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Sonali

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

awesome job ! loved them all!

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akshi_t

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Posted: 13 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: AKlover101
That was tooo cute!! Gr8 job!! Do continue soon!:)

awwie,,.thanks a lot 🤗...little out of ideas ryt now but will surely try to write more as soon as some pops in my head 😛

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akshi_t

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: adventure_gurl
awesome job ! loved them all!

thxieee...really glad u liked them all 😃

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: Anjalika13
loved them 😊

really happy u did 😃

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akshi_t

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

hey all...m so sorry for updating this late...wat to do...little out of ideas ryt now (would love ur suggestons ideas and requests)...and this time i'm updating just 1 scene...but it's a pretty long one😛...i know this one's not that good...but i hope u guys like it (and don't find it boring😆)

13. I was lost in her thoughts when i heard the phone ringing...i looked at the clock...it was 3:00 a.m...i wonder who could be calling at this time??...i picked up my mobile and was surprised to see that it was manyata...i immediately answered it

Uday: princess??

Manyata: tu so raha tha na..sorry yarr..hum kal baat karte hain

Uday: are ruko princess...hum so nahi rahe the...tumne is waqt kaise call kara?...sab sahi to hai na?

Manyata: haan bas wo...wo..

Uday: wo kya princess?

Manyata: wo mujhe neend nahi aa rahi thi

Uday: princess tumne galat no. dial kar diya hai...hume koi lori ya story nahi aati...aisa karo tum aunty komal ke paas jao

Manyata: tujhse baat karna hi bekar hai...ek toh mujhe yahan pata nahi kyu neend nahi aa rahi hai upar se tu mujhe har jagah...mera matlab har time pareshan karta rehta hai

Uday: princess ye phone tumne hume kiya hai humne tumhe nahi aur hum tumhe pareshan kar rahe hain?

Manyata: aur nahi toh kya...main yahan pareshan ho rahi hoon aur tu hai mazak pe mazak kiye jaa raha hai meri help karne ke bajaye...

Uday: jab hume hi neend nahi aa rahi to hum tumhari help kaise kare princess??

Manyata: are haan...tu is samay kya kar raha tha??...tune hi bola tha na ki tu so nahi raha tha

Uday: hum wohi kar rahe the princess jo tum kar rahi thi..

Manyata: k..k..kya?

Uday: *hum tumhare baare me soch rahe the aur tum humare baare me...haan nahi toh* are jaag rahe the baba aur kya?

Manyata: tujhe bachpan se hi seedha jawab dena nahi aata hai ya fir mere sath hi ye sab nautanki maarta hai...yehi to pooch rahi hu ki jaag kyu raha tha?

Uday: kya kare princess tum hume sone kaha deti ho

Manyata: saale halkat vede

Uday: are call jo kar diya tumne..to sote kaise hum??

Manyata: tu na...

Uday: jawab de chuke hain...ab tumhari baari hai...batao kya hua...kyu neend se itni khafa ho tum?

Manyata: are yaar jab main khud hi nahi janti to tujhe kaha se batau??

Uday: princess...!!

Manyata: sachi...mujhe lagta hai mujhe na koi bhukar shukar ho gaya hai...mujhe na

Uday: princess hum abhi doctor sahab ko phone karke bolte hai ki vo abhi waha aakar tumhe check kare...aur hum bhi thodi der me pahuchtey hai...tum fikar mat karo...hum bas..

Manyata: oye bewakoof ke bache...maine bola na ki mujhe aisa sirf lag rha hai...na ki hai...aur itni raat ko bina wajah sab pareshan ho jayenge...

Uday: bina wajah...?? princess agar tumhe sach me bukhar hua toh?...abhi doctor sahab ko nahi dikhaya aur kal zyada tez ho jayega...humari baat mano princess

Manyata: tujhe rai ka pahad banane ka itna shauk kyun hai?...bola na abhi zarurat nahi hai...aur mujhe zyada gadbad lagi to khud doctor sahab ke paas chali jaungi...khush?

Uday: theek hai princess...waise tum kuch keh rahi thi naki tumhe kuch...??

Manyata: are kuch nahi...wo to bas aise hi...

Uday: princess bata rahi ho ya fir hum waha aakar kehlvaye...humne jootey to pehen hi rakhe hai...aur hume wahan aane me koi problem nahi hai...

