar nahin hai
Veer: jo apne appse hi bhagne lage woh kayar hai...
Shera: hum kudh se nahin bhag rahe
Veer: toh kya ye sach nahin hai ke tum jo kar rahi ho woh tum karna nahin chahti
Shera: kya karna nahin chahte
Veer: mere bhai Dharam ko marr na nahin chahti

Tasha: kya tumhara baap aise Khazane ko choodh deta
Shera shuts up...thinking abt his words n realizing how much wrong she has done til date

Shera: humme kisi rajkumar ki zaroorat nahin
Veer: tumhe zaroorat hai varna tum yahan nahin hoti

Shera: Rajkumar Dharam ki maut
Veer takes out a knife from his belt
Veer: lo ye katar aur kaat dalo Veer ka saar
Shera: humne dharam maanga tha
Veer: DharamVeer do jism mein ek jaan hai...leh lo meri jaan

Shera: tum humse pyar kyun karte ho?

Veer: sunne ki itni jaldi kya hai

(ok guys for the next bit i wont be able to put it into hindi coz i dont know that much hindi so im going to put Veer's thoughts in english 😳 )
in his mind Veer is answering the question correctly:
Veer: u have something that no girl has...u have both beauty and brains...ur effortlessly look so mesmerizing with curly black locks that shimmer in the sunlight....ur eyes which contain a sparkle that no pair of eye which i have seen has ever contained before...a sparkle that shows ur heart only if read correctly...ur soft pink lips and ur milky complkexion only make u look more beautiful....ur posture and ur attitude has won over my heart....every lil thing abt u has made me admire u more....there is not a reason why i shudnt love u....

back into reality out of Veer's thoughts

Shera: humme ye lagta hai ke shayad hum ye mera matlab hai sab kuch itni jaldi hogaya

Veer: jaan ta hoon...humme waqt chahiye ek doosreh ko samaj ne ke liye

Shera: lo poonch gaye hum


Dharam: veer tum teekh ho aur sab teek hai

Veer: haan kyun...

Dharam: woh senapati charusena aur kuch senik aye teh par hum chup gaye

Veer: phir

Dharam: unko paata chala ke Rajkumari Sia bhi yahan hai humari saath is mele mein toh woh Sia ko sandesh deh kar hum dhoodhne nikal gaye

Veer: kya lika hai sandesh mein

Dharam: Nivriti bua ne likha hai ke jald se jald Aryanagar wapas aajao varna iss baar saza hogi

Veer: tum toh gaye kaam se

Dharam: mein nahin hum

Veer: Sia tumhara rajya beech mein ata hai toh hum tumhe choodh kar ageh badhenge...kyun Dharam

Dharam:hmmm

Dharam felt akward to the fact that he wud have to leave Sia's company


He recalled all their convos n all the moments they spent together

Veer whispering in Dharam's ear: mein toh kehta hoon ke hum abhi Sia ke mehal ja ke uske pitahji se uska haath mang teh hai

Dharam: huh

Veer: abb sherni ka shikar karna hai toh sedhe tareke se karte hai

Dharam: kya Veer....uski maangni teh hogi hai par ye nahin karna chahti

Veer: aur isske mangni hum todhen ge

Dharam: kaise

Veer: jaan ne ki itni jaldi kya hai...pehle aryanagar poonch kar yojna par kaam toh karleen

Dharam: veer hum..

Veer: sabra ka pahl meta hota hai...bohat meetah

Sia: rooko humme aram karna hai

Shera: par Sia hum nahin kar sakte....abhi bohat duur jaana hai

Dharam: nahin agar Sia ko aram chahiye toh aram hum karenge

Veer: Dharam maharaj ka gusa tum bhool gaye kya...

Dharam: par veer dekho ye kitni takh gayi hai

Sia: ye sab uss dasi ke waja se hua jo wapas sab ko leh kar mehal chali gayi...maa ko ye paata ne ke humme koi utaah gaya hai...kaam se kaam palki ko toh nahin leh jana tha

Veer: mere paas ek tarkeeb hai

Dharam: kya

Veer: hum sab chalte rahe aur sia na chale

Shera: veer hum rajkumari ko choodh kar nahin ja sakte

Veer: mein kahan keh raha hoon choodh ne ko mein toh ye keh raha hoon ke woh na chale aur hum sab chale

Dharam: toh kya tum...

Veer: nahin...mein nahin tum

Dharam: tut tut hum kaise ye kar sakte hai

Veer: Dharam uske nazuk pearon ka dekho kya haal hua hai aur tum chahte ho ke woh chale

Dharam: nahin...teek hai

Sia: tum log ye kya keh rahe ho

Dharam walks up to sia n picks her up in his arms

Sia: ahh Dhara...

