Silent Promise !!! (Concluding Part @ PG 147)

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Deepika

@ADreamyDeepz28

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#511

Dada 😊

Wow !!!!!! What a story hain 😛 I loved it very much 👍🏼

The detailed descriptions of each and everything was really nice to read...

like as if Iam watching it on TV with those detailed description. As you may

know( No idea 😛) I love to read the Duo Conversations and the fun

conversations in it; So I loved the whole story ..❤️. 😃.

Iam coating the dialogues I liked most here (Thodey jyaada hain 😉)

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DAYA: Main Chand ki Aatma hun aur Tum say Milnay aayii hun

FREDDIE cell Slipped from His hand and He is trying to Run away as fast as can and at Main Entrance Collided with someone with Force and Fear' (😆)

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ACP: ek File lenay aaya tha' DCP sahib nay kaha tha' us per baat karni hay' abhi ghar ja ker yaad aaya kay File tou Cabin mein hee reh gayii' wesay acha hua aa gaya' warna shayed (look at FREDDIE) Hospital mein Mulaqat hoti'( 😆)

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DAYA Irritate but obviously surrendered' both moved to DR' He checked it and tell that because of Swelling and Pain' He gave Him a TETNIS Injection for protecting it from further Infection' when he moved towards DAYA and tried to give Him an Injection'suddenly a 4 year old Kid came and grabbed DAYA arm and tell Him'

KID: Uncle Mian aap ko paker leta hun.. bilkul Pain nahi hoga' (😍 So sweet 😛)

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DAYA: Main bhool gaya tha kay Tumhari Sewa TAREEKA Jee nay ki hay' ab tou aandhi aayey ya Tofaan ye Bandage tou Tum utaro gay nahi'. (🤣)

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DAYA (in laugh): arry dekho kuch Juices kay Cans parein hongay aur Mujhy ab Sonay do' aur haan yaad rakkho ab Bandage khul gayii na tou TAREEKA Jee nahi balkay SALUNKHY shahab Bandage karein gay'

ABHIJEET: Shub Shub Bol'!!!

(😆 Becharey Abhijeet Sir 😆 )

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DAYA: hahahha' kya Boss' Daku kya khany ko detay' (tease with naughty smile) wesay kuch hay Khany ko???

ABHIJEET (anger): haan Mera BHEJA' (😆)

DAYA (laugh): wo tou ACP Sir kay liyey hay na' (😆)

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ACP (to ABHIJEET in confusion): wesay ABHIJEET Tum nay itna Late Signal kyun diya???

TAREEKA started Laughing and ABHIJEET gets Embarrassed as all Eyes Focused Him' He initiates..

ABHIJEET: wo Sir' (pause)(in embarrass) wo Main So gaya tha (🤣)

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ABHIJEET (again in Embarrass tone): wo Sir TAREEKA Jee aur wo Larki' kiya naam tha.. haan MONA' ye dono Baatein karnay lagay' aur wo chaarun Larkay Carrom kheelnay lagay' main Thori der tou Ketchup khata raha'

PURVI (in shock): Ketchup??!!! (🤣😆)

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Oh Dada it was a full enjoyable like a 3 hour movie ..😛. I would love to read it again when I get time ( jo aajkal nahi milta ) Agar waqt miley toh please tell me what you meant by 'HIACE' kyunki mujhey samjah mein nahi aaya yeh kya tha.But let me tell you Dada tumhaari story padh kar yesa lagtha hain ki mein pehli baar padh rahi hoon... Woh freshness hamesha hota hain in your stories ,new ideas, new kinds of stories ... alag presentation... Maanna padega its a very herculean task to write such big stories everytime 👏👏 Mujhey isliyeh patha hain because I have written stories ... A very GOOD STORY 👏👏 DADA You ROCK 👍🏼

So DADA...

SO DADA This is for you:

Edited by DreamyDeepz28 - 13 years ago

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halfbloodprince

@Wistfulness

Achiever

+ 8

Posted: 13 years ago

#512

I fail to find a word that would suit you. Your stories are unique and simply outstanding, I just keep on repeating myself. After reading the title, I couldn't guess what the story exactly is.

