Beyond Investigation (Ep. Name : Behrupiya)...(New Story@page 48)

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23Diya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#271

Originally posted by: AS-Rifi
Wonderful story Diya.
Ur narration is very classical👏
The way u described Abhijeet was giving me the feeling of Aditya😆
A private person he's! See like Daya and others were curious to know Abhijeet's personal life...we all are curious to know how Aditya deals with his family..how's his wife, kids😆
Keep writing such classic stories 🤗
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Again...Rony 😈

@bold, Maine wahi sochke likha tha. 😆

@blue, I'm also waiting for the same.😛

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#272

Now have a Task to Read this Chotu Gem of IF/FF...⭐️⭐️

Hope to Read and Reviewed it in this Weekend...👍🏼👏

Gives Me Wishes...😉😳

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23Diya

@23Diya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#273

Originally posted by: gadhadada

Now have a Task to Read this Chotu Gem of IF/FF...⭐️⭐️
Hope to Read and Reviewed it in this Weekend...👍🏼👏
Gives Me Wishes...😉😳

WO bhi do-do...😉😆

Good luck...to me too.😛

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#274

Originally posted by: 23Diya

WO bhi do-do...😉😆

Good luck...to me too.😛

haan haan ...

InshaALLAH Parh lun ga...👍🏼

I m so Deligent Pakshi na...😉😉

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23Diya

@23Diya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#275

Originally posted by: gadhadada

haan haan ...
InshaALLAH Parh lun ga...👍🏼
I m so Deligent Pakshi na...😉😉

bilkul...the most diligent pakshi on earth.😃

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#276

Originally posted by: 23Diya

bilkul...the most diligent pakshi on earth.😃

ahan...😳😃

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#277

Walking Through The HailStones

Chota Pallot...🤗

Honestly, I have No Words in My Mind and Heart to Appreciate/Applause or Praise Your This Work...⭐️

You really with Your Simple Narration makes it Legend...⭐️

The Masterpiece contained really a Movie licks ass I saw All 4 Characters against My Eyes...⭐️

Either I feels their Soft Cloths, Look and Tones too through Your Fantastic Writing Skills...⭐️

Seriously Still I read so Many Stuff on that but its the Bestest One I Read till Now...⭐️

I feel the Intentional and Unintentional Every Emotions of a Son to Control over His Emotions although Few Moments Expelled it Badly...⭐️

The Mother-Son Relation is the thing which is the Beautiful Core of This Story...⭐️

The way You used ACP Sir Character is really makes His Character MORE than Larger than Life...⭐️

Every Simple Sentence tied the Reader in its Beautiful Whorl and makes a Knot inside Readers Heart and Soul...⭐️

The Small Sweet queries/Offers/Request/Suggestion/Calls/Care and lastly Love Presented in Each Character Routine Portrayed by You Brilliantly...⭐️

I m Surprised that why You wrote its Not Good or having OTT flair in Your Preface section...😲

This Story easily Stand You in those Writers Batch consists of Vis Dii, Demonstar, Rashida, Sherya, Shagnika, Neha and Others MileStones of IF...⭐️

I m Obliged to Read this Story which makes Me Mesmerized with Your Out Of Box masterpiece Work...⭐️

a Big Thank You so much Baccha for giving Us a Writers becoming whose Fan is a Big Opportunity... ⭐️🤗⭐️

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#278

GUILT...

Chota Pallot...😳😳

I think the Total Investigative Stuff U Classically Portrayed...⭐️⭐️⭐️

that Raka and Mangesh, Abhijeet Sir Doubt and then Meeting was Presented Lovely...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Wonderful Job by Teammates too either Supporting Daya Sir or Back Biting against Him...⭐️⭐️⭐️

the Senior-Junior Relations, Presented Smoothly and Sweetly...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Loved the Restriction of Junior in Few Lines...⭐️⭐️⭐️

Somehow I dunt find Daya Sir POV anywhere...

Few Sequence looking much Inspired from Your Previous Story...😉😉😉

the Dominance of Abhijeet Sir as Senior U really Showed Extremely Well Baccha...⭐️⭐️⭐️

The Finish was Cute and Naughty...😆👏👏

Thank You so much for Your Classy Effort...⭐️👏⭐️

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23Diya

@23Diya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#279

Thank you so much senior for taking out time and giving such a detailed review...🤗

It makes me so happy to know you liked it so much...

I m Surprised that why You wrote its Not Good or having OTT flair in Your Preface section...😲

I was not sure what I wrote at that time. It was written in a hurry and I didn't recheck. Normally I edit all the OTT parts that come by chance in my stories but this time I didn't get the time. Isiliye, just as a warning ki agar mil jaye to just overlook it. You know, there are so many senior and experienced writers...kahi daat hi na pad jaye.😆

This Story easily Stand You in those Writers Batch consists of Vis Dii, Demonstar, Rashida, Sherya, Shagnika, Neha and Others MileStones of IF...⭐️

I m Obliged to Read this Story which makes Me Mesmerized with Your Out Of Box masterpiece Work...⭐️

a Big Thank You so much Baccha for giving Us a Writers becoming whose Fan is a Big Opportunity..

Awww...My cheeks are getting red...😳😳

Somehow I dunt find Daya Sir POV anywhere...

If you see, the whole story was only narrated by me, but it was all shown from Daya sir's side only...like how he felt during that phase, how he came close to Abhijeet, his relation with Abhijeet before and after the kidnapping as he sees it, why he wanted to help Abhijeet after his comeback and so on. It's like, Diya's words to Daya's thoughts.😛

And as a mauke pe chauka offer, I just added why ACP is softer to him than Abhijeet, something that always bothers me.😆

Few Sequence looking much Inspired from Your Previous Story...😉😉😉

Yes it was. I don't change facts that I show in my previous stories like FW do.😉

Jokes apart, my task was to write the previous story from Daya's side. That's what I did.

Edited by 23Diya - 9 years ago

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gadhadada

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Posted: 9 years ago

#280

Originally posted by: 23Diya

Somehow I dunt find Daya Sir POV anywhere...

If you see, the whole story was only narrated by me, but it was all shown from Daya sir's side only...like how he felt during that phase, how he came close to Abhijeet, his relation with Abhijeet before and after the kidnapping as he sees it, why he wanted to help Abhijeet after his comeback and so on. It's like, Diya's words to Daya's thoughts.😛
And as a mauke pe chauka offer, I just added why ACP is softer to him than Abhijeet, something that always bothers me.😆

Its Ur Thoughts/Idea as being a Writer, as a Reader, I did not Find... already it was Daya Sir Biggest Fault even having All things as He has Gun but did not Fire Once atleast, He has Bike but no Go behind them...😒
Khair, I find it DIYA POV not DAYA POV...😉😉

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