Create Scenes (UPDATED NEW pg6) - Page 8

wow, you are some great writer 👏
Seriously Hats Off 👏 👏

Do Continue, its great to read 😃 😉 😊

OMGGGG i luvvv it soooo much suchi
its soooo suspenceful....poorrr dayaaa...i can almost imagine everything!!
ur soo creativeee dear...lubbb the part
plz continueeeeeee

😳 😳 😳 thankssssssssssssssssssssss so much friends, u all are my inspiration to drag just one scene till part6,I perhaps couldn't even think to convert just one scene into a story,it's all of u r enjoying and believe me giving me tremendous inspiration & courage to complete the story.
thankssssssssssssssssssssssssss very much my friends & take my neeeeeeeeeevr ending love. 🤗

omd suchi u deserve alottt more than just those comments!!!
i just wish if ur story cud actually get published!!!omd that'd be like a dream cum true....
i'd luvvv to see that on tv..
there are no real words to describe ur talent
luvv u

Originally posted by: Daisy!!

omd suchi u deserve alottt more than just those comments!!!
i just wish if ur story cud actually get published!!!omd that'd be like a dream cum true....
i'd luvvv to see that on tv..
there are no real words to describe ur talent
luvv u

I even can't dream like that, all of your comments are like a real booster & incentive for me to work more hard, Thanksssssssss friends for being so nice, posting the next very very soon.

Originally posted by: suchi_dev2006

I even can't dream like that, all of your comments are like a real booster & incentive for me to work more hard, Thanksssssssss friends for being so nice, posting the next very very soon.

Suchi dasiy is absolutely right you deserve more than tihs and you really should get it published👏

cant wait for the next part suchi
aur ika yaar tum bhi apna continue karo na plzzzz...me waiting hardly for that...aur waise ika tum bhi kisi se kam nahi ho....i lubbb ur fanfics tooo...missing them shoo much...plz continue karooooo
the onli reason i cum to this section is to read the fanfics 😉
both of u guyzzz are awesummmmmmmm
y dont u guyz work together n create the world's best ever fanfic... 😉

Originally posted by: Daisy!!

cant wait for the next part suchi
aur ika yaar tum bhi apna continue karo na plzzzz...me waiting hardly for that...aur waise ika tum bhi kisi se kam nahi ho....i lubbb ur fanfics tooo...missing them shoo much...plz continue karooooo
the onli reason i cum to this section is to read the fanfics 😉
both of u guyzzz are awesummmmmmmm
y dont u guyz work together n create the world's best ever fanfic... 😉

Aww thanx asma, sweetie will continue soon, wok exmz hain na😳😳so lil busy, but will definateyl continue soon....new ones coming up soon😃

Friends, I've come with the next part, yes, ika u r defintely very much talented and quite brilliant not just writing skill but also in other skills,U have posted so many nice photoes and video clipings,I will be so grateful daisy if one day have a chance to wrok with Ika. Thanksssssssss for all of your constant support for which I able to write a full story about CID. 😃 😃

PART VII


There was full moon in the sky,cold gale was blowing, sparkling stars were glittering ,cloudlets were floating across the sky,the sound of the trees rustling in the breeze,Tarika was gawking at the full moon & was recalling the day she last saw the full moon.Daya was there with her. she breathed out--moon,can you tell me why Daya was gazing at you? Is he seeing you even tonight? what is he doing moon? please tell him that I am missing him terribly.She eventually very slowly looked at the red thread Daya gave around her ring-finger & gulped back her tears.. & what's this? who is there standing just behind the parapet?? Tarika strolled towards the parapet. Daya?????....She soon went just behind Daya & slowly leant herself over him & breathed her heart out. But he didn't respond. Now Tarika touched his chin and tried to move his face towards her & .... he didn't protest at all, he was soft & submitted himself in the wish of Tarika..... Daya, why are you crying shona? Daya leant on Tarika's lap, tears spilt down his cheeks.Tarika rumpled his hairs with all her affection and tried to soothe him and said-- aise kyu ro rahe ho Daya? tumhe nehi pata ke tumko rote huye dekh ke mujhe kitna dard hota hai?
Daya answered with wavering voice--main kuchh bhi nehi kar paya tarika,woh log tumhe mujrim bana diya, itna bara saza de diya...... aur... main??... khare khare dekhta raha.
Tarika was trying to quiten Daya's agony--mujhe pharak nehi parta hain Daya,jab tak tum mere sath ho, mere pas ho, mujhe kisika parwa nehi hain.
Daya was desperate & restless--lekin kyu? ek bekasoor pe kyu itna nainsafi hoga? mujhe to maloom hain na ke tum mere sath thi.magar koyi..... koyi mujhpe.... his voice was choking with huff..... vishwas hi ...
Tarika smothered him with kisses to give him solace,moped his eyes out gently, clenched his two palms within her own & then dragged very gently towards her & started to sing:
Ae meri zindegi tu mere saath hain
Ae meri zindegi tu mere saath hain
Ab mujhe is zamane ki parwah nehi
Jaan le loo bhi main, jaan de du bhi main
Koyi keemat chukane ki parwah nehi
Ae meri zindegi tu mere saath hain.
Daya was bewitched completely & he was suanter along with Tarika like a beholder.

