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pranita1202

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Posted: 13 years ago

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superb 👍🏼

loved it

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Lekha Ishwar

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Posted: 13 years ago

#82

Radz. Omg girl it's been really long. Your writing style has intrigued me soo soo much. Maybe I'll do a piece of writing inspired by you. You're really good pls do pm me.

Lekha.

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Aradhna

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Posted: 13 years ago

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@ adventure_gurl: thank you!

@ Angel_20: thank you! Yes, definitely trying to write more. :D

@ dumas: exactly! she is afraid of losing who she is in order to become who everyone says she is meant to be. her friendship with unnati will show her that she doesn't have to lose herself, she just has to grow as a person. thank you!

@ salekh1: thank you! I love writing unnati and manyata's friendship.

@ Meera: *coughs*

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Aradhna

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: desi chic
Hey Radz!

Just so you know, I've been silently creeping into this thread - relishing your writing, and then disappearing. I must say, some things just never get old. Rather, they beautify with time. I'm loving it, 👏 I haven't read the last update, but I would like to say thanks for indulging us!

I'll be back with more comments. Sorry, I've been slow and lazy with commenting lately, but I will get there, pakka😉

Cheers,
dc

Hi DC! oh wow, you read this? you liked this? considering how much I adore your writing, this is such a compliment! Thank you so much! I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

@ nasghar: thank you!

@ tvlover92: yes, manyata really would! maybe I'll put that in somewhere - her figuring that out. 😆 thanks for reading.

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Aradhna

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: atop
Hayee, inteha ho gayi intezaar ki, aayi hai abh khabar, mere yaar ki, lol...
Waited long, long and long enough this Sunday to get an update as it was kind of a bedtime story but knew my friend that this cruel world will not let you live in peace, there would be work, work and work. Left, right and centre but someday, sometime, victory will be ours and thou shall get away from the shackles of overload and update.
Oops, I forgot that am not giving an audition for the next lead, but seriously, it was a treat to have an update finally now.
I have always admired and felt good about the whole Unnati-Manyata/Unnati-Moniya friendship. She accepted her as it is and she became her friend with grace yet playful gesture. I totally love the way Unnati knows Moniya/Manyata well and tries her every bit to help her. Purple is the color, my love, a new synonym for red and I could already imagine the royalty flowing through that anarkali.
Now, want to see Uday's reaction upon seeing his princess finally dressing like one.
Needless to say, great update and I shall look forward for more and more every week.
Have a great week ahead!

Luv Atop

*giggles* Atop, your comments make my day. Just so you know. And I want to apologise for the long wait between this update and the last. Your second comment to remind me to update reminded me to WRITE. 😆

You know, I always felt that if anyone would accept Moniya/Manyata as she was, would help her flourish, it would be Unnati because she knew what the pressures of being a princess could do - and she wanted to not be a princess, or at least, not have the rigidity of it imposed of her. but because she understood the necessities of it, she let it be, and she could help M understand it, and learn to accept it as well. there's a bond there that Jay never let grow between herself and M.

I've always associated purple with royalty - and with the nickname her baba gave her, I'd had M love the colour purple too. 😆 I'm so glad you enjoyed this part! I do hope the next part lives up to expectations.

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Aradhna

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Posted: 13 years ago

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@ --ANGEL--: thank you!

@ Surya.Ravi: thanks!

@ Aashi: I love how that is your only comment. :D

@ rosh-star: I know right? I'm still waiting on a proper makeover. I'll only start watching the show properly after they give her a complete overhaul. But then again, since it's so slow on tv, that's what we have FFs for! I'm so glad you're enjoying this, and you've been added to the PM list.

@ dmg_roks_antara: added, and thank you!

@ zigzagway_sadi: thank you! you've been added.

@ pranita1202: thank you!

@ Lekha: omg hi!!! What a place to meet you again. Glad you're enjoying this! You've been added to the list. Hope you enjoy what else comes too!