Ayush's part was short yet fabulous. Loved his bonding with Daya sir and Abhijeet sir. I felt bad reading he died :(
Team's and specially Abhijeet sir's concern for Daya sir was a delight to read. During the whole picnic scenario, I never thought it's a plan.

Overall, a great story as usual.

Funny moments were simply awesome! Chand ki aatma wala part was hilarious 😆
Thank you dada! This made me forget the harsh present and smile for a few moments.

Edited by -Shruti - 13 years ago

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Pari

@fairy1

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#513

Well GD I feel you are inspired by FW that's why a YSPT 😆

About your story I have nothing to say as usual👏

Every time you pop in with a new idea

Did feel bad that Ayush died...but the way Abhijeet Sir comforted Daya Sir was very soothing!!

The story had humerus conversation between Duo which is applauded by almost every CIDian these days

YOU HAVE WRITTEN A MASTERPIECE INDEED 😃

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#514

Originally posted by: mahrukh
Great story like always GD... tarka of comedy emotions naugtiness is superb.. especially that line "main aur kisi ko nae kho sakhta ABHI" awsum... enjoyed ur story alot...

Thank You so much MAHRUKH...😳

I added this Line just to Raise My Story TRP... 🤣😉

Originally posted by: Mansi.
🤣🤣 Good story🥳

Thank You MANSI for Ur Laugh and Whistle...😳😊

Originally posted by: Tami_
cool superb story

Cool Superb Feedback TAMI...😉

Thank You...😳

I like UR DP alot...😊

Originally posted by: hal96
Dafs was a realli gud story x keep it up x

Thats was really a Good Feedback...😊

Thank You...😳

Originally posted by: hummi16
Amazing story xx made me laugh xx 😆

Amazing Feedback... Thank You😳

Originally posted by: hummi16
Good story like the way daya pulls abhijeets leg xx

yes its always a Pleasure to Watch or read such Sequences...😃

Thank You again...😳

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#515

Originally posted by: Forfriends
Frankly yeh when i am reading story i am so surprise that why every culprit was falling unconscious when he is coming next to Daya sir...

but a YSPT na i never guess so...

but jab pata chala that time I am just pressing Abhijeet sir... nad of course You... 👏

But yaar Abhijeet sir chair pe sote sote gir yahi... tomato souse kha rahai the time pass ke liye...

OMG can't stop 😆

good one Daya...

Full does of emotions and comedy 👏 ⭐️ 🤗

Ur Surprise is My Success na...😈

If U guessed that its YSPT😉, so Mera Role tou kuch Nahi hota na...😆😆

yes I tried to Lit some Off Moods after watching DUO Separately in Episode into Chilling Moods...😳😳

Thank You so much BH...🤗

Originally posted by: shreela
Perfect story!👍🏼 chalo, tonight I'll sleep well.😃

Perfect Feedback...👍🏼

kya KD... 🤔

Meri Story Teri Neend ka Saamaan hay...😲

tou Yaar kabhi humein bhi Apni Stories say aisi Achi Neend provide karo na...😳😊

Thank You so much...🤗

Originally posted by: khota_sikka_sri
Awesome story GD. You kept the suspense right till the end. And the comedy was awesome as well. 👏

Thank You yaar🤗... apun tou Aap ki Story ka Wait ker rahay thay... bus usi Wait mein ye YSPT likha daala...😆😆

Originally posted by: maggi.masala
Perfect as usual... Grt combo of emotions n comedy...
Thanx dada

Ye Naam MAGGI.MASALA Main nay pehlay kahein suna hay...😕😲

CHASHMA told Me kay ye Meri PICHLY janam ki GURYA hay...😳😳

Thank You so Much...🤗

hope U are ACTIVE in This Janam also...😆😆

Originally posted by: aditi
huge one...
but best one...😆
loved all of it...
abhi and daya sir's dialogues are awesome...
its perfect...⭐️

Thank You ADITI...😳

hope Next time Not that Huge one...😆

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#516

Originally posted by: AmanDeep24
thanku dada for MAST doze😛😳🤗
dil bag bag ho gya story pdh kr😃
some line dialouges r sooo sweeettt

