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Posted: 17 years ago
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wow... That was great 👏
i really enjoy reading these scenes 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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pleaseee continue soon suchi
pretty pretty please with a cheery on the top..
cant wait to c wat'll happen next
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Daisy!!

pleaseee continue soon suchi
pretty pretty please with a cheery on the top..
cant wait to c wat'll happen next

sorry Daisy, but last week I had tremendous working pressure so couldn't write a line, but I am trying to write the next & will post very soon, o.k

take care buddy and take a looooooooots of 🤗

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Posted: 17 years ago
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I'm very sorry friends for being so late to post the next scene. Here it is:
Part IV


--Devi
--ha
--ye kaisa rang hai tumhare akho me aaj?
--aapka rang sir.
--sir?? sir ko maro goli.
--ji sir???
--Abhijeet hu main, tumhari Abhi.
--Abhi?
--bolo Devi, aapne aap to rang se saj liya,mujhe kaisi rangse sajaoge?
--tumhe to.... ye.... rang... se.... sajaungi. Devyana flung several rose petals onto Abhijeet & burst into peal of laughter.
--aaaaaaaaaaaaaaa... aaaaaaaaaaaaa. d.......eeee..........v....i
--Abhijeet...... Abhijeet..... Abhijeet kya huya tumhe?? hey utho aur chhoro mujhe.....
Abhijeet waked up & when he became enough concious about the situation, he realised that it was a dream.
--kya huya tum thik to hona? Daya asked with much anxiety.
---ha yaar.Abhijeet answered being a little shy.
---hmmm sapne me koyi thi?? Daya tried to razz with Abhijeet.
--arrey tum bhi yaar, khud to tyar ho gaye, aur mujhe nehi bulaya, abhijeet tried to convert the topic into another.
--bulaya nehi?? kabse bula rahahu tumhe,niche chalna hai, dekhona dr. salunkhe kitna chilla raha hai, chalo jaldi karo.
Abhijeet saw that Daya wore a maroon silk kurta and white cotton pyjama.He was looking indeed very good.
--tum jao, main abhi tyar hokar ata hu. Abhijeet told Daya with a smile.
Daya came in the lawn and felt by his heart the true colours of the atmosphere. The sky was playing with the crimson & white cloudlets, cold zephyr was playing with pure all pervading redolence,blooming flowers were playing with swaying leaves & Daya was ravished by the beauty of the colours flying in the nature.
--arrey kaha ho tum log? Salunkhe couldn't control himself more
--salunkhe, itna besabr hone ki koyi zarurat nehi, lo main to aa gaya,happy holi
--happy holi ACp shab, both greeted each other with colours.
--sir, lijiye mukh mitha kijiye, Devyana came with a dishful of laddu,
--arrey Daya, h--a-p-p-y h-o----li , ACp was overwhelmed and suffued him with various colors, Daya too gave colours to all of them.
Vivek was running behind Fredricks and fredricks was screaming like mad--- ye vivek, mujhe aur rang mat de yaar, already tu mujhe bhut bana diya,
vivek came to Daya and said with a very humble voice-- sir, happy holi
Daya smiled and draw a tilak on vivek's forehead and kept his hand over vivek's head and told-- happy holi to u too.
Vivek: Sir, Abhijeet sir, Muskan, Dr. Tarika kaha hai? sab chhupke biatha hai kya??
Daya: (with a smile) Abhijeet to upar se abhi niche nehi aye, lekin baki log... thik hai, main dekhta hu.
Daya started to amble towards the lake, and after coming a little while, he saw Muskan.She was standing there helding a tree & she looked like discarded & forlorn.
Daya: Muskan,
muskan was awakened by the voice of Daya ---ha sir,
Daya: kya huya? tum... aise... yaha pe... kya baat hai, are you all right?
Muskan didn't answer but cringed with embarrassment.
Daya: Muskan,aaj holi hai, aur tum aise udas ho kar akeli .... chalo, holi khelna hai... aur..
Muskan: (interrupting Daya) sir, jiske zindegi se sari rang ur jate hai, woh kya holi khelegi?
Daya couldn't say anything and riveted by the sudden question of Muskan.
--kya holi lauta sakte hai meri khushi? boliye sir? Muskan was a bit desperate and a bit crestfallen.
Daya couldn't understand what to tell her, how to console her, or even he was confused about what he would try to quell her agony.
after sometimes he asked her-- muskan, kya baat hai, ... agar chaho to tum mujhe keh sakti ho.
Muskan shouted scathingly--- aapko? aapko kyu kahu?? kaun hai aap meri? aur kisika dard samjhne ki kya kabliyat hai apme? she soon scarpered from there.
Daya was completely flabbergasted and yet to understand why Muskan behaved so rudely & badly with him.But what is this?Someone was sprinkling him with abir.within a few moments he found himself smeared with all colours and .... Abhijeet yaar thik hai dekh lunga main tumhe, as he scoured his face with his palm he saw --- Tarika with a smile of winner.Daya was gazing with rapture to see her wearing an orange sari.Tarika's eyes were full of fervour & deep and it seemed to Daya that they were calling him up ...
Daya started to saunter towards Tarika and as he was about to touch her with colours Tarika fended him off and scampered away and was laughing like a little scamp, Daya again started to wander towards Tarika and Tarika... again... scuttling away from Daya . The more Tarika was escaping from him, the more he was craving to...,Daya was fidgeting inside to teach a lesson to..., he was strangely mortified by Tarika's skittish behaviour and...
--Daya, kaha chhupke baithe ho yaar? happy holi, Abhijeet came with colours to greet him, & Tarika?? ..... was hiding behind a scrubb.
--happy holi boss,tum kaha the?
--main to... Abhijeet stopped as he heard the roistering converstaion among vivek, Fredricks & Devyana during their playing.
--main abhi ata hu Daya, Abhijeet headed towards them.
Daya smiled and slyly looked at the scrubb but when he reached there,Tarika already fled away. Daya was searching for her everywhere and thus he came into the dense forest now, where had she disappeared? would she dare to come in such a dense forest?? Daya was thinking with flummoxed mind & when he was just about to return he saw a shaft of orange ray behind a tree.He very gingerly went there as no one couldn't be able to hear any noise.Tarika stood riveted to the place.Daya came very closer & nearer to Tarika & respired heavily being very tired. Tarika felt the warm breath of Daya behind her but she didn't turned back.Daya very slowly undid her bun & then sniffed through her straggling hair.Tarika shuddered to feel the touch & warm breath of Daya.Daya continued to sniff & then pecked her on the earlobe. Tarika lay soft & yielding in the arms of Daya. Daya turned Tarika towards himeself & smudged colour over her face with his fingers very slowly & gently. Tarika sighed with pleasure. Daya smacked over tarika's lips and Tarika was writhing with unbridble pleasure.She was completely drowning & her fervent desires were billowing like a wayward ocean, huge surging waves of that ocean were crushing onto the shore of her heart as both were getting closer & closer.flowers were drizzling over them and the nature was singing for them

