PrAja SS-An Unknown feeling: something i never felt before - Page 7

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome beautiful parts
loved them
pls pls continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome stuff. i've become a big fan of your writing.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey everybody. I'm back. Updating after a long time. Was really busy so couldn't post earlier than this. And friends mujhe na tum logo se baat nahin karni. The number of comments are day by day decreasing with the number of pm increasing. If you people guys don't comment I'm not gonna update the other parts. Please everyone and the silent readers do leave you comments.

Author's note:

As you all can see that I'm way too much backwards in my story than the one going in the show. Actually the thing is that I'm describing everything in too much detail actually. But that is my style of writing and I think in respect to the title it is important to express the character's feelings. But if you guyz want me too catch up with the show and run accordingly then its fine. I'll skip some of the smaller events and try to catch up as soon as possible. Please friends.Do mention in your comments if you want me to pace with the show or go on with my currnet speed. I'll post accordingly.

Thank You,

Celana

Part 6-

"Ajabde, kya aap humein yeh bataane ka kasht karengi ki aap iss samaye rasoi ghar mein kya kar rahi hai? Aur iss tarha sare khan eke patilon(bowl) ka dhakkan utha utha kar jhank kyon rahi hai?" Phool was really confused by Ajabde's behavior. It is not possible that she is hungry at this time because Ajabde is not like that who feels hungry often!

"Woh phool, kunwar Pratap aate he honge, isliye hum unke khane ki vyavastha karke rakh rahe hai." Said Ajabde examining whether all the dishes were there.

"Kunwar Pratap? Woh bhala abhi bhojan kyon karenge? Unhone to kar liya hoga!" Phool asked curiously.

"Unhone kaha tha ki unhe aane mein der ho jayegi isliye." Ajabde answered heading towards the passage outside the kitchen. Phool hurried behin her and kept on asking her silly questions.

"Accha. Yeh baat hai. To iskeliye aapko jaane ki kya avashyakta thi? Aap dasiyon ko bol deti. Aura b aap apne kaksh ke taraf na jaakear wahan kyon jaa rahi hai?"

"Arrey Phool! Dasiyan bhi to insaan hai na. Woh sara din kaam karte hai. To humne socha ki unko na pareshaan kiya jaaye. Bass isiliye hum apne kaksha mein nahin jaa rahe hai." She replied while entering a room where some books were kept. Phool also went along with her.

"Ajabde hum soch rahe the ki knuwar Pratap ko bhoja hum parosenge. Haan, hum hi parosenge." Phool said with a big smile on her face.

"Par phool aap..." she was cut off in the middle by phool.

"Arrey Ajabde, aap chinta mat kijiye. Aapko kya lagta hai ki hume khana banana nahin aata iska matlab parosna bhi nahin ayega? Thik hai aap swayam hi apne ankhon se dekh lijiye ga. Acha hum jaate hai aur dekhte hai ki kunwar Pratap aaye yaa nahin." She rushed away from there never giving a chance to Ajabde to speak.

"Phool suniye...Yeh bhi na, bohot hi vichitra hai. Aaj subha kunwar Pratap ke itna kuch kehne ke baad bhi ve unke liye khana parosna chahti hai. Hume laga woh bohot dukhi ya gussa hogi kunwar Pratap par. Hey Bhagwaan! Pata nahin kya ho gaya hai phool ko." Ajabde was unable to understand the logic behind her friends strange behavior.

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Pratap was shocked to see Phool arranging the plates for him. Pratap wasn't expecting Phool to do this type of work. And that also for him. It was something that he was finding hard to digest. Ajabde was standing there looking at Phool who was managing to serve the items in the plates. Pratap sat in his place and looked at the plate. He could see a few drops of daal or kheer outside the plate or bowl. He looked at Phool who had a smile plastered on her face and then at Ajabde. She was going to apologize for her friend's mistake when he signaled her no with his eyes. He looked at Phool and with a small sigh said "Phool kanwar, humne jo aaj subha aapse kaha uske liye hum maafi chahte hai. Woh hum bohot zyada krodhit the uss din ke ghatna se, aap sabko chot lag sakti thi aur Ajabde kobhi to kitni chot lagi hai." Pratap looks at Ajabde who was staring him in awe. The injury which she got was not that deep. But still he was worried about her. Why? You two are friends stupid. That's the reason. Simple. Replied her mind.

"Koi baat nahi Kunwar Pratap. Ab aap bhojan kar lijiye." Said Phool happily. She couldn't believe it. Kunwar Pratap was apologizing to HER? Wow! That is what she wanted from the start. Kunwar Pratap to get defeated from her in any argument or challenge. Seek apology from her. And now when he did, she felt a strange type of happiness. Not of victory but something else. What was it? *Sigh* It's too confusing. Said her mind.

Pratap was eating his food and was almost finished. He was now going to eat kheer. All this was being witnessed by two more people from behind the curtains. An evil smirk played on her face. He was almost sure that this smile was going to be replaced very soon with despair. "Aapko lagta hai aapka yeh vish kaam karega? Hume to nahin lagta." Said Surtan Singh looking towards Pratap.

"Woh to abhi pata chal jayega." Srepled Gauhar glaring at Surtan. She turned her face to see Pratap who was sitting with his eyes closed after eating the kheer. Gauhar smirked evilly eyeing Pratap. The smirk was soon replaced into shock then to disbelief. "Aisa nahin ho sakta! Bilkul nahin. Hume achhi tarha se yaad hai ki humne kheer ke pyaale mein hi zahar daala tha. Aur humara zahar se aaj tak nahin bach saka hai. Phir aisa kaise.Kuch to zarur hai." Gauhar was sure something have happened that she was unaware.