DAYA: Main Chand ki Aatma hun aur Tum say Milnay aayii hun'

🤣

KID: Uncle Mian aap ko paker leta hun.. bilkul Pain nahi hoga'
😃

DAYA hugged Him so Tightly and just Whisper in Teary tone'

DAYA (teary tone): main aur kisi ko nahi Kho sakta ABHI'
🤗

ABHIJEET: wo Sir' (pause)(in embarrass) wo Main So gaya tha'
🤣

tumare jaise dusra koi nhi likh skta🤗
ye tumare liye😃
ab next story khate khate likhna ya likhte likhte khana😆

amazing that Ur Dil turning into BAGH...😲😲

I hope its Not ALI BAGH...🤣🤣

Thank You so much...🤗

aur yaar MUJH say Buht Acha yahan Writers Likh rahy hain...😳

Parho tou pata chalay na...😡

Originally posted by: DreamyDeepz28
Dada 😊
Wow !!!!!! What a story hain 😛 I loved it very much 👍🏼

The detailed descriptions of each and everything was really nice to read...

like as if Iam watching it on TV with those detailed description. As you may

know( No idea 😛) I love to read the Duo Conversations and the fun

conversations in it; So I loved the whole story ..❤️. 😃.

Iam coating the dialogues I liked most here (Thodey jyaada hain 😉)

---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

DAYA: Main Chand ki Aatma hun aur Tum say Milnay aayii hun

FREDDIE cell Slipped from His hand and He is trying to Run away as fast as can and at Main Entrance Collided with someone with Force and Fear' (😆)

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ACP: ek File lenay aaya tha' DCP sahib nay kaha tha' us per baat karni hay' abhi ghar ja ker yaad aaya kay File tou Cabin mein hee reh gayii' wesay acha hua aa gaya' warna shayed (look at FREDDIE) Hospital mein Mulaqat hoti'( 😆)

-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

DAYA Irritate but obviously surrendered' both moved to DR' He checked it and tell that because of Swelling and Pain' He gave Him a TETNIS Injection for protecting it from further Infection' when he moved towards DAYA and tried to give Him an Injection'suddenly a 4 year old Kid came and grabbed DAYA arm and tell Him'
KID: Uncle Mian aap ko paker leta hun.. bilkul Pain nahi hoga' (😍 So sweet 😛)
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DAYA: Main bhool gaya tha kay Tumhari Sewa TAREEKA Jee nay ki hay' ab tou aandhi aayey ya Tofaan ye Bandage tou Tum utaro gay nahi'. (🤣)

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DAYA (in laugh): arry dekho kuch Juices kay Cans parein hongay aur Mujhy ab Sonay do' aur haan yaad rakkho ab Bandage khul gayii na tou TAREEKA Jee nahi balkay SALUNKHY shahab Bandage karein gay'

ABHIJEET: Shub Shub Bol'!!!

(😆 Becharey Abhijeet Sir 😆 )

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DAYA: hahahha' kya Boss' Daku kya khany ko detay' (tease with naughty smile)wesay kuch hay Khany ko???
ABHIJEET (anger): haan Mera BHEJA' (😆)
DAYA (laugh): wo tou ACP Sir kay liyey hay na' (😆)
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ACP (to ABHIJEET in confusion): wesay ABHIJEET Tum nay itna Late Signal kyun diya???
TAREEKA started Laughing and ABHIJEET gets Embarrassed as all Eyes Focused Him' He initiates..
ABHIJEET: wo Sir' (pause)(in embarrass) wo Main So gaya tha (🤣)
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ABHIJEET (again in Embarrass tone): wo Sir TAREEKA Jee aur wo Larki' kiya naam tha.. haan MONA' ye dono Baatein karnay lagay' aur wo chaarun Larkay Carrom kheelnay lagay' main Thori der tou Ketchup khata raha'
PURVI (in shock): Ketchup??!!! (🤣😆)
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Oh Dada it was a full enjoyable like a 3 hour movie ..😛. I would love to read it again when I get time ( jo aajkal nahi milta ) Agar waqt miley toh please tell me what you meant by 'HIACE'kyunki mujhey samjah mein nahi aaya yeh kya tha.But let me tell you Dada tumhaari story padh kar yesa lagtha hain ki mein pehli baar padh rahi hoon... Woh freshness hamesha hota hain in your stories ,new ideas, new kinds of stories ... alag presentation... Maanna padega its a very herculean task to write such big stories everytime 👏👏 Mujhey isliyeh patha hain because I have written stories ... A very GOOD STORY 👏👏 DADA You ROCK 👍🏼