ye pyar kya hai, ye ek dhanak hai
sato rango ki isme jhalak hai
pehla ranga hai suno kaisa
samne aye koyi aisa
Dil kahe khwabo me isko hi to dekha tha
Dusra rang pyar ka, pehle se gehra zara
Barti jitni kashish hai hoti utni khalish hai
kuchh din rehta hai yehi silsila
age armano ka ranga hai teesra
Chautha rang ikrar ka, panchva intezaar ka
aur woh rang jo chhata hai,sapno ki woh ghata hai
har pal rehta hai dil khoya huya
satva ranga kar deta hai deewana, deewana.
ye pyar kya hai......

......... Tarika opened her eyes and cupped Daya's chin within her hand and tried to say something, but... she wasn't being able to.
Daya took very gently her ring-finger and knotted a red thread around it. Tarika was astounded and kept her ravishing eyes over Daya's.
Daya: ye dhaga mere ma ne mujhe bandh diya tha..... mere hath me. woh dhaga main rakh diya tha usi ke liye.... jisko..... jise main apna bandhan me bandhna chahta tha.......
tarika was totally engrossed and was silent.
Daya: tumhe dene ke liye is waqt mere pas to kuchh bhi nehi tha ..... to maine socha..... Daya was trying to overcome his reticence with all his determination.
..... socha ki ye dhaga...
Tarika couldn't believe her eyes & ears and again & again she was watching her ring finger,she was only & only watching Daya with rapt attention. after some times she whispered--- tum... is tarika se is holi ko yaadgar bana doge..... maine kabhi nehi.... kabhi nehi sochi thi.
Daya gave a very rougish look to Tarika and then smudge a little red abir in the parting of her hair.
Tarika was startled and kept her hand over her head and asked--- ye kya kiya Daya?
Daya: ye sindur nehi hai, lekin .....
Tarika: lekin kya?
Daya lowered his eyes & with a cloying smile said very slowly-- tumhe... aise... dekhne ka ... bari ichchha ho raha tha.
Tarika was enamoured, & completely smitten by Daya at that moment.It seemed to her that she knew him since so long, still she had so much to suss out about him.She lost in trance untill a moneky shrieked out to see them & grimaced at them. Tarika was petrified and clenched one arm of Daya, Daya too clasped her with his arms to protect her, they clung to each other in this way untill & unless that moneky went from there.
Tarika:Daya....
Daya: hmm bolo,
Tarika: Kal Mumbai lautne ka man nehi kar raha hai, aise lag raha hai, ki hamesha ke liye yaha pe aise tumhare baho me reh jau,
Daya: achchha?? lekin kya karu, mere bahe itna khush naseeb to hain nehi, zada tar criminals ko pakarte pakarte ye bahe to thak jate hai,ye tumhe thanks dena chahte hai
tarika: chalo, mazak mat karo
Daya was enjoying chaffing with Tarika & burst into a loud chortle.
But.... his chortle was faded away by a loud gunshot at a near distance.both were startled and speechless for a momemnt.
Daya: Tarika, shayad waha se ye awaz aye hai, chalo dekhte hai.
Tarika was hesitant and she clasped one hand of Daya tightly and said--- lekin Daya.... agar koyi.... Tumhare pas gun hai?
Daya was restless-- nehi, lekin mujhe waha pe jana hoga, please choro mujhe.He was running gustily towards the place from where they heard the gunshot.Tarika too was running behind daya. Daya stopped reaching near a pond and he was very intently & minutely searching for something & my God .... what did he see? He could only feebly bumble--mus...
Tarika stared at Daya with frightened & scared eyes.

