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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome update 😊
Loved Sharon's antics
Dance was beautifully penned of Swaron
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG!wat a fabulous update 👏..and ending toh..the truth and dare game was superb with sharon openly hugging swayami am actually at loss of words to describe your writing, the way you express the emotions everything is just so relatable
and your ending just proved the fact that no matter how angry or hurt
you are you can never deny your love
marvellous simply outstanding
eager for your next part
thanks for the PM
sorry for the late reply
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Posted: 11 years ago
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continue soon---i want to see grp's involvement more...a scene between him and swyam.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey gusy im back with 4th part...abhi bhi yeh complete nahi hai...last ek chotusa epiloge ho ga...which is necessary...this is the most bakwasest part i have ever written😆😆 pls bear with me...😆😆😆 thanks a lot guys for the response...im just flying...hope u guys will like it

Kaise Kahe Alvida

He looked at her puffed eyes...he kissed her forehead...kissed her..eyes..lovingly...kissed her tears away...he cupped her face..she closed her eyes in anticipation as she felt his hot breath ...he placed her lips on hers.

She felt as if she was transmitted to another world the moment he placed his lips on hers. He kissed her passionately yet slowly pouring all his love into a kiss. Forgetting every other physical...existence in the world around them... He pulled her more into himself... she snaked her arms around his neck...digging her nails...

They left each other as the need for air took priority...they stood there panting...resting their foreheads against each other... Tear dropped from Sharon's eye ...she smiled to herself as she felt a weird kind of happiness being with Swayam...seeing the walls of his anger crash...she felt too shy to look into his eyes...

Swayam couldn't hold it any longer. He has always longed for her. He has shut his feelings...he was compressing them every day...ignoring is heart... he couldn't act rationally anymore...

Swayam's mind began to think rationally... He opened his eyes...realised that how close they were...entire flashes of dance...kiss...came infront of him...he suddenly loosed his grip and moved back...

Sharon came back to senses once she felt Swayam has moved back...She has opened her eyes to look at him...

He was not able to look her. He is looking here and there except at her... he turned to the other side...

Sharon was surprised by action...

Sharon: Swayam...

Swayam: i...i ..i... iam sorry Sharon...

Sharon: sorry??

Swayam: i m really sorry..he turned around...i m really sorry...pata nahi...what got into me...how can i?? How can i?? Tumhare saath aise kaise...oh god...

He ran his fingers through his hair...

Sharon: Swayam...y are you feeling guilty...it was..it was...

Swayam: a mistake...how could i Sharon...mein tumhe kaise ...

Sharon: mistake...it was a mistake...tum guilty ho??

Swayam: ha mein...tum meri nahi ho...sharon...how can i..i have forced myself on you...

He got up and went and stood near door ...he hit it in frustration

Sharon couldn't take it anymore. What she felt few moments ago was...a pure...divine feeling...it was a mistake for him...a sheer mistake... She lost her cool...She walked in rage and made him turn around...

Sharon: MISTAKE...it was a sheer MISTAKE for u.Swayam... aur yeh guilt be kyun..because u feel im not yours...are you blind mr Swayam shikhawat... my love...my longing for you is nothing...itne mahinon se tumhe yakeen dilane ki koshish kar rahi hu ki mein tumhari aur sirf tumhari hun...par tum samajh na hi nahi chahte...tum mujhse gussa the...maine hurt ki tumhe...uski sazaa kaat rahi hun Swayam...mein aur kya karu tumhe yakken dilane keliye...ki.I LOVE YOU dammit... i need you in my life... yeh jo moment...jise mein special or divine samajh rahi thi ...was a mistake for you...y are you doing this to me Swayam...y are u doing this to ur self...to us...

Tum itna badal gaya Swayam...woh sab kuch bhul gaye...woh sab..har moments...humara pyar...itne jaldi sab kuch bhul gaye tum...tumne mujhe pyar ka matlab samjhe...ussi feeling kit um mistake kaise samjh sakte ho Swayam"

"Swayam ha..maine galti ki hai...par Swayam kya tumne ek baar bhi mujhe trust kiya...whole heartedly??..kysa kabhi yakeen kiya ki mai bhi tumhe unte intensity se pyar kar paungi?? "

"Nahi na...Agar tum chaho tho mein zindagi bhar prove karti rahungi Swayam...par agar sachmein mein tumhe irritate kar ya uncomfortable feel karwa rahi hunt ho mujhe batado/..mein tumhare raaste mein kabhi nahi aaungi..."

Swayam was shocked at the statements she made...he went into confusion as on if she was actually right...he couldn't look in to her eyes..and turned away...

