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Posted: 15 years ago
#51

Originally posted by: bmtdluver

nice update, poor bharti, her life is soo complicated



ya, her life is really complicated😭
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Posted: 15 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: Blueberry_07

Nice part Kanu!!..I loved it!...😊

Now i gotta say though the Rocky Armu is HOT like Aamir in CINTAA,..😳 i rather Bharti goes with her College friend Armu..!! He is just so sweet..The fact that he is behind bars for Bharti's sake...and telling her "You don't know how it's like being in a jail..don't worry i'll be fine..."..Ahh so sweet man!! Also he said "would you be able to take away Jia joy..? " (smth like that ...sry i forgot the line..😆) So this means he doesn't want Bharti to reveal the culprit Rocky..He is sacrificing for Bharti so much and i feel he's the only true lover for Bharti..So "Jail" (😆) Armu all the way!!..😃...Me love the College/Jail Armu..!!...and well i actually got a feeling that Rocky didn't kill Sam..Maybe someone else is in the picture..
Hmm...Still has the mystery going on..and i really want the Jail Armu to be set free..!! He has a heart of gold..and is so sweet..and hence he deserves Bharti's love the most..!! 😃..I loved the Jia-Bharti moments..But i don't like Rocky...😆(though he is So Hot!)...so since i dun like Rocky..i dun like the eye contact they shared..and i dun want them to be a family..i want Jia and Bharti and the Jail Armu to be a family..!!😃 😆....
Love it..😊 and jaldi next part update karo!! I want to know how it ends..!!



will edit after posting the last part😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: sejal719

loved the parts plz write more soon cant w8 :D



Thank you Sejal😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: trueraginifan

awesome part... 👏 👏 continue soon.... very curious to know what will happen next.. 😉



Thanks a lot Divisha😃
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Posted: 15 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: Zoya_01

Awesome Di
Loved it
Continue soon

Take Care
Zoya



Thank you Zoya🤗

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Posted: 15 years ago
#56
The last part:

Friends, I have written two alternative endings. I hope you will like both the stories😊


Part 1:

Bharti was standing outside the balcony. Suddenly a lady (neighbour) came in.


Lady: you are Bharti right? Jia is looking for you.😊


Bharti came in. It was cake cutting time. Jia cut the cake, first she fed Armaan and then she fed Bharti.😊


After that it was photography time. The photographer took many pics of Jia, Jia-Armaan, Jia-Bharti. Finally the photographer wanted to take a family pic of Armaan-Jia-Bharti. Bharti was really unwilling, Armaan understood, he told the photographer "hum tino ki photo lene ki koi zaroorat nahi hai", but Jia was really sad. Ultimately Bharti agreed, which made both Jia and Armaan very happy. 😊Bharti was still not talking to Armaan.


Part 2:

Next day, when Bharti woke up she found that Jia was not feeling comfortable. She kept her hand on Jia's forhead, it was really hot. 😲Bharti very quickly covered Jia with a blanket; she needed to call the doctor. But she needed to call Armaan first.😒


Bharti: Armaan, Armaan, utho, Jia ko bukhhar hua hai😒


Armaan jumped off from his bed and ran towards Jia. He picked her up and tried to wake her. Jia very slowly opened her eyes and said very weakly "papa".😔 Armaan hugged her tightly, tears running down his cheeks. 😭


Armaan didn't know what to do. 😕He started searching for his mobile, still holding Jia in his lap. He was totally panicked and was not able to see his mobile which was lying on his table.😒


Bharti picked up the mobile and gave it to Armaan. But Armaan was still panicking, he was not able to dial the doctor's number.😒


Bharti snatched the mobile from him.


Bharti: doctor ka naam batao


Armaan: Dr. Murthi


Bharti found out doctors number, she called the doctor, told him what happened. The doctor told he will be coming within some minutes.😊


Doctor came; he examined Jia, prescribed some medicines. Armaan was so sad that the doctor had to tell everything to Bharti. Armaan was sitting beside Jia all the time, he was not sleeping, not eating. Bharti was feeling really awful, she couldn't eat as well. At night Jia was feeling much better. Armaan had fallen asleep beside Jia.😊

Bharti couldn't sleep that night. She kept looking at this father and daughter.😳


Part 3:

Next day Jia was feeling much better. 😊Bharti was not talking with Armaan, but it was due to Jia they started talking normally again. 😊Armaan got a call from his office that he had an urgent meeting. He didn't want to leave Jia. Bharti told him to go, she assured him that Jia will be alright.😊


All the day Bharti spent her time with Jia. Jia was very happy she was enjoying a lot. Bharti kissed Jia's cheek and thought to herself "mujhe maaf kar dena Jia".😭


In the evening, Armaan came back, he came to Jia and kissed her cheek. He was very happy to see Jia fit and fine.😃


Armaan: Bharti, kya tum thodi der ke liye mere kamre mein a sakti ho?