[To be continued>


Edited by suchi_dev2006 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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^^^OMG...this is brilliant part 👏
oh please its not Muskaan na 😭 😭 😭 I cant belive she killed herself 😭

waise Suchi...u r proffesional writer 👏 👏 👏 (u r really a proffesional writer? 😉 sach batao) 😆 😉
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Day_Dreamer

^^^OMG...this is brilliant part 👏
oh please its not Muskaan na 😭 😭 😭 I cant belive she killed herself 😭

waise Suchi...u r proffesional writer 👏 👏 👏 (u r really a proffesional writer? 😉 sach batao) 😆 😉

Nehi ika, main koyi professional writer hu nahin, ye to CID ke liye mera pyar hain jo mujhe likhne ke liye majboor kar dete hai😳 100% SACH bata rahi hu main.

aur jaha tak story ka sawal hain, hmm it will be revealed in the next episode, o.k? waise tum logo ko achchha lagta hai, yehi likhne ka inspiration hain.

Take care buddies and looooooooooots of 🤗😃

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: suchi_dev2006

Nehi ika, main koyi professional writer hu nahin, ye to CID ke liye mera pyar hain jo mujhe likhne ke liye majboor kar dete hai😳 100% SACH bata rahi hu main.

aur jaha tak story ka sawal hain, hmm it will be revealed in the next episode, o.k? waise tum logo ko achchha lagta hai, yehi likhne ka inspiration hain.

Take care buddies and looooooooooots of 🤗😃

But ur work looks purely professional👏 you should start wrting professionaly...seriuosly😃 u'll do great👏 haan cID ke liye tumhara pyaar dikhta hai😳😃

haan hume bohut acha lagta hai, so keep writing😃 waiting for next part😳

Take care🤗

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hello freinds,here is the next part:
PART V

--Muskan.... Muskan... Daya was calling her being much worried. He took Muskan's hand and checked her pulse and then sighed with relief-- zinda hai. Tarika couldn't react in utter shock. Daya rushed to the pond and fetched some water to sprinkle it over Muskan's face.Blood was oozing out form the wound nearer to her chest.
-- My God, ise abhi hospital me le jana parega. Daya called Abhijeet-- abhijeet
--ha suno, yaha jungle me teesre talav ke pas Muskan ko kisine goli mar diya hai, tum sabko leke yaha pe chale ayo, aur main muskan ko hospital me leke jate hai, khafi khun beh gaya hai, jaldi hospital me pauhchna hai, barna...
Abhijeet: o.k Daya main abhi ACP sir ko inform karta hun.aise... ghao ... gehra hai? bach... jayega na? Abhijeet was a bit tensed.
Daya: (after a pause) umeed to hai, o.k bye.
Daya took Muskan in his lap and started to run within the dense forest to reach the main road, Tarika was also in hurry with Daya.After reaching at the bunglow Daya took a car.
Tarika: Daya, main bhi tumhare sath jaungi, pls,
Daya: o.k, chalo utho.
They were rushing towards the City Hospital, Mumbai.