Sharon couldn't take his silence any longer. She left the rehearsal leaving Swayam alone there...Swayam sank to the floor as tears made way through his eyes..he was confused yet again. He just couldn't make up his mind as on what to do. He couldn't even stop her from going..He just sat on the floor and went into thought process.

************

Sharon went back home. Tears didn't take the name of stopping. She went into her room and cried her heart out. Unknown to her ..her dad was watching her...she let her cry..she cried...took out her diary...scribbled something and went back to sleep

Gautam Rai prakash came to Sharon's room as she was sleeping holding the diary. He slowly took the dairy ...covered her with blanket ...switched off the light...He was about to place the diary on the table..he just opened first page...to see the picture of Sharon with someone else...

GRP:Swayam Shikhawat...

He kept the dairy and went to his room.

***************

Next day Sharon went to college.They had three days to prepare for the duet. She has waited for Swayam but he didn't come to collge. Sharon tried calling him but he didn't pick her calls. She tried enquiring about him but none of the gang knew anything about him.

Sharon: ab tum mujhe dekhna bhi nahi chahte ho Swayam. Kya itne paraye ho gaye... i guess you want to move on...u were right... agar mein true love karti ho tho i should let you go...mein tumhe aur tang nahi karungi Swayam...aur mein tumhe move on karte hue bhi dekh nahi sakti...

***************

Swayam again went off to his incognito mode to analyse things. He knew he loved Sharon ...he loves her till today...but there is some kind of ambiguity with his feelings...he didn't want to be unsure...he wanted to analyse so he came off without saying anything to anyone...

****************

Gautam Rai Prakash was looking at his daughter who was playing with her food staring in blank.

GRP: Sharon ...

Sharon: ha papa...

GRP: u ok...

Sharon: ha im fine...

GRP: khana khao...

Sharon: papa...mein itni short tempered kyun hu...kya sab ki tarah aap ko bhi hurt ki hai maine...she said as a tear escaped from her eyes...

GRP:Sharon...beta...u are an angel beta...aise kyun bol rahi ho... ...

Sharon hugged her dad and cried her heart out...

GRP: kya hua...

Sharon: kuch nahi papa...maine kabhi na kbahi mere life mein har kisi ko hurt ki hai...sab log eke k karke mujhe chod ke jaa rahe hai...atleast app raho mere saath...

GRP: shh...beta...aise baath nahi karte...if they are meant to be in ur life..woh log wapas aa jayenge...pls...ab chup ho jao...

Sharon: hmm...

GRP: waise tho maine socha ki parso jaao...par i think iwill stay for more days...

Sharon: nahi papa...rukhne ki zaroorat nahi hai...infact...mein bhi aap ke saath aungi...yaha rehne ka man nahi hai mera...jab man ho jaaye wapas aungi...

GRP: jaise tum kaho...

Sharon: kal hi chalte hai...

GRP: teek hai kal hi chale jaayenge...

***********

It was early morning hours ...Swayam came from his incognito mode...

He has entered his house to see an elderly person sitting and waiting for him.

Swayam: ji...aap ...

GRP: Gautam Rai Prakash...

Swayam's eyes got widened in shock...Sharon's dad infornt of him...he felt a weird kind of sensation ...fear...excitement...he didn't know what...

Swayam: he ..hello sir...

GRP: Swayam right...

Swayam: yes...yes sir...

GRP: tumse kuch baat karna tha...tum freshen up ho kea a jao..lets talk...

Swayam: sure sir...

Swayam went and got freshened up in no time he came back...

GRP: walk...

Swayam: Sure sir...

They kept walking on the road...

Swayam was feeling nervous...they didn't speak anything till long...

GRP: tho...u love my daughter...

Swayam became speechles...he didn't expect this situation...he was not prepared or so... he wiped swaet droplets from his forehead...calmed himself down...

Swayam: yes sir...

He looked at Swayam who was neverous yet confident about his love...

GRP: tumhe pata hai Swayam...maine kabhi bhi apni beti korote hue nahi dekha...atleast disron ke saamne tho kabhi nahi...mujh pe gayi hai...humhe apna emotions dusron ko dikhane mein badi takleef hoti hai...pata nahi kyun...'

Swayam kept staring at him...

GRP: nahi meri beti ko kisi cheez keliye regret karte hue dekha...she loves perfection...pehli baar..usse itna lost aur takleef mein dekha...

GRP: agar mein tumhare baarein mein pehle se nahi jaanta hota...ab tak tum is halat mein mujhse baat nahi kar rahe hote...

He just looked at Swayam and gave him a smile...

