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Posted: 13 years ago

#481

Originally posted by: DEKfan2012
I really enjoyed reading it Reeha...
All that punching etc sure was an outlet...and Majnu was a true majnu...lol! I loved how Manyeta went straight to Uday first...infact I am very sure that is how it is going to be in the future with DEK too.😊

From your mouth to the CVs ears! I eagarly awaite the day Manyata will step onto UV's side, and think about him FIRST.😳

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dumas

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Posted: 13 years ago

#482

awesome beautiful perfect well written omg just fantastic loved it the were so happy together just being with each other and then that sh*****d turned up and ruin their perfect moment atleast now she know what type of person he is go uday loved how he beat the crap out of that jerk he is not man enough to hit him when he is staring at him he sucker kicked uday but uday gave it to him real good loved how manayatha supported uday and so sweet uday told her he loved her awesome loved it

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#483

Originally posted by: dumas
awesome beautiful perfect well written omg just fantastic loved it the were so happy together just being with each other and then that sh*****d turned up and ruin their perfect moment atleast now she know what type of person he is go uday loved how he beat the crap out of that jerk he is not man enough to hit him when he is staring at him he sucker kicked uday but uday gave it to him real good loved how manayatha supported uday and so sweet uday told her he loved her awesome loved it

Thank you for your lovely visual post! 🤗 I always look forward to it 😳

I'm glad that the part was salvaged via the majnu beating.

Is it just me or does he drive us all to swearing?

LOL, don't blame you though- this Akash makes everyone's blood boil 10X more then the one on the show!😡

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salekh1

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Posted: 13 years ago

#484

Originally posted by: reeha...k

Salekh1 you ALWAYS comment, but I never get your name! Be sure to tell me, your such a loyal reader that I'd like to be able to call you by your name! Thank you for reading, and enjoying it! The next part will be up tommorow- hopefully! 😊

Your awesome writing always forces me to come and comment and express my response to your AMAZING writing!
and My name is Sana! 😃

and

Dont thank me for reading, THANK YOU for writing😉

and im Eagerly waiting for your next part!!😳

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udaymanyata07

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Posted: 13 years ago

#485

👏well done rheea..great job...i finished reading the while story.great job...i an new to the website...if you good stories from other writers..please tell me...i am a great fan of your...love your writing...👏

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Surya.Ravi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#486

very nice update..i simply love Manyata & Uday's valentine day celebrations...it was simply very well written...simply beautiful..keep up the good work going...waise akash had to come & spoil their mood..i feel akash is turning obsessive can't he see Manyata is not interested in him...i felt glad when Uday, bashed akash..he really deserves more... anyway except for this one small hitch, i liked the fact that Uday & Manyata day out was simply perfect..& Uday ended it on a perfect note... he told Manyata he loves her...awww..it was such a picture perfect moment...& though Manyata not voicing her love, but the light touch of hers to Uday's cheeks, the love shining in her eyes, they are enough to prove she loves him too...this scene was very beautifully...wonderfully portrayed...loved the update to the core...keep it up...please do continue as soon as you can..waiting for the next update of the fanfic, very very eagerly...😊

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Poulomi Das

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Posted: 13 years ago

#487

U asked me, so i am doing it...but seriously i dont think there is any need for a feedback, coz u are just SIMPLY AMAZING. I am still swooning! I cant believe i didnt read it before...i am such an IDIOT i tell you! ouch that hurt! Okay so i am gonna start reading and give my 'feedback' to make ur system closed loop hence making it STABLE...Went over head...? i have this habit of giving 'mufat ka gyan'...Its from a subject called CONTROL SYSTEM.I should cut my Stupid blabbering. So without much Ado...__________________________________________________________________Part 1:INTERESTING BEGINNING...
Three things...
1. UV's inner turmoil came out to me, through out. Each and every line, conveyed his Emotions so beautifully. Oh! Reeha ! U portrayed the emotions so nicely...Its actually nice to see a story from our Hero's POV...and u did it excellently.<33
2. I liked this line, ...
"Why won't she come and play Auntyji?" "Is she mad about the hurt I gave her still? I'm sorry! I didn't want to hurt Manyata!" "Auntyji! Why are you crying is Manyata ok? Where is my Manyata!?"
I am ready to die a hundred deaths just to see this scene enacted on screen! It touched my heart...i had tears when i read first time...
3. The ending!
At that moment I had not been looking for a Princesses, or my Betrothed. I had just wanted to find my best friend.
if i coud kiss u now... This is what i always wanted the DEK writers to show... UV's Intentions, what his real feelings are...thank u for doing it in their place!😆
__________________________________________________________________PART 2:
Wow!! i just want to enjoy reading it again and again. The anxiety and frustrations are brilliantly conveyed. The BEST part is every character's dialogues are so APT in their roles. I just loved reading their dialogues over and over again...
But what stood out was the 5-year old kid searching for his best friend. Uff! that was so touching... and so CUTE!__________________________________________________________________
PART 3:
oh my! the 5 year old prince UV. He is so CUTE...
The cute friendship between the two is so Adorable! Its so Beautiful and Innocent...I cant hold my tears any more.The line:
Uday: OPEN GATE!!! I need to FIND MANYATA!!!! Open!! I order you to OPEN NOW!
Was so heart-wrenching. Haye! i cant stop crying.BEAUTIFUL.The Past UV and Present UV comparison part was AWESOME.My heart just stopped at this line:
Uday: It's time to give you back Tom, Manyata's home.
This is how the serial should have been. This is how the story should have unwrapped.After reading this scene i seriously want the writers to include such CUTE scene...
Over to next part😉
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Edited by poulomi12 - 13 years ago

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Ziva01

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Posted: 13 years ago

#488

Hi Reeha 🤗 it's me your late latiff friend😆

First of all I love the title DDLJ😉 and suits the chapter to the T as UV his dulhania under A nose after him beating so much I love it

Enjoy reading this chapter ...I always love it when ManVeer are having fun and don't care about the surroundings but insteads they are themselves and enjoy their childhood which they have missed long ago and even after 16 yrs of separation the bounding is still there. And the way you penned it down is simply amazing.