ACP Pradyuman & Dr. Salunkhe was recalling the holi days of their young age
ACP: yaar, salunkhe, tumhe yaad hai, larkiyan tumko kaisi darti thi, tum sabko rang dene ke liye kitne bechain rehte the aur.....
Salunkhe: a ha ha ACP shab aap to aise keh rehe hai jaise aap bare sadhu the? hey hey pata hai mujhe, ek number ka chhupa rustam the aap, chhup chhup ke izhar karna aur..
ACP: yaar salunkhe, tu to mera nak katvayega, chup kar yaar
Salunkhe: kyu? koyi sun lega? lene do, akhir in bachcho ko jan na chaiye ke tum kya cheez ho.
Abhijeet came rushing at them and told with gasping voice--- sir, satyanash ho gaya hai, jungle me teesre talav ke pass kisine muskan ko goli mar diya, Daya abhi phone karke bataya mujhe, woh muskan ko leke Mumbai ki taraf ravana ho gaya.
ACP: What???? Muskan... ko..... kisine goli mar diya?
Salunkhe: lekin... yaha pe aisa kaun ho sakte hai jo....
ACP: lekin Daya mujhe kuchh nehi bata kar chale kyu gaye?
Abhijeet: sir, aur koyi chara nehi tha, ghao kafi gehra hai , aur Daya ne kaha khun bhi kafi beh raha tha, to jaldi Mumbai pauhchna bohot zaruri hai,
ACP:ha... ye bhi sach hai, lekin pata kaise chalega ki kisne chalaya ye goli? Himmat to dekho uska, CID team ki maujudgi me ek CID officer ko goli marta hai!!!
Salunkhe: mujhe to kuchh samajh me nehi araha hai ACP shab, woh utni ghane jungle me teesre talav ki pass gayi hi kyu?
ACP:( with frowning eyes) Abhijeet, chalo waha pe jakar dekhte hai, baki logo ko bhi bula lo, hume hoshiyar rehna chaiye.come on fast. ACP was rushing towards the jungle.
Abhijeet called everyone and then along with salunkhe & ACp he also rushed there.
As they reached nearer the pond ACP shouted-- achchhi tarah se check karo, zarur kuchh na kuchh milna chaiye, come on hurry up, ye ek serious matter hai, ek CID officer pe goli chalana koyi mamuli baat hai nehi.
Everyone was searching very minutely and Abhijeet called--- sir.
ACP: ha abhijeet kuchh mila?
Abhijeet: ha sir, ye dekhiye yaha pe khun hai, shayad Muskan yaha pe hi pari huyi thi
ACP came and took one drop of blood in his finger and said--my God, shell bhi yaha pe hai!!!
Salunkhe: lekin ACP shab agar shell yaha pe para hai to matlab goli chalane wala yaha pe khare ho kar goli chalaya.
ACP:ha
Salunkhe: to pher muskan yaha pe kaise gir gayi? use to thora sa dur girna chaiye tha.
ACP: (with fire in his eyes) yaar salunkhe, ye mazak ka time nehin hain, Muskan ko kisine goli mari hai, aur tum ...
Salunkhe: main bhi mazak nehin kar raha hu ACP shab, jo sach hai, wohi bata raha hu.
ACP: sach??? itne kam waqt me tumhe sach maloom par gaya?
Sakunkhe : dekhiye ACP shab ab to aap kuchh..
Devyana: s--i--r
ACP: ha devyana, kya mila?
Devyana: sir, yaha pe ek scarf pari hai, ye dekhiye,
ACP: scarf?? ye scarf kaha se ? kayi ye goli chalane wala ka to hai nehi? ya pher goli chalanewali ki? dhuno dhuno, chappa chappa chhan maro.
Vivek went towards a dense shrub and and yelled within just a minute--- s--i--r
ACP: ha vivek
Vivek: sir yaha pe ek gun mila, shayad golichalanewala apne gun chhorke hi bhag gaye. He gave the gun to ACP.
ACP: Fantastic, Vivek,ab ye gun hume bataiga ke kisne chalaya tha goli.ACP emitted the ray of fire through his rancoured eyes thinking about the culprit.Salunkhe was searching and suddenly he came to ACP-- ACP shab, ye gun ekbar dijiye.
ACP: kyu, ab isse tum kya naye funda nikaloge salunkhe? ab hume tumhara zarurat nehi, hum khud hi pata kar sakte hai ki ye gun kiska hai.
Salunkhe: (being a little restless) ab to aap mazak kar rahe hai ACP shab, maine gun ko dekhna chaha to zarur koyi waja hoga, Gun dijiye
ACP gave the gun to Salunkhe with reluctance and to see the gun Salunkhe was startled.
Salunkhe: My God, ...... lekin ye kaise ho sakte hai.....
ACP: kya huya, maine bataya na ke tum koyi naye problem khare kar doge,lo gun do, Abhijeet, jaldi Mumbai me phone karke is gun ka number dekh ke pata karo ye gun kiska hai, jaldi karo.
Salunkhe: Abhijeet, ek minute
Abhijeet: kya salunkhe shab,Muskan ko kisine goli mara hai, woh hum pe bhi attack kar sakta hai, hume jaldi ye jan na zaruri hai ki ye gun kiska hai.aur aap bhi...
Salunkhe: main bata ta hu ye gun kiska hai....
ACP: what??? tum bataoge!!!!, ye to kisi lash ka bal dekh ke uska jijaji ka naam batane jaise ho gaya. ACp let out an ear piercing shriek.
Salunkhe: Ye gun........ .. ye gun... Dr.Tarika ka hain.
Everybody winced in utter shock & ... what!!!!!!
Salunkhe also was in shock and nodded his head to confirm that the gun was of Tarika's.
ACP: ye kya bak rahe ho tum,tum sure ho?
Salunkhe: ha ACP shab, ye number mujhe kayi bar likhna para form me. koyi bhi official form me mujhe mera khud ka aur dr. tarika , dono ke gun ke number likhna parta hai, mujhe ye number... hamesha yaad rehte hain
Abhijeet: Sir, Dr. Tarika hain kaha? unka gun yaha pe pari huyi hai, aur woh...
ACP: D o c t o r T a r i k a. He fixed his eyes and Mmade his face stern like a stone.
Everyone was in confused state and couldn't understand what to tell, how to think about this incident.
ACP: fredricks, tum bunglow me wapas jao, aur dekho Dr. tarika hain ya nehin, agar hain to use yaha par leke aao, jao jaldi jao.
Fredricks:yes sir,..... par sir agar woh waha par nehi huya to?
ACP:(again with stern face & basilisk stare) to......to pher mamla kuchh zada hi serious hai.
Fredricks started to run towards the bunglow.
Abhijeet: lekin sir,woh aisa kyu karegi? sir, humko koyi galatfaimi to..
ACP interrupted --Abhijeet and then slyly glanced upon Devyana. Abhijeet was confused and mumbled--sir...
ACP:(whipering) jao, jake puchh tachh karo use..
Abhijeet: magar sir...
ACP:(sternly) Abhijeet... dekho woh log ek sath the, agar Muskan aur Tarika ke beech me kuchh huya hai, to use zarur maloom hoga...
Abhijeet: lekin sir..... Devyana..
ACP was speaking in his own terms and reiterated his words again giving emphasis on each word--- aur mujhe ye lag raha hain ke dono ke beech me zarur kuchh huya hai.
Salunkhe: Kya? ACP shab, aap Tarika ko shak kar rahe hain?
ACP was silent & didn't answer Salunkhe.
Salunkhe: aap pagal ho gaye hai ACP shab,apna hi team pe aap shak ....shak kar rahe hain?
ACP: ha, hum saboot pe vishwas karte hain salunkhe, sirf saboot pe, bhabna o se behek ke hum kam nahin kar sakte hain, samjhe ?

