ManVeer OS - If I Could... - Page 3

Originally posted by: mari2095

aww this is so sweet 😳

Originally posted by: arryline

Aww that was so adorable😍.Lovely piece of writing😊

Originally posted by: adventure_gurl

loved it. so soothing yet romantic!

Originally posted by: KaShfan7

Gosh that was so beautiful. So romantic.

Originally posted by: prc_fan1

That was such an amazing OS.

So heart-wrenching & tragic yet, so beautiful.

If only, it was in our control to decide who we would fall for :(

I, especially, loved it when a tear slid down her cheek..

Originally posted by: -Mais-

OH MY GOD!! This has to be the SWEETEST comment I ever got for an OS!! Thank you thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU so MUCH!!! You have no idea how much it means to me...!!!! 😳 And no honey, YOU are awesome for writing such a sweet comment for me! 🤗

Originally posted by: -Heart-Hacker-

yesterday my net was acting like the bigggest jerk ive known! Sorry for that. :P

OMGGG PARTNERRR ;O You know youre just one of the best writers of IF? and definetely the best on DEK Forum :$$$$ I had to read it like thrice, because its so so BEAUTIFUL :$ How do you come up with such unique and utterly brilliant and beautiful concepts? ITS LIKE MINDBLOWING! i dont even have words to tell you, how geniusly this is plotted then written. Hats off to you.

I simply love how youve personified nature here. Its a beautiful touch to your OS, showing the fairytale magical bonding <3 Love how the wind has a very important role here. OMGGG IL the way you characterised Uday, his inner turmoils, his emotions, and the brilliant connection to his past with Manyata. Its just fabulous, the dialouges, the if i could is just so brilliantly put in, im just too mesmerized, the way he let out a concealed part of his heart to the wind, and the personified figurative reactions left me speechless! And how you showed the connection with Manyata in the end, was just the MOST MOST Beautiful part of this OS. I cant stop reading it again and again. The connection of their childhood is so utter beautifully used and displayed. This is just PERFECCCHHT! Im so mesmerized and blown, dont know what to say! OMGGG i love the concept and the way you wrote it down.

Woh bhi cellphone pe ;OOO YOU ROCK SERIOUSLY PARTNER :OOO

LYYY!

OMFG write more, you know? im so reading your work! <333 :$

Originally posted by: Muskaan.C

I love how you've captured Uday's inner turmoil. On one hand, he knows that the relationship between Moniya and Akash isn't going to last, and in the end, he will marry her. On the other hand, he wishes to be the cause for her happiness, and wants to be a part of her life, like he was when they were children. It was beautifully written; you've captured, in my opinion, the essence of Uday's character.

- Muskaan. C

Originally posted by: PinkChocolate

Your words made me think of somebody who is walking around the world with a huge hole punched through his/her heart , looking for something and having no idea what it is.

Deep chambers of a lonely heart.