GRP: Mein yaha tumhe warn karne ya...kuch kehne nahi aaya.hun... jitna maine tumhare baarein mein suna hai...i wanted to meet u once and see kit um waakai mein aisa ho kya...i m glad u are...

Swayam gave him a smile...

GRP: It was Sharon's fault ki woh tumhe itna hurt ki...i can understand... actually hum yaha se jaa rahe hai hamesha ke liye...so i thought ki ekk baar tumse milna chhiye..

Swayam : hum matlab...aap Sharon ko hamesha ke liye leke jaa rahe hai...

GRP: mein nahi...woh aana chahti hai..chalo it was nice meeting u young man...bye take care...

************

The moment Sharon's dad said that they are gonna go from Mumbai forever...Swayam's senses have stopped working...only he knew how he stayed away for four months when she went to delhi...He was not able to think... he was angry with her...he told that he wanted to move on...but..how can she leave him...forever...but he wanted it right...he wanted to move on right...did he..

He just couldn't sit or stand ..he tried calling her...but she didn't answer his calls...he went to her home ..to find our that she went to college...Sharon went to college..to say bye to her friends...say that she was going on a break...

Everyone was surprised by her sudden decision...she has searched for Swayam...she forgot her phone with her dad...so she couldn't call him..

Rey felt bad that he behaved with her so badly...He went and hugged her...she had decided to go to Swayam's house and say a final bye to him...

She left college just then Swayam reached college to know that she left...he panicked...

Rey: dude u ok...

Swayam: Sharon...jaa rahi hai..how can she...

Simmi: y cant she Swayam...u wanted to move on right...

Swayam : bewakoof hu na...isliye...pls rey...mujhe usse milna hai...pls kaha hai woh...

Rey: abhi tak airport gayi nahi hogi...chalo we will catch her...

Entire gang went with Swayam searching for Sharon...

Meanwhile Sharon went to Swayam's house...only to find he was not there... disheartened she started to airport...

Sharon: Shayad swayam kush hoga ab at lest kuch dino keliye...i love you Swayam...

Gang has reached airport..they were calling Sharon...but she was not lifting the call...

Sharon has reached the airport where her dad was waiting for her...she was sad that she couldn't meet Swayam before going...

Suddenly someone pushed her and her cabin baggage fell down scattering all the things..

Sharon: what the hell...

She sat down and was collecting all of them...

**********

Swayam was frantically searching for her...it felt as if someone was snatching his heart and taking it away...he doesn't care anymore...he didn't know y but the thought that she will not be there is not allowing to think anything...He needs her...more than he needs to breathe...

Just then he saw her...picking up scattered luggage...

*********

He went and stood infront of her...she got up adjusting her bag..just to see him...

Even gang came behind...

Sharon: Swayam tum yaha...

Swayam: ek baar batana bhi zaroori nahi samjha Sharon??

Sharon: nahi Swayam...mein aayi thi..par tum nahi they...

Swayam: tho...tum...jaa. rahi ...ho...

Sharon: ha...jaa rahi hun...

She said trying hold a smile while her eyes are watering...

Swayam: mujhe chodke...

Sharon: Tum bhi wahi chahte ho na...ki mein chale jaaun tum hare zindagi se...

Swayam:So...tumhara challenge itni jalgi give up karli...

Sharon: kaun sa challenge...oh wohhh...

Swayam: itna jaldi give up kar diya...

Sharon: ha...mein tumhare tarah nahi hun na Swayam...mujhe jaldi gussa aa jaatha hai...patience zara sa bhi nahi...aur shayad isliye bhi kyun mein jaanthi hun...ki i don't deserve u...

Swayam:Tumhe tho bas reason chahiye na Sharon mujhse door rahne ki...

Sharon: tum mujhse door hona chahte ho...mein nahi...

Swayam: chodke tum jaa rahi ho mein nahi...

Sharon: ha kyun ki mein yaha rehke tumhe move on karte hue nahi dek sakti...utna himmmat nahi hai mujhme...

Swayam: tumhe chodke kisi aur ko pyar karne ka strength nahi hai mujhme...

Sharon got tears in eyes hearing this...

Swayam: Im sorry Sharon...i m sorry for being rude to u all these days...i just do it anymore...i need u...i love you...pls mat jaao...

Sharon hugged Swayam...and cried her heart out...hugging him ...

Gang saw GRP coming towards Swayam and Sharon...they all went and covered them...making some stupid converstions...

Sharon: i m sorry Swayam...i love you...

Swayam: tumne yeh kaise ssoch liya ki mujhe hamesha keliye ke chodke jaaogi...

Sharon: hamesha??ye kisne kaha...

Swayam: ha...