Abhijeet came to Devyana but he was hesitant to ask her anything.He did never think that in the atmosphere like that,on the day like Holi, he had to ask this kind of question to Devyana.he was indeed very much confused.
Devyana: kya baat hain sir?
Abhijeet: woh..... bat ye hain ki ..... tum to Tarika aur Muskan ke sath the.
Devyana didn't answer and was waiting to hear more from Abhijeet
Abhijeet: to... kya tumne kabhi woh dono ko jhagarte huye dekha?
Devyana contorted her face with hatred and said--- sir, aap Dr. tarika pe shak kar rahe hain?
Abhijeet:devyana,woh hamara detective ka kam hi to aisa,aap ne aap par bhi shak karna parta hai,
Devyana was shaking her head with despair and said-- ajeeb hai na sir, jin logo ke sath hum waqt bitate hain, un logo pe vishwas, bharosa kuchh nehi karte hain hum.kitna sharm ka baat hain,
Abhijeet was being restless and also he was in real dilemma which was irritating him. For the sake of duty he had to do such things which for the first time wasn't permitting his heart.
Devyana: sir, Dr.Tarika ke bare me koyi aisa soch bhi kaise ...
Abhijeet: Devyana....... Abhijeet shouted.Kuchh bhi bole ja rahi ho tum, dekho agar apne jajbat ka itna hi kadar hai tumhe to CID se bahar ja kar dikhao ye sab, yaha pe sirf saboot par kam karna parte hai.bhavnao ka koyi jagah nehi hai idhar, ye CID ka crime scene hai, koyi emotional film scene nehi hai. He behaved very gruffly with devyana & went from there for the time being.
Devyana was stupefied and tears came within her eyes.She couldn't believe that the man who was chiding her just a minute ago was Abhijeet sir who once..... She gulped back her tears and tried to divert her mind .
(Mumbai)
Here in City Hospital Muskan was taken to OT and Daya & Tarika was waiting just outside the OT with grim faces. As a doctor was rushing towards the OT, Daya asked -- Doctor, woh thik ho jayegi na?
Doctor: dekhiye koshish to karenge, actually khun kafi beh gaya hai, otherwise .... hope for the best.
Tarika: waise dekh ke to lag raha hai ke collar bone ko affect kiya hai.
Daya: tarika, tumhe kya lag raha hai, Muskan thik ho jayegi na?
tarika: dekho daya, hum doctors zarur hai, lekin kabhi kabhi hume bhi uparwalo par sab kuchh chhorna parta hain,mujhe lag raha hai, ke koyi bohot kareeb se Muskan par goli chalaya hain, aur... us halat me normally to goli is par se andar jake us par se nikal jate hai, lekin aisa nehi huya hai,i think she should take it easy,
They were waiting for the doctors to come after the operation. Suddenly tarika was about to fall and she slumped down onto a bench pressing her head with one palm
Daya: kya huya Tarika? tum thik to hona?
tarika: ha Daya main thik hu
Daya: nehi mujhe to lag nehi raha hain, tum ek kam karo, ghar jakar thora aram kar lo, main hu na yaha pe, tum jao.
Tarika:(being a bit irritated) nehi Daya, Muskan ka ye hal me main kaise ja sakti hu? mujhe kuchh nehi huya hain.bas thora sa chakkar araha hai,
Daya: Tarika yaha pe aise hi itna tension, aur tum mujhe dugna tension mat do please, jao thore der ke liye hi sahi, ghar chali jao tum..
Tarika: lekin Daya, hum lonavla me sab kuchh chhorke aye hai, kisiko thik tarika se bataya bhi nehi, jaldi chale ana para, aur
Daya: Tarika ... tumhe ye sab leke tension nehi lena parega,chalo main tumhe taxi se chhor deta hun. Daya became a little dominant here.Tarika headed towards her home and Daya came back in the hospital.

