SwaRon OS Series : #3 Pg10.

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#41

Reserved. I am going to come back after 20th too. 🤔

-edited-

I did come back after 20th. Just not very early. Sorry for that. Life has been shitty. 😳

I really enjoyed reading this one Nivriti. It was quirky and amusing.

Swayam and Sharon's conversation was helluva cracking. Sharon's fixation on Swayam lips and Swayam's reaction on knowing that. He must have been really pleased with himself. That sly.

Keep writing.

Cheers.

Edited by Rhapsody. - 10 years ago

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see my username..:P

@__nidhi__

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#42

well written

loved it

do continue soon

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-spongy-

@-spongy-

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#43

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OMG!

This was too good. The writing, the story and the spontaneity.It was short but it showed a complete image. I really enjoyed reading it. You are a really good writer.Please do write more OS's like this. You guys are the reason why SwaRon are still alive in our hearts.

Thanks a lot for the PM. Update soon.

Sorry for the late feedback. Exams.. 😊

Edited by -spongy- - 10 years ago

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Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: thegameison
I'm gonna come around after you-know-what, man. 🤓

I did not read before posting, and now when I did, I think I want to kill myself for writing it down. Its crappy. And, a piece of shit. Pardon me, for this one.

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ujwal

@ujwal_v

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#45

loved it..

great wrk.👍🏼

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Manisha Bhardwaj

@Rockingbhardwaj

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#46

Well its great piece..
Loved it
Poor sharon
Hahaha
She still wanna break his teeth.aww

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LoveHopeMagic

@LoveHopeMagic

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#47

Its great ...

Loved it...😳

God sharon is tooo 😆...Loved her anger...

it was so simple still was nice 😃

Keechu

Edited by --Keechu-- - 10 years ago

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Aneesha

@aneesha93

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#48

Nice one. Do continue soon

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i.am

@i.am

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#49

It's fantabulous..
I loved both the parts...
and would like to request you to turn the last os Into an ss or ff.. but it's totally up to you.. these are brilliant pieces of writing.. and I really wanna read more of it...
Thank you

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Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: thegameison
Niv,

This is good writing! This is writing you can visualize, it has got quirks you can laugh at. I like such stuff, how it's more the middle of a story than one whole story. There's Sharon, who meets Swayum, Swayum she's still attracted to, but it's him and he's still the ladies' man with whom she couldn't or wouldn't be with, for reasons not fully known.

It's good stuff, man. Her observation of weddings and what happens there as well as her venomous view of all things girlie is well, personally, accurate. Cheers!

Plus Swayum, waiting on tables at his cousin's wedding, amusing shit. 😆

Thanks for the PM,
K

Thanks for liking this shit. Seriously. Anyhow. I dunno what came into me and I wrote this. It was inspired by a book I read. Somehow, I was not very convinced of it. But if you say.

Anyhow. Sharon! 😆

I'll try to continue. But there is lot on my plate write now. I am thinking of ending a few works before taking up something new.