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Mahadevi

@Morana

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: musicndance2
Tum sab ki itni aadat pad gayi hai.. iss liye shaayad forum visit karungi... No cmmnts abt the show...

Yess ye dosti hum nehi todenge. 😃

Jarurat padne pad Writers ki saar podenge ! 😃

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musicndance2

@musicndance2

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: AnnaPaquinFan

Yess ye dosti hum nehi todenge. 😃

Jarurat padne pad Writers ki saar podenge ! 😃

Bilkul...

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Riddhima

@Khushi_Dillse

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: VasusenaRadheya

Hey , I am in love with your username ! 👏

Thanks Gargi...I love ashkara...yaar muje bohot bura laga tha jab ashoka ne ahankara k love ko reject kia tha so SS or OS se hi kaam chala leti hu 😉😆...even I don't understand ashoka's so called friendship...sab kuch kar jao ahan k liye but she is still his frd...lo batao ye bhi koi baat hui...

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Siriusly Serious

@Quantum-Dot

Viewbie

+ 16

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: AnnaPaquinFan

Thank you so much !! 😳 It means such a lot to me. 😳

Do you really think I'm planning to torture you guys only with my OS ?? 😉 There's more to the story. Picture avi baki hai mere dost ! 😉

Oh really!! Post the next part ASAP re...cant wait to read the next part ...

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Siriusly Serious

@Quantum-Dot

Viewbie

+ 16

Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: AnnaPaquinFan

Yess ye dosti hum nehi todenge. 😃

Jarurat padne pad Writers ki saar podenge ! 😃

Word...Ab writers ke saar phodnese CAS ki story ka kuch nai honewala re Gargi ...its completely out of the line now...

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Riddhima

@Khushi_Dillse

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Planck
Oh really!! Post the next part ASAP re...cant wait to read the next part ...

Really...wow I m waiting for it...Please update soon 😛😳

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zaara610

@zaara610

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Loved it..well written..eagerly waiting for next part..😳

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vidhya

@vidhu22

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#18

gargi dear first of all a big sorry fr reading u r os so late and wht hav u just written it's just awesome u r views abt ahankara is the main reason i started liking ashkara and again u corrupted my mind wid ashkara i wnt atleast 10% of wht u've written to be seen in cas bt i don't think it'll happen so plz update part 2 or extend to more parts i would love to read more

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Michelle

@-ChildOfChrist-

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Loved the os! When are you updating?

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guenhwyvar

@guenhwyvar

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#20

This was wonderfully beautiful, a fascinating read. You really captured Ahankara's confusion over Ashok. She knows she loves him, she feels love for him, but at the same time she's annoyed that he couldn't care to write a letter to her.

I love your descriptions and your style or writing for Ahankara.

Maybe, you could write a prologue part II before Part II of the story comes up (don't kill me part II waiters) written from Ashok's POV that sort of fills in all the blanks given by Ahankara's POV. Like maybe Ashok wrote a letter but thought that it was too romantic and he didn't want to leave Ahankara behind with hopes of love since that would just hurt her even more so he made RG send her a letter.

I really enjoyed your premise and the flow of the story. Ashok's POV is just something I'd be interested in reading 😆😆

👏👏👏 ⭐️⭐️⭐️ 😃😃😃

Edited by shyam09 - 9 years ago