[lonavla]
ACP: kya huya Abhijeet kuchh pata chala? devyana ne kuchh batayi?
Abhijeet:(after a pause) sir lagta to nehi hai, aisa kuchh huya.
ACP: lagta nehi hai ka kya matlab? tumne puchha nehi devyana ko?
salunkhe: ACP shab,aap kuchh dusre tarika se sochiye,aise bhi to ho sakte hain ki koyi CID team ko darane ki koshish kar rahe hai, isliye Muskan pe goli chalaye.
ACP:(with a sardonic smile) hm, Fredricks ka phone ate hi maloom par jayega ki kisne kya kiya hai, samjhe?
Abhijeet: sir, main Daya ko phone karke Muskan ka haal puchhta hu.
Abhijeet called Daya.
Abhi: ha Daya, Muskan kaisi hai?
Daya: OT me leke gaye hai,abhi tak to operation chal raha hai, jaise hi woh log niklenge main tumhe phone karunga, thik hai?
Abhi: o.k, yaha pe bhi gazab ho gaya,
Daya: kya huya Abhijeet?
Abhijeet remained silent for few moments and then told--woh Mumbai ake bataunga, thik hai, tum call back karna. He cut down the line with haste.

Fredricks called ACP.
ACP: ha fredricks,
Fredricks: sir, yaha bunglow par koyi bhi nehi hai
ACP: kya??? tarika nehi hai?
Fredricks: nehi sir, maine sab jagah achchhi tarah se dhuna, kayi bhi nehi hai woh.
ACP: thik hai, tum waha par ruko, hum ate hai. He cut the line down
woh..... to tarika gayab ho gayi hai, aur ye sab Tarika....
Salunkhe: kya anab shanab bak rahe hai aap...
ACP(with a loud scream) woh bangle par hain nehi, aur uski gun yaha par hain, jaha par Muskan wounded huyi thi.
Vivek: lekin.... sir... aise bhi to ho sakta hai ki.....
ACP: koyi lekin vekin nehi hain vivek, sidhe Mumbai chalte hain, waha par hi dudh ka dudh aur pani ka pani ho jayega. he headed towards the bunglow.
They all prepared within ten minutes to get started for Mumbai.
[Mumbai]
After reaching at Mumbai, ACP ordered Salunkhe: Salunkhe, tum forensic lab me jao, aur gun ki upar jo fingerprint hai use check karo, vivek tum bhi salunkhe ki sath jao.
Salunkhe looked at ACP for some moments and then told-- aise vivek mere sath chal sakte hain, lekin ACP shab, main... kam me koyi garbar nehi karunga.
He went to forensic with heavy heart.
ACP & Abhijeet reached at the City Hospital and as they met Daya , he told-- sir, Muskan ka operation ho gaya hai, woh ab thik hai, lekin abhi tak hosh nehi aye hain.
A nurse came into them and informed-- sir, Officer ka hosh agaya hai.
They rushed towards Muskan's cabin.Muskan lay on bed & was in delirious state.
ACP:(with a very mild voice) Muskan, kaisi ho?
Muskan:(very slowly) thik hu sir,
Abhijeet:(with a smile) tumne to hume dara hi diya,
Muskan smiled very lightly & didn't say anything.
ACP:Muskan, tumne dekhi thi ke kisne tum par goli chalaye?
Muskan made her face & eyes stern & answered feebly yet boldly--ha sir.
ACP, Abhijeet & Daya were all keeping their eyes on each other and then asked--- kisne Muskan.
Muskan was silent.
ACP: Muskan, daro mat, bolo kisne tumhari ye haal kiya?
Muskan: Dr.tarika ne sir.
---what!!!!! Daya was staggered completely.
Muskan: ha sir, Dr. Tarika ne mujhpe goli chalayi thi.
Muskan's words came as a thunderbolt to the reputaion, recognition and welfare of the whole CID team.
[To be continued]
Edited by suchi_dev2006 - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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omg..Muskaan blamed Tarika? 😲
Brilliant update Suchi 👏 👏 👏 ...please continue soon 😃
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PART VI


