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Frank review please don't mind---
Ok first of all Please give proper spacing between scenes so that it can be easier to read.

Your idea was great. Some dialogues were out of character. here Vivek's dialogue. I didn't like it. They were just showing their care for him, its their style.

ACP; good work VIVEK, but next time better tell us..we will believe you..
VIVEK;(silently)I can see how much you believe in me..talking things about me behind my back..

Plot was good around a child but somewhere find ending very filmy. Girl SIMI giving ideas to CID first to match her finger prints then hypnotize her. Team has to be shocked at this. But I think from finger prints straight away Forensic doctor can tell that finger prints are of some child not grown up person? I don't know exactly but I think.

You have lot of potential and lot of ideas keep writing.👍🏼.

congrats for your first story. good attempt.