Sharon: ha mein jaa rahi thi...par kuch time ke liye...mein hamesha ke liye kyun jaaugi??

Swayam: par...

Swayam looked to other side...GRP giving a grin to him,...Swayam understood it all...He smiled to himself..

Sharon: kya...

Swayam: kuch nahi...

Swayam hugged her again...they stayed for some time and broke hug...as GRP came towards her...

GRP: hmm..so tumm aa rahi ho mer saath...

Sharon: papa woh...

GRP: hmm samajh gaya mein...chalo isliye meine bas aopne liye ticket liya hai...

Sharon: huh...asie kaise...par mujhe bhi nahi pata tha mein ...

GRP: mujhe pata tha...

Sharon: kaise?/

GRP: bas pata tha... he said smiling at Swayam...

GRP: arrey timhara phone reh gaya mere paas...chalo bavh o got to go...Sharon khayal rakhna...tum sab bhi...

He left from there...Swayam smiled to himself...

Gang: guys finally ...tum dono ek saath...

Sharon held Swayam's arm protectively...smiling after so many days...

Swayam: chale...

Sharon: hmmm...

Just then Swayam got a message from some number...

"Tumhare ghar mein ek parcel choda hai...deklena..."

Swayam turned back...he understood from whom the msg was...

Sharon: kya hua..

Swayam" kuch nahi...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMGGG...It was beautifulll...varshu u seem to be a bollywood fan...airport pe hero heroine ka milna...loved it...

loved the emotional conversation between swaron...swayam's inner turmoil..confusion...

GRP is such a cool dad...loved his role...he did everything,...still he didnt interfere...he just let them take their decision

LOVED the airport scene...the confrontation...finally they are behaving like a couple...showing love through fights...

cant wait for last part...brilliant stuff varshu...loved it
Edited by deep_Tanha - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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I read alk the parts together at once and it was just so amazing...loved it alot varshi...when sharon was trying to win back swayam and the attenpts she made was so cute specially the truth and dare was hug was so innocent..it was quite emotional seeing sharon going through so mych just get him back in her life...the rasiya wala scene was so emotionally romantic it was kinda hot 😉 and sharonz dad was so cool i loved him i just purely loved the climax and how sharonz dad passes smile to swayam and sharon being unaware of the whole thing happning btwn thm too...amazengly written it was really really nyc u r so good varshi ...thnx for such an amazing os...i enjoyed it so much
Edited by Swaron.maniac - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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u know di yeh two shot ke alawa sab kuch ban gaya hain 😆
4 parts are done and more to go..
you better make it a SS 😈

and coming to the part it was phenomenon
i was awestruck
it was so beautiful..

i was just hoping ki aaj update mil jaye and i got one 😳😳
this was totally swaron-ish..
just want more and more cn't get over this OS..

i am loving GRP
and loving the airport as well as the couple-ish behavior ❤️

thanks for the PM
please give the next part jaldi se.. 😳😳
can't wait
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Posted: 11 years ago
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loved d whole update di...

grp ka roll was aswom...


airport oe confession...cool...

kha se ate ga aisa ideas...

plzz update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome update 😊
Beautifully penned
GRP turned the cupid
Love the Swaron moments
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Finally unreserving phew kaafi kuch bolna hai on this update but again starting with the same thing you were extraordinary as you always are varshu superb part tha..😊.
The liplock they shared was beyond the word beautiful something very pure and lovely I could feel their emotions in that moment the pain of being away and then finally covering the distance through the kiss and finally being able to express emotions.. There was the initial shyness after sharing an intimate moment with your loved one but also the urge to see his face and sharon was feeling the same.. Then swayam's aloofness shocked me and even more shocking was his "Mistake" statement and then sharon's outburst all of it was written down by you in such a beautiful manner that I have no words to tell you how much I loved that section.. Her pain her desperation to have swayam back in her life, her undying love for him and last but not the least swayam's utter shock at her outburst was penned down perfectly by you great flow of emotions varshu..👍🏼.
Then the heart to heart talk between swayam and sharon's dad was good to read bechaara swayam kaafi darr gaya tha sharon ke papa se baat karte time..😆. Then the shock planned for swayam by GRP.. He did nothing to bring them together yet he did everything to bring them close..😊.
Swayam's desperation to stop sharon from going finding her everywhere to stop her and talk to her was written nicely by you good job varshu..😊.
Last but not the least the dramatic airport meet was good bollywood ki bahut badi fan hai tu lagta hai..😆. But mujhe pasand aaya.. I loved you update.. Ab epilogue jaldi post karna theek hai..😊.
Love,
Kashmi..🤗.
Edited by sweet16cash - 11 years ago

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