-ye... ye.. tum kya keh rahi ho Muskan? Daya asked her being totally flabbergasted.
Muskan: ha sir, woh mujhpe goli chalayi thi
Daya: Muskan, zara soch samjhke bolo, ye kaise ...
ACP: (interrupting Daya) lekin kyu? tum dono ke bich me koyi jhagra huya tha?
Muskan:(very slowly) sir, main khud bhi pareshan hu ke woh....
Daya: Muskan tumhe shayad golimarnewala ko dekhne me koyi galati huya hai, Tarika ye kar nehi sakte hai
ACP: (with a shrill shriek) kyu nehi kar sakti hai? uske khilaf kafi saboot hai, aur sare ke sare saboot yehi keh raha hai ke Tarika ne hi ...
Daya:lekin aisa ho nehi sakta hai sir, tarika mere sath thi, woh kaise chalaigi goli?
ACP: tumhare sath thi???? ? to woh gayi kaha? humne bunglow par use bohot dhuna..
Daya: sir Tarika mere sath yaha par chali ayi thi, uska tabiyat kuchh thik nehi tha isliye maine use apna ghar jane ke liye bola.
ACP: tabiyet thik nehi!!!! woh kaise rahega? kisiko goli marne ki bad pakar jane ki darr se har kisika tabiyat kharab hi lagta hain.
Daya: ( being very much shocked) sir ye aap kya keh rahe hain!! aap ko mere baat par vishwas nehi ho raha hain??
Muskan started to whimper & said with much difficulty-- ye aap ko kya ho gaya hain sir, aap kyu tarika ko bachane ki koshish kar rahe hain? aap to.. she was breathing shllowly and couldn't say much.
ACP looked at Daya with a sneer of disdain and then said-- Abhijeet, chalo forensic me chalte hain, dekhte hain Salunkhe ne kya naye gul khilaya.he went from there with rage.Daya kept his eyes upon Abhijeet & he turned back to went to forensic glancing at him reprovingly.Daya was shocked & became restive at a time to think about the whole incident.He again came to Muskan & asked very mildly-- Muskan,tum aisa kyu keh rehi ho?
Muskan was silent.
Daya: Muskan, itna bara jhut tum kyu bol rahi ho Muskan, batao mujhe.
Muskan didn't answer Daya.
A doctor came and said --please aap log inhe zada sawal mat puchhiye, abhi inhe rest ka zarurat hai. please leave her alone.
Daya came outside the cabin very slowly and thought-- ye kya ho raha hai? Muskan kyu juth bol rahi hai? aur sab log tarika pe hi kyu shak kar rahe hai? kyu koyi mera baat ka yakeen nahin kar rahe hain? aisa kya huya waha par jo..... shayad Forensic me jakar jawab milega.
Daya started with wavering heart towards Forensic.