I were happy that A was in the chapter 😈 as M hasn't care for him a damn and instead she stood by UV and loved UV beating him.

The last part UV said " I Love U M" omg i will faint ☺️ and UV read M feelings through her expressions wow it's good. ManVeer don't need words to understand each other their expressions speak volumes.

Thxs for the pm dear and plzzz update soon

Love U 🤗

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-Misek-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#489

Reeha 🤗 🤗

This whole UdayVeer Chronicles is getting Intresting I Tell You.. Seriously this was such a sweet part ☺️ ☺️..Loved the whole UV and M's moments.. DDLJ flashback and all.. This can't get any more romantic.. ❤️ ❤️

Okk Without me rambling too much.. Just wanted to Highlight wat I loved the most.. Obviously Loved the whole part to core But will pick my best ones 😉..

1) UVs and Ms fall.. OMG tht was just SUPERB.. I was imagining the whole thing in my mind and Blushing myself.. Couldn't help smiling.. ( Mind I m in libraray and just finished reading it.. The Guy sat next to me gave such a weird look.. I m smiling and blushing all by myself.. He must have thought that I am a totally GONE CASE 😆)

But Seriuosly Reeha this was just awesome and made me soo happiee.. 😃 and Moreover M tracing UVs back on the brusies.. Tooo Much for me too Handel Gal.. I m totally Love Struck..

2) The whole Frisbee thing and the DUO competting to win. This is just done Perfect Reeha.. Frisbee in the beach with a Hwatiee 😍 😍.. Ohhh I would LOVE that too.. But Here M is only the Lucky one.. 😭.. But Yesss you have described the whole scenario in such a Passion that I could hardly take my eyes off your writing.. The splashing of Waves, M and UV getting wet, M mocking UV on being the Best Polo Player and all.. That was just awesome ⭐️ ..

Ohhh Forgot to mention the Castel bit.. Awww My UV soo muchh in Love that he actually helped M to renovate the sand Castel.. ❤️ ❤️

3) UV loosing controll and beating the HELL out of Majnu.. Too god.. I have enjoyed the scene on screen as well but on your FF it gave me an immense pleasure to read it as it was not as onscreen But He was punching Majnu coz he couldn't hear anything against M's self respect and character.. Awww UV.. 😍 I Tell You Reeha I can't wait to see the same thing happening onscreen, UV responding for M's insult.. 😍

4)ROTFL 🤣 🤣 🤣 I just couldn't keep it with in me..Ohhh Goshh CHIKKI with that Majnu again.. LOL BOWS Reeha..

..Only you knw How much I feel for this Perm Headphones (UV even referred to her as meatballs here 😆).. ohh She was crying to see her Majnu in pain and asking M to stop UV.. How can Majnu not see the Love and Concern for him in Chikki's eye.. The way you've written for them is just too good.. And Once Again CHIKASH FTW 🤣 🤣..

5) This DEFO is the BEST overall.. How UV could not controll his Feelings for M.. and wanted to Kiss her.. M's realising tht too.. OMG both falling for each other..

But Wat made me HAPPIEST is the last scene.. M apologies to UV and their PERFECT moment and emotions shared through the HUG

... Finally UV Confessed that HE LOVES M..

I was on Cloud 9 while I read it..

and M's reaction how she touches UVs facial features.. SUPER DUPER LOVED the moment..

..So my part of ramblings done.. I better shoot off now.. Thanks soo much for such a sweet, adorable, captivating, charming and cute part.. (Did I just finish all the adj 😉 😆)

Reeha waiting eagerly for the NEXT PART.. hope we don't have to wait Long 😉..

Lastly orangeemoticon

(for You for the update, Thought I am only showering my LOVE to UV then 😉 😆)..

Simmy

Edited by limbu.simmy - 13 years ago

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180506

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Posted: 13 years ago

#490

TO Polo:

FIRST! I love your emoticons- the monties, and the weird white things: SO EFFING CUTE! Gahh! They make me happy! 😃

Polo, you and crying? holy crap. Wow. Well, I guess my job went over well😆

AND don't thank me for writing about UV, I can shamelessly say I love the charecter soo much that I needed to do this for all UV crazies like me! HECK, We deserve some UVness, after all of the Ammonia crap we've been through- even if it's in an FF...maybe some CV creeping around here can catch a hint?😉

Oh god. Part two was hard to write- one because of that hindi...but i think it was understandable nah? I'm glad you liked it. Personally I REALLY want to see a flashback like that...showing what the family went through when M was kidnapped. Maybe even in a conversation with M so she can understand the pain her family felt. Just so she gets a better perspective.

Part three- that was a little difficult. I'm wondering if I've limitied myself by saying his mother died. It's like- what if she comes back in the show. Oh well. And I firmly believe that the little UV would be soo effing adorable. Had to make him a sweetheart.

Thank you Polo! 🤗 For taking the time to read this monster! 😆

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