Veer n Shera move on

Dharam: shhhhhh...iss pal ko ankhon mein samaye rakho...ye lamhe shayad kabhi wapas aye

Sia stars at her Prince Charming unable to stop herself from blushing

They reached Sia's kingdom n stop outside

Dharam: lijiye aah gaya app ka mehel

Sia: hum ghar nahin jaana chate

Dharam: hum bhi nahin

they look at each other

Veer coughs loudly

Shera laughs at him

Veer: chale

Dharam: tum niklo mein baas ata hoon

Veer: nahin saath mein chalte hai

Dharam: veer

Veer: aacha rajkumari ji phir milte hai

Veer n Shera bid Sia fare well n leave

Dharam turns to Sia

Dharam: dekho mein jaanta hoon tum harsh se shaadi nahin karna chati iss liye mein chahta hoon app aur hum phirse mile jahan sari baatein ho sakeh

Sia: mulakat ho sakti hai(pointing out) uss nadi ke tat par aaj se teekh saat din badh...raat ko

Dharam: teekh hai hum tumhe vahin milenge...tab tak ke liye

he pauses n takes a deep breath n then kisses her on teh cheek...turns n leaves

Sia is in shock at what he had done but then smiles to herslf touching her cheek where he had just kissed her


shona

Originally posted by: lashy

OSR

as promised i am here with my analysis - i have picked out points i thought were nice 😳+ 😆both

-thank u-i hope u liked it

its funny how dharam is unable to come to terms with his new found love and needs veer's help for the same...😳the dialogues are very catchy and very much in tune to what is happening on screen.. (i.e. something that we can identify with) but i have a question... poor dharam why is he so innocent

he's kinda a bit helpless when it comes to romancing where as Veer though has no experience is an expert

what i liked i liked the confrontation between shera and veer in the tent 👏(hee hee both of them referring in the third ki shera ye shera woh shera kyun aisi karti ho)

this is one thing Veer likes abt Shera-the way she talks in 3rd person so he uses it as well

looool i know it wasnt meant to be that way but the way she passed out immediately after hearing veer's name brought a smile to my face.. 😆its nice to see their fiery relationship.. neither wants to give in but both already have...😳

when dharam catches veer with shera its a nice scene.. i expect to see something like this in the serial too.. hee hee 😛

wow first meeting main veer has already popped the question of her ideal guy and shaadi loooool kaafi forward veer hai...😆

he's confident n doesnt want to drag things and just wants to get to thje point

im glad u liked all that

in a span of a short time i think shera has been injured so many times... kyaa khatarnak lady hai - khud ke liye 😆

agreed that she has injured herself alot 😆

i know im being sadistic but im glad veer doesnt shera completely even when he goes to save her.. 😛

Shera,Veer,Dharam n sia remain alone in the cave then shera and veer alone... ahem ahem... 😛

i started blushing during the part when he heard her stomach rumbling.. i get embarassed.. hence try and ensure all my meals are eaten on time.. 😆

what i think could be changed😳- just my suggestions... dont take it to heart.. you might have much better plans for your story as this point of time.. so you can choose to ignore them

oh i dont mind at all...actually im glad ur giving me gd points as well as bad points

please letshera notget any more injuries -for a while atleast 😳dont worry she wont get injured much now-she's had enough to last her a life time 😆
😆can we see a more independant Dharam or atleast his transition that way.. 😳

yep in todays part which i updated a while ago i think u'll see that...also in the next couple of parts u will see this too

What i Loved - i absolutely was bowled over by the following dialogues... like almost hit me out of the blue.. you have handled the following scenes very well and i am sure if this was shown in the episodes, we would have been discussing it for ages here on IF..
thank u...im glad u enjoyed them

😳

Veer: itna jaan lo ke mein tumhari soch aur tumhare zindagi ka tareeka is mele mein badal dunga....aur ye mera...Rajkumar Veer ka vaada hai tumse Shera: bohat vishwas hai tumhe apne app par Veer: apne app par bhi aur TUM par bhi........jai bhole nath

maat ao Shera ke itne kareeb ke Shera tumse durr jah na sakeVeer: veer kayaron se mukabla nahin karta Shera: hum kayar nahin hai Veer: jo apne appse hi bhagne lage woh kayar hai... Shera: hum kudh se nahin bhag rahe Veer: toh kya ye sach nahin hai ke tum jo kar rahi ho woh tum karna nahin chahti Shera: kya karna nahin chahte Veer: mere bhai Dharam ko marr na nahin chahti

Tasha: kya tumhara baap aise Khazane ko choodh deta Shera shuts up...thinking abt his words n realizing how much wrong she has done til date

Shera: humme kisi rajkumar ki zaroorat nahin Veer: tumhe zaroorat hai varna tum yahan nahin hoti

Shera: Rajkumar Dharam ki maut Veer takes out a knife from his belt Veer: lo ye katar aur kaat dalo Veer ka saar Shera: humne dharam maanga tha Veer: DharamVeer do jism mein ek jaan hai...leh lo meri jaan

