Story Contest 9 Rating: 'No Murder Story' (Rating Closed)

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honey71

@honey71

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Guys, I am really really Sorry as it takes some time for me to read the stories.. Once I read the stories I will share my views..

See you all soon ..

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Reshma

@Reshh16

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Looks like good stuff from all the writers 😛

Will definitely read it and rate if I get time

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Soni.

@Soni.

Sparkler

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

ll read and review as I read each story. So sorry writers you have to be patient for a while as my post will keep getting edited

Story No 1
Rating 6/10

The story was good. I like the casual scenes that you included. It sticked to the concept about robbery in the bank but it lacked in investigation. I really don't think the comedy element was needed and plus the story wasn't serious enough. I did like the duo scenes except when the T-S conversation was going on sorry but this is just my opinion. Hope you didn't mind.

Story No 2
Rating 8/10

Contest wise it was good. Investigating wise it was also good but I got a bit confused in the middle because of the case but you clarified everything in the end which was really good by your part. I really liked how you brought Rajat, Vivek and Dr Nyati together in one frame but they had little less role which was a bit disappointing but overall I liked the story and didn't guess who was the mastermind behind the case till the end so well done.

Story No 3
Rating 8/10

This one was very interesting and simple story with intriguing plot. I just loved it. I could visualize everything with your descriptions. Especially I adored those disguise scenes. Everyone had good role in your story and made an impact. You did a great job by bringing Vivek and Tasha back as if this is their era. I really enjoyed reading the case. It was really good I really liked it.

Story No 4

Rating 9/10

My favorite story story so far. A super nice story with some really fabulous dialogues by all the time. I really liked the way you described the investigation being done. The action and the final scene with Vivek, Tasha and Purvi was really well written as i could imagine the complex direction and dialogues being told and done. Abhijeet also got a great role as poor him got injured. It was a really good attempt done by you as it was simple and less confusing story.

Story No 5

Rating 8.5

I liked this story as well, It was a short nice story. You maintained everything very well. The only confusing thing was on how Asha entered without any notice but she really made an impact and kept me hooked with her style and your style of writing. I really liked your choice of the officers as you kept everybody involved. I also adored those disguise scenes. Overall a nice story keep writing.

Story No 6

Rating 10

OMG I truly loved this story to bits. My favorite story out of all six. Your style of writing is just too good. You kept me hooked to the story and i never looked around once. The entire investigation scene was wonderfully written and the suspense was maintained brilliantly. Too good yaar. Freddy and Purvi were fab together. Asha and Purvi's fight scene and the final scene of Asha and Purvi was too good. It was nice to see that female officers got their due. I must say you have done a great job!!!

All stories were fab everyone

Good luck to all!!!

Edited by Soni. - 11 years ago

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Veena..

@Veena..

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#34

i have just read 1st story till now 😒

but will read and review all very soon 😃

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

I have posted reviews for first 4 stories on page 2.. Reading the 5th. My tab is giving trouble when I edit my post on page 2, so I have to post next 2 reviews here.

Story 5: Just started. I am all smiles reading this and imagining it. ,' Abhijeet in a red half sleeve tee and a jeans and Daya in a dark blue polo and light blue jeans, these men would have got women to take a second look.' 😉

Abhijeet and Daya going to bank to draw cash in this era of ATMs? 😕 You could have given any other reason. Maybe Daya has applied for a new car loan...😛

The story was short and a bit confusing. How did Asha and Vivek happen to work on the same case? I wish you had explained why Asha came in...maybe a case which her dept was handling and then duo happened to be on the crime scene so they worked together or something like that. Nice attempt anyway. 😊

story 6: Very stylishly written, but there were some places where continuity was missing. How do I explain...something happens, the scene changes and what happened in the previous scene becomes clear only in the next scene.So this story is not for a relaxed laidback reading.

It was nice to see Asha and Vivek back. Esp the explanation for Vivek leaving CID. Freddie keeping in touch with him was nice too. Purvi touching Asha's feet-zaroori tha???? 😛

My ratings

1 - 5/10
2 - 6.5/10
3 - 8/10
4 - 7/10
5 - 6.5/10
6 - 8/10

Reviews for first 4 stories are on page 2.

Very well done all of you. Hoping for more stories from everyone. Without the restrictions of theme etc I am sure you'll all churn out wonderful stories. Marking was just a formality because it's a contest. Don't take them personally.

👏 👏

Edited by visrom - 11 years ago

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ControlledChaos

@ControlledChaos

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Finally read all the stories so gonna give my reviews. I am not a very keen observer of investigative stories so will give an overview kind of thing. And I look at the positives so will rate according to that obviously keeping rules in mind.. Good luck to all the participants. 😊

Story 1- It was funny and I enjoyed it a lot. I agree with the review of Vis di so am gonna give you
6.2/10.

Story 2: Investigation wise the story was good but some points were confusing. Kindly remember to take a good look at the spellings in future.. 😊.
8.2/10

Story 3: I liked the investigation.. the explanation was really good as well..
8/10 from me..

Story 4: I enjoyed this one.. the funny comments in the middle were really good..😆 overall a nice attempt. 😊
8.7/10

Story 5: Simple, short and sweet.. loved the idea.
7.8/10

Story 6: Personally speaking, I enjoyed this one the most!!! beautifully written and fast paced. Read it till the end without even looking here and there. Really liked the concept and the investigation.. Really good job.. 👏
9/10.

