CID stories : By CHINNU

Will surely read it as soon as i m a little free.. Dont underestimate urself... M sure its gonna b v good!😃

Originally posted by: Shagnika

Will surely read it as soon as i m a little free.. Dont underestimate urself... M sure its gonna b v good!😃

ok i will wait...

Okkay, m done reading it!! 👍🏼 Its good.... As ur first attempt its good. Since its in english, i always feel something is missing, but nevertheless, its good. Mostly daya the person highlighted... Which was done in a nice way. Was slight odd to imagine as never seen him so.but still, it shows u really like him a lot! A little more of suspense and investigation would have made it go to a diff level!

Would expect many more from u! 😃

Different type of narration.So this was way you were explaining me. Liked it, read a new story way. But yes agree with Sagnika more of investigation and suspense would have made it wow. Still its very good. First attempt is good attempt.

Originally posted by: Shagnika

Okkay, m done reading it!! 👍🏼 Its good.... As ur first attempt its good. Since its in english, i always feel something is missing, but nevertheless, its good. Mostly daya the person highlighted... Which was done in a nice way. Was slight odd to imagine as never seen him so.but still, it shows u really like him a lot! A little more of suspense and investigation would have made it go to a diff level!

Would expect many more from u! 😃

thank you so much for the comment shagee....

Originally posted by: sunnyp1414

Different type of narration.So this was way you were explaining me. Liked it, read a new story way. But yes agree with Sagnika more of investigation and suspense would have made it wow. Still its very good. First attempt is good attempt.

hi sunny thanks for the comment...this is the only way i know...its tracitional but i like it....dont know abt suspense triller writing....thats why....any way i will try to add more suspense next time...thanks for the comment

Good attempt chinnu...but investigation is less...I hope you will write good stories...you have a capacity and I know you can do it...all the best for next creation.

Originally posted by: jiya1

Good attempt chinnu...but investigation is less...I hope you will write good stories...you have a capacity and I know you can do it...all the best for next creation.

yes jiya dee i will try and make it next time....hope so