Tu khuda hain mera, mera imaan hain
ishq karna tera mujhpe ehsaan hain
Tu subha ka ujaala mere vaaste
Tu mere vaaste dilnashi shaam hain
Tu mere vaaste dilnashin shaam hain
Tere dil me thikana rahe umru bhar
phir kisi aashiyane ki parwah nehi
Ae meri zin...
Daya suddenly came very closer and quickly smooched her on the lips---main tumhe ye saza bhugatne nehi dunga, kisi bhi haal me nehi,chahe mujhe kuchh bhi karna pare
--- jo kuchh bhi karna hain cID se bahar ja kar karooooo. the sombre voice of ACP they heard.
Daya: sir, aap?
ACP came to them with a slow walk & glowering eyes over them and made his face stern--haa main,tumhe kya laga, kya gul khil raha hain tum dono ke beech me, mujhe maloom nehi.ACP wailed out.
--ye lo, ye tumhara prize hain.he gave a letter to Daya.
Daya: sir, prize!!! kis baat ... ke...
ACP: you are suspended from cID, aur tumhara suspension ka sifarish main ne hi kiya tha. Team ka ander kisi bhi tarah ka chir mujhe pasand nehi hain aur.
Tarika begged & pleaded--nehi sir, please agar koyi gunah kiya hain to main, uska saza aap please Daya ko maat dijiye, woh bekasoor hain sir, please aap use wapas le lijiye, sir..
ACP: saza??? ye to achchha hi huya na..... ab woh tumhare pass reh sakega... aur CID ke khilaf lar sakega... saza to mujhe mila, woh bhi itne saal baad. ACP snorted with rage.
Tarika fell into the ground and touching the feet of ACP she again pleaded-- nehi sir,meri gunha ka saza aap Daya ko maat dijiye, sir aap meri baat suniye main aapko sab bataungi, sir .. sir...
ACP went with a snooty contempt ignoring Tarika's plead
--ssiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiir. Tarika yelled her heart out and waked up.
She was gasping for breath in the spasm of fear & pain-- my God, ..... Daya thik to haina????.....uske saath kuchh bura to nehi huya na????? Soon she was going to call Daya...but suddenly she stopped and thought---kya Daya ko call karna thik hoga? shayad woh CID bureau me hain, ACP sir ke samne, aur... agar ... woh Daya ko.....Tarika pressed her head with two palms and again flung herself onto the bed and thought very deeply---mujhe is waqt Daya se dur rehna hi behtar hain,maloom hain ke taqleef hoga, lekin kaise dur rakhu main use apno se? jab bhi woh mere samne ata hain aise hi to.. main .. aur woh bhi to .... She was awakened by the doorbell & as she opened the door, she was bamboozled totally to see............ Daya. His face was so lugubrious, so pale,so doleful,three days' stubble on his cheeks.......kaise ho Tarika? he asked solicitously.
--thik hu. she answered curtly.
Daya was minutely watching Tarika & after a few moments he again asked--ander ane ke liye nehi kahogi?
--nehi,main busy hu,abhi bahar jaungi. Tarika tried to be extreme snub daming up her spewed pain.
--Tarika,main janta hu ke main tumhari gunegarh hu,agar main tumhe waha se le kar Mumbai chale nehi ate to..
Tarika: Daya please, jo huya hai, ho gaya hai, pachhtane se kuchh bhi nehi hoga, now please leave me alone.
Daya was confounded totally to hear Tarika's harsh words.
Now he cooed gently--mujhse naraz ho?
--nehi.again Tarika let out a curt answer.
--to pher..
--to pher kya? bata to rahi hu tumhe ke main busy hu, phir bhi mera peechha kyu nehi chhorte ho tum? Now she busrt out in feigned hatred.
Daya was hurt but that didn't reflect within his face and said-- thik hain, main chala jaunga, lekin tumse kuchh kehna tha, woh batake main ...
Tarika shouted-- kaha na tumhe ke mere pas waqt nehi hai, phir bhi kyu disturb kar rahe ho? jao yaha se.
Now Daya came closer & again said-- mujhe maloom hain ke is waqt tum bohot pareshan ho,dekho,zarur aisa koyi rasta hain jisse sachchai ka pata chalega,hum soch sakte hain Tarika ke ..
Tarika: look Mr. tumne mujhpe bohot ehsaan kiya, now please main hath jorti hu, aur kuchh karne ki koshish bhi maat karna.She continued to snipe at Daya.
Daya was stupefied, how much he was watching her, it seemed that he had come to a stranger.With profound affliction he asked-- kya tumhari pareshani mera hain nehi?
Tarika: nehi,tumhara aur mera rahe alag hain.
Daya: ye ... kya.. keh rahi ..ho Tarika?
Tarika's pent up pain was trying to spew out, how much she was trying to give pain to Daya, double was coming back to her,to deliver every word she was thinking that Daya would be insulted or angry and left her alone, but Daya was becoming more caring, more protective,he wasn't bothering about the venomous words she......
nehi Tarika.. tujhe Daya se dur rehna hi hoga.Tarika was determined and then she very slwoly told-- tum thik kehte the Daya,mere parents wake hi ..........she choked back her tears....bohot dukhi ho jayega......jab ...unhe ye pata chalega..... ki.... tum.....Tarika turned opposite Daya and continued--- tum....... ....she bit her lips in indescribable pain...... tum ek anath ho.......
Daya left speechless in utter shock.Tarika raised her palm & watched her ring finger & the red thread.
A thuderbolt came in the room & made everyone silent for a few minutes.After sometimes Daya spunned to face Tarika & said--ye.. sach nehi hai.His eyes sparkled with excitement.
Tarika: kya kahu jisse tum yaakin karoge ke ye sach hain? she then slackened and undid the red thread from her ring-finger and raised her hand towards Daya to give it to him.
Daya was utterly perplexed and couldn't react against what was happening around him.He stood riveted there gazing at Tarika.
Tarika kept the red thread into the shirt pocket of Daya and said---main.... tumhare wajase...... mere parents ko............. dukhi.. nehi kar sakti hun Daya.... tum chale jao yaha se, aur kabhi mat ana.soon she ran into her room and shut the door on Daya.
Daya was vacantly stared at the door for sometime and then turned back very slowly to go away.It seemed to him that someone had throttled him for which he couldn't sniff normally.sometime he thought crying could give him a relief but his heart was so much heavy, how could he cry? spilled pain was smouldering inside him. Tarika's words & voice still thundered in his ears--tum anath ho..... anath..anath... anath ho Daya tum anath......he hobbled along the road cogitating all these.Tarika's words left him feeling extremely groggy & distraught, with much difficulty he reached near a tube well and then splashed his face with cold water & then again started to saunter down the road.A very soppy tune was wafted along by the breeze:

