FF:'SHUT DOORS OF HEART' |Chapter 4 updated.|Page 12 - Page 7

Originally posted by: alisha_ashiyal

Heyy Sis I'm Commenting From The Start...
Great Concept And Concept...
I Don't Know Whyyy But Vicky Character Seems To Be Not Good.. Don't Know.. But Maybe U Would Had Given Little Intro In Chapters..
Chapter 1 Was Quite Good.. First I Thought Manyata Is In Chap 1 But As When I Read It Again I Was Wrong...No Manyata...
Lia And Maya Convo Was Funny Specially The Very First Line Of Maya...

"Tumse kitni baar kaha hai ke mera wait kia karo,par nahin!Tumhare kaanon par joon tak nahi rengti." Was Indeed Amazing...
And Awww Maya Fall On Ground By Paper Ball Anddd Ohhh OMG HERE TOO MAYA ... Hahahahahahaha ... Poor That Guy Maya Ne Acha Sabaq Sikhne Ki Koshish Ki...


Chapter 2
OMG First Boy Started And Again Maya's Words Were Speechless again "English jhadne ki zarurat nahi hai,London mein bhi tumhare hamwatan ho sakte hain"...Thanxx alot :)

and she got late for her bet and 15 mins... and wow getting into library she relaxed was ahhh
and woww paperball boy was her class fellows.. and ."Oye teri!Tum idhar kia kar rahe ho?"She questioned him."Kyun?Kia classroom mein,jo logon ko padhane ke liye banaya gaya hai na ke sone ke liye..uss mein enter hone se pehle tumse pucchna pade ga?"

their convo wasss ahhh very entertaining... so it was Veer... hmmm... amazinggg... Thanx again😊

Chapter 3
seriously in chap 3 maya dialogues r hilarious... shikayati tattu lolzzz

"You knowwhat,Lia?Woh mujhe cchod kar nahi Gaya!In fact Wohtumhe,mujhe ya kisi ko cchod kar nahi Gaya!He has gone abroad for studying!And you'll see,you'll see,he'll come back!I mean how can he not?Humari family ke ilawa Uss kiapni family bhi wahan hai!"

Thanxx,sis.Delighted to know that u found them gud enough😊

i dont know here maya words seems like to me that she is talking about uday... but how uday and maya met and why lia told that woh tumhe chod kar chala gaya hai... sis will u disclose this secret...There wll be a flashbackIn the next chapter,but still,u'll have to urself read chapter 3 again for hints😃😉 (But still it won't answer all ur questions!😛)

and now this line is confusing me... "Kab tak?Kab tak Khud se jhoot bolti raho gi,Man..Maya!!" aur is update main kya hua kuch samj nae aya until u wont disclose the past.. which i guess is connected with uday ...Well..sis,wait 4 the story to proceed and u'll get ur answers😊😉

Originally posted by: ManVeerObsessed

No no!It's okay,take ur time😊

Originally posted by: ManVeerObsessed

Thanxx alot again,Alisha sis,4 ur precious comment and thank you for ur compliments,glad u liked the chapter!!😊

Originally posted by: alisha_ashiyal

thanxxx... 😊

Originally posted by: alisha_ashiyal

i would read chap 3 soon but when flashbacks will be there.. and i know u would post it... buttt whennn... im hell desperate...

Originally posted by: ManVeerObsessed

Umm..I think I posted it on pg 7 or 6 2 dys ago,maybe u didn't see chapter 3!

Aur 10 likes mill jayen,I'LL post chap 4!

Originally posted by: ManVeerObsessed

Thanxx alot again,Alisha sis,4 ur precious comment and thank you for ur compliments,glad u liked the chapter!!😊

Hey, how you? 😊

Loved Chapter 2 and Chapter 3

Both chapter have been beautifully written and I loved it to the core

So sorry for the late reply...

Chapter 2

Wonder who Veer reminds Maya of? Lol, love how she answered him as it shocked him...as well as when she told him "Excused"

Lol, I also hope that the teacher didn't mark the register and that she wins the bet...

Lol, love how he spoke to her and made her move her legs because he wanted to sit there... and I love how they both judge each other

Chapter 3

Still want to know who Veer reminds her of...Lol, love how Lia walks in with chips and soft drinks and tells her that even though she went late for class, she won the bet and I love Maya's self confidence... I agree with Lia because very few friends are true friends who keep all your secrets while sharing theirs with you...

Gosh, I feel really bad for Maya but what did Lia mean when Maya left the room and I wonder what happened to the guy Maya loved

Thanks for the pm 😊

Originally posted by: rockstar4eva55

Hey there! Tysssm for sending to me the pm! ^_^You r most welcome!😊.The storyline yet again is awesome.Thank you😊. It's gonna be an interesting one,though I understood the whole thing :P ^______^
Waiting for further updates,cuz this is great!Thanxx alot onc again!😊 Oh and btw,could you post pics to show us what Jihan and Laila look like? That'd be great! :DUmm...I will,surely in the next update😊😉.
And once again,thanks for sending to me the pm and update soon!!U R WELCOM,WILL DO!!😊

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Alisha