Bharti was confused,😕 she followed Armaan to his room.


Armaan: who are you Bharti?😡


Bharti: main Bharti hun. Tum kya kehna chahte ho?😕


Armaan: Who is Sam and who is Armaan?😡


Bharti understood that somehow Armaan came to know her plan.😒

Bharti: wo 'main..


Armaan: tumhe lagta hai ke maine kisika khoon kiya hai? tum yahan pe mere khilaaf saboot dhundhne ayi ho?😒


Bharti: Armaan'😔


Armaan: Main kitna galat tha Bharti, maine socha ke tum Jia ko pyar karti ho, maine socha ke tum mujhse''😭He kept his hands on his forehead ''Bharti, tum abhi, isi waqt hamare ghar se nikal jao, tumhe shayad mere khilaaf saboot bhi mil gaya hoga'..😒


Bharti: Armaan, main kuchh bolna chahti hun😔


Armaan: just go, leave us alone, aur kabhi bhi Jia ke karee bane ki koshish bhi mat karna.😡


Bharti had decided that she will leave today, but she never thought she will be thrown out of this house. 😭Bharti came to Jia's room, she was playing with her doll. She kissed her and said "I will miss you Jia".😭 She picked up her bag (which was already packed) and came out of the house.😭


(Actually what happened is: Armaan is a lawyer. Sam's father has hired a lawyer, but due to some reasons he was not able to continue his job, so he gave the case to Armaan. Armaan saw the case file. What he found out was---

Sam was killed by Armaan (Bharti's friend), he is in jail now. Police have evidences against him. But he has a girlfriend named Bharti who says that Armaan didn't kill Sam, according to her, there is a person named Rocky, who is actually behind this murder and she is collecting evidences against that Rocky.

So I hope you can understand why Armaan (Rocky) was angry with Bharti.😒)

Part 4:

Bharti came to jail to meet Armaan. Armaan noticed that Bharti looked miserable.


Bharti: Armaan, can you do anything for me?


Armaan: what's the matter Bharti? Why are you looking so miserable?😕


Bharti: tell me na? kya tum mere liye sab kuchh kar sakte ho?


Armaan: ha Bharti, anything.😊


I have submitted all the evidence against me; I want you to support me. I want you to give some evidence which will tell that you were not in Sam's house that night. I will tell the judge that it was me who killed Sam, not you.😔


Armaan: You know something Bharti, I always thought ek din to zaroor ayega jab tum Rocky ko bhul ke mujhse pyar karogi, but I was wrong. Main kabhi tumhare dil mein tha hi nahi. It was Rocky all the time. At first you loved him, then you hated him, and now you started loving him again.😊


Bharti: I don't love him Armaan.😒


Armaan: kames kaam khud se jhut to mat bolo.😒 Do you really believe that Rocky killed Sam?


Bharti kept silent for a while, then she said: Nahi Armaan, he cannot kill anyone.😊


Armaan: mujhe bhi nahi lagta ke Rocky can kill somebody, tumne mujhe kaha hai howmuch he loves his daughter.😊


Bharti started crying: to main kya karoo Armaan, main kya karoo?


Armaan: Bharti, yeh waqt barbaad karne ke liye nahi hai, just go to Rocky, tell him the truth, tum dono milke sach ko dhundhke nikalo, aur mujhe is jail se bahar nikalo. Don't waste your time Bharti''😊


Bharti got up''.she held Armaan's hand. "Thank you Armaan, main abhi ja rahi hun" she left.