[Forensic]
ACP: Abhijeet, tumne woh bullet salunkhe ko diya jo hum hospital se leke aye, jo Muskan ko laga tha?
Abhijeet: ha sir,
ACP:kya nikla salunkhe? woh bullet isi gun ka hai?
Salunkhe: bas check kar rahe hai ACP saab, pata chal jayega.
ACP: aur,us gun me jo fingerprint tha use check kiya tha?
salunkhe just nodded his head
ACP: kya pata chala usse?
Salunkhe: woh fingerprint Dr. Tarika ka hain.
ACP: bhag wan ... samajh me nehi araha hain ke Tarika ne kyu chalayi ye goli.
Salunkhe: ACP saab, ye mat bhuliye woh gun Dr. Tarika ka hi hain, to unke gun se unka hi to fingerprint milna chaiye.
ACP:itna asan nehi hain salunkhe,ek CID officer wounded ho kar abhi bhi hospital me pari huyi hain, samjhe aap? Then he muttered by himself -- aur sabse ..,sabse afsos ki baat ye hain ki aap.. aur ... ( very feebly with a sad voice) Daya bhi use bachana cha rahe hain
Daya entered into the Forensic and again told with a pleading voice--- sir, main jhuth nehi bol raha hu sir, tarika mere sath thi jab hum dono ne goli ka awaz suna, aur hum teesre talav ke pas jake dekha to Muskan pari huyi thi.
ACP was very slwoly romping towards Daya keeping his eyes over him and then he told--- itni salo me maine tumhe ye sikhaya????? bolo Daya?
Daya: sir main jhut...
ACP: kitna naaz tha mujhe tum pe,aur aaj sirf Tarika ki waja se tum mere naaz ko aise ... is tarika se .. mitti me mila rahe ho?
Daya was trying to say something but ACP's scrunching voice shrouded his attempt again & again.
ACP: Kyu???????? Tum ek sentimental fool ho ye to mujhe maloom tha, lekin tum jo ek itna bara liar ho ye mujhe... ACP began to rave in anger.
Daya was stupefied totally, shock, anger, sorrow, no word is sufficient to describe his feelings at that moment.He was deeply resentful of what was happening around him,he blushed in russet in ACP's strong scathing sardonic reprimand,but he was silent and cringed with embarrassment & racked pain.
ACP:Tum ye bhi bhul gaye ho ke tum ek CID officer ho,aur ye tumhara duty hain ke ek galat kam karne walo ko tum pakro,ha!!!! kya ho gaya hai tumhe.He went berserk & attacked Daya.
Everything was being blurred with tears in front of Daya.
ACP: ha aaaa. bas yehi baki tha, rolo jitna chaho,lekin maat bhulna yaha asu ka nadi behne nehi dunga main.
Daya: sir, itna saal apke sath kam kiya maine,phir bhi aap ko mujh par vishwas nehi ho raha hain
ACP shouted vehemently-- nehi ho raha hai, Daya, nehi ho raha hai,.sare ke sare saboot tumhare bat ke khilaf hain.
Daya was silent and cowered at the floor with wrinkled face.
ACP: Abhijeet, subha tumhare sath Daya ka mulaqat huya tha?
Abhijeet: yes sir.
ACP: us waqt Tarika sath thi Daya ka?
Abhijeet glanced at Daya & Daya was looking at him beseechingly. His eyes were full of helplessness & importune.
Abhijeet was in real dilemma.It was an eternal struggle between truth & lie,it was a struggle between brain & heart, it was a struggle between freindship & duty....
ACP: bolo abhijeet, kya tarika thi Daya ke sath??
Abhijeet lowered his eyes & and after a sad moan he said-- nehi sir, Tarika nehi thi.
--nehi thiiiiii. ACP told to google at Daya with his reddened eyes.
ACP: vivek,tum dekha tha tarika ko aaj?
vivek: woh sir.....
ACP: dekha thaaaa ya nehi?
vivek cringed and answered-- nehi sir.
ACP: kisine aaj Tarika ko nehi dekha, aur tum keh raha ho ke woh tumhara sath thi!!!!!,
Salunkhe:ACP saab, woh bullet ka checking ho gaya hai
ACP: ha to kya kaha us bullet ne?
Salunkhe: woh kaha..... ke ... main Tarika ke gun se chali hun.
ACP turned back towards Daya & snarled at him--kyuuu!!!batao,kaise thi woh tumhare sath!!!kya tumhare samne hi woh Muskan ko....
Salunkhe:ACP saab,ab ye bhi bhul gaye kiske sath baat kar rahe hain, woh Daya hai, Daya jise aap apne hatho se tyar kiya ...
ACP sniped with anger--haaaaa, lekin aaj wohi Daya Jhuth bol rahe hai, Tarika ke liye woh apna wajood, apna kam sab kuchh..sab kuchh bhul gaya hain. He fixed Daya with his basilisk stare.
Fredricks came with a letter and gave it to ACP-- sir, aap ka naam ye letter aye hain.
ACP: letter!!! kaisi letter? he torn the envelop with much curiosity and the started to read it & after reading it he kept ranting on--- m y G o d.
Abhijeet: kya huya sir?
ACP: DCP sir Dr. Tarika ko suspend kar diya hain, jab tak ye case ka faisla nehi hota hain tab tak wohh...
Daya scarpered from forensic,what had happened in forensic still was rankling him,he was gasping in unknown excitement & bitter feelings,how could he save Tarika from this? she was ensnared in such a way..... but how? and why? million of question was disrurbing him and he ..... almost bumped against..... Tarika!!!!!
Tarika: kya baat hain Daya? Salunkhe sir mujhe jaldi forensic me bulaya, Muskan thik to haina?
Daya couldn't turn his eyes away from Tarika, she was totally unaware the dangerous trap she had been caught with.
Tarika: kya huya Daya?
Daya clenched one palm of Tarika and said with moist eyes-- chahe kuchh bhi ho jaye, main tumhari sath hun. he then soon flinched away from there.
Tarika stared at Daya and did watch him as long she could & then turned back to go to forensic.
[To be continued]

Edited by suchi_dev2006 - 17 years ago

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