(very slowly)
hmmmmmmmmmm hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Pyar hum ko bhi hain, pyar tum ko bhi hain
to ye kya silsiley ho gaye
bewafa hum nehi, bewafa tum nehi
to kyu itne gile ho gaye
chalte chalte kaise ye phasle ho gaye
hmmmmm ooooo kya pata kaha hum chale
Daya was shambling with racked pain within his heart thinking ---kya ye hamari dastan hain?
Duniya jo puchhe to kya hum kahe
koyi ye humko samjha de
Thes lage do pal me tut gaye
sheeshe ke the kya sab waade
Jata hain koyi kyu sapno ko thukrake
payega ye dil kya kisko batake
chalte chalte rakh hum bin jale ho gaye
hmmmm mmmmm ooooooooooooooo
Bujh gaye diye pyar ke .

Tarika slumped down onto the bed & burst into a loud, heart rending wail.
--Daya, mujhe maaf kar dena, please , main tumhara koyi luksaan nehi..... she was sniffling miserably.
Doob Gaya Hai Kaise Dard Mein Dil
Aansoon Bhari Hai Ab Aankhen
Tanhaiyon Ki Jo Ruth Aa Gayi
Ujdi Hui Hai Sab Raahein
Socha Tha Paayenge Dono Ek Manzil Ko
Raahein Jo Badli To Tumhi Batado
Chalte Chalte Gum Kahan Kaple Ho Gaye
hmmmmm ..mmmmm.oooooooooooooooo
Kho Gaye Kahan Raste.

[To be continued]