Armaan: jaldi jao Bharti, mujhe is jail mein ghutan si ho rahi hai.😭

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Part 5:

Bharti came to Armaan (Rocky). At first he was not ready to hear anything. Finally he agreed. Bharti told him about everything, how she got trapped, how Armaan helped her. 😊

They understood that there is somebody who wanted to trap Rocky; he/she killed Sam, made a duplicate copy of Rocky's locket, and kept it beside Sam's body. But Bharti reached there, possibly Sam called Bharti (using Rocky's name), and unfortunately she was trapped instead of Rocky. On the same day Rocky got a call from Preeti, he got Jia, and he left India, knowing nothing about Sam or Bharti.


(Unfortunately Rocky didn't identify Bharti after 4 years, it was because he never noticed her in college, so many girls were after him😳).


Armaan (he was still upset with Bharti, he couldn't forget how Bharti cheated him and Jia and additionally he thought that Bharti loves her friend Armaan, she never loved him😒):

OK Bharti, main puri tarah koshish karunga Armaan ko jail se bahar nikalne ka. aur mujhe yeh bhi pata karna hai, wo kaun hai jo mujhe phasana chahta tha.


Bharti wanted to meet Jia.😊


Armaan: Nahi Bharti, tum Jia se milne ka haq kho chuki ho, humdono ek khush family hai aur rahenge, we don't need any third person in between us.😒


Bharti was very very sad, she came back to her house.😭

The song playing in the back ground


pyaar hai ya saja, aai mere dil batatoot ta kyon nahi dard ka silsilais pyaar mein hon kaise kaise imntihaanye pyaar likhe kaisi kaisi dastaanya rabba de de koi jaan bhi agardilbar pe ho na, dilbar pe ho na koi asar


and we could see Both the Armaans and Bharti very sad.


Part 6:

Ultimately Armaan got evindences. Actually Armaan met Sam's father. Armaan instantly recognized him. It was a music competition ~ 6 years ago.This man, who is happens to be Sam's father offered Armaan a good lot of money so that Armaan sings badly and his laadli daughter gets the first prize. Armaan denied him, that person warned him "main dekh lunga tumhe, aaj tak kisine Rishi Chopra ko na nahi kaha hai".


but after six years, he didn't recognize Rocky, to him he is Armaan Sinha.😆


Armaan met his daughter. She said howmuch she loved her brother. She said his father wanted to close this case, but it was her wish, she wanted that her brother's murderer should be punished.


Armaan: Mr. Chopra case bandh karna chahte the?😲


His daughter (Ria): actually papa ne kabhi bhi bhaiya se pyar nahi kiya, he was my step brother, Sam ke papa koi aur tha, uske papa marne ke baad ma papa se shaadi kii.


Armaan found out that Sam's mother was very rich, when she died she gave 70 % of her property to Sam and 30% to Mr. Chopra and her daughter Ria. After Sam's death, all the propertuy came to Ria (according to the will).


Armaan understood that it was definitely Mr. Chopra's plan to kill Sam, he never loved his stepson and he loves his daughter more than anything. Ultimately Armaan could arrange all the evidences.



He gave all the evidences to Bharti's lawyer. But he told the lawyer that in the court he wants to stay as Armaan Sinha, Mr. Chopra's lawyer, he didn't want others to know that he is Rocky. The evindences were sufficient to prove Armaan innocence.


Finally Armaan was freed. Bharti was very very happy. She ran towards him and hugged him. Armaan (Rocky) saw it, he felt very bad😭, He left the court without meeting Bharti and Armaan.😭

Armaan (Rocky) dressed himself as Rocky, the way he dressed when he was in his college. He came to meet Mr. Chopra in Jail.😉


Mr. Chopra: Rocky, tum'😲


Armaan wore his shirt, brushed his hair, and put on his spectacles.😆


Mr. Chopra: (shocked to see Armaan like that) Mr. Armaan Sinha😲


Armaan: No, its Rocky, the Rockstar.😉

Part 7:


Armaan (Rocky) came back home, He picked up Jia and kissed her.😊


Jia: papa, Bharti aunty kabhi bhi nahi ayegi?


Armaan: nahi Jia and he hugged her tightly.😭


Just then the door bell rang. Armaan opened the door and saw Armaan there.😊


Armaan (Rocky): tum? yahan?😕


Armaan: kya tum kabhi bhi Bharti ko maaf nahi karoge? Bharti Jia ko bohut pyar karti hai, aur tumhe bhi. Please Rocky jao aur usse ghar wapas leke ao.😊


Armaan (R) was confused:😕 mujhe lagtha tha ke Bharti tumse pyar karti hai😕


Armaan: No Rocky, she always loved you and she still loves you.😊


Armaan ( R ): tell me her address, I will go and bring her back. 😳


Armaan gave her the address. Just when he was about to leave.