Good luck to all the participants. You all did a great job. 😊 Am sorry if my comment hurt anyone of you.

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..optimist..

@..optimist..

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Will edit my post as and when I read... 😊

Will rate the stories when I finish reading all of them.

STORY 1

It is a good funny story, but in the story contests we expect a serious story. I liked the story, the Duo friendship. But I would have loved it more if there was more inverstigation in it. It would have been more interesting to see some more significant roles to the officers.

Overall, I liked the plot and the writing style. Would like to read more from you.

Keep writing!!

😊

Edited by neha_dna - 11 years ago

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Reshma

@Reshh16

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Started reading the stories.. I'm reading in a disorderly way... So will post reviews in order but..😊

1st story:

You have a good style of writing. This story could have become a really good one had you not included the flirty scenes along with fun. As @Visrom and @Soni said, your story is more funny than serious. Plus it is quite short. Next time try to include some really serious investigations. Keep writing 😊.

2nd story: A really interesting story. I liked the choice of characters you had brought in. Really very nice investigations. Some scenes were really cool. You never fail a teasing between duo..😛😆.. But I personally felt more of prominence could have been given to the inclusions. Anyway. a nice story. Keep writing 😊

But one thing, please take care of the spellings and flow.. I had really a tough time reading it. Daaya, VIvik, sachaan was all messed up. Take care of that.

3rd story:

A very nice straightforward story. The inclusion of Tasha and Vivek was made justice to. 😃 You have your own flair of writing. Some passages aptly described the scene and and the "aaunga" "aaungi" thing also was well taken through. I liked the duo interrogation scene 😆😃 Suspense was well maintained. Great job! 👏 Keep writing 😊

4th story:

A nice story with some really witty dialogues. The fight and the final scene where Purvi, Tasha and Vivek are involved was really well written, though very brief.👏 The A+VE group n all was written so, for the purpose of investigation, I guess. But you didn't show anything related to that. I liked the lab scene. 😃 Overall, a nice straightforward simple story. Keep writing 😊

5th story:

Ah, a short nice story. I can imagine duo in that costumes. 😳 You maintained everything very well. Wish there was a short note as to how Asha entered. But the choice of the officers is really worth it 👏 Good job 😃 Keep writing 😊

6th story:

I have to say. Truly I loved the story to bits. The style. Oh My God! You really have your way writer. 👏The entire investigation was excellently written and the secret was maintained very well 👏 The Freddy-Purvi scene was really worth reading again and the reunion. 😳.. was so sweet.. I loved the way u wrote "... expressing unspoken tales of love and anguish..".. So touching it was.. It is alaways nice to see lady cops get prominence. Your story had it. Asha-Purvi fight scene and the final scene of Asha-Purvi was too good 👏👏 Great job!! 👏 Keep writing 😊

Marks

Story 1: 6/10

Story 2: 7.5/10

Story 3: 8/10

Story 4: 8/10

Story 5: 7.5/10

Story 6: 9/10

😊😊😊

Edited by Reshma. - 11 years ago

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Veena..

@Veena..

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#39

My review:

Story 1: its a funny one story, but not really investigative and there is nothing about the other four robbers who escaped from the spot. overall its entertaining 😃

6/10

Story 2: its really an interesting one, i fully enjoyed reading it and very well goes with the plot, good investigation, no one can guess the real mastermind behind all these robberies, even motive was unknown till the end... daya pulling abhi's leg was amazing... rajat, vivek and Dr Nayati in the story and their entry in the case with the current team and scenario was very good... overall its a very good and interesting story 👍🏼 👏 ⭐️

8.6/10

Story 3: another good story indeed, unexpected mastermind... tasha and vivek in the story are good... the part where all officers were working in pairs was perfect, i mean perfect couples, acp and dr salunke, abhijeet and daya, vivik and tasha ❤️ good fighting at the start, good investigation till the end. 👏 ⭐️

8.3/10

Story 4: it was a nice and simple story with good fight, investigation and little forensics. all officers were good in it, but poor abhijeet got injured. 👏

7.5/10

Story 5: yet another simple and nice story. asha and vivek in the plot thats really nice... wellldone to the writer 👏

7/10

Story 6: wow really an interesting story. two best old cops were selected, portraying brother and sister beautifully...perfect match to the plot, very good investigation, really enjoyed reading this story, awe can understand freedy emotions, how much he miss his younger bro... overall its a well deserving story 👍🏼 👏 ⭐️ 😊

9/10

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swagatamghosh94

@swagatamghosh94

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Story 1 : A real funny story. Kind of out of place in a competition but still, a good attempt by the writer.👍🏼

Story 2 : Good investigation. Very well written too. Loved the writer's style.😃

Story 3 : A very interesting plot. Once again, loved the writer's style. Awesome story again. Keep writing.👏

Story 4 : One of the best of the lot. Very well written, with tremendously modulated pacing and a very enticing plot. Well done writer.👍🏼

Story 5 : A nice and simple story. Not much to review on this one. Enjoyed reading it.😃

Story 6 : An absolute masterclass. This writer has the ability to go where he wants with the prodigious talent he has been endowed with. Thank you for such a wonderful story. It was an honor to read it.👍🏼

Ratings : Story 1 - 7/10

Story 2 - 8.5/10

Story 3 - 8.5/10

Story 4- 9.95/10

Story 5- 8/10

Story 6 -10/10 (Deserves more 👏)

Edited by swagatamghosh94 - 11 years ago