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latha

@nishalpvsk

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Posted: 15 years ago

#21

Very Nice story it is an extra ordinary effort
keep it up and looking forward for many more from your side..
but to say ur thiking is really diffeent from others of making vivek to the lead of this case no one thought of such so

good keep it up

Edited by nishalpvsk - 15 years ago

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SAGNIKA

@Shagnika

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Posted: 15 years ago

#22

Omky finally read the story! Good to see a Viivek centric episode- refreshing change! Characterisations of every member has been shown properly! Abhi-Daya momebts came naturally... Was in a flow! Even the comic scenes were well narrated! Just one point was-they were worried about Viivek so may be in such tensed situations they wont easily have laugh about any issue..but thats okkay! The climax was fast n simple.
Overall a good story, superb effort! Waiting from many more from you dear! 😃

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visrom

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Posted: 15 years ago

#23

Well, so far interesting, but the story is not yet complete isn't it? Vivek is yet to be found....

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shaama

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Posted: 15 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: Shagnika
Omky finally read the story! Good to see a Viivek centric episode- refreshing change! Characterisations of every member has been shown properly! Abhi-Daya momebts came naturally... Was in a flow! Even the comic scenes were well narrated! Just one point was-they were worried about Viivek so may be in such tensed situations they wont easily have laugh about any issue..but thats okkay! The climax was fast n simple.
Overall a good story, superb effort! Waiting from many more from you dear! 😃

thank you very much SHAGNIKA,i am very happy that most of the old members liked my story..i am working on my next story,don't worry i will be writing the next story in english,since my hindi is sooo horrible 😆 once again thankyou for comment and advice...i completely forgot about the emotions of the team in tensed moments 😭 i thought of adding some comic scenes cause we are not seeing any of them in these days 😡

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shaama

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Posted: 15 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: Shagnika
Omky finally read the story! Good to see a Viivek centric episode- refreshing change! Characterisations of every member has been shown properly! Abhi-Daya momebts came naturally... Was in a flow! Even the comic scenes were well narrated! Just one point was-they were worried about Viivek so may be in such tensed situations they wont easily have laugh about any issue..but thats okkay! The climax was fast n simple.
Overall a good story, superb effort! Waiting from many more from you dear! 😃

thank you very much SHAGNIKA,i am very happy that most of the old members liked my story..i am working on my next story,don't worry i will be writing the next story in english,since my hindi is sooo horrible 😆 once again thankyou for comment and advice...i completely forgot about the emotions of the team in tensed moments 😭 i thought of adding some comic scenes cause we are not seeing any of them in these days 😡 i had planned a great ending,but forgot at the last moment 😡 so i thought of bringing FREDDY sir's wife for a happy ending 😊

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SAGNIKA

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Posted: 15 years ago

#26

Visrom, the story is completed on the previous page...hve a look!
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1453704&PID=32605969&#32605969

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prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

#27

Instead of "my first creation" it would be good if we can have a specific title like : NAME OF STORY - BY NAME

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shaama

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Posted: 15 years ago

#28

so sorry i had posted twice... 😭 and thank you prabha didi,for your advice...next time i will remember all your advices 😊

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

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Posted: 15 years ago

#29

Finally completed, it was different story, involving Vivek but somewhere something was missing. It was fast paced I like it. I enjoyed few scenes alot some nice moments were there.

Very good first attempt I will say. Keep writing.

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prabha.

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Posted: 15 years ago

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