Armaan: Rocky, can you borrow me your shirt?

Armaan (R): what?😲

Armaan: Actually tum Rocky banke jaoge to Bharti ko zyada achcha lagega.😉

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Bharti's house, the door bell rang. Bharti opened the door.😊


Armaan (dressed as Rocky): do wanna have dinner with me?😉


Bharti started smiling: yesssss😃


Armaan: On one condition, tum kabhi bhi Jia ko chhorke kahin nahi jaogi.😒


Bharti came and hugged him: Armaan, you know something, main jab college main tumhe pasand karti thi, that was not love, that was infatuation, mujhe to us Armaan se pyar ho gaya jo apne se zada Jia ko pyar karta hai. I love the father side of yours.😊


Armaan: So, why are we wasting time? Jia is waiting for us.😃

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P. S. Alternative ending-next post😊

do tell me what is your opinion about this part?
Edited by kaninikabasuray - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
#57

Alternative ending😊

Part 1

Suddenly somebody came and stood beside Bharti. It was Bharti itself in white Saree, her alter ego.😳


Bharti's AE- what are you doing Bharti?


Bharti: He is doing that again.😒


AE: Bharti don't let him control your mind, apni aankhein bandh karo, aur socho tumhara dil kya chahta hai.😊


Bharti closed her eyes and saw her friend Armaan standing behind the bars, looking at her very coolly.😊


AE: pata chala tumhara dil kya chahta hai? Bharti nodded her head. To apna dimag ko sahi tarah control karo. Don't fight with this Rocky, usse dosti karlo. Tumhe uske khilaf evidence ekaththa karna hai.


Bharti understood what she has to do. She came in, in the mean time Armaan finished singing. It was time to cut the cake. Jia was very happy, Armaan saw Bharti smiling at him. He was happy too.😊 At night when everyone had gone and Jia had fallen asleep:


Armaan: Bharti, kya tumne mujhe maaf kar diya?


Bharti : Ha Armaan, I have nothing against you.


Armaan gave a wide smile: to tum jake so jao, bohut thak chuki hogi.

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Part 2

Bharti in jail:


Armaan: Jia ka birthday kaisa raha?


Bharti: It was fun, she looked worried.😔


Armaan: Rocky aur Jia ke bare mein soch rahe ho?


Bharti: No Armaan, I am thinking about how to get evidence as fast as possible, we really have very less time in our hand. You know what, in dino mein Rocky mujhe vishwas karne laga hai, he told me a lot of things, main baton baton mein usse 4 saal pehle us din ke bare mein puchhungi.😎


Armaan: tum uske vishwas ko torogi? You want to cheat him?😒


Bharti looked at Armaan very angrily😡: Its not me, its him who cheated me😡, its because of him you are behind these bars,😡 and you know what Armaan its you who never wants to come out of this jail,😒 tum agar chaho to yeh prove kar sakte ho ke tum usdin Armaan ke ghar nahi gayethe, but you will not do it. 😡You are not ready to help me.😒

Mujhe pata hai kyun, tum meri life khatre mein nahi dalna chahte, lekin tum kabhi yeh nahi samjhoge ke in char salon mein tumne mujhe kitna dard diya hai,😒 you will never understand😭. And she left from there.


Armaan (thinking): Bharti tum samajh nahi pa rahi ho. I am not worried about Rocky, I am worried about Jia.😔

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Part 3:


When Bharti came back home she saw Armaan singing and Jia is listening to him sitting on his lap.

tum se hi (Jab We Met)


Bharti came and smiled at them. Bharti came to her room and just when she was going to close the door (because she wanted to change her dress), Armaan came in pushing the door.😲

Bharti: kya hua Armaan? What do you want?😲


Armaan came in and closed the door from inside. Bharti was really afraid.


Armaan came close to her, sat down in front of her and said


Armaan: I love you Bharti, will you marry me?😳


Bharti : What the hell you think of yourself? How could you even think about it?😡

No Bharti didn't say this, Armaan's voice reminded her something.


It was 5 years ago, Valentines day, the college terrace. It was a place where Armaan and Bharti used to study together. Bharti never wanted to read and it was Armaan's duty to teach her.😳 But that day Armaan proposed her.😳


He sat in front of her and asked her: I love you Bharti, will you marry me?😳



Bharti instantly started laughing. "you must be joking Armaan, we are just in our second year of college and you want to marry now?"😆


Armaan's face instantly faded. Bharti realized that Armaan was serious. She sat in front of him, held his hand and said.


Bharti: I am sorry Armaan, you are my best friend, but I love someone else.😔


Armaan instantly stood up and started smiling :Its OK Bharti, don't worry, but I will always be your friend.😊


Bharti got up and hugged him "of course Armaan"😊


Bharti rejected Armaan but he never left her. She still can remember the incident when Bharti lost her puppy, she was sooo sad. 😭She was not able to eat or sleep for several days. Armaan always tried to make her happy. He used to sing "Kabhi kabhi Bharti''" to make her happy.😊 Ultimately he found out her puppy, she still doesn't know how he did that.😕


Bharti was lost in Armaan's thoughts'.suddenly'..


Armaan (Rocky) stood up and came near Bharti: kya hua Bharti, kya main kuchh galat keh diya?😕


Bharti understood that she can't deny now, it will be more dangerous for her investigation, she should say "yes"😒, Armaan will trust her more and she will be able to find more evidences.😎


Bharti: Nahi Armaan, tumne kuchh galat nahi kaha, I love you too Armaan.


Armaan came closer to her and just when he was about to kiss her lips, Bharti pushed him very hard.😲


Suddenly Armaan's expression changed unexpectedly, he grabbed her neck and pressed them hard, his eyes were filled with anger and hatred.😡


Armaan: aur kitna jhut bologi Bharti? Abh sach sach batao tum kyun ayi ho yahan?😡


(Actually what happened is that Jia lost one of her toys Armaan was searching for it, during the process, Bharti's bag fell from the cupboard, he got some papers related to Sam's murder. Actually Bharti usually carry the papers with her but unfortunately it was raining heavily that day so she decided to keep them within Jia's cupboard. Usually Armaan comes back to home after her, but that day she was really unlucky😒)


Bharti was almost chocking to death, she pushed Armaan hard, and then controlled herself. She was able to switch on her recorder.😊


Bharti: tumhe kuchh galat faimi ho raha hai Armaan. Main yahan pe nahi ayi, tum mujhe laye ho yahan.😊


Armaan: Who is Sam? Tum uske bare mein kya janti ho?😡



Bharti: Sam, I don't know any Sam.😕


Armaan came and grabbed Bharti's neck again: Jhut mat bolo,😡 kitna galat tha main, mujhe laga tum mujhse'.😒mejhe laga tha ke tum Jia se pyar karti ho, kitna achcha sapna tha mere dil mein''.tum actually mere khilaf sabot dhundrahi ho?😡😔


Bharti: leave me Armaan, it really hurts.😔


Armaan: what do you think? Main tumhe chhor dunga? Aur tum jaake police ko sab bata dogi'..phir Jia ka kya hoga? Bharti, tumne kabhi socha hai Jia ka kya hoga?😡


Main yeh baat tumhe kyun puchh raha hun, tumhe kya pata mere aur Jia ke relationship ke bare mein?😒


I know I was very bad in college, I know I hated Sam a lot, but it was just an accident. It's true we had a fight that day but I never wanted to kill him, he wanted to hit me with his knife, I killed him for self defense.


Bharti: you killed him? Lekin tumne usdin mujhe apne ghar pe kyun bulaye the?


Armaan loosened his hands, Bharti was able to take some breath.


Armaan: tumhe? Main to tumhe pehlibar wo rastein mein dekha tha.😔


(Unfortunately Rocky didn't identify Bharti after 4 years, it was because he never noticed her in college, so many girls were after him😳)


Bharti: tumne dinner ke liye apne ghar pe mujhe nahi bulaya? Main gayi tumhare ghar aur mujhe wahan Sam ki body mili.😒



Armaan: mere ghar? I killed Sam in his house. He called me in his house, and when I went there he suddenly started abusing me. I was really angry and we started fighting with each other.😒


Bharti understood that it was Sam who called Bharti in his house, and when Bharti reached there Sam was already killed by Armaan. (Really if Armaan didn't kill Sam that day, I don't know what Sam would have done to Bharti)


Bharti: Armaan, meri ek baat manoge? Kya tum police ko sab sach sach bataoge?


Armaan: tum pagal ho gayi ho?😡 tumhe pata hai police ko pata chalega to wo mujhe pakar lenge aur phir Jia ka kya hoga?😒


Bharti: You can't hide this from Jia Armaan, ek na ek din usse sach ka pata zaroor chal jaega. Aur tumhe pata hai tumhari wajah se mere dost Armaan 4 saalon se jail mein hai?😡


Armaan: who is Armaan?


Bharti: tumhe kuchh bhi nahi pata?😕


Armaan: dekho, the day when I killed Sam, the same day Preeti called me, I got Jia, aur uske baad I left India, meri life mein uske baad sirf Jia i hai, mujhe aur kuchh pata nahi hai.😒


Bharti: described Armaan what happened 4 years back. Armaan heard everything; he removed his hands from Bharti's neck.😊


Bharti: Armaan mujhe pata hai, tum burhe nahi ho, please help me, ek tum hi ho jo Armaan ko bacha sakte ho.😊


Armaan saw Bharti's eyes filled with tears.😭


Armaan: you love him?


Bharti: Armaan, its only you who can help us.


Armaan: "us?"m you mean tum aur Armaan? ya, I forgot, you don't belong to my family. 😡But I am sorry Bharti, I can't help you. And you know why? Main tumse pyar karta hun but Jia se zada nahi.😡


Bharti: OK, main hamesha ke liye is ghar ko chhor ke chali ja rahi hun.😒


Bharti was about to leave the room when Armaan grabbed her again.😲


Armaan: give me your recorder.😡


Bharti hit Armaan's head with Jia's wooden pencil box, Armaan fainted instantly.😲


Bharti came out of that room, she saw Jia sleeping on the sofa. She picked her up, came out of the house and went straight to her lawyer.


Part 4:

For some days, police was not able to catch Armaan (Rocky), but finally he was caught. He couldn't go anywhere, because he only wanted to make Jia happy, he wanted to meet Jia and take her with him.😊 Police trapped him using Jia and finally caught him.🤢


Armaan (Rocky) was sent to jail.😒 Armaan (Bharti's friend) was free.😃


Bharti came to meet Armaan (now this time Rock😆y) in the jail.


Armaan: abh tum mujhse kya chahti ho? Jia kahan hai?😡


Bharti: Jia is with me Armaan, I will take care of her. I will never let her know that his father is a criminal. I told her that her father has gone to America, he has some work there.😊


Armaan was shocked😲: main usse mil nahi sakta?


Bharti: humlog koshish karenge jitni jaldi ho sake tumhe jail se nikalne ke liye, tum burhe nahi ho Armaan, it was Sam, who was bad. We will collect evidences against Sam, I don't know agar us din tum Sam ko nahi marte to shayad wo mujhe mar dalta. I don't know what Sam's plan was , either he wanted to kill you and accuse me of your murder or he wanted to kill me and accuse you for my murder.😒


Armaan was really sad😭: OK Bharti, I will try to stay away from Jia, I will never meet her.😭 Meri life main Jia ke siva aur koi hai bhi to nahi.😒


Bharti: Don't worry Armaan, very soon you will meet her😊

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Part 5:

Bharti's house: Bharti was trying to make Jia happy, she was missing her father very badly. 😭Finally Bharti was able to make Jia sleep. Bharti's eyes were filled with tears, she was really sad for Jia.😭 Just then the door bell rang, it was Armaan (Bharti's friend). He noticed that Bharti was trying to hide her tears.😒


Armaan: don't worry Bharti, bohut jaldi hum Rocky ko jail se bahar nikal lenge, I brought some evidences against Sam. Uske baad tum Rocky aur Jia ek happy family ban jaoge.😊


Bharti: you know something Armaan? Tum tabh bhi mujhe nahi samjhte the, aur aj bhi mujhe nahi samajh rahe ho. I am not that same old Bharti who bevakoof ki tarah tumhara pyar reject kiya tha. Kya tumhe pata hai yeh 4 saal main kiske ke liye jii rahi thi?😒


Armaan was literally shocked.😲


Armaan: Bharti'.what are you trying to say?😕


Bharti: I love you Armaan, I really do.😳


Armaan couldn't believe his ears, was it a dream?😍


Bharti: I never told you Armaan, mujhe laga tha tum apne aap samajh jaoge.😒


Armaan: Kaise Bharti? Kaise?😒 College mein tum Rocky se pyar karti thi aur 4 saal bad you met him again, you became a part of his family😔''and I thought'😭..he was not able to speak a single word'😭..he felt like crying'..😭


Bharti felt very bad for him and hugged him tightly. 😳Armaan hugged her back. Tears were running down their cheecks.😳


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P.S: end of the alternative ending. Do tell me which you you liked more and why?

Edited by kaninikabasuray - 15 years ago
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First alternative ending...

My my Kanu i gotta say i was reading this part so carefully..there were too many Armaans inside...😆 😆.BUT I love love love this ending SO MUCH..!! Finally Bharti realised her true lover..!! Her friend Armu..!! Yessssssss!! I love this ending...and am so happy...!! 😃
Gosh this Armaan (Bharti's friend) is such a gem..the way he still thinks about Jia...and depsite Rocky going to jail..he still want to make them a happy family once Rocky is out..!!....Am proud of Bharti's friend...and good that they ended up together...and that Rocky went to Jail...though he wasn't at fault...but he killed Sam so he instead of Amu deserves to go to jail!!....and i love the ending..!! Poor Armu wanted to cry...and they hug each other..me likes...😳...happy that Bharti still once to help get Rocky out of Jail..one thing though he really loves his daughter, Jia....:)
Will be reading the other ending...!!😉
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To Missus Kanninikabasuray
Imagination ho...to aisi.. warna na ho........
Edited by Armu4eva - 15 years ago
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Second ending..
Hmm..okay after reading this part..i am liking Rocky...because one he is innocent..and secondly his relationship with Jia..the father-daughter relationship is so sweet...and also Rocky is so hot man..!!..Am SO picturing Aamir at CINTAA...😳 😳....and the way you said Rocky came in that ouftit..and the sunglasses...and brushing his hair aside...Woah...!! ☺️..Totally 😎....He seems to be rocking in that outfit..!!....
Also i loved how there was a twist in the story and ther was another person involved in the murder of Sam..that too being Sam's stepdad...Now that is an unexpected twist..and i like the way you brought it in...and so very nice of Rocky to help Armu..and then vice versa when Armu helped Rocky get Bharti...
Also at the end i liked what Bharti said..that she only fell in love with the now Armaan(Rocky)...and that during college days she only had an infatuation for him..that makes more sense...😊...i would rather she fall in love with this Rocky Armaan now when he became a father..then how he was in college...So all in all..this other alternate ending was 👍🏼 too...BUT....I have to pick which one i like right...??? So my choice goes to:
Ending ONE
Why?
Well it's because i've always like the Armaan Sinha more (Bharti's friend)...I mean as i said in my previous post..the fact that he was willing to take the blame and go into prison showed how much he cared for Bharti..and love her..and also having gone into prison..he still was not selfish..and didn't want Bharti to dig up evidence on Rocky..because he thought abt Jia's feelings..Now i know you didn't show the father side of Armu (Bharti's friend) but with him caring for Jia like that already shows his father side...and i prefer him anytime over Rocky (though Rocky is oh-so HOT...😳)...but i like how this Armu gave up his love..and still never forced Bharti to like him..him taking the blame already proves that he is Bharti's true lover..! and am all for Bharti's college friend Armaan Sinha ANYTIME..!!...So i like the first ending...cos they end up together...and also even though they end up together...they still want to help Rocky come out of jail...So pure at heart...😊
Rocky doesn't deserve Bharti's love...BUT Bharti derserves Armaan Sinha's love...I hope you get this line am saying....😃.....😆 😆..
All in all..i must say Kanu you writing One Shots..is so much of fun to read..though I gt very confused many times...But excellent job on both parts..!! 👏 👏 👏
Great endings..and i love how ther was two endings too..!!...Very creative i must say....but since you asked to choose i chose one...😳😊.....
Do carry on writing more because you're really AWESOME at coming up with such short stories..!! 🤗 I loved this whole Short Story very much..!! Loved it..!!..❤️ and well gotta agree with Tanu!!..Hats off girl to your wondeful imagination...!!........👏
Was a pleasure reading them..!! 😊
Looking forward to more from you...! 😃
Edited by Blueberry_07 - 15 years ago

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