SwaRon OS: The Reality.. - Page 5

Originally posted by: cutelove

beautifull...!! amazingly written n potrayaed in such beautiful manner.. i jst luvedit whoke.. d emitions werr bang on...reys concern was apt n swaron.convo pebned out nicely...great wrk...

Originally posted by: athi_vrushan

nice os nishi ...
of course u did justify the first part MIRAGE
keep writing more dear
and of course i lovd the title of this os
thanks 4 d pm
...one of the best friendship day gift anyone could get

Originally posted by: prachi_vrushan

superb os dear thank god n to u u don't give this os a terrific end finally swayam met to his Sharon 😊

Originally posted by: -spongy-

You are a splendid writer. What feelings and what words used. Beautifully written.
Loved it so much. I was taken so deep in the OS that I didn't even realize when it ended.
Loved it. Thanks for the PM.

Originally posted by: nature2

amazing os dear...

Originally posted by: sweetydiyafrien

this was fantastic and superb os... loved it

Originally posted by: Sehrish_VruShan

Nishi🤗
Woww!! Its Amazingly written OS 👏
Really loved your title its suits the OS completely
Its Short and Sweet 😃
Keep up the good work dear 👍🏼

Originally posted by: Barbievishi20

IMG Freaking Awesome !!!!!!
Just loved jt !!!!
Nish you Rock Re 😎

Originally posted by: ...Ananya

Nishi 🤗
Happy wala Friendship Day to you too... 🤗
(Never mind that it's already Rakhi today...😛)

Coming to the OS...
Thank you for writing a continuation to your last OS. I was quite distressed about the open end in the last OS. 😛 😆
So yeah...Thanks for writing this before I decided to pester you about the end...

Swayam's pain was perfectly described. The changes that he had gone through.
His yearning to see Sharon and be with her was written beautifully. 👏
Rey's an amazing friend. Period. 😃
Thank goodness Swayam finally decided to do something about Sharon instead of just moping around...👍🏼
I loved the way you described SwaRon's meeting in the dunes again.😳 Really beautiful.
The emotions of both Swayam and Sharon were written extremely well. 👏
One could feel their pain and joy at being away from each other for so long and finally seeing each other again.
LOVED the way Swayam made Sharon give in to her feelings in the end. ❤️
Brilliant ending with the kiss. The emotions were excellently brought out. ☺️

The last line stole the show. Khoobsurat it is.


Overall another outstanding piece of writing. Keep writing more Jerry. 😃 😳 ⭐️