SO DADA This is for you:

Thank You so much DD as its really a Pleasure to have Feedback from a Excillent Writer Herself😳... Thanks for liking the Fun Convo between DUO and the Descriptive Part as well...😳

Thank You for Quoting Ur Favourates Dialogues as well😳... abt HIACE... its a Big VAN kinda Vehicle like they used in HOLIDAY MURDER...😊

Thank You For liking the Freshness and Presentations...😳

thanks alot...🤗

Originally posted by: -Shruti
I fail to find a word that would suit you. Your stories are unique and simply outstanding, I just keep on repeating myself. After reading the title, I couldn't guess what the story exactly is.

OML😲!!! You always feel Me at Cloud 9 of 7th Sky by Ur Words Baccha...🤗🤗 yes The Title did not give any Clue about the Story Exactly...😆

Ayush's part was short yet fabulous. Loved his bonding with Daya sir and Abhijeet sir. I felt bad reading he died :(

Yes, but If I dragged it, the Plan will Not come out like that...😉

Team's and specially Abhijeet sir's concern for Daya sir was a delight to read. During the whole picnic scenario, I never thought it's a plan.

Yes, its Not Only the Concern as being a Friend, Best Buddy, BHAI, its also a Concern as being a Pal, Colleauge, Team mate, human being...!!!😳😃

Overall, a great story as usual.

Thank You very very much...😳😳

Funny moments were simply awesome! Chand ki aatma wala part was hilarious 😆

Yes... I thought jub Sub ki AATMA ho sakti hay tou Chand ki kyun nahi...😉😆

Thank you dada! This made me forget the harsh present and smile for a few moments.

These TWO WORDS Pinched Me alot Baccha😭.😭.. if U feel Relax just Pm the Background of these...😭😭

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#517

Originally posted by: fairy1
Well GD I feel you are inspired by FW that's why a YSPT 😆
About your story I have nothing to say as usual👏
Every time you pop in with a new idea
Did feel bad that Ayush died...but the way Abhijeet Sir comforted Daya Sir was very soothing!!
The story had humerus conversation between Duo which is applauded by almost every CIDian these days
YOU HAVE WRITTEN A MASTERPIECE INDEED 😃

Kya karein Yaar, thora buht Inspire tou hona parta hay...😉

Shuker karo itna Nhai Inspire hua kay BHAI ki tarah Short Shirts and baray Bhai jesa CardBoard Coat Use karnay ka sochnay lagun...🤣

Yep I did not drag AYUSH part cz if I did that, The Plan will totally a Waste and yes if I knew a Person from 15 Years and have a Good and Understandable Relations with Him, I tried to Sooth Him by any means... its Not about a Feeling between Frnd to Frnd... its a ACHY SANSKAAR na...😳😳

and U knew I m so Pyara, Sohna and Gudda baccha with SEENGS...😈

arry MASTER PIECE Nahi.. bus PIECE hay...😉

abhi MASTER aana baaqi hay Meray Dost...😆

Thank You so much...😳

Originally posted by: gadhadada

Thank You so much MAHRUKH...😳
I added this Line just to Raise My Story TRP... 🤣😉

Thank You MANSI for Ur Laugh and Whistle...😳😊

Cool Superb Feedback TAMI...😉
Thank You...😳
I like UR DP alot...😊

Thats was really a Good Feedback...😊
Thank You...😳

Amazing Feedback... Thank You😳

yes its always a Pleasure to Watch or read such Sequences...😃
Thank You again...😳