CID Story: Nakul Returns 3 - Page 2

Originally posted by: visrom

Shreya. finished reading! And I must say this is one of your best.👏👏 THANK YOU! 😃

The whole story was so well written along with the time and date that reading and grasping the details was absolutely effortless. 😃

I could see everything happening in front of my eyes. The best part was the fight between Nakul and Abhijeet in the pantry car. Everything was playing on TV in front of my eyes. 👏👏👏

Just one thing...was Abhijeet unconscious for 4 hours? 😲 And for 4 hours Freddie and Nik didn't find him? This is a bit difficult to digest. Otherwise everything is perfect. 😊 No, no, just 2 hours. Did I miss showing them searching for him? Damn! I had thought of it, but I guess I forgot.

The only thing that's hurting is that you made the 'sister' lady another criminal. When I told you to write this, I wanted the lady to be a nice lady who wouldn't backstab Abhijeet in the end. That's what was hurting since Mouse Trap and that's why I wanted this track to be written differently. But you made it the same. Thoda bura lag raha hai. 😒 The story is perfect but I wish the lady were good. Oh I thought you wanted to see her as a criminal as well yaar. Sorry. Agli baar. 😊

Thanks for getting Nakul arrested and making him a Behrupiya. Chalo ACP did shoot his own real son. That was pricking at the back of my mind from the time you started the Nakul series. 😆 Nahi, nahi. He's real. Maine usse behrupiya nahi banaya. 😆

Originally posted by: visrom

About that Ria I had something else in mind. ..like the lady is a criminal but looking at Abhijeet's protective nature she regrets in the end and maybe confesses to him and surrenders or maybe helps him from a tough situation.

From his side a pang of regret while getting her arrested. .. but he is forced to, because she's a criminal after all. 😛

Originally posted by: debasree04

Read it 😛

Wonderful story 👏
Abhijeet's disguise & his fighting with Nakul described very well 👏 DUO convo, Daya sir & ACP sir's concern is very good...ACP sir-Salunkhe sir's nokjhok is good! Overall i have enjoyed a lot. ⭐️😃

But I don't like how you wrote same thing twice...i know the reason but its like we are reading same things with little modifications...you can write it one time.


Dnt understand it - "Yani ek hafte main Mumbai Rajdhani pe hamla hoga," ACP Pradyuman said.
Ek hafte kaise...😕 ACP sir's this dialogue is on 26th May & attack's date - Date of attack: Monday, June 15th...even attack actually happened on 1st June...is it typo error? 😕
Oops yeah. That's a typo. Actually pehle maine yeh sab kuch ek hafte baad kiya tha yani 9th June se shuru, phir sab kuch ek hafte pehle kiya toh yeh miss ho gaya.

"Daya tum aur Freddy inhe dono se milo. Purvi, Nikhil, aur Freddy tum log yeh rental agreements dekhna shuru karo. Dekho ke Nakul aur Sehar ke baare main kuch milta hai kya inse. Aur Abhijeet aur main yeh dekhte hain ke yeh dono kab aur kaise aaye yahan," ACP Pradyuman said.
How Freddy sir can do 2 things simultaneously? 😕 I think 1st one is correct becoz later we see Daya sir & Freddy sir are going together.

Typo again. 😆

There is 1 typo error...i m saying becoz u can edit it
On the deserted road, Saturday May 30th (past), 8:10PM
"Phone recods se kuch mila hai?" Abhijeet asked.
Done. 😃

One question - why CID could not able to catch Sehar? 😉 Do you want to write another part? 😉😛 Yep. Sehar trying to free Nakul and getting caught. 😉

Originally posted by: CT_Shreya

Originally posted by: 23Diya

Very nice story...

Loved the whole explanation...

Especially the fight scenes were very good to read...

The character of sehar is new for me as I hv not read most of the stories on IF...but as much this story tells, I get that she is a friend of Nakul in his bad deeds, right?? If not, can u plz tell me abt this character in short...

Just one doubt...

Every compartment of all the rajdhani trains are checked by 2 sniffer dogs every time the train halts at a station...why didn't they get the bomb then??