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Aradhna

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Posted: 13 years ago

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I am so sorry for updating this so late! I hadn't written part six (I have now, but I will only be able to post that after I write part 7 at the very least) so I refrained from posting this. But, with any luck, part seven will be written soon and I can post part six asap. Till then, enjoy Manyata and Uday meeting again!

part five

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"Aa gaye aap dono?" Komal gave in to her urge to touch her daughter's cheek lightly, pushing a strand of hair off her face. To her heart's delight, Manyata did not push her off or make a face, but simply stood there, a soft look in both their eyes. She reluctantly let her hand drop. "How was the shopping?"

"Very good," Unnati declared, ignoring the moment between mother and daughter tactfully. "Aunty, what do you think of Manyata's dress?" She indicated that Manyata spin, which the older girl did with a laugh.

Komal had to pause to stem her tears. "Beautiful," she finally managed to say. "Utterly beautiful."

There was an odd look in Manyata's eyes as she tilted her head to one side and surveyed Komal, before a mischievous grin broke out on her face. "Aakhir aapki beti toh hoon," she chirped, and Manyata told herself that it was only because of the promise she had made herself to behave that she had said this, and not because of the way Komal's affection was plain on her face, and definitely not because Manyata's heart warmed at it and had her biting her tongue to keep her from calling Komal Maa.

Before Komal could respond, Manyata had hurried Unnati away and to her room. Unnati let Manyata pace for a bit, muttering to herself. All that the younger princess got were snippets that made no sense. She began to unpack the shopping bags, which spurred the other girl into action as well. The clothes were taken out, admired one more time, before Manyata hung them up in the closet. The shoes, and they had picked up a few pairs of those, five for Manyata and two for Unnati, they took out of the boxes and Unnati made Manyata try them on again. She kept hers back into a shopping bag and set them to one side while Manyata neatly placed hers in order on the floor of her closet. Neither noticed the door open or the prince who was leaning against the frame and observing them.

"So," both girls jumped in surprise at the interruption. "I'm guessing the shopping was fruitful."

"Tumhe knock karna nahin aata kya?" Manyata shot back.

Uday smirked. "Aap toh meri honewali patni hai. Zaroorat kya hai knock karne ki, eh Princess."

"Toh tumhe tameez nahin aati," she smiled sweetly back. "Aise bolo." The smile dropped and was replaced immediately with her usual glare. Uday liked to privately term it the 'Uday is right and I don't want to admit it' glare. "Yahaan kar kya rahey ho?"

"Unnati ko lene aaya tha," the look he gave his sister was affectionate.

Manyata hid her embarrassment at forgetting that by turning to thank Unnati for the day, shooting her a smile. The two girls hugged, and Unnati pretended not to see her brother's expression over Manyata's shoulder. Or the way his eyes lingered on Manyata's bare legs when the girls broke apart.

"Dada, hum chalein?" she picked up her shopping bag and exited the door, patiently waiting for her brother to move.

Uday made a show of looking Manyata up and down. "Not bad Princess, not bad at all," he commented, before turning and letting Unnati slip a hand into the crook of his arm. Both prince and princess of Jaigardh cast a glance at Manyata before walking away. Unnati grinned, wide and open and easy, while Uday smirked, eyes glinting with amusement and challenge.

The fight and attitude drained out of Manyata the second they were out of sight and she sank down onto her bed. She let her head fall into her hands, hair messily draping over her face. Sighing, she pushed her hair back and straightened.

"Theek hai Yuvraaj Udayveer," she said to herself. "So you want to turn me into Rajkumari Manyata. Fine, go ahead. I'll learn all you can teach me, all everybody wants me to learn. I'll be the princess of Rajgarh that the people expect."

Her eyes narrowed and she stood. "But I will not be your Manyata. That girl does not exist. I am my own person, I make my own decisions."

"You want to play games, Udayveer?" The glint in Manyata's eyes as she smirked, raising her head challengingly to her empty room, would have made Udayveer proud in just how much it made her look like a royal. "Bring it on."

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please let me know if it lived up to expectations!

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dumas

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Posted: 13 years ago

#88

awesome update loved it what manyata is not realizing is she is the princess and in challenging uday she is living up to his expectation he does not want her to lose either of her ways he just want her to get more refined she is a diamond who just need polishing so the training will make her more a royal but he likes the fire underneath he just loves riling her up loved the update thanks for the pm

Edited by dumas - 13 years ago