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Chintan

@ArRoGaNT-CHINTs

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#461

Hey Dada... your story is superb...
Aur Bhai jab abhi ki kheench rahe the.. aur wo fake gifts... abhi to😡😡 on Bhai...
Aur abhi sir ka dimaag to bahot hi tej chala hai...
Keep it up...
Great work...

Edited by Chints09 - 14 years ago

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Sakshi.. Angel..

@Reserved_angel

Inactive

Posted: 14 years ago

#462

hey well written...

nd specially ur jokes in between duo,

and the description ...

so nyc..

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Naomi

@Naomi.

Rocker

Posted: 14 years ago

#463

As usual SUPERB story Dada👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 I loved the part of duo jokes😆😆😆

Send ur stories to CID...surely they'll use them.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Edited by naomi.cid - 14 years ago

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halfbloodprince

@Wistfulness

Achiever

+ 8

Posted: 14 years ago

#464

I was waiting eagerly for your story. Will read and give my feedback.

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Shruti Chatterjee

@shreela

Voyager

Posted: 14 years ago

#465

GD, nice to see you back with such a nice story. the plot is a different one and it's very well-written. 👏👏smart investigation and the conversations of duo is too sweet. BTW, I have some doubts:

1. why did the magician reveal the trick of the Aatma magic, without knowing that the people are from CID? usually, magicians don't like to discuss about their tricks to anyone.

2. why did Roshan say, that he killed Ins. Tamly, while the killer was Plainfield? why did he try to save him?

3. how did they kill Mohit?

plz clear these doubts. and yeah, congrats once again for the story.😃⭐️

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#466

Originally posted by: shreela
GD, nice to see you back with such a nice story. the plot is a different one and it's very well-written. 👏👏smart investigation and the conversations of duo is too sweet. BTW, I have some doubts:
1. why did the magician reveal the trick of the Aatma magic, without knowing that the people are from CID? usually, magicians don't like to discuss about their tricks to anyone.

2. why did Roshan say, that he killed Ins. Tamly, while the killer was Plainfield? why did he try to save him?

3. how did they kill Mohit?

plz clear these doubts. and yeah, congrats once again for the story.😃⭐️

thanx KD... i have sum INTUITION to have sum VALED POINTS cuming from UR side... thanx again...

1) cz the MANAGER RAM told him that these people are VIP's and gave them PROTOCOL... thatswhy...

2) any GOOD EMPLOYEE does not want to CHEAT hiis BOSS in any way... he didd not know abt Sr INs ABHIJEET SHARP SHINE... he thought that if CID nabbed him... accepted all CRIMES... so afterward the SITE or his OWNER be FREE and after sum BREAK cuming in MARKET with any another IDEA...

3) ROSHAN said that he told MOHIT that the SUITE had a BUTTON which FLASHED OUT his all LIGHTS EFFECT and he would be in DARK so easily SKIP... but MOHIT did not knoow that this BUTTON was only to make him ASH...

i think i cleared all UR DOUBTS... thanx buddy for POINTING these BLUNDERS... i m an DUFFER LEARNER na...

bundles of THANKS

Edited by gadhadada - 14 years ago

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#467

Originally posted by: Chinoy
hey well written...
nd specially ur jokes in between duo,
and the description ...
so nyc..

hey also WELL WRITTEN FEEDBACK...😃
nd specially the SENTENCES in between LINES...😃
and the WORDS...😃
so NYC...😃

THANK YOU

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

+ 2

Posted: 14 years ago

#468

Originally posted by: Chints09
Hey Dada... your story is superb...
Aur Bhai jab abhi ki kheench rahe the.. aur wo fake gifts... abhi to😡😡 on Bhai...
Aur abhi sir ka dimaag to bahot hi tej chala hai...
Keep it up...
Great work...

hey CHINTS... your FEEDBACK is SUPERB...😉
aur BHAI baray BHAI say buhat FRANK hain na... tou kheench saktay hain... and un FAKE GIFTS per... BARAY BHAI ka BHAI per GUSSA... wo GUSSA bhi FAKE hee hay...😉
aur ya BARAY BHAI ka dimagh BULLET nikalnay ki SPEED say bhi TAIZ hay...⭐️
keep it up... wesay WAT😉
Great FEEDBACK...👏

THANK YOU