^^^me in bold

thank u lashy di for the analetic post
it has helped me alot n was really encouraging n also i know what i need to change now

i hope u continue to read the FF in future n enjoy it too as well as offer suggestion

thank u 🤗

Shona

HeY sHoNe AgAIn
aWeSoMe!
uNdEsCrIbAbLe !!
eXcElLeNt
fF 😛

great part pls con't soon 😉

CHing 😃

Thank u Kiran,CHing n rekha n everybody else who read 🤗

ok heres what happen afterwards

Veer: Shera tum apne pitahji ke paas jaogi

Shera: Veer hum

Veer: woh tumhare pitah hai...une ek akhiri baar mil ao

Shera: aur....agar woh humme maar dalenge toh

Veer: aisa nahin hoga...mein hoon na....Shera mein nahin jaanta ke ye pyar hai ya dosti par itna jaanta hoon ke agar tumhe choot ponch ti hai toh dard mujhe hota hai


Dharam joins them agen

Dharam: ahemm

Veer quickly changes the topic

Veer: toh Dharam...tumhe kya lagta hai...humme itni jaldi kyun wapas bolaya tha

Dharam: paata nahin...chal ke paata chalega


Shera: yahan ageh hai humara tabila

Dharam: Veer tum Shera ko chood ao...hum abhi kuch hum dono ke liye kane ka intazam kar te hai

Dharam walks off

Shera: veer...

Veer: shh meri baat dhyan se suno...tum apne pitahji se milongi aur haan khabhi mujhese mil ne ka maan kare toh rajmehal mein dakshin ke aur se sabse uppar ki kidhki mere kamre ki hai par...wahan aaja na

Shera: shera ko is tara ki supari phir se mile toh

Veer: mere paas ajana...tumne he toh kaha tha ke kaal ki kaal sochen


Shera: toh hum...phir milenge

Veer: so toh hai...Veer se mile bina koi kaise reh sakta hai

Shera: veer...

they were arguing

Veer: aacha ye baatao tumhara tabela kahan hai

they were standing next to each other

Shera point it out

Shera: wahan

Veer: kahan

Shera moves near him to point it out

Shera: wahan

she is so close to veer...n he seizes the opportunity n kisses her on teh cheek

Shera is stunned for a sec

Shera: veer...ye...tum

Veer: phir milte hai...meri kidhki par

he gives a million dollar smile n leaves

Shera turns n walks to her tabila

DV rejoin

they sit down to eat

Dharam: toh kya hai tumhari yojna

Veer: sia se phir kab mil rahe ho

Dharam: 7 din ke badh

Veer: acha humme ye paata hai ke woh andhi hai isliye toh tumhe pasand karti hai

Dharam: Veer!

Veer: acha acha woh nahin hai...tum usse milo aur poocho ke ye mangi kab hai aur kya uski maa aur pitahji usski harsh se mangni rok kar tumse kara ne ke liye khush hai

Dharam: haan par agar woh khush nahin toh

Veer: toh tum aur Sia ko bhaag ga kar le yana

Dharam: nahin nahin...pitahji humme maar dalenge

Veer: acha toh phir zinda reh kar tum Sia ko kisi aur ki Dulhan ban te dekh na

Dharam: nahin nahin...hum aisa hone nahin denge....ab hum sia ko apni bana kar he rahenge...aur ye humara vaada hai tumse,,,kudhse aur Sia se

Veer: ye hui na baat...vhalo ghar chale


they arrive at home later....n are given a grand welcom

public: Rajkumar DV ki jai...Rajkumar DV ki jai...Rajkumar DV ki jai

DV approach Aryavardhan

Dharam n Veer touches his feet n takes blessings

Arya: hamesha khush raho

They take Nivriti's blessings

Nivi: bhagwan tumhari har manokamna swikar kare

Dharam's mom: khush raho

then the whole royal family is sitting together for dinner

Dharam: pitahji aisi kaunsi vaja thi ke apne humme mele se bola liya

Arya: bata hum aaj bohat khush hai...app ke liye Sunaiya ke maharaj Samar Singh ki beti Saanvi ka rishta aya hai

Dharam n Veer freeze ...looking Shocked

Dharam: ji?

Arya: haan...Samar singh humare bohat ache dost hai...aur sanvi bohat achi ladki....

Dharam: par pitah ji

Arya: Dharam appko kal sham tak sochne ka waqt hai...aur hum haan suna chahte hai

DV are stunned n Dharam looks a lil shattered


enjoy

Shona

I loved it Shona.. I was blushing soo much at the Veers kiss 😳 n I am excited abt this proposal for Dharam 😛

Thanks shona for the lovely update pls. do continue 😉 It is getting interesting with each & every part 😊