Manyata: are yaar bata rahi hoon...main to bas yehi keh rahi thi ki mujhe lag raha hai ki mujhe bukhar ho gaya hai kyunki mujhe har jagah koi dikh raha hai...aur uski awaze sunayi de rahi hain...aur dil me kuch ajeeb sa ho raha hai...oye uday ye haveli bhootiya to nahi h na??

Uday: bhootiya??...acha mazak hai princess

Manyata: (mainly speaking to herself) main bhi kitni pagal hoon...ye haveli bhootiya hoti to mujhe bhoot dikhte na...mujhe tu thodi na...(realizing she was speaking out loud)

Uday: hum thodi na kya princess??

Manyata: are main keh rahi thi...ki tu...tu...thodi na...thodi na nahi batata mujhe...aur itna acha mauka kaise gawa deta tu mujhe darane ka...chal ab mujhe bahut neend aa rahi hai...tu bhi soja...bye

Uday: princess??...hello??

Uday: hume kyun lag raha hai princess ki tumhari aur humari bimari ekdum same hai...bas farak itna hai...ki hum humara cure already dhund chuke hain(tum ❤️)...aur tum ye pata laga rahi ho ki akhir tumhe hua kya hai(pyaar ka bukhar😛)...

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SaHillover101

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

AWWW that was soo sweet!! I really hope we get a scene like this in the show!!:) Continue soon!:)

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akshi_t

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: AKlover101
AWWW that was soo sweet!! I really hope we get a scene like this in the show!!:) Continue soon!:)

😳...thxieee...seems like cv's heard your wish 😆...not the same feelings from manyata's side but still u got ur telephone scene 😛

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akshi_t

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Posted: 13 years ago

#28

so here i am again with one more update,..hope you guys like it 😊

14. Uday was standing behind Manyata...she was wrapping the chunni around her neck when it's end almost hit uday's eye...

Uday: ow...

Manyata:(making a sad face) o teri! sorry uday...zyada tez lagi?

Uday: no worries princess...aise bade bade rajmahalo me aise chote chote hadse to hote rehte hain...thodi der me theek ho jayegi...tab tak hum tumhe ek ankh se hi nihar lenge...

Manyata:(looking away from him) main bhi kitni pagal hu...pta nahi dhyan kaha tha mera...ab galti maine ki hai to sudharni bhi mujhe hi padegi

while manyata was speaking uday opened his pretending to be injured eye and tried to control his huge smile from giving him in...she turned to look at him again and in the hurry he closed his right eye this time and forgot that it was the left one he was pretending to have got injured...but manyata noticed it and her mouth opened a bit in the shock that he was just pretending all this while...

Uday: kya hua princess??

Manyata: huh?...kuch nahi...

Uday: tum kuch keh rahi thi na galti sudharne ke baare me...

Manyata: haan wo...

She signaled him to get his face at her level...and opened his not so injured eye with her fingers and tried to soothe it by blowing gently in it...

Manyata: ab theek hai? meri wajah se bahut dard hua tujhe?

Uday: bilkul nhi...waise bhi it was worth it...

Manyata: waise agali baar se dhyan rakhna

Uday: huh?

Manyata: ki tujhe chot left me lagi thi right me nahi

and she turned to go out of the room...but uday caught her hand and turned her around so that she was facing him

Uday: matlab tumhe pata tha?

Manyata: (trying to get out of his grip) haan pata tha

Uday: fir bhi tumne us samay kuch nahi kaha...kya baat hai princess...humare kareeb aana tha toh hume aise hi bol deti...hum tumhe kabhi mana nahi karte...

Manyata: ye sab harkate tu kar raha tha na ki main

Uday: acha princess...fir jab pata lag gaya tha tumhe tab hi kyu nhi kaha ye sab?

Manyata:(finally getting out of his grip) kyunki...mujhe der ho rahi hai...aur mujhe jana hai...

and she quickly ran out of the room...

Edited by akshi_t - 13 years ago

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SaHillover101

@SaHillover101

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Posted: 13 years ago

#29

Awww so cute!! Eager to read more!!:)

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SaHillover101

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Posted: 13 years ago

#30

Originally posted by: akshi_t

😳...thxieee...seems like cv's heard your wish😆...not the same feelings from manyata's side but still u got ur telephone scene😛

Ya they did here my wish bout the telephone scene but the show's scene wasn't even nearly as cute as ur scenes!!:)