On the other hand Pratap was delighted to eat the kheer. It was truly delicious.

"Wah yeh to bohot hi achi bani hai. Par na jaane kyon hume iska swaad bohot jaana pehchaana sa lag raha hai." Pratap looked at Ajabde just to find her smiling at him.

"Yeh kheer aapne banaya hai na Ajabde?" he asked Ajabde who couldn't believe that Pratap made it out that the kheer was made by her.

"Par aapko kaise pata chala?" Ajabde asked him curiously. Phool looked at her shocked. Even she didn't know this.

"Aapko yaad hai nai humne iss se pehle bhi aapke haath se bani kheer achakhi hai." Pratap replied getting a yes-nod in return from Ajabde. Ajabde felt butterflies in her stomach when she heard that he still remember the taste of the kheer made by her. She didn't know why the feeling was so strange yet a happy one. Or something more than that which she didn't knew.

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"Ajabde! Woh kheer aapne banai thi? Aisa kaise ho sakta hai? Woh to dusre khan eke bhaati dasi ne hi banaya hoga. Hai na Ajabde?" Phool was damn confused.

"Woh phool humne" Ajabde started thinking what to say. She started getting flashback of the incident.

*flashback*

Ajabde was passing by the kitchen when she heard a faint sound coming from there. At first she thought she was mistaken but she thought of checking inside. She went near the kitchen. From the door, the place where the food for Pratap was kept could be clearly seen. She noticed a figure there near the food. She saw the shadow of a woman near the food as if pouring something into it. She rushed inside just to find the place vacant. No one was there. The food were kept as it was earlier and seemed untouched only one of the bowl's cover was slightly open which went unnoticed by Ajabde. She thought she was only hallucinating. When she was about go the plate of red chili powder was kept there only near the food.

"Arrey, pata nahin hume isse wapas jagah par rakhna kaise bhool gaye. Phool se baate karte karte hume dhyaan hi nahin raha. Hum abhi isse wapas iski jagah par rakh dete hai." Thinking this Ajabde took the plate in her hand then advanced near the place where it is to be kept. But she tripped over something and the chili powder fell from her hands into the bowl of kheer. Due to its little uncovered part a fine amount of chili powder had fallen in the kheer. Ajabde was horrified to see this.

"Hey bhagwan! Yeh humne kya kar diya? Ab kya hoga? Ab hum kunwar Pratap ko yeh kheer kaise denge? Ab hum kya kare? Hume kuch samajh nahin aa raha hai." Ajabde started pacing in the kitchen trying to think of a way when it struck her that Kunwar Pratap has still not arrived. May she will be able to prepare the kheer again. "Haan! Humare paas yahi ek upaye hai." With that she set to her work. The kheer was soon ready.

*flashback ends*

"Woh phool, humare haath se galti se laal mirch gir gayi thi kheer mein. Iss liye humne doobara banaya." Ajabde said.

"Achha. Toh yeh baat hai. Hmmm." Phool now understood.

"Phool ab aap jaldi se jaakar so jaiye. Thik hai. Kal Saubhagya wati aur Saubhagyawati ka vivah hai na. Agar aap jaldi nahi soyi to subha aapko shringaar karne ka samaye nahin milega."

"Aapne sahi kaha Ajabde. Hum chalet hai" and with that Phool went to her room.

Ajabde was also heading towards her room when noticed that her ring was not in her finger. Then she remembered that she had kept her ring in the kitchen as she was having difficulty to cook the food hurriedly wearing that ring. So she had kept it there only and completely forgot about that. She quickly went to the kitchen to take her ring.

She took her ring and was about to go when she again tripped over something but somehow managed not to fall. This time she saw the object because of which she was about to fall. She bent down to pick it up. It was an anklet made up of gold which clearly not affordable for a dasi. It wasn't hers. And definitely it was not Phool's. She was very particular about her attire including her jewelries even if it is a pair of anklet also. It must be someone else's other than the dasis, herself and phool. But who may have come to the kitchen other than them.

Ajabde took the Anklet with her to her room and kept it there. It was too late. There is a lot of work tomorrow. Tomorrow is saubhagyawati's Haldi. She has a lot of work to do.

OK. That's it friends. And please please please comment and LIKE the post. Your comments are the only thing which encourages me to write. Critisism and suggestion bot welcome.😃

Edited by Celana - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#64
was savin this as a nice weekend read 😆
pretty awesome yet again. . Ajab flashback idea very very cool 👏

and phool arrangin plates lol. 😆 rather cute 😆

overall awesome. . i dont mind the pace. . if you are comfortable writing 😊 (if i was writing, I wud struggle astronomically if the shows's pace overtook me lol 😆 )
Edited by Vinder90 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#65
nice love your writing do write some more a bit longer .. :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
#66
i just read both part and they are really good
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: worldequalsyou

nice love your writing do write some more a bit longer .. :D


Thank you for liking my writing. Will try to update longer parts next time.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: harshil_radhi28

i just read both part and they are really good



Thanks. Please do tell me about if i should go ahead in my current speed or keep pace with the show.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#69
Just read all the parts in one go...its really good..!!

I love the concern between Praja...and Pratap remembering Ajab with her torn blood-stained dupatta..!!!!! *sigh*

I'm hoping Ajabdeh will solve the GJ mystery...which is awesome. This should happen in the show...she is smart enough and also she needs a confidence boost and this can surely give her that.

Do continue soon...and according to me pace of the story is just fine.

Edited by Bonhi_ipkknd - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow I like it...